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|Nation-state is an outmoded institution and should replaced with a world government.
2 - precedent president All countries have their own rulers or dominant people who make rules or discard rules according...
Writing Feedbackjems007 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|TOEFL: Playing Sports teaches us lessons about life? Yes, there are at least 3 things
7 - More than what? I don't understand this either. Maybe they mean this: Playing sports teaches many life lessons....
Writing Feedbackfengyang2011 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|If we were to admit one more student to the class of 2012, why that student should be
4 - Let's look at this first sentence: Having a B.E Comp degree with versatile experience of 5 years. It should...
Writing Feedbackhemlata - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|"wisdom of the former times"; GRE issue essay/ Important truths begin as outrageous
4 - thank you Anurag, and Kevin for you important inputs. To answer Kevin's question about the GRE - yes...
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 6, 2010 / kgb66 - Sep 8, 2010
|Does everyone see everything from the same perspective- SAT essay
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|Essay- Fatigue (after a full marathon)
Writing FeedbackPurpleBook - Sep 6, 2010 / PurpleBook - Sep 12, 2010
|Tracking down three citations in their original sources
Writing Feedbackgreenswing - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|In our time, specialists of all kind (generalists and specialists): GRE topic
3 - Thank you so much Kevin! I promise I'll follow your directions in my essay writing. I really appreciate your...
Writing FeedbackMaxim - Sep 6, 2010 / Maxim - Sep 7, 2010
|living in a house compared with in an apartment; 'scarce land resources'
Writing Feedbackiishine - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
|Advertising causes unhealthy eating habits. Do you agree or disagree?
4 - Practice 10 times whenever you see a correction. In recent weeks, I have begun to think that is very...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
|Past gives us preponderance experience which might be good or bad
4 - I think here is the mistake and it should be improved this way: good experience is seldom remembered...
Writing Feedbackjems007 - Sep 6, 2010 / Maxim - Sep 6, 2010
|The extended family less important; 'not bother to contact relatives anymore'
4 - Hey, I do not think the sentences are too long. Many TOEFL writers have sentences that are too long,...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
|"Riding a motorcycle in Vietnam" - Risk you have taken, why and was it worth it?
4 - hahaha you have nothing to worry about! The process of translation is common to all bilingual people, but...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Sep 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|"alcohol is the cause of most College student death" - My significant moment
3 - This has too many unnecessary details. Imagery details are great, but meaningless details like names and street addresses are...
Writing FeedbackMikey305 - Sep 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
|Comprehensive Note on ' The impossible is often the untried'
7 - When referring to a word, I usually use " " marks for clarity and detail: The word impossible does...
Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|Revolutionary / communication is better than other types of communication
2 - However, I still assert that face-to face communication is superior to other means. For example, the modern logistics...
Writing FeedbackAnnie Ma - Sep 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|How technological development affect traditional skills and way of life in a country?
Writing Feedbackdrrahulsolanki - Sep 4, 2010 / drrahulsolanki - Sep 8, 2010
|A narrative essay -First time I experienced an earthquake- Feedback
9 - Ana, Now that you have a number of critiques and suggestions concerning your essay, why don't you take...
Writing Feedbackarubi - Sep 3, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 17, 2010
|Too much is spent on pets than starving people of Africa, your opinion.
3 - But because of this, do we neglect our own species across the ocean in Africa, where they do not...
Writing FeedbackAndy Nguyen - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits.
6 - I don't think irreplaceable is good here, because it implies that we want advertising to play this role......
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|What, in your opinion should be the main function of a university?
Writing Feedbackhaghshenas - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2010
|TOELF: Thomas Edison - One famous person you would like to meet
7 - Thank you for your help. I already made the list. Your corrections are not a waste of time, I...
Writing Feedbackmuroslav - Sep 3, 2010 / muroslav - Sep 6, 2010
|IELTS:Giving aid to poorer countries has more negative effects than positive effect
3 - This sentence is awkward: In this world, there is no one who does not know this world 'globalization', which...
Writing Feedbackhealing80 - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|TOEFL--A job with more vacation time is better....& Teachers should show their...
6 - Famous writers use commas in different ways, and their uses have changed with time. My favorite approach...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
|SHORT ESSAY Describe your favorite food- Instant-boiled mutton
8 - First: Describe what a crepe is. Second: Elaborate on what makes a crepe unique, yummy. Third: Wrap it up,...
Writing Feedbackayida365 - Sep 2, 2010 / vinhstuh - Nov 6, 2011
|the media focuses too much on celebrity.how far do you agree?? a general paper essay
Writing Feedbackyuvly - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
|THE CAY, story about one trip in the in Caribbean Sea
Writing Feedbackzeed - Sep 2, 2010 / zeed - Sep 14, 2010
|Grade is an assessment that encourages students to learn more.do you agree?
4 - Here is the way to follow the rule called 'number agreement' Keep singular with singular and plural with plural:...
Writing Feedbackdivya2010 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
|money either to protect arts or the environment - source of our livelihood
3 - This is a good idea for your argument. I think, though, that it should also include some mention...
Writing Feedbackdivya2010 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
|IELTS: effects of globalization (decrease in global tension)
3 - Let's fix the clarity here: Although it has undeniably beneficial effects on the economics of the world, it also...
Writing Feedbackhaghshenas - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|Repaying a kindness ("I have to treasure my parents' effort for funding me")
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|Comprehensive Note on ' Flatterers get together,the devil goes for dinner'
5 - Corruption, nepotism, favoritism is are some byproducts of this evil. The flattered person loses touch with reality...
Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|"Parents should never try to be a child's "friend" - Descriptive/Narrative Essay
2 - This is a common idea. Only when you think of a very original, intriguing, or useful idea would...
Writing Feedbackrhamrick - Sep 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2010
|Influence of past achievements is necessary for making a significant contribution
3 - Woah. To me, this is a bit of an overstatement. Whatever someone does must be influenced by something....
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Sep 1, 2010 / freezard7734 - Sep 1, 2010
|Originality is an identity. Every idea generated in this world is as original as its originator.
2 - I enjoyed thoroughly your discussion on originality! Some details, amoxicilline for instance, might not be easily absorbed by the...
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Sep 1, 2010 / Shadow93 - Sep 1, 2010
|Now and then: the mass movement of people into the cities
11 - Oh... yes, you will have difficulty as long as you come up with ideas first and then look for...
Writing FeedbackBrandon Zhou - Sep 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
|"Being a Foreigner" - a narrative essay
5 - Hello Amal! I'll change many sentences in your essay. I hope you have time to read them aloud...
Writing Feedbackamal omar - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 2, 2010
|"The diagram related how are lead pencils made.", IELTS: writing part 1
7 - Dear Altraga, About your band score, I guess it is around 5.5. It would be raised if you could...
Writing FeedbackAltraga - Aug 31, 2010 / sharkondiet - Sep 11, 2010
|IELTS essay: compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV,books and radio.
3 - thetre a lot of grammatical mistakes in your essay. and its spelt as although. sentences should be short n...
Writing Feedbackanhduy_tran - Aug 31, 2010 / divya2010 - Sep 2, 2010
|I disagree that television has destroyed communication between friends and family.
10 - It's funny that you mention that, because my sister watches Discovery more than anyone I know, and her...
Writing Feedbackjay4TOEFL - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|essay/ IELTS Animal testing is the only way to guarantee the safety of new products?
Writing Feedbacksunshinebank - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|Ielts: Study at school or get a job?
Writing Feedbackreiichi - Aug 31, 2010 / reiichi - Sep 2, 2010
|IELTS TASK 1: The US's energy consumption and production
4 - The most significant rise happened in the period between around 1955 and 1972, when the Americans ' energy production...
Writing Feedbackcathead_2307 - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
|'Change will change a person' - avoiding change essay
2 - Cutting edge refers to the most advanced technology, which exists in every era... so I think this needs...
Writing Feedbacksandeepkale - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
|Sex Trafficking, an issue of international significance
Writing FeedbackMiss_Swiss - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
|Does the end justify the means? - GRE issue essay.
6 - No comma necessary in that first sentence. This question is about whether a moral end justifies immoral methods....
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
|Mistakes in the tenses, could you check these sentences and their verbs?
Writing FeedbackTetanya - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 31, 2010
|New idea always faces contradiction desipte its reasonalbilty
4 - I think your thesis misses the point being asked in the prompt. You probably made a mistake distinguishing between...
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Aug 29, 2010 / ershad193 - Aug 30, 2010
|sense of humor, honesty, willingness - QUALITIES OF A GOOD NEIGHBOR - TOEFL
Writing Feedbacksoccon36 - Aug 29, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 13, 2010
|TO SPEND BILLIONS OF MONEY ON THE SPACE PROGRAM? CLEP essay
Writing Feedbackritu40 - Aug 28, 2010 / ershad193 - Sep 1, 2010
|Essay about the importance of human needs for land and animal protection.
Writing FeedbackAnnie Ma - Aug 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|''University is a only way lead people to success''
4 - Thanks Tina! I hope you don't mind if I offer another way, though. There are still a few mistakes....
Writing Feedbacksamac - Aug 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|No matter if it's original, more important is how useful is this idea for the people in a new way?
Writing Feedbackrajeshaaidu - Aug 27, 2010 / rajeshaaidu - Jan 11, 2011
|Peer Pressure: Recalling an Experience (Autobiographical Narrative)
3 - Often I tell people that giving the name of someone like Mr. Tomanio is an unnecessary detail. Here, it...
Writing Feedbacknicole6370 - Aug 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|Peoples behavior is impacted by Television & Movies
4 - Watching television and movies is the cheapest and fastest way to transform information and entertainment . However, TV...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Aug 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|Discoveries - Subject of your interest or subject good for career?
Writing Feedbackcanizarro - Aug 27, 2010 / thaitam - Sep 1, 2010
|"parents are the best teacher of their children'' - agree or not?
7 - Secondly , parent's teaching methods regularly have strong influence on their children's behaviour, because they understand their children better...
Writing Feedbacknamtuocbonghong - Aug 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|Cosmetic surgery - agree or disagree with this trend?
NEW - Nowadays, people try to change their life by changing their clothing styles, wearing jewelers, changing their appearances through cosmetic...
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|Positive or negative aspects of giving aid to the poorer countries: An IELTS
2 - Actually, I do think an essay of 434 words is accepted in IELTS, provided that you spend no longer...
Writing FeedbackNash - Aug 26, 2010 / cathead_2307 - Aug 27, 2010
|IELTS essay: whether not teachers and doctoes should work in rural for many years
Writing Feedbackjszwan - Aug 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
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