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5 - The exact instructions would help, as Tyler said. Also, you might want to consider adding more detail to your...
Writing Feedbackcin ali - Apr 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 4, 2009
|Bioethical Disputes: simple essay on explaining a concept
7 - No, I meant I don't understand how institutionalization is a bioethical dispute. Sorry, I guess the emphasis wasn't clear...
Writing FeedbackTESE - Apr 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 1, 2009
|I've vowed to change how I interact with people; Fruitful discussion.
5 - I think you once wrote that wordsmiths pick verbal arguments for the same reason jocks often pick physical fights...
Writing FeedbackMustafa1991 - Apr 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 1, 2009
|Today, the dominance of global product brands threatens individual identity
Writing Feedbackmarine - Apr 29, 2009 / marine - May 1, 2009
|Rough Draft on relation between the epigraph and Gatsby in The Great Gatsby
Writing FeedbackLifeisallugot - Apr 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 30, 2009
|Violence and the youth - two reports
3 - Here are some quick revisions you could make to the essay in your latest post. I'll do 1 line...
Writing Feedbackttc1234 - Apr 28, 2009 / Mustafa1991 - May 14, 2009
|Process Anaylsis Essay in 5 paragraphs (CompTIA Network+ Exam)
5 - This is an excellent process analysis essay. The only suggestion I can think of is that you might want...
Writing Feedbackalexxis - Apr 27, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 1, 2009
|Persuasive essay (Lithium based batteries>Nickel based batteries)
Writing Feedbackkylelanning - Apr 27, 2009 / kylelanning - May 28, 2009
|Will You Buy a House or Start a Business?
9 - I think if you take advantage of most of the suggestions and changes offered, your essay will be just...
Writing Feedbackadalumi - Apr 27, 2009 / Londyn64 - May 16, 2009
|Under the Age of Eighteen and in the Military: Evaluation Essay
4 - Your essay needs a sharper focus. Tyler already pointed out your need for a thesis upfront. You will also...
Writing Feedbackmichaelfrye1970 - Apr 26, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 29, 2009
|Financial anaysis essay (cash flows)
5 - I have no background in this area of expertise, but I can show where some words are missing: ...
Writing FeedbackAbby002 - Apr 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2009
|Aboriginal Rights in the Twentieth Century-My term essay for History
7 - Great question! Fluidity comes from having a central theme for the whole essay, and then having a mini theme...
Writing Feedbackmacawtopia - Apr 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 5, 2009
|Spend more time working hard on jobs or stay with families?
10 - When family is in conflict with working， which one will you will pay more attention to and spend more...
Writing Feedbackflorazhou - Apr 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2009
|Critique my current event paper (English Critical Thinking class)
5 - I am going to tackle your first paragraph. I think that it could read a little better with some...
Writing Feedbackbluek7 - Apr 24, 2009 / Notoman - Apr 25, 2009
|English Comp. CLEP - practice essay "Impossible Goals"
9 - Well, they are testing for English competency, and so presumably have backgrounds in language rather than in computer science....
Writing FeedbackSairaTasartir - Apr 24, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 6, 2009
|Locke and Rousseau
Writing Feedbackgacesaa - Apr 24, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2009
|Austen's satire of society; Pride and Prejudice essay - Check
3 - Citizens--Criticizes... That's the kind of weird mistake that comes from over-zealous word processing program auto-correct functions. I hate those...
Writing Feedbackxeidus - Apr 24, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2009
|NASA Spinoff Technology
5 - Thanks Kevin. I added the sentences, corrected a few word errors (powered/powdered, premiere/premier, subcommitteE), and I am calling it...
Writing FeedbackNotoman - Apr 24, 2009 / Notoman - Apr 26, 2009
|What discovery in the last century has been most beneficial for your country?
4 - In the last century, My country, Romania, had passed through many changes and regimes that influence its history in...
Writing Feedbackadalumi - Apr 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2009
|[Essay]The Best and Worst aspects of being a Teenager.
3 - Give some more help to other members -- thoughtful, substantial help, like you might give to a younger sibling...
Writing Feedbackceberus - Apr 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2009
|University students should be required to take history classes - essay
6 - Some points to consider: When summarizing the case against learning history in your first body paragraph, you might...
Writing Feedbackflorazhou - Apr 23, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 25, 2009
|A mistake i learned from - narrative essay
2 - The pleasant man from the phone call was actually the head coach of the basketball team. He told me...
Writing Feedbackgacesaa - Apr 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2009
|Personal Objectivity of James Joyce- research paper
3 - This is going to be a great paper! You weave together the information very well. I only found two...
Writing Feedbackhevyhomie - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2009
|English Comp. CLEP- literary decline
3 - Your grammar and style are solid as usual. The content is okay. I suspect for this sort of essay,...
Writing FeedbackSairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 25, 2009
|Religion is good for the people - does it touch on the line of poetry?
4 - There is always a certain amount of fun in engaging with a new language. What's your first one? English...
Writing FeedbackProt - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 23, 2009
|Growing housing bubble ignored by ecomomists
3 - Why are we<<Avoid the use of editorial we, us, or our in academic writing when referring to general humanity....
Writing Feedbackmichaelfrye1970 - Apr 22, 2009 / twilocity - Apr 22, 2009
|English Comp. CLEP essay - "guns outnumber the population"
4 - Therefore , his proposal is an adept way of limiting the damage done to society through.. (Above) Technically,...
Writing FeedbackSairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2009
|English Comp. CLEP - "Discontent is vital to growth and development"
7 - Thanks for your help! LOL... seems to be a popular topic! (either that, or we are both studying from...
Writing FeedbackSairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|'Some empires refused to learn from history' - English Comp. CLEP - practice essay
3 - In the first paragraph, you'll start out stronger if you write, "can be taken to mean" instead of: It...
Writing FeedbackSairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 23, 2009
|What essential skills young people should have in our complex society?
Writing Feedbackflorazhou - Apr 22, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 6, 2009
|narrative essay- giving birth, its not graphic
2 - Hyphens: It was two-thirty in the afternoon on a gorgeous sunny, fall, Tuesday. My favorite day of the week....
Writing Feedbackpurfec8gel - Apr 21, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 22, 2009
|Outline-- Responses in relation to the attacks of September 11
5 - Man that must be a big essay, for the general idea, try to include things about how the planes...
Writing Feedbackttc1234 - Apr 21, 2009 / saichicka39 - Oct 5, 2012
|The Concept of Courage as Illustrated by Different Characters
3 - According to Atticus Finch, an honest lawyer in Harper Lee's novel "To Kill a Mockingbird", teaching the children that...
Writing Feedbacktak7171 - Apr 20, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 21, 2009
|The Death Penalty is more costly than imprisoning someone for life
Writing Feedbacktapsghost - Apr 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 21, 2009
|" Rising divorce rate"- Cause and effect essay
9 - Hi Kevin and Sean, I appreciate ur valuable help! ^^ I learn a lot from you. Thanks again for...
Writing FeedbackThuong - Apr 20, 2009 / Thuong - Apr 24, 2009
|We can know something about a person by the way he dresses.
Writing Feedbackbinu - Apr 20, 2009 / binu - Apr 26, 2009
|Description Essay: The Rider
Writing Feedbackalexxis - Apr 20, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 30, 2009
|TOEFL essay - PR: from-books knowledge and experiential knowledge
Writing FeedbackMonkeyDDragon - Apr 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 27, 2009
|Descriptive Essay: Joffrey's is My First Distance
5 - You might want to elaborate a bit on the descriptions, given that this is supposed to be a descriptive...
Writing Feedback3looy - Apr 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 2, 2009
|Problem Solving Essay:Contradicting Characteristics-Correct my essay
5 - Well, it should be something that resonates with ou. Think of what you feel strongly about; what problems are...
Writing Feedbackmilkee_0923 - Apr 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 18, 2010
|GED Practice essay: Do you think stronger laws should be enacted to...
Writing Feedbackspczmb - Apr 19, 2009 / spczmb - Apr 20, 2009
|Essay about war and religoion during 1990s in Europe-Balkan
4 - ...especially when war is going on toward you all around me . In Serbia, people who were living...
Writing Feedbackgacesaa - Apr 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2009
|What is the right stuff essay
5 - Instead of "arrogance," you could just say that they needed a robust ego, and let the reader decide for...
Writing Feedbackmichaelfrye1970 - Apr 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 21, 2009
|Does Success Come from Luck or Work?
Writing Feedbackadalumi - Apr 16, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 20, 2009
|The Effects of Violent Movies
9 - i have to do a similar essay...i think you should write out an outline intro-thesis main body- write...
Writing Feedbacksilentheart - Apr 17, 2009 / ttc1234 - Apr 28, 2009
|What is the major benefit of an international cooperation? Correct my essay
4 - Well, you could start off by creating a thesis. Like instead of going too broad, you use four different...
Writing Feedbackkirin - Apr 17, 2009 / ryoga - Apr 7, 2013
|Essay: Are exams necessary? Yes ... they are!
5 - It's a good idea to find a couple of examples where exams aren't used and compare them to examples...
Writing Feedbackyemenja - Apr 16, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|"Is racism becoming an obstacle in today`s world?" - correct my essay
4 - In our diverse society, racism is facing proving to be one of humankind's major tensions in this day...
Writing Feedbackstudent001 - Apr 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 17, 2009
|TOEFL Essay - Convenience food can not improve the way we live.
15 - Perhaps it is a good idea to make time to be healthy? For that matter, while some people have...
Writing FeedbackMonkeyDDragon - Apr 15, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 5, 2009
|Career, exploration, travel, home - check these paragaphs
11 - Here is what to do: Read some articles and see what special ideas they contribute to the topic....
Writing FeedbackThuong - Apr 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2009
|Aphorism essay - "A Better Tomorrow"
5 - Thanks...
Writing FeedbackNinja Fox - Apr 14, 2009 / Ninja Fox - Apr 21, 2009
|"King of the Jungle - story feedback
Writing Feedbackmeshaal - Apr 14, 2009 / meshaal - Apr 16, 2009
|GED Practice essay: Do you think people learn from their mistakes?
7 - Your concluding paragraph could use some beefing up. And I think if you gave some examples of people learning...
Writing Feedbackspczmb - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|Early human development is strongly influenced by nature
6 - Is this supposed to be a five paragraph essay, or a 4? For a standard, five paragraph essay, this...
Writing FeedbackAlshebah - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009
|500 word image essay (Black Hair Report)
4 - You seem to be on the right track. Now go into more detail. Why were they "jumping" through the...
Writing Feedbackteelyons - Apr 14, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 16, 2009
|Art Paper - Elizabeth Murray
4 - Like Kevin said, I would strengthen the first paragraph. One way of doing that is by quoting Murray near...
Writing FeedbackLink42 - Apr 14, 2009 / silverystars - Apr 18, 2009
|We can't negative wholly benefit from nuclear technology
Writing Feedbacksecret1302 - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|TOEFL Essay - Parents are the best teachers (Devotion and penetration)
8 - You might want to "exhort" parents to spend more one-on-one time with their children. That is one way to...
Writing FeedbackMonkeyDDragon - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|Suxanne - a story about one of my dreams
3 - Wow, your opening imagery is graphic and gripping. Great job. If you want to make your story even stronger,...
Writing Feedbacknizarnasir - Apr 14, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 18, 2009
|"the chase" story
4 - thank you guys, ur really helpful. but Sean can u suggest some better verbs. im really bad at this....
Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - Apr 13, 2009 / newsha31 - Apr 14, 2009
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