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|Children raised in the countryside have better than those from urban areas?
3 - Hi Pier, 1. I think it is better to write "... better educational facilities and effectively learn modern communication...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 18, 2017 / Hannielee - Oct 19, 2017
|Whether taking a gap year is a reasonable idea? (help, rescue poor writting)
4 - Hello Jane, I found some mistakes from your essay. Firstly, Grammar: -learn different culture of other countries...
Writing Feedbackchche - Oct 18, 2017 / happyfunny - Oct 19, 2017
|Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research
3 - There are 2 observational points that I would like to call your attention to. The first, is the problem...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|The proportion of men and women from the Aussie country who did systematic physical activity
4 - Yes, numbers are included in the word count. Whether spelled out or numerical, it counts towards the total number...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|Dependance on mobile phones. Everyone is using them more or less intensively.
3 - Huynh, you properly discussed the prompt by choosing to discuss only one side of the issue. This is a...
Writing Feedbacktieunuhuyenbi207 - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|When proffesors give project on which students must work together, the students learn more effective
5 - @pier Hello Pier, your second draft is a lot better. However, there are some sentence construction errors in...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 18, 2017 / Onyinye123 - Oct 20, 2017
|Providing different kind of support to improve the quality of life of citizens in poorer nation
Writing FeedbackSummer1994 - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 18, 2017
|[task 1] Below is a map of the city of Brandfield - investments plan
3 - @Holt I see. Thank you for your explanation. I've finally found the proper way to write map analyses on...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 18, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 18, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Is local history more important than world history? Opinion essay.
Writing Feedbackscully_vananh - Oct 18, 2017 / Hannielee - Oct 19, 2017
|IELTS task 1-The charts below give information on the ages of people when they got married...
4 - @madeline8484 your summary overview is missing a few details that could have made it stronger. You should not have...
Writing Feedbackmadeline8484 - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 18, 2017
|Some people believe that the amount of time that is put into art could be better managed
5 - Your second point on: parents who think there are no points in learning art for their child, is not...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 17, 2017 / Competent_Anna - Oct 18, 2017
|Should long-term job-seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work
4 - I have modified it, based on the feedback. Please suggest. In many countries, the government gives benefits to...
Writing Feedbackitsme2216 - Oct 17, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 18, 2017
|Nowadays, a lot of new, big supermarkets are appearing every day - what about local business?
4 - Hi just_writer. You have a lot of comma splices and run-on sentences in your essay. A comma splice is...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 17, 2017 / TJLuschen - Oct 17, 2017
|[IELTS] We lived in a world of technology these days. Opinion essay.
4 - Few corrections:- information is more significant (information is singular) it raised concerns over the way of military having...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 17, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 17, 2017
|The effect of paying for high grades at school.
3 - Bezhab, you can very well use the word "However" in your paragraph presentation because it is meant to break...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 17, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|The unpaid community service is not necessary to be a compulsory program in high school
2 - Sandra, your score for this essay will a 1. It is a failing score because you did not discuss...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 17, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|The developments of West Park Secondary School, from 1950 when it was erected, to 2010.
2 - Na, your summary overview doesn't really appear to be complete. It only has a basic description of the image...
Writing FeedbackNanadinh - Oct 17, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK II - TRADITIONAL AND MODERN MUSIC; each type has different purposes and style
2 - Lubis, what you wrote is not an IELTS task 2 essay. You wrote a research paper complete with references...
Writing FeedbackLUBR2310 - Oct 16, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle.
5 - I have modified it, based on the feedback. Please suggest. In many counties, the government gives benefits to...
Writing Feedbackitsme2216 - Oct 16, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 18, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug
6 - you're writing is not full chaotic, such as you used several correct grammar and you wrote more than 250...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 18, 2017
|I disagree that university should accept same number of men and women in each subjects.
3 - Lu, since this is an "extent" essay, you cannot simply say that you disagree. There has a to be...
Writing FeedbackChi Han - Oct 16, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|The bar charts compares the percentage of Australian men and women who do regular exercise
4 - hi Chi Han. glad to read your writing, you wrote more than 150 and you sometime using well grammar...
Writing FeedbackChi Han - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 18, 2017
|Writing Task 1: incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transport
2 - FBG, I cannot continue assessing your essay at this point because your text did not meet the minimum 150...
Writing FeedbackFlashBanG - Oct 16, 2017 / Holt - Oct 16, 2017
|writing task 2 : some people think universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree
6 - Hi Alimin, I can see that from your essay, the third paragraph was a supporting point to the second...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 16, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 16, 2017
|Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 23, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Bar chart - Population distribution in the Northwest region (1900 to 2050)
8 - Holt has briefly pointed out the main faults in this essay. However, I would like to point out some...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Oct 15, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - Oct 20, 2017
|There are many reasons why people should choose a specified job
4 - Also, I need to remind you that punctuation is important in IELTS and getting it wrong will lose you...
Writing FeedbackAAriel - Oct 15, 2017 / sgassani - Oct 15, 2017
|The essay about nature and nurture kind of talent
4 - @Holt Thank you for your comments. I'm not good at writing essays so your advices are really important for...
Writing Feedbackakesha06 - Oct 14, 2017 / akesha06 - Oct 15, 2017
|TOEFL: Advertising causing people to impulsively buy things
3 - @Holt Thank you for your response but I have a difficulty understanding the first paragraph of your feedback: ...
Writing FeedbackWriter2037 - Oct 13, 2017 / Writer2037 - Oct 14, 2017
|TOEFL - either you choose the same job as your parents do or enter a new field
Writing FeedbackFan0203 - Oct 13, 2017 / Fan0203 - Oct 13, 2017
|Social networking is a double-edged sword - people become more selfish or narrow in their lives
3 - Linh, if this is a formal research paper or school, then you will have to present the sources of...
Writing FeedbackLingMei - Oct 13, 2017 / Holt - Oct 13, 2017
|Co-ed college? Which esbetter for students - single-sex school or a co-ed counterpart
3 - Furqan, the first thing you have to understand is that unlike a TOEFL essay, the IELTS essay does not...
Writing Feedbackfurqanrahmat12 - Oct 13, 2017 / Holt - Oct 13, 2017
|The perseverance can bring us through the most difficult times. Narrative essay correction.
Writing Feedbackbenh44 - Oct 12, 2017 / Holt - Oct 13, 2017
|[IELTS] The percentage of female employees in major tech companies in the US
7 - Hello namibdesert, Like many people have said, you need to add the word to the minimum requirement of 150,...
Writing Feedbacknamibdesert - Oct 12, 2017 / Chi Han - Oct 16, 2017
|[IELTS] Overpopulation in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem.
4 - hi Jimmy, glad to read you're writing because you discuss nice topic actually. it good you wrote more than...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 12, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 16, 2017
|More People Would Like To Pay More Attention To The Famous People. This Is A Positive or negative?
2 - Nguyen, your opening paraphrase was going so well. It was smooth, it was right on the mark, and then...
Writing FeedbackMili5464 - Oct 12, 2017 / Holt - Oct 12, 2017
|Should working hours be reduced?
8 - @rubychautran Hi ruby. Do you have any personal experience to back up or support your points? I think it...
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Oct 12, 2017 / BigBoy - Oct 12, 2017
|Writ. task 1: the pie chart provides information on 5 major purposes for student to study in Britain
3 - Nhu, your overview is incomplete as it does not give an accurate outline of the discussion topics as presented...
Writing FeedbackNhu Vu - Oct 12, 2017 / Holt - Oct 12, 2017
|Agricultural land productivity - IELTS-Cambridge 8- test 1
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 12, 2017 / Holt - Oct 12, 2017
|Is paying taxes enough? Writing IELTS Task 2 attempt
4 - @rubychautran Oh sorry, here is the full prompt : Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution...
Writing Feedbackayibram - Oct 12, 2017 / ayibram - Oct 12, 2017
|City - for the young / Rural - for the old? Living in small community or not?
4 - Hi Alimin, I would recommend you to use different vocabulary to convey your message. For example: if we...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 12, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 12, 2017
|Writing Task 2. Small Village and City Center
3 - Ummu, there are a number of problems with your essay ranging from inaccurate prompt paraphrasing, lexical mistakes and grammar...
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 12, 2017 / Holt - Oct 12, 2017
|Topic: The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
2 - Vu, you will be losing points for task accuracy with your presentation. Your summary overview at the beginning is...
Writing Feedbackvuthanhhoa - Oct 11, 2017 / Holt - Oct 12, 2017
|Changing job; my writing should score 6 for IELTS, can you help me to improve my writing ability
Writing Feedbackintern0410 - Oct 11, 2017 / intern0410 - Oct 13, 2017
|The maps illustrate how Meadowside village and Fonton, which is a neighboring town - development
4 - @Holt Thank you. It is quite considerate of you to give me the advice. I would like to reassure...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 11, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 12, 2017
|Public celeberations such as festivals, holidays... shouldn't be financed by governments
5 - @Holt: Thanks so much for your detailed and useful comments and instructions. I have noted them down to practise...
Writing FeedbackThao Huong - Oct 11, 2017 / Thao Huong - Oct 12, 2017
|The invention of the Internet has had negative effects on your civilization.
4 - I was just expecting someone to view this as a free writing and give me feedback, though. and yes,...
Writing FeedbackWriter2037 - Oct 11, 2017 / Writer2037 - Oct 12, 2017
|Memoir writing draft about my memories in Korea
3 - Yongju, when you set up your first paragraph, you need to do so in a reflective manner. Ease your...
Writing FeedbackChocomint777 - Oct 11, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|History HW - One Object that Can Reflect Modern Civilization
3 - Sherry, this can only be considered a possible outline for topic discussions in your homework. I failed to find...
Writing FeedbackSherrywu - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|[TOEFL independent task] What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult?
3 - Sophia, I think you did not post the full original prompt for the discussion. The topic sentence is missing....
Writing Feedbacksophia1942 - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|The bar chart illustrates the Biritish male and female employees working in different occupations
3 - @hapi_hana9 Hi, I'd like to rewrite a sentence for you. Overall, the percentage of men ... => Overall,...
Writing Feedbackhapi_hana9 - Oct 10, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 22, 2017
|Only by challenging existing knowledge, we are able to expand our thinking about the universe
2 - Since not all countries live under a democratic form of government, it would perhaps be best if you avoid...
Writing Feedbackimpatient101 - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 10, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 2: Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result.
4 - @AliminHamzah There are some mistakes on grammar and spell. And the content lack of logical, it is hard...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 10, 2017 / hiimsandra - Oct 13, 2017
|I am more inclined to study with group of students rather than preparing to test alone [TOEFL]
Writing FeedbackKenChen - Oct 10, 2017 / KenChen - Oct 10, 2017
|Describe a strong memory based upon a smell
2 - Dang, you need to be more descriptive of the smell that is driving this memory of yours. The reader...
Writing Feedbackdvhanh - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|Television is one of the most wonderful inventions of human. And how it influence our children?
2 - Anatasia, I wish you had provided me with the complete and original prompt requirement for this essay. It appears...
Writing Feedbacklamphuongta - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|TOEFL: Children should play and study rather than help do the household chores?
3 - Ching, your opening statement was alright until you got to the part where you were supposed to provide your...
Writing FeedbackSunnyLai - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: The trend of GDP growth in post-reform China
6 - Hello Wong, As a fellow candidate preparing for IELTS academic I can give you few pieces of advice...
Writing Feedbackwinky_wong - Oct 9, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - Oct 20, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country side
3 - Alimin, are you enrolled in English classes at the moment? If you are, how is it possible that you...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|Kids can learn from the very first days by their parents, but other say it's the task of the school
3 - @Ummu Hi, I'd like to give you another example of paraphrasing the prompt: Children is an essential thing......
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 9, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 22, 2017
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