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|The Effects of Violent Movies
9 - i have to do a similar essay...i think you should write out an outline intro-thesis main body- write...
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|What is the major benefit of an international cooperation? Correct my essay
4 - Well, you could start off by creating a thesis. Like instead of going too broad, you use four different...
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|Essay: Are exams necessary? Yes ... they are!
5 - It's a good idea to find a couple of examples where exams aren't used and compare them to examples...
Writing Feedbackyemenja - Apr 16, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|"Is racism becoming an obstacle in today`s world?" - correct my essay
4 - In our diverse society, racism is facing proving to be one of humankind's major tensions in this day...
Writing Feedbackstudent001 - Apr 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 17, 2009
|TOEFL Essay - Convenience food can not improve the way we live.
15 - Perhaps it is a good idea to make time to be healthy? For that matter, while some people have...
Writing FeedbackMonkeyDDragon - Apr 15, 2009 / EF_Sean - May 5, 2009
|Career, exploration, travel, home - check these paragaphs
11 - Here is what to do: Read some articles and see what special ideas they contribute to the topic....
Writing FeedbackThuong - Apr 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 20, 2009
|Aphorism essay - "A Better Tomorrow"
5 - Thanks...
Writing FeedbackNinja Fox - Apr 14, 2009 / Ninja Fox - Apr 21, 2009
|"King of the Jungle - story feedback
Writing Feedbackmeshaal - Apr 14, 2009 / meshaal - Apr 16, 2009
|GED Practice essay: Do you think people learn from their mistakes?
7 - Your concluding paragraph could use some beefing up. And I think if you gave some examples of people learning...
Writing Feedbackspczmb - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|Early human development is strongly influenced by nature
6 - Is this supposed to be a five paragraph essay, or a 4? For a standard, five paragraph essay, this...
Writing FeedbackAlshebah - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009
|500 word image essay (Black Hair Report)
4 - You seem to be on the right track. Now go into more detail. Why were they "jumping" through the...
Writing Feedbackteelyons - Apr 14, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 16, 2009
|Art Paper - Elizabeth Murray
4 - Like Kevin said, I would strengthen the first paragraph. One way of doing that is by quoting Murray near...
Writing FeedbackLink42 - Apr 14, 2009 / silverystars - Apr 18, 2009
|We can't negative wholly benefit from nuclear technology
Writing Feedbacksecret1302 - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|TOEFL Essay - Parents are the best teachers (Devotion and penetration)
8 - You might want to "exhort" parents to spend more one-on-one time with their children. That is one way to...
Writing FeedbackMonkeyDDragon - Apr 14, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 23, 2009
|Suxanne - a story about one of my dreams
3 - Wow, your opening imagery is graphic and gripping. Great job. If you want to make your story even stronger,...
Writing Feedbacknizarnasir - Apr 14, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 18, 2009
|"the chase" story
4 - thank you guys, ur really helpful. but Sean can u suggest some better verbs. im really bad at this....
Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - Apr 13, 2009 / newsha31 - Apr 14, 2009
|Essay to Compare and Contrast Two members of Your Family
Writing FeedbackQueenie31 - Apr 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2009
|Psychology Concepts applied to the real world
5 - ...taught them to sew their clothes... She stayed very close to her sister and brought her along so...
Writing Feedbackteelyons - Apr 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2009
|"Who Swims with the Tuna" by Quammen and "Riches of the Sea" by Scully
3 - I think it was David Brin who first pointed out that environmentalists are always only really concerned with creatures...
Writing FeedbackCodyB - Apr 13, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 14, 2009
|TOEFL Essay -Why go to university (career preparation, self-actualization)
7 - Well, i think in TOEFL essay, it is important to use conjunctions. May be instead of saying 'in conlcusion',...
Writing FeedbackMonkeyDDragon - Apr 13, 2009 / Abby002 - Apr 26, 2009
2 - I would often judge people on assumptions I had been brought up with. Since starting college, I have...
Writing Feedbackkazzy31 - Apr 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 13, 2009
|Education Playground -- letters after your name
Writing Feedbackzoomdots - Apr 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 12, 2009
|Holocaust Essay (genocide subject)
Writing Feedbackahausermun - Apr 11, 2009 / Melanie Rose - Apr 20, 2009
|Many people regret that they had not attended a university, but none regret that have a degree
4 - Hi adalumi, your topic and mine are the same thing :D essayforum.com/writing/university-career-preparation-self-6375/ I think your essay is...
Writing Feedbackadalumi - Apr 10, 2009 / MonkeyDDragon - Apr 13, 2009
|Apprenticeship Program Aplication
Writing Feedbackangelfight - Apr 9, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 10, 2009
|SAT essay: Are people's lives the result of the choices they make?
4 - Thanks ^ ^...
Writing Feedbackkitty Freud - Apr 9, 2009 / kitty Freud - Apr 10, 2009
|Definition Essay: Building the Blocks, Becoming Successful (The Climb)
3 - "Success" is derived from the Latin word "successus"... You can follow Sean's advice by using a new topic...
Writing Feedbackbhoptl - Apr 8, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2009
|IELTS ESSAY: lessons with teachers versus others sources
Writing Feedbackeffy_sun - Apr 8, 2009 / effy_sun - Apr 11, 2009
|Pushed to hard work-----a positive or negative development?
Writing Feedbackkirin - Apr 8, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2009
|TOEFL essay: movies - serious or amusing?
11 - If you like Blackadder, you should check out some of Atkinson's stand-up comedy. A few skits are "Mr Bean-ish,"...
Writing Feedbackeric_ly - Apr 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 10, 2009
|'Schools are nestles of education' - Essay on Violence in schools.
Writing FeedbackChidem - Apr 8, 2009 / Chidem - Apr 24, 2009
5 - As you rework this essay, think about how you can move, as you progress from the introduction to the...
Writing Feedbackhannahkim91 - Apr 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 8, 2009
|Economic paper: the role of opportunity cost in financial decision making
5 - Like Kevin, I can only guess at your meaning, as a result of unfamiliarity with the subject matter combined...
Writing FeedbackAbby002 - Apr 7, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 10, 2009
|Hypocrisy in the Chrysalids
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|Limiting the Use of Dispable Plastic Bags
5 - Chidem and HD, thanks for those great insights. It helps in more ways than you know; it helps me...
Writing Feedbacklenzo537 - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2009
|qualities required for a happy marriage
Writing Feedbackkaynling - Apr 5, 2009 / kaynling - Apr 6, 2009
|The higher goal the bigger efforts for it. (SAT Essay)
5 - About that thesis, I think you should move this sentence to the end o the first paragraph: People should...
Writing FeedbackGiovane - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2009
|It's with God's miracle that human miracles are innovate; Human Mind vs. the Computer
Writing FeedbackRosamond - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 6, 2009
|The individuality, use of machines and traveling for pleasure - essay
Writing FeedbackChidem - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 10, 2009
|Essay on England's Right to Tax
Writing FeedbackReborn777 - Apr 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2009
|The Big Three, Japanese Archetypes
3 - Well, about the space limitation, remember: you could, if you had to, write this whole essay in a single...
Writing FeedbackFDeacon - Apr 4, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2009
|Advertisers, affecting our childs thought process
10 - Overall this is a really well constructed essay. I wonder, though, if you might make a bit stronger if...
Writing Feedbacklilmisha - Apr 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 10, 2009
|My father sacrificed alot in his lifetime ; Someone Who Has Influenced My Life
10 - Is this supposed to be a five paragraph essay, or a 4? For a standard, five paragraph essay, this...
Writing Feedbackcboggs0027 - Apr 3, 2009 / SairaTasartir - Apr 22, 2009
|"Important truths begin as.." (CLEP English Comp w/essay)
4 - Oh, that is an interesting point you made, about the difficulty of writing when you don't know much about...
Writing Feedbacknazgolg2000 - Apr 3, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2009
|The mighty (movie) essay. Max's past.
Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - Apr 2, 2009 / newsha31 - Apr 4, 2009
|Introduction essay for Death of a Salesman prompt- Critiques?
3 - You're on the right track. Willy is only truly happy when he is working with his hands. If he...
Writing Feedbackkeentimothy - Apr 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 4, 2009
|Opening paragraph - 1984 by George Orwell - Big Brother control
5 - There is only one way in which one is allowed to carry out sexual activities: to produce a child...
Writing Feedbackpeppersauce - Apr 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2009
|My sculpture paper, Emile Antoine Bourdelle
6 - I agree with Kevin -- you have met the requirements and given a decent description of the artwork, but...
Writing FeedbackMoeMoe1 - Apr 1, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 4, 2009
|Description Movie-Secret essay
2 - Jay lives with his father -- who is a Tamkang music teacher that wears glasses and a beard, and...
Writing Feedbacklilylee34 - Mar 31, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2009
|Pan's Labyrinth vs. The Fountain essay
4 - I agree with the Eliot quote. Tennessee Williams said it best: "I give you truth in the pleasant disguise...
Writing Feedbackmwingboy - Mar 31, 2009 / silverystars - Apr 3, 2009
|Pledge of Allegiance, under God, separation of church/state, essay feedback
Writing Feedbackkauilani1 - Mar 31, 2009 / silverystars - Apr 3, 2009
|Essay on Obama's Stimulus Plan
8 - Well, if you have to remain neutral, perhaps you could focus on the fact that it is controversial, turn...
Writing FeedbackFDeacon - Mar 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 4, 2009
|Power Privilege essay
8 - You still need to work on defining power. You might start by going over to dictionary.com, which lists 20...
Writing Feedbackwilliams73 - Mar 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 1, 2009
|"Leave it to Allah!" Does this article sound good in English? 2
48 - I'm curious; do you mean that calling for love requires learning, arts, literature, and religion, or that love...
Writing Feedbacktasneemspring - Mar 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 29, 2009
|A good X ( Teacher, Roomate, Classmate, Friend, etc.)
3 - You really need to pick one X. (Teacher, Roommate, Classmate, Friend, etc.). Anything general enough to fit all of...
Writing FeedbackCS800 - Mar 31, 2009 / EF_Sean - Apr 1, 2009
|Some Causes of Stress -- work, family, finance.
3 - In our modern, technological century, stress becomes a common experience for all of us. There are many reasons. for...
Writing Feedbackchubbybear - Mar 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2009
|TOEFL Essay - Cars cause a lot of air pollution...
5 - In my view, this payment it is obviously their responsibility to pay for cleaning the environment and to support...
Writing Feedbackinextricable - Mar 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2009
5 - I agree that the first paragraph should be cut. Instead of saying obvious things, say your most important truth...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Mar 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2009
|My narrative story on how bank of america charge off department closed down
3 - Some excellent advice from Mustafa. I would go even further, though, and say that you should add dialogue even...
Writing Feedbacksexyness1421 - Mar 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - Mar 30, 2009
|My paper, for Newt Gingrich...
19 - Yes, for sure, if you are seeking help from everyone possible, and if you show them that you really...
Writing FeedbackMoeMoe1 - Mar 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - May 9, 2009
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