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|Spanish Language proficiency
15 - Once you have left helpful comments for two other forum members, then you can start your own thread...
Writing Feedbacksad_an6el - Aug 17, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 28, 2009
|parents and relatives make the decisions
3 - Whereas parents and relatives never do this? No parent has ever pressured his or her child to be,...
Writing Feedbacktoefl7 - Aug 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
|"Questioning authority" - GRE topic.
4 - You need to elaborate more on your examples. At the moment, you are not using them to actually prove...
Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 16, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
|What do you want most in a friend TOEFL
7 - got it. thank you so much! your examples are easy to understand ,and i learned not only the grammar...
Writing Feedbacktoefl7 - Aug 16, 2009 / sugarzhi - Aug 18, 2009
|Travel Versus Saving Money (IELTS test prep essay)
Writing Feedbackorlando - Aug 16, 2009 / orlando - Aug 16, 2009
|toefl: We live in a world of music - Why is it important to so many people?
Writing FeedbackLiwen - Aug 16, 2009 / Liwen - Aug 17, 2009
|traditional foods vs international fast food (which is bad)
Writing FeedbackEricc - Aug 15, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 26, 2009
|TOEFL: Movies or television now play an important role in our life
Writing Feedbackdhanh90 - Aug 15, 2009 / sung_tung - Sep 2, 2009
|The Next Patient
7 - The air dances violently in the space between our stare. wow, definitely gave me goosebumps :o Awesome essay!...
Writing Feedbackjdharake - Aug 14, 2009 / CalLover - Aug 17, 2009
|TOEFL; Television Versus Friends and family
Writing Feedbackdhanh90 - Aug 14, 2009 / sad_an6el - Aug 20, 2009
|Frankenstein Essay: Critiques?
3 - A thesis needs to be debatable. Your isn't. Say something about the message of the book, preferably something that...
Writing Feedbackkenziii - Aug 14, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 15, 2009
|Essay about important characteristics of a co-worker.
Writing Feedbackarsdtbk - Aug 13, 2009 / arsdtbk - Aug 14, 2009
|"pet proposes man disposes" - TOEFL: Should pets be treated as family members?
Writing Feedbackalwaysholly - Aug 12, 2009 / alwaysholly - Aug 18, 2009
|Old saying; 'experience is the best teacher' -Review for CLEP
11 - Should be an "are" here because of the word "and". ____________________________________________________________ _______________________ I would suggest including...
Writing Feedbacktg2009 - Aug 12, 2009 / JunYuan - Aug 26, 2009
|"Justice can only exist when people obey laws that are not to their liking."
3 - Simone is right -- you need to start by defining what you mean by "justice". Virtually any definition you...
Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 12, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 16, 2009
|"the personal consumption of butter" - IELTS task 1 Homework 1
2 - This graph shows the personal consumption (in grams) of butter, margarine and low-fat or reduced-fat spreads per week [omit...
Writing FeedbackAnne25 - Aug 12, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 12, 2009
|Formal educational credentials and hiring employees - GRE essay
5 - To improve your sentence by noticing that DON'T MISS WORDS, I believe your essay will be more attractive and...
Writing Feedbackwonglofu - Aug 11, 2009 / Superkid - Aug 19, 2009
|"About a time when you thought an experience would take place in certain way"
3 - This is essay drags on a little. The lesson learned not really something that would effect your character or...
Writing Feedbackpresario32 - Aug 11, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Aug 11, 2009
|"Wise people appreciate the little things in life" - narrative essay
Writing Feedbackbal0601 - Aug 11, 2009 / bal0601 - Aug 20, 2009
|Should government withhold information?--A GRE Issue topic
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Aug 11, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 4, 2009
|"Goods And Service Tax At All India Level"- how 2 improve this article
Writing Feedbackescritor - Aug 10, 2009 / escritor - Aug 12, 2009
|Results of publicly funded scientific studies for free -help for GRE issue essay
Writing FeedbackUlribe - Aug 10, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 10, 2009
|"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value"
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Aug 10, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Aug 10, 2009
|Personal Essay - Travels; I have inherited my mother's wanderlust
4 - I love experiencing the magic and draw of various cultures, each with their own flavor and distinctions which seizes...
Writing Feedbacksarahstu - Aug 9, 2009 / Liebe - Aug 10, 2009
|GRE Essay on "skepticism in student's learning"
6 - Your essay mainly seems to be arguing in favor of the idea, rather than against it as your introduction...
Writing Feedbacknatz - Aug 9, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
|"hard work leads you to success in your life" - need help in correcting my essay
5 - Your logic here isn't very tight. Overwhelming evidence suggests that hard work is in fact the key to...
Writing Feedbackpelaru - Aug 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 9, 2009
|The Saluda hospital - Advice for my GRE argument
6 - "The author" works. Or "the newspaper," or "the article." These all would be more standard, and accurate, than "the...
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Aug 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 23, 2009
|We are blessed with modern tools; Modern technology
Writing Feedbackrosamond00 - Aug 7, 2009 / arsdtbk - Aug 16, 2009
|Getting up early and starting day's work in the morning should always be preferred by people
4 - You need to attend to basics. For example, you must place a space after punctuation marks, as I have...
Writing Feedbackmansten - Aug 7, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|Saving money for future is more useful than spending on travel.
2 - Is that true? How do you know? Students often start essays with an assertion that whatever they are...
Writing Feedbackgh52km42 - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
|Essay on Urbanisation
2 - For what purpose did you write this essay? I see you've got it posted under undergraduate admissions essays, but...
Writing Feedbackkillerwind - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|Cbest - Back to Basics
2 - One strength of this essay is your use of supporting evidence. However, you will need to work on your...
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|To be elected as the country's president gives prestige and honor.
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 4, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|Gay Marriage: Is It Right?
13 - Note: I deleted John6503's comment to which Llamapoop123 is responding, because it ran afoul of our guidelines prohibiting postings...
Writing Feedbackladiired3 - Aug 4, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 12, 2009
|Benefits and drawbacks of urbanization. Better life for older in the countryside
Writing FeedbackJino - Aug 4, 2009 / HarryK - Aug 25, 2009
|Classification and Divison Essay on different "sources of energy."
6 - Natural fossil fuels, yes. Biofuels are universally considered renewable, as you point out. So, if petroleum becomes a biofuel...
Writing FeedbackReborn - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 8, 2009
|Dangerous sports and activities - for fun, money, or for nothing
11 - It's not so much that it sounds weird as that nobody knows it. This is a dictionary word that...
Writing Feedbacksugarzhi - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
|Our lives abound with examples of the importance of remaining creative
Writing FeedbackDiddy - Aug 3, 2009 / kenziii - Aug 14, 2009
|For Eng 121 class: Use of critical thinking using Mary Postgate and Yellow Wall
Writing Feedbackbiggestv - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|If people want to have a good future they should have a careful plan
2 - I understand the reason for the meditation on religion with which you preface this essay, but I feel that...
Writing Feedbacktimmytos - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 3, 2009
|Looking for a review of My Philosophy Paper
12 - I agree with that advice in general. Good writers say what they have to say rather than telling...
Writing FeedbackAli MacLennan - Aug 2, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|Summary-Response Essay - Celebrating Nerdiness by Tom rogers
5 - Your summary is okay. Your thesis should probably include a summary of the reasons why you agree with...
Writing Feedbackkingdomcome - Aug 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 9, 2009
|'Harmful effects on our environment' - Benefits and Drawbacks of Urbanisation
10 - Thank you Notoman, Sean, it definitely quenched my curiousity^^ I'll practice hard, and thanks for the website !!...
Writing FeedbackHarryK - Aug 2, 2009 / HarryK - Aug 4, 2009
Writing FeedbackFearlessDare - Aug 2, 2009 / FearlessDare - Aug 8, 2009
|Archie isn't just a typical guy I've encountered in my life! - Unforgettable person
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
|Originality and thinking - GRE Issue No:2.
Writing Feedbackdesigningsally - Aug 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|The current technological innovation (the first writting in this web)
4 - Sean's advise is very sound. Follow it. Here's my advice: Don't use a translation devise when searching for the...
Writing Feedbackmoula_moula - Aug 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 2, 2009
|Essay on A Prayer for Owen Meany
Writing FeedbackTottenham125 - Jul 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 1, 2009
|Colleges for gain knowledge, new experience & prepare for future career - TOEFL
11 - Indeed. And, in literature as opposed to workaday prose, ornate sentences are still acceptable. (David Foster Wallace, anyone?)...
Writing Feedbackstardust - Jul 31, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|I closed my eyes and started the chanting!; The moment of the Lords.
Writing Feedbackmbjaya999 - Jul 31, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 3, 2009
|"Who made history"--A difficult GRE Issue topic
9 - Private Joseph Martin kept a diary during the Revolutionary War. His detailed writings prove to be an invaluable...
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Jul 31, 2009 / Notoman - Aug 3, 2009
|Causes and Solutions for increasing traffic congestion
6 - I'm sorry, but we cannot tell you what your score might be as we are not trained IELTS scorers....
Writing Feedbackrosamond00 - Jul 30, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|-- Writing from India (essay about holidays and truth)
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jul 30, 2009 / Rajiv - Sep 17, 2009
|Bringing emotion - television has destroyed communication among close people?
3 - Overall, quite good just little things i noticed. "According to the survey" -I think it would sound...
Writing Feedbackmomotou007 - Jul 30, 2009 / et_350 - Aug 4, 2009
|Correct and rate my essay essay. Its on laws being rigid or flexible
Writing Feedbackdesigningsally - Jul 30, 2009 / EF_Simone - Jul 30, 2009
|Essay (On) Love
7 - This is a difficult topic to deal with. Our ability to describe any emotion is very, very limited. We...
Writing FeedbackOnd - Jul 30, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 3, 2009
|Ielts essay: living and studying overseas
Writing Feedbackorlando - Jul 29, 2009 / orlando - Aug 1, 2009
|"Actions speak louder than words" (do you agree or disagree with the statement)
Writing FeedbackJanie Tine - Jul 29, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
|"Running away"; "I'm sorry for all that is happening, but..." - rate my essay
7 - You need to clarify much more. The entire work is interesting but makes very little sense and threatens to...
Writing Feedbackkennethfatty - Jul 29, 2009 / kenziii - Aug 14, 2009
|Illegal Aliens and Their Quest to Stay in the United States
3 - You also need to set up some background in your intro. So, for instance, why not just grant everyone...
Writing Feedbackswatson - Jul 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jul 29, 2009
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