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|"addicted to something addictive" - It is just a Daily Journal
4 - You certainly are right. Your journaling is as meaningful and significant as anyone's writing about anything. I'm glad...
Writing Feedbackeastspringkim - Sep 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 19, 2010
|Happiness is a state of mind; Realizing Happiness
2 - Various would be a good word here: People from all walks of life try to achieve happiness through various...
Writing Feedbackasokapalama - Sep 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 18, 2010
|Digital textbooks vs Textbook
12 - Yes, I understand that. I wrote "all messed up" because I did not understand it when you had...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Sep 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 24, 2010
|Advertising encourages people to buy things or not
3 - I suggest rewriting this sentence. It does not take a stance on the issue. Saying it is subject...
Writing Feedbackkal - Sep 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 17, 2010
|Essay _ How will Vietnamese diet change in the next 50 years?
4 - Thanks Megan and Kevin for advices. It is quite boring and I am trying to re-phrase to make it...
Writing Feedbackngcanh - Sep 14, 2010 / ngcanh - Sep 24, 2010
|"I am a loaf of bread" - Unique Personal Essay: Wanted
5 - Yep, great job here... great variation of sentence length, and it is just such a cool metaphor. The word...
Writing Feedbackmneale324 - Sep 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 21, 2010
|In my view studying in a group is a better method than studying on your own.
Writing Feedbackdil - Sep 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 19, 2010
|vocational training:essays for those in their secondary school and high school finals
3 - This is the wrong way to use versatile: A versatile number of graduates are being Do this: versatile ...
Writing Feedbackelfranchise - Sep 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|Doing the same things or change? is change always good? - DISCUSSION
4 - Dear Raksmeymony and Kevin, I greatly appreciate your kindness. Thanks for correcting my mistakes and also recommending different ways...
Writing Feedbacklktramanh - Sep 14, 2010 / lktramanh - Sep 17, 2010
|Writing about Heuristics that relates to your life
Writing Feedbackcomet2000 - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|Why did Kimveer Gill murder? - Paragraph for Psychology class
3 - Cool! I am going to steal this "without further ado-plus-colon" form of introducing things. Kimveer Gill was...
Writing Feedbacknortherlywind - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|We can now buy more things but lost our traditional values and customs -IELTS writing
Writing FeedbackVeronika - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|Studying at home by using technology or studying at home.
Writing FeedbackErica Kim - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2010
|"We are changing the world with technology." (Bill Gates) Is this true?
Writing Feedbackidasuhaila - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|"The Truth about the Tiananmen Square Incident (massacre)" - Academic history essay
Writing Feedbackkin0504 - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|There are many pros and cons toward communicating ways; different options
3 - Look at this part where you need "AND" I think books, radio, and television are the most effective ways....
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|"the doctor announced that I was pregnant" - Courageous action
5 - Maybe it was because of the anticipation of becoming a mother that made me so much stronger. Oh,...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Sep 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|IELTS ; Is it unfair to pay such high salaries to Football players?
2 - ...than a normal person will do in all her or his its life. Great corrections and guidance here!...
Writing Feedbackjcmorais - Sep 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|Friend for Life: writing class
Writing Feedbacktanhung106 - Sep 12, 2010 / KellyBarbirgirl - Sep 21, 2010
|TOEFL - 'Meng Zi Story'; Classmates are a more important influence
4 - Some great corrections have been made here. For example, now you know that the common expression is: In addition...
Writing Feedbackrmli - Sep 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 13, 2010
|GRE essay: Laws restrict but not eradicate wrongdoings.
3 - Actually i wrote this essay for the following prompt: It is possible to pass laws that control or...
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Sep 11, 2010 / Kapayapaanify1 - Sep 13, 2010
|Generation gap: your generation is different from your parents' generation?
5 - Yes, I'm sorry for not explaining well. The thesis statement is confusing! ---> However these vast differences...
Writing Feedbacksuve - Sep 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 15, 2010
|Data commentary about the growth of 3G phones and total phones
4 - Apostrophes are used in contractions, and that makes the writing informal. He can't win the game because he...
Writing Feedbacksonofgod229 - Sep 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 14, 2010
|It is better to take a job with a low pay but safe than to take a job with a high pay
5 - ...and a job is a man person's most precious possession resource. That is why chinese young people like...
Writing Feedbackquzheng - Sep 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 12, 2010
|"the National Police Cadet Corps" - about a competition you entered.
2 - I agree. Here is an example: Although the trainings we had were tedious and tough, I enjoy competing...
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Sep 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 12, 2010
|Should employers allow employees to use machine and equipment for their personal need
3 - ※ Thank you, Minh Tam and Luu Dang. Thank you for your best ideas. I will consider those ideas for...
Writing FeedbackTomomi - Sep 9, 2010 / Tomomi - Sep 13, 2010
|GRE issue essay (45min) It is always an individual who is the impetus for innovation
4 - Though Edison's contributions, we are able to plan for tomorrow's delights late into the evening. This is an...
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|What are some important characteristics of a co-worker?-Toefl
Writing Feedbacksoccon36 - Sep 9, 2010 / soccon36 - Sep 13, 2010
|'destroyed pleasures'; Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life
8 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackkal - Sep 9, 2010 / kal - Sep 12, 2010
|What can we learn from sports?
2 - Let's say in instead of under: In such situation, those who are actively committed would be squeezing out their...
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|'no government restrictions'; Creative Artists vs Freedom of Expression
3 - Personally, I think you should reform your essay to be more academic. Your introductory paragraph had better introduce about...
Writing FeedbackVY NGUYEN - Sep 9, 2010 / anhduy_tran - Sep 24, 2010
|The Time Machine - if i had the opportunity to do something again, what would it be.
3 - Everyone wishes to have a time machine which can be used to correct a past occurrences. It will...
Writing FeedbackOlaoluwa - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|Comprehensive Note on; A Civil servant is a Public servant
2 - Don't sever the public! Sever means something different! :-) This way is good: To sum up, the...
Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|"Five years ago, we residents of Morganton..." - GRE Task
Writing FeedbackMaxim - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|GRE - essay Laws should not be rigid or fixed; flexibility - 'hurricane Katrina'
4 - The first paragraph is excellent, but you should use the word should in there somewhere to show that you...
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|Building a large shopping center in your neighborhood - 'hanging out place'
4 - Thank you both of you. It should be great comment to improve my writing. Do you have any further...
Writing Feedbackscarecrowd - Sep 8, 2010 / scarecrowd - Sep 9, 2010
|Why do we need music? The traditinal music of a country is more important than other?
3 - Below I'll give you some correct sentences to practice. Please type each sentence the correct way 10 times, and...
Writing Feedbackhedi_65 - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|University faculty should have some experience in the fields they teach.
Writing Feedbackabcdef123 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|(SAT essay)ARE there heroes who will be remembered forever?
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 17, 2010
|some people say TV has left family members unable to communicate with one another.
3 - Sandeep, You started with "Television media", author does not state anything about the media. You need to Read the...
Writing Feedbacksandeepkale - Sep 8, 2010 / abcdef123 - Sep 9, 2010
|TOEFL TOPIC:Newspaper is the best way of learning about a foreign country.
Writing Feedbacktshml1990 - Sep 8, 2010 / tshml1990 - Sep 12, 2010
|informative essay; human trafficking
3 - If it comes in second, it is not fastest. Human trafficking is one of the fastest increasing criminal industry...
Writing Feedbackxoxsandrina - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|The Will of the Butterflies - An essay on any observation.
3 - I am impressed from the start. Here is how I would write this sentence: Somewhere amongst all in...
Writing Feedbackkame - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|TOEFL---Parents should help determining the future
12 - I wish to appreciate you for sharing this essay because I am also preparing for TOEFL and the writing...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 7, 2010 / eastspringkim - Sep 17, 2010
|GRE Argument Essay "People should not a misled by the advertising competition...
5 - It's important to refer correctly to the conclusion that belongs to the author. Use an apostrophe, but do...
Writing Feedbackabcdef123 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|GRE Issue Essay "Colleges and universities should offer more contemporary culture"
Writing Feedbackabcdef123 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|Originality? Is it a fiction since older ideas are mostly prefabricated into some new theories? GRE
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|TOEFL- a part time job beneficial to students?
6 - At the start, I think I understand what you mean to say, but the sentence needs revision: 20-somethings...
Writing FeedbackBluesie - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|TOEFL:Ways of learning about life & Quickly made decisions are wrong
Writing Feedbackmuroslav - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|Communicating information has been a primary and constant necessity for people
Writing Feedbackfordragon - Sep 7, 2010 / fordragon - Sep 28, 2010
|'It was a crisp October morning'; Innovation needs one thought, one person.
3 - This is very well-written! I don't have much to say about the writing, because you have a very sophisticated...
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|Climate changes is a threat to our planet, but there is not enough political pressure
2 - Your essay showed that you indeed had knowledge on global warming. But I felt that you could have talked...
Writing Feedbacksandeepkale - Sep 7, 2010 / PurpleBook - Sep 7, 2010
|Essay about: should jobs be taken by young people before a serious career start?
Writing Feedbacktshml1990 - Sep 7, 2010 / tshml1990 - Sep 8, 2010
|Nation-state is an outmoded institution and should replaced with a world government.
2 - precedent president All countries have their own rulers or dominant people who make rules or discard rules according...
Writing Feedbackjems007 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|TOEFL: Playing Sports teaches us lessons about life? Yes, there are at least 3 things
7 - More than what? I don't understand this either. Maybe they mean this: Playing sports teaches many life lessons....
Writing Feedbackfengyang2011 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|If we were to admit one more student to the class of 2012, why that student should be
4 - Let's look at this first sentence: Having a B.E Comp degree with versatile experience of 5 years. It should...
Writing Feedbackhemlata - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|"wisdom of the former times"; GRE issue essay/ Important truths begin as outrageous
4 - thank you Anurag, and Kevin for you important inputs. To answer Kevin's question about the GRE - yes...
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 6, 2010 / kgb66 - Sep 8, 2010
|Does everyone see everything from the same perspective- SAT essay
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|Essay- Fatigue (after a full marathon)
Writing FeedbackPurpleBook - Sep 6, 2010 / PurpleBook - Sep 12, 2010
|Tracking down three citations in their original sources
Writing Feedbackgreenswing - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
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