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|ESSAY: SHOULD TUCK SHOP STOP SELLING "JUNK FOOD"?
5 - That's interesting about U.S.A. Today taking both sides... smart strategy! Speaking of editorials, my grandmother recently wrote an editorial...
Writing Feedbacknpxzs - Jan 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2009
|Nature and nurture essay research (GRE exam)
2 - It may be more accurate to say not that people inherited particular personality traits, but rather that people inherited...
Writing Feedbackavih - Jan 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2009
|Narrative Essay (what to be when you grow up) - I need critique
4 - Thank you for the help! I am actually planning to specialize in pediatric oncology : ) I actually follow...
Writing FeedbackBrinajada - Jan 23, 2009 / Brinajada - Jan 23, 2009
|By age 24, 60% of bullies have a criminal record; Introduction/ Essay on Bullying
3 - "By age 24, 60% of bullies have a criminal record." Also, do you know that 92% of statistics are...
Writing Feedbackcoollint - Jan 22, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 22, 2009
|A Letter from Birmingham Jail (loaded words effectiveness)
5 - thank you all for reading it i appreciate it very much and will definitely make the adjustments you suggested!...
Writing Feedbackremembermo - Jan 20, 2009 / remembermo - Jan 25, 2009
|Oedipus the Tragic Hero
Writing Feedbackvkwang - Jan 19, 2009 / vkwang - Jan 20, 2009
|Several different ways in which colleges fail to prepare students for life.
7 - Using a solitary example weakens an essay that is supposed to discuss "Several different ways" of something, because it...
Writing FeedbackKayshel - Jan 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 22, 2009
|Tragic Hero in "Antigone" by Sophoceles- essay feedback
7 - The two parts of the prompt don't need separate paragraphs. The answer to (1) is "Creon." The answer to...
Writing Feedbackluckystar - Jan 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 26, 2009
|Great Expectations - Charles Dickens. Tension and suspense.
4 - You include a lot of plot summary and details that really have little or nothing to do with how...
Writing FeedbackViral - Jan 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 19, 2009
|GRE essay (Science and Art)
2 - Your essay lacks focus. It is not particularly clear what your thesis is, or what sort of relationship, if...
Writing Feedbackavih - Jan 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 17, 2009
|"In the middle of difficulty lies opportunity"; significant event or achievement
3 - Use a dash to separate these: "In the middle of difficulty lies opportunity" -- Albert Einstein Oh,...
Writing Feedbackvj_justin - Jan 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2009
|review - Position(s) of responsibility you have held
Writing Feedbackvj_justin - Jan 15, 2009 / silverystars - Jan 26, 2009
|"The New Lone Rangers" and "Foot-binding" are representing the same sort of character
2 - This is interesting reading good luck with your grammar try buying greegs list it should help you in the...
Writing Feedbackchipmunk - Jan 15, 2009 / mcglownn - Jan 15, 2009
|Leadership experience - leader is one who learns from their success and failure
Writing Feedbackkbros9193 - Jan 12, 2009 / vj_justin - Jan 14, 2009
|Sexual Harassment research essay
2 - Revise for conciseness by taking out unnecessary words. They suck the life out of writing! :) To begin...
Writing FeedbackKarim Fathi - Jan 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 13, 2009
|"The Great Changes" - Essay Feedback
3 - This opening part: For most people, high school is just the next step of education. Most students havetheir...
Writing Feedbackseanydee - Jan 11, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 12, 2009
|1984 / Modern Day surveillane proposal, but im an art student
4 - Your essay is a promising first draft of how the modern world contains Orwellian elements. It has nothing to...
Writing Feedbackliamg87 - Jan 11, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 26, 2009
|need help with fixing my essay, "LETTER FROM BIRMINGHAM JAIL" response
Writing Feedbackamonet520 - Jan 10, 2009 / amonet520 - Jan 13, 2009
|"rules of the game" in society - essay, opinions
Writing Feedbackyohooo - Jan 10, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 12, 2009
|need help with this essay - "the subjects with which you had difficulty"
Writing Feedbackkbros9193 - Jan 10, 2009 / kbros9193 - Jan 11, 2009
|About edgar allen poe essay
11 - Shock and sophistication is a mixture that can so easily be either loved or loathed, but the point is...
Writing Feedbacknotmysuitcase - Jan 9, 2009 / silverystars - Jan 26, 2009
|an experiment essay - A memorable evening
Writing Feedbackonindo - Jan 9, 2009 / onindo - Jan 9, 2009
|A Separate Peace Essay during World War II in 1943
6 - Commas can be your friend. To help you out, here are some rules on commas: grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm Many teachers...
Writing FeedbackShardul - Jan 7, 2009 / EF_Constance - Jan 9, 2009
|'Liberalisation of aviation' - Airline deregulation essay
2 - The airline industry currently occupies a very important place in the Irish market, due to both the major changes...
Writing FeedbackTizzy - Jan 6, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 7, 2009
|Essay comments - "invention that has influenced modern society"
2 - Great job!! My suggestions would be other than calling, what else can a cell phone do that significantly improves...
Writing FeedbackJerrySpock - Jan 6, 2009 / mikedogg90 - Jan 9, 2009
|'People use some drugs, always' - essay about drugs.
8 - People always use some kinds of drugs. Despite the effects of drugs, millions of people constantly consume (abuse?) various...
Writing Feedbackjurgita - Jan 6, 2009 / mikedogg90 - Jan 9, 2009
|Odyssey essay; 'Sure God created man before woman...'
6 - Well, for a high school or undergraduate essay... really for any essay... quotes can be added in at the...
Writing Feedbacksczyra - Jan 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2009
|Peony in love is my favorite book. Take a read of this essay
5 - Jerry, that is some great advice. Actually, the thesis sentence often goes at the end of the first paragraph....
Writing Feedbackjenf3r - Jan 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2009
|Essay comments - "A place you go to relax"
4 - Thank you two for the feedback! I will change the end of the first paragraph to (my thesis statement):...
Writing FeedbackJerrySpock - Jan 5, 2009 / JerrySpock - Jan 5, 2009
|Internet has given people access to information; we can't live easily without
3 - Beyond the advice you've already been given, you should revise "With the development of Technology, people have chance to...
Writing Feedbackfranklamparden - Jan 4, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 4, 2009
|Lincoln Paper - Introductory Paragraph
Writing FeedbackGlenn900 - Jan 3, 2009 / mussy - May 26, 2013
|The person I admire happens to be my rival - Essay on Role model
13 - Thanx...
Writing FeedbackULL - Jan 3, 2009 / ULL - Jan 14, 2009
|writing technique advices for the essay " regular and election days"
8 - It is better than it was, certainly. You now sound more thoughtful, and have gone into more depth on...
Writing Feedbackcraver - Jan 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Jan 6, 2009
|for IELST...." sports or physical course is importmant "essay
5 - Is that true? Wow, schools should not drop phys. ed... it is so important! I is even important for...
Writing Feedbackpamfan0810 - Jan 2, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 3, 2009
|response paragraph for the essay "why we crave horror movies"
Writing Feedbackcraver - Jan 2, 2009 / craver - Jan 6, 2009
|An essay about privacy and communication
4 - Another example is that when people use Internet cafés to check their email, some may forget to sign out...
Writing Feedbackray2008 - Jan 1, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 2, 2009
|Aunt Junko, essay feedback
Writing Feedbackseatoy - Dec 30, 2008 / seatoy - Jan 4, 2009
|Paper feedback on Nationalized Healthcare
Writing Feedbackcgryniewicz - Dec 29, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 30, 2008
|Reflective Response on "To Build a Fire" by Jack London
2 - Nice job! Just use commas to introduce quotes: I think that the author does an excellent job building...
Writing Feedbackrockd211 - Dec 29, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|PERSONAL ESSAY, does it fit? (Pose an original question and answer it.)
NEW - Pose an original question and answer it. (500 words or less): Imagine that you've just finished writing your...
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|Writing to improve my essay - New Year resolution
Writing Feedbackvickyw - Dec 28, 2008 / vickyw - Dec 29, 2008
|History and China - Why Lehigh, need corrections
NEW - Obsessed with the historical documentaries of his time, my father often watches them with great appreciation on the sofa....
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|Essay: "What is art for me?"
Writing FeedbackPower_Hammer - Dec 27, 2008 / Angela629 - Dec 27, 2008
|"Prevention is better than cure" IELTS essay - much band score I can get?
2 - This concept represents the opportunity to avoid many diseases if we take proactive steps before a problem forms. Previously,...
Writing Feedbackkazi - Dec 27, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
|Magic Lu Chen - essay help
5 - Good influential essay, I'm not fond with your system of writing, but I can sense your emotion with Lu...
Writing Feedbackfl415 - Dec 27, 2008 / mikedogg90 - Jan 9, 2009
|Business Law Essay feedback (Stevens, Wiley & Co)
4 - Yes, these are supposed to be grounded in your course readings. Good luck! It's hard, but it can be...
Writing FeedbackTom - Dec 26, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 27, 2008
|Account of Activities
NEW - Activity 1 In the early 2008, I participated in Beijing Olympic Games Volunteering Service. I filled in the online...
Writing Feedbacktonydengcnu - Dec 25, 2008 / — -
|Academic Interest (I like math, physics and economics)
Writing Feedbacktonydengcnu - Dec 25, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2008
|Essay comparing two Short Stories-Topic: Naive Narrator
Writing FeedbackMimiroselilly25 - Dec 22, 2008 / Mimiroselilly25 - Dec 23, 2008
|"George Richman" - need revision help on writing a narrative
3 - During one summer day, Rich City was blooming with beauty. The trees are fully grown, everything is green, the...
Writing Feedbackyahman - Dec 19, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 20, 2008
|"Experience of Cultural Difference" essay (pls. help revise, thanks)
2 - For family reasons, I have visited New Zealand on many occasions, and have savored a distinctive cultural atmosphere. ...
Writing Feedbacktonydengcnu - Dec 17, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2008
|Duality of good and evil essay
5 - You might find it helpful to read other works that present philosophies of good and evil The Virtue of...
Writing Feedbackkyudaime - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 20, 2008
|notre dame essay! - look through and give any suggestions
Writing Feedbacklilveni - Dec 16, 2008 / lilveni - Dec 18, 2008
|Need revision with Humanity Paper on "is humanity good/evil"
2 - You might want to consider taking issue with the question here. Good and evil are moral concepts that presuppose...
Writing Feedbackchiknugget - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 17, 2008
|Naturalism v Modernism - comparison essay
2 - You might want to consider picking three or four of the main characteristics of each movement and comparing each...
Writing Feedbackmichaelfrye1970 - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Sean - Dec 17, 2008
|"The Healthy Americans Act" - essay
Writing FeedbackAndrew - Dec 16, 2008 / Andrew - Dec 17, 2008
|what are some of the experiences that have shapped your outlook and the way
NEW - Nowadays our daily life and time are moving faster than it did several centuries ago. That is why every...
Writing FeedbackAsselya - Dec 16, 2008 / — -
|distance learning and online computer classes should replace classroom lear
Writing FeedbackAsselya - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 17, 2008
|it is better to marry someone who is similar to you - essay
Writing FeedbackAsselya - Dec 16, 2008 / Asselya - Dec 17, 2008
|Multilateral Aid is like water; it can float a boat but it can also sink a boat.
5 - No, I didn't think you were being rude! Words are a difficult means of communication.. :) Kevin...
Writing Feedbackrice - Dec 16, 2008 / EF_Kevin - Dec 16, 2008
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