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|Originality is not such a concept that can be categorized in the first group or the other
4 - thanks, yes as i read again, it seems unclear.:( i write these essays as a practice for GRE exam.....
Writing Feedbackmina_sedaghatir - Sep 21, 2009 / mina_sedaghatir - Sep 22, 2009
|Puerile Prince or Stalwart King: An Analysis of Shakespeare's Henry V
Writing FeedbackNotoman - Sep 21, 2009 / Notoman - Sep 29, 2009
|My Essay on Disappearances in Pakistan. Help
3 - If you're going to talk about the U.S. in relation to Pakistan, you have to go back further in...
Writing Feedbackcantonhero - Sep 21, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 22, 2009
|Hills Like White Elephants Essay (man and girl frustration)
Writing Feedbackhazelc - Sep 21, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 21, 2009
|Cbest Essay - Missing Opportunity in Life
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Sep 21, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 24, 2009
|"Studying overseas" - I AM PREPARING FOR IELTS EXAM
Writing Feedbackangel_luv - Sep 21, 2009 / elainedlcruz - Sep 21, 2009
|Toefl---TV good or bad?
Writing Feedbacklitingjiao - Sep 21, 2009 / looktor - Sep 24, 2009
|Good parents influence their children essay
5 - I think your introduction essay is too long. Why don't you make it shorter and divide you essay in...
Writing Feedbackkokidpham - Sep 20, 2009 / essay0405 - Sep 26, 2009
|Process Essay. Water Polo.
2 - This is your conclusion right now. It functions weakly as a conclusion and ought to go in the...
Writing FeedbackDEW72 - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 21, 2009
|the parallels of " The world on the Turtles back" and "The Genesis"
Writing Feedbackleone123 - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 22, 2009
|President Bush's September llth Address to the Nation
Writing Feedbackluckystar - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 23, 2009
|Are you bored doing the same tasks over and over again? - Definition Essay
Writing Feedbackvwyodapink - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 21, 2009
|reformation in education good or not? why?
2 - Certainly. But you must do your part too. I notice that you have posted two essays for feedback,...
Writing Feedbackkhoctham - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 20, 2009
|solution for new students to get on new school
3 - thank EF_Simone so much!i try to make better comment for others and avoid these mistakes in my essays. i...
Writing Feedbackkhoctham - Sep 20, 2009 / khoctham - Sep 20, 2009
|'Korean student died'; The advantage and disadvantage of the Internet
2 - In your conclusion, you list recommendations related to only two of your points. If you're going to list recommendations,...
Writing Feedbackessay0405 - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 20, 2009
|students should take apart in lecture or not? why?
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 20, 2009 / looktor - Sep 24, 2009
|how can school help new students get accustomed to new environment?
6 - thanks mrchildchil! ielts 8 band, it means that your english is excellent. in your opinion, with this essay, how...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 20, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 26, 2009
|Descriptive Essay - A media event or a once in a lifetime event
8 - you can use methaphors, similes, analogies to help show and not just say things that describe emotions or feelings...
Writing FeedbackJSteinberger - Sep 20, 2009 / neuromancer - Sep 20, 2009
|toefl -- needed land / protecting environment
5 - I can't help but notice that many of your comments on other people's threads have been a bit brief...
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 20, 2009
|Narrative essay / the street artist
5 - The story is too pat to be realistic. Also, the theme of the etching, according to the website you...
Writing Feedbackal_nadwani - Sep 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 20, 2009
|Toefl Topic -- "A person you know is coming to your town"
5 - You're not doing too badly for a TOEFL essay. You should reorder either your paragraphs or your introduction, however,...
Writing Feedbackzhigoolet - Sep 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 19, 2009
|the main purposes of a country's education system
6 - talk about the variety in public school curriculum, private schools, boarding schools, athletes, scholarships, neighborhood, admission process, money. ...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 19, 2009 / kyleroland - Nov 15, 2009
|A licence to Write ?
11 - I lived some years in Bethesda, near Washington DC. My neighbor had a very cynical attitude towards Indians and...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Sep 19, 2009 / Rajiv - Oct 31, 2009
|Rambo Verses the Boar; Descriptive Narrative Assignment
Writing Feedbackneuromancer - Sep 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 27, 2009
|students should get jobs or not? why or why not? 'to be more confident'
3 - thank DJKessler very much. your comment encourages me very much; because, my teacher often says that my essays are...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 18, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 18, 2009
|toefl -- success and luck
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 18, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 20, 2009
|Personal Essay: A Dog's Best Friend.
5 - Maybe some advice? My writing prof. explained that i should have a grey conclusion taht goes along with my...
Writing FeedbackJpicker - Sep 18, 2009 / Jpicker - Sep 22, 2009
|discuss advantages and disadvantages of building a new shopping center
4 - It is comment considered thatN othing in the world is perfect, and everything always comes at a price. ...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 18, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 19, 2009
|A formal education is the problem of my hometown - I would try to eliminate it
Writing FeedbackKeng - Sep 17, 2009 / Keng - Sep 24, 2009
|motherhood and father hood
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 17, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 18, 2009
|"Get an A, but no brain" - Cheating and plagiarism
12 - While we get a fair number of aspiring freeriders here, the default assumption for anyone new should be that...
Writing Feedbacklorelain - Sep 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 21, 2009
|Summary/Response: Kant's Public and Private Use of Reason
Writing Feedbackmilkee_0923 - Sep 17, 2009 / milkee_0923 - Sep 21, 2009
|the way to achieve good health and fitness in modern society
2 - I'm trying to figure out how you've managed to post two essays while only giving feedback -- and not...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 17, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 17, 2009
|'advantages outweigh annoyance' - people have a close friendship with their pets
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 17, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 18, 2009
|"All Cultures Are Created Equal" - Is this categorized as an analytical paper?
3 - Your problem here is that you haven't defined "equality," or, for that matter, "culture." In a whole host of...
Writing FeedbackBrianne - Sep 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 18, 2009
|'I would like to live in a big city' - For Toefl writting - need a score
Writing Feedbackfishbaby - Sep 17, 2009 / khoctham - Sep 20, 2009
|Toefl--- fossil fuels will soon be replaced?
7 - Maybe not oil, but coal is abundant. We cannot use contractions in written English? Never noticed this problem before......
Writing Feedbacklitingjiao - Sep 16, 2009 / litingjiao - Sep 17, 2009
|Skill is more important than a theory, but without any experience - knowledge, it fails.
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 16, 2009 / Jin - Sep 18, 2009
|"Truth it self doesn't exist" - truth in the relationship
6 - i think that u should not make question in the essays, most people consider that it is not very...
Writing FeedbackPatricia - Sep 16, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 17, 2009
|When a huge factory is built, the job demand is high, and it attracts thousand persons to move there
6 - i think that you repeat pollution issue. in the second reason u refer to this problem, however in the...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Sep 16, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 18, 2009
|Cbest Essay - Person Most Instrumental in Shaping Your Life
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Sep 15, 2009 / elainedlcruz - Nov 16, 2009
|Cbest Essay - Memories are instruments that will teach us valuable lessons
3 - If you are or will be teaching in public schools, you may want to demonstrate your ability to...
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Sep 15, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 15, 2009
|TOEFL: Good or bad for more information?
Writing Feedbackjiaxing - Sep 15, 2009 / jiaxing - Sep 15, 2009
|"joining the armed forces" - FSU entrance essay: Vires, Artes, Mores
3 - Do not start with this. Your reader will have been reading hundreds of essays on "Vires, Artes, Mores."...
Writing Feedbackzoe_marie1 - Sep 15, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 15, 2009
|Response paper for Bill of Divorcement
2 - The focus of the essay is supposed to be the smoking, but you do not mention this theme until...
Writing Feedbackpaolaalonzo - Sep 14, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 14, 2009
|A meal is not only the original resource for daily energy and health but also the spirit feast
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 14, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 20, 2009
|MANY PEOPLE DO BUSINESS AT HOME AND STUDY DUE TO COMPUTER TECHNOLOGY.DISCUSS
Writing Feedbackniraj - Sep 13, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 15, 2009
|"experience is the best teacher" - Practice essay for CLEP Exam
Writing Feedbackjwinzer - Sep 13, 2009 / jwinzer - Sep 14, 2009
|TOEFL: Media are paying too much attention to public figures' personal life?
2 - This looks good for a TOEFL essay. Just a few punctuation problems... The interrogations of the media often...
Writing Feedbacklitingjiao - Sep 13, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 14, 2009
|Toefl topic -- why should people attend the university?
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 13, 2009 / Jin - Sep 13, 2009
|Reserve Readings - What did I do wrong in this essay?
7 - Research your topic more, and spend some time reflecting on it. Once you know the material well enough, your...
Writing FeedbackJeannie - Sep 13, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 25, 2009
|Comparison essay with subject on tolerance and power.
11 - To EF_Sean Hmm, I better be more careful with how I word things next time. Actually it wasn't until...
Writing Feedbackdanielh - Sep 12, 2009 / danielh - Sep 26, 2009
|When a baby comes to this world, the first man they meet are his/her parents...
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 12, 2009 / Jeannie - Sep 13, 2009
|the problems of balancing school, job and a family.
Writing Feedbackmoneyka - Sep 11, 2009 / Jin - Sep 16, 2009
|WILL WOMEN LEADERS BE LESS VIOLENT THAN MEN, GIVE EXAMPLE AND OPINION
6 - Naturally society expects men to be leaders and for women to be kind and gentle. For a woman to...
Writing Feedbackniraj - Sep 11, 2009 / danielh - Sep 13, 2009
|Teacher lecture or students do some of the talking? which do you prefer?
5 - You're right danielh. I think I will just focus on the basic sentence structure right now. I don't want...
Writing Feedbackmrarching - Sep 11, 2009 / litingjiao - Sep 13, 2009
|a machine that many people,including myself,are dependent on is....
5 - Whether or not it is okay enough depends what the instructions were, what grade level you are writing for,...
Writing Feedbackkutie_9x - Sep 11, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 11, 2009
|Essay on a carpe diem quote
3 - Yeah, that shouldn't be too difficult for you. We should seize today because we cannot change yesterday or predict...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Sep 10, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 10, 2009
|Many Animal are getting extinct from this world, describe the ways to protect .
3 - Simone is right -- your grammatical mistakes are severe enough and frequent enough that they make reading your essays...
Writing Feedbackniraj - Sep 10, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 11, 2009
|A SOCIETY IS BASED ON LAWS AND RULES. DISCUSS THE PERSON WHO WANT TO LIVE FREELY
3 - Again, try revising this essay yourself, focusing purely on eliminating all grammatical errors. Working out for yourself what is...
Writing Feedbackniraj - Sep 10, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 11, 2009
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