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|Going overseas for university study
5 - Countries try to exemplify their greatest traits and most beautiful architecture to entice internationalists to come and visit them....
Writing FeedbackSayed Naeem - Mar 6, 2010 / caseySchooling - Oct 21, 2012
|GRE issue 48 History is like a puzzle
4 - Yeah, your sentences seem complex, like sentences used in formal writing. I notice that you are good at varying...
Writing Feedbackclaire echo - Mar 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2010
|gre issue7 video camera provides an accurate and convincing record.
NEW - TOPIC: ISSUE7 - "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has...
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|Life in symmetry - Essay.
2 - You have a verb tense problem at the beginning. You can do this: Today, I spent almost two hours...
Writing FeedbackWanderer_x - Mar 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2010
|Tony Hoagland's "Romantic Moment" -- personal response essay
Writing Feedbackmbiscoe25 - Mar 4, 2010 / mbiscoe25 - Mar 28, 2010
|the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activty.
2 - People believe that the earth is being harmed by human activity. According to me me "Earth is better place...
Writing Feedbackmegha - Mar 4, 2010 / Ariel - Mar 5, 2010
|Toefl:Some students like classes where teachers lecture (do all of the talking)
3 - Thanks Azamat! Please check out the contributor page! My preference is based on several reasons. --- this is...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Mar 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2010
|business and cultural contact + development - views and your opinion
NEW - 1 .Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is a positive development, while others...
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|"great feeling of cooking" - Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare.
3 - That's what we're here for! Sometimes maybe you just want to correct a few of the mistakes, and...
Writing Feedbacksaruul2004 - Mar 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2010
|University education is mandatory to get a good career. Discuss opinion. IELTS
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Mar 4, 2010 / usalma2002 - Mar 5, 2010
|Proof/edit my cause & effect paragraph about unemployment- collegeEnglish
3 - Some of the common causes of unemployment are due to getting fired, getting laid off, the market economy,...
Writing Feedbackxoqtpie609xo - Mar 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2010
|Leave the land in its natural condition? 'harmony with modern cities'
4 - Nowadays, people tend to concentrate more on economic growth and leave the environmental problems behind by constructing more buildings...
Writing Feedbackbinhdt101 - Mar 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2010
|Illustrative Essay, The Dairy Farmers Life
Writing Feedbackmsdenna - Mar 3, 2010 / msdenna - Mar 5, 2010
|Email and text messaging threats written language
Writing Feedbackmalek1406 - Mar 3, 2010 / malek1406 - Mar 6, 2010
|5. mixed --21st century=opportunity,you agree/disagree, changes you hope--
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Mar 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2010
|sedating music - There are many different types of music in the world today.
3 - hi, I'm not good. I will share my experience. "For conclusion" - everybody uses this word. If you choose...
Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Mar 2, 2010 / saruul2004 - Mar 4, 2010
|"Make all you can, save all you can, give all you can" it's better to save money
4 - Otherwise is one word. Also, this is a run on sentence: For basic needs, we should have money; otherwise...
Writing Feedbackmegha - Mar 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2010
|Comparison and Contrast : Differences between two lives
Writing Feedbackpurplespongy22 - Mar 2, 2010 / cathyliu - Mar 2, 2010
|Private car ownership has grown dramatically in recent years.
Writing Feedbacksaruul2004 - Mar 2, 2010 / cathyliu - Mar 18, 2010
|Explain why you like (or do not like) to work in a team.
5 - i have some corrections i hope that help you - never begin a sentence by because/ the sentence must...
Writing FeedbackN2N - Mar 1, 2010 / djanat - Mar 4, 2010
|desirable lifestyle: as a celebrity or common people. argument IELTS
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Mar 1, 2010 / usalma2002 - Mar 2, 2010
|"Preventing Herpes" - Current Issue in Public Health using an article about health problem
9 - I think this should be two sentences instead of one: Herpes is one of the most co mmon sexually...
Writing Feedbackcomet2000 - Mar 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 24, 2010
|essay about studying abroad in spain
2 - I enjoyed reading your essay, it was very well thought out and interesting. Here are a few small mistakes...
Writing Feedbackdefnite - Feb 28, 2010 / EF_Susan - Mar 1, 2010
|Hunger - it's difficult to fully grasp the plight of it; Causes, Concerns and Symptoms
3 - Thanks!!...
Writing Feedbacksperkie - Feb 28, 2010 / sperkie - Mar 12, 2010
|the town of Garlsdon: Maps, roads - IELTS cambridge 5 writting task1
2 - Capitalize the first word: The central part is the town centre and surrounding it is the housing district with...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2010
|Informational and persuasive essay on travel
3 - Thank you very much! I truly appreciate your insight. As times passes and my writing skills improve I hope...
Writing FeedbackJ Carpenter - Feb 27, 2010 / J Carpenter - Mar 1, 2010
|"That birthday card" - Besides the Point? A Re-thread
Writing FeedbackChenalaska - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2010
|Commitment,Intellectual ability & Enthusiasm; Recommendation by academic advisor
Writing FeedbackHanna - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2010
|Maps, roads - IELTS cambridge 5 writting task1 check out the grammar
5 - Thanks everyone! You are all making this forum a great place by helping each other so much. In...
Writing Feedbackmerchant - Feb 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2010
|personal narative -mexico tattoo
NEW - started writing this personall narrative for a senior english assingment..feeling kinda stuck. please helppp Laying my head back...
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|Your school days, an enjoyable event description
5 - The enjoyable event I would like to talk about here is the spring outing activity that happened on my...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
|what is advantage and disadvantage of a new shopping mall ?
3 - A mechanisms of free-trades of consumerism in modern times, shopping malls are large places full of goods and service...
Writing FeedbackBBOY - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
|TOEFL assay: You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business.
4 - I see that you are very good at writing in English! I'll help with a phrase in this sentence:...
Writing Feedbackcuchocruz - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 27, 2010
|Havisham: My Story based on the Poem Havisham
Writing FeedbackAdamking120 - Feb 25, 2010 / Adamking120 - Feb 26, 2010
|micheal jackson : rock with you
4 - 1958: when Michael was born in lower middle class family with a curse of being black. ---- if you...
Writing Feedbackkasi_gem - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|A healthy person: What do people do to stay healthy in your country?
2 - Like in other countries, a healthy life style and having a healthy society is one of the main prioritiesofin...
Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Feb 25, 2010 / Rod_Farva - Feb 25, 2010
|descriptive essay about my favorite animal (the lion)
Writing FeedbackESCRIBE - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|which one do you think--- a wide range of courses --most/least important
3 - Nowadays, along with the emphasis on the overall development of individuals, students now stay ... ---- you don't need...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|How to Apply to Universities in America from Indonesia (process analysis)
3 - ...but something always goes gets in their way. Some people just cannot afford it, and some people just...
Writing Feedbackpurplespongy22 - Feb 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|a narrative reflective essay regarding education
2 - If you are writing in the present verb tense, keep consistent about it: When his class mate, Ken Harvey,...
Writing FeedbackDeedames - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|Photographs/ Reminisce about the past ; Classification Essay
6 - Sounds like a tough class, but it will make you a good writer! I think you should google dianna...
Writing FeedbackGYG17 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2010
|Indian-White Relationship in Colonial New England, can you check my essay
3 - You can't just start by saying something had been some way without saying "when" you are talking about: When...
Writing FeedbackJuan8897 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|"Freedom to Failure" - Definition & Example paper, passive voice, prepostion use
2 - Yes, isn't it interesting that we crave that sense of connectedness, so we blog and twitter about what...
Writing Feedbackkjwerner - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|TOEFL topic: wheter or not to build a school in your hometown
Writing Feedbackpeter007 - Feb 24, 2010 / djanat - Mar 9, 2010
|TOEFL essay (compare work of artists and scientists)
3 - Good advice, Peng! I also think this essay needs an intro paragraph that talks about both artists and...
Writing Feedbacksheryl82 - Feb 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|Do you like to eat at home or hotel?
6 - thank you...
Writing Feedbackmegha - Feb 23, 2010 / megha - Mar 2, 2010
|Modern buildings are appearing in large numbers, we should build our buildings in traditional styles
5 - Well, it is a very difficult language to learn! You are doing very well. The way to practice is...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 26, 2010
|Personal Story - The Child Hood
Writing Feedbackhyori14 - Feb 23, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 25, 2010
|Personal Essay- How the children from India transformed me
Writing Feedbackjenniferrchan - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2010
|[TOEFL essay] Teachers should update their knowledge every 5years.
Writing Feedbackduke616 - Feb 22, 2010 / duke616 - Feb 25, 2010
|In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior,
Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|Nanotechnology (implications and the future) - essay polishing
2 - There are many different implications that nanotechnology has for the future.--- this kind of sentence always weakens an essay....
Writing FeedbackClyde - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|"Do Phone Calls Increase Voter Turnout?" - article summary and critique
NEW - I was hoping to get some quick revisions for the rough draft of my article critique, I feel like...
Writing Feedbackggc540 - Feb 22, 2010 / — -
|Reasons-winners are be motivated by money & fame, what impacts on youth & itself
3 - Great thanks, klusterfunk. (1)Due to the rapid ecomomic development, Due to /Owing to/As a result of; Along with...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 22, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 22, 2010
|Anti-social behavior, lack of respect to others -help me make some improvement
5 - This is what colons are for----> There are mainly two causes of this phenomenon: the negative influence of ......
Writing Feedbackadverb - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|Essay-Mommy Makeovers, Newest Trend in Cosmetic Surgery-Feedback Welcome!
4 - Questions are good attention grabbers, for sure. They are almost a little cliche, though, because of how overused rhetorical...
Writing Feedbackamymich79 - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2010
|Compulsive buying disorder (CBD): Conceptualization and classification
Writing FeedbackMcGregor10 - Feb 21, 2010 / McGregor10 - Mar 4, 2010
|"big or small inventions and their roles" - English Composition Clep
2 - When you use a semi-colon, you are supposed to have a complete sentence worth of words on each side...
Writing Feedbackmonessie - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|toefl writting:Printed books have greater effects on society than television
2 - In fact, people in growing numbers prefer television to printed books, considering it efficient and effective. Yet, there are...
Writing Feedbackelvis_ma - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|TOEFL IBT ESSAY "Telephones have had more positive effects on human kind than TV
2 - Don't write it all as one long paragraph. Separate it into some 4 or 5 sentence paragraphs: ...telephone,...
Writing Feedbackcandy890411 - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
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