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|IELTS writing task 2 - teachers and parents education - which has more value to a child?
6 - Hi, I think you should write down your opinion in the first paragraph. In the second and third paragraphs,...
Writing Feedbackemem123 - Sep 26, 2017 / monopolymi - Oct 3, 2017
|Which age group is easier to be influenced by views of celebrities?
3 - Sheanen, the opening paraphrase is not accurate in terms of representing the original prompt. You have a tendency to...
Writing Feedbackdiligentwriter - Sep 26, 2017 / Holt - Sep 26, 2017
|[IELTS writing task 1] Table: Underground railway information summary
6 - Hello hgianghgiang, based my humble opinion. your essay is not too bad actually, you wrote more than 150 words...
Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Sep 26, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 10, 2017
|Some believe that children should get education at their home rather than educational institutes
4 - Ankush, regardless of whether you are writing an essay for the IELTS or TOEFL test, the main requirement for...
Writing Feedbackvipy411 - Sep 25, 2017 / Holt - Sep 26, 2017
|Strict actions should be imposed on the offenders who violates traffic norms
5 - @Holt : Thanks for the response. Mistakes that you pointed in my essay are valid and I gave me...
Writing Feedbackniteshgoyal11 - Sep 25, 2017 / niteshgoyal11 - Sep 26, 2017
|Salary can overweight other factors when it comes to selecting a job
5 - @lamtrieuphong Hi, It seems to me that you need to build more sentences in the conclusion that cover all...
Writing Feedbacklamtrieuphong - Sep 25, 2017 / ayibram - Sep 26, 2017
|Essay about unsatisfactory habits (TOEFL)
3 - @Holt Thank you for your reply! I appreciate your advices. This is my first time writing an essay. I...
Writing Feedbacknaz1204 - Sep 25, 2017 / naz1204 - Sep 25, 2017
|TOFEL: To finish a project single at one time or do several projects at same time?
2 - Ching, your representation of the prompt paraphrase is inaccurate and your paragraphs go beyond the maximum allowable of 5...
Writing FeedbackSunnyLai - Sep 25, 2017 / Holt - Sep 25, 2017
|International fast food companies have spread their branches - junk food is available everywhere
5 - @diligentwriter Hi Sheanen, yeah I just realized it. Thank you for your feedback :) @hgianghgiang Hi Nguyen, thank...
Writing Feedbackayibram - Sep 25, 2017 / ayibram - Sep 25, 2017
|These days people pay more attention to artists (writers, painters, and so on)
3 - Tello, your whole approach to the essay is wrong. You did not understand the instruction sentence at the end...
Writing Feedbackafnitello99 - Sep 24, 2017 / Holt - Sep 25, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Motivation for sports persons
6 - @rubychautran This essay impressed me right from the beginning with excellent paraphrasing. Throughout the body paragraphs you presented a...
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Sep 24, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Sep 25, 2017
|IELTS writing practice task 2 academic - Modern technology
4 - @Holt Thanks for reviewing! Your advice are really useful. I was trying to rephrase the keywords in the question,...
Writing Feedbacklhy1216 - Sep 24, 2017 / lhy1216 - Sep 25, 2017
|Is it the right time for wildlife preservation? task2
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Sep 23, 2017 / sfiza - Sep 25, 2017
|Tertiary education is becoming an increasingly popular choice among high school graduates
5 - @rubychautran I agree with contributor Holt's feedback that you shouldn't assert: "Tertiary education is becoming an increasingly popular choice...
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Sep 23, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Sep 25, 2017
|An increasing number of people are concerned about the benefits of studying the past in schools
Writing Feedbackhoanglk12 - Sep 23, 2017 / rubychautran - Sep 24, 2017
|IELTS writing task 1 -- the comparisons among the sales of two Fairtrade-labelled goods
Writing Feedbackemem123 - Sep 23, 2017 / emem123 - Sep 24, 2017
|FOR QUESTBRIDGE: The Christmas Present that Got Away
3 - @Holt Hi, I considered your advice and drafted a new response to be the prompt. I would appreciate some...
Writing Feedbackissaessay - Sep 23, 2017 / issaessay - Sep 23, 2017
|Telecommuting allows employer to cut costs
3 - Renzo, your statement has time reference issues. It appears that you are using a future tense voice in the...
Writing Feedbackrenzotello - Sep 23, 2017 / Holt - Sep 23, 2017
|People will have rewarding and life enriching experiences when they have a chance of studying abroad
3 - My, your opening statement is inconsistent. The first sentence does not make any sense. Aside from that, your paragraph...
Writing Feedbackmy vo - Sep 23, 2017 / Holt - Sep 23, 2017
|Some people may get specific traits or skills by born or it can be achieved only by practice?
4 - FiZa, an accurate review of your essay cannot be completed as your original prompt posting does not include the...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Sep 23, 2017 / Holt - Sep 23, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 (About the distance-learning programs)
2 - Wei, this is an essay discussion that requires you to deliver an emotional response to the "extent" discussion. That...
Writing FeedbackDavidFeng - Sep 23, 2017 / Holt - Sep 23, 2017
|Genetic engineering is an important issue in modern society.
3 - ... Modification technique precipitates problems upon society. Some people tend to favor the technique because modifying the human DNA...
Writing FeedbackWakalanud - Sep 23, 2017 / issaessay - Sep 23, 2017
|Obesity is an increasing public health problem in some parts of the world.
5 - Renzo, what is the prompt that you are responding to? It seems that you are not responding in the...
Writing Feedbackrenzotello - Sep 23, 2017 / Holt - Sep 23, 2017
|ECONOMIC DEVELOPMENT CANNOT BE PROMOTED IN PARALLEL WITH ENVIROMENTAL PRESERVATION
5 - @Wakalanud thank you so much for helping me, I really appreciate that @Holt Thank you a lot for helping...
Writing FeedbackWontaeyoung - Sep 22, 2017 / Wontaeyoung - Sep 28, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 (Both Views of Blood Sport on Animals)
3 - @ditoaji hello!! I read your paragraph, I saw you need to paraphrase the prompt properly. U can do...
Writing Feedbackditoaji - Sep 22, 2017 / sfiza - Sep 23, 2017
|MYSTERIES OF THE UNIVERSE - MY ESSAY TO GET INTO COLLEGE
2 - This essay is amazing. I can truly see you worked hard on this. This essay flows cohesively. The only...
Writing Feedbackcalliepj24 - Sep 21, 2017 / Kiera9473 - Sep 22, 2017
|Materials printed on paper or given in an electronic form? I am working for Toefl Exam.
2 - Fahri, rather than creating your own information in relation to the original prompt, you must simply restate the prompt...
Writing FeedbackFahri - Sep 21, 2017 / Holt - Sep 21, 2017
|Our Trip Our Adventure in Jambi - Narrative Essay
2 - Nuraya, your narrative essay is too broad in scope and should use the first pronouns "Me, myself. and I"...
Writing FeedbackNuraya - Sep 21, 2017 / Holt - Sep 21, 2017
|A Time Bomb in Wildlife Existence - IELTS Writing Academic Task 2
8 - I'd like to suggest a way of making the introduction for you: follow the original prompt as closely as...
Writing Feedbackayibram - Sep 20, 2017 / rubychautran - Sep 28, 2017
|IELTS Academic Writing Task 2: Essay Writing (Effect of the Internet in society)
2 - Riya, I believe that this is a level 6 essay. It has a clear presentation of the discussion points...
Writing FeedbackIELTS_Academic - Sep 20, 2017 / Holt - Sep 21, 2017
|[IELTS writing task 2] Performance enhancing drugs : causes and effects?
Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Sep 20, 2017 / Wakalanud - Sep 20, 2017
|TOEFL: invest in infrastructure and physical plant V.S. invest in keeping the faculty satisfied
Writing Feedbackdiligentwriter - Sep 20, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 8, 2017
|SAT essay, topic: Taking the responsibility
7 - @TatyanaMileva I like this essay but, there is some grammar mistakes. English is not your native language though, so...
Writing FeedbackTatyanaMileva - Sep 19, 2017 / calliepj24 - Sep 21, 2017
|Clear indicator of a great nation is the common well-being of all its people.
3 - Nikhil, you can very possibly score a 4 with this essay. You were able to show a clear understanding...
Writing Feedbacknikhiltinder - Sep 18, 2017 / Holt - Sep 19, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Debatable Issue of Genetic Engineering
5 - hay @ditoaji I think this "World's livestock and availability of ..." sentence quite confusing and it is hard...
Writing Feedbackditoaji - Sep 18, 2017 / Wakalanud - Sep 20, 2017
|Exploring Natural Resources (high demand in oil and gas) - IELTS 2: Essay Writing
2 - Riya, this essay will automatically get a failing score of 2 for the TA portion. That score is based...
Writing FeedbackIELTS_Academic - Sep 18, 2017 / Holt - Sep 19, 2017
|IELTS Academic writing - Advertising expenditure breakdown
3 - @Holt Thank you for the feedback. Noted all your points and will try to keep all this in mind...
Writing FeedbackJavid27 - Sep 18, 2017 / Javid27 - Sep 22, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 _Description of Graph - spending time on the phone calls
5 - Hellooo there..., it is always good to include the picture of the graph as this way helps us to...
Writing FeedbackIELTSWARRIOR - Sep 18, 2017 / eddies - Oct 9, 2017
|More and more factories are being built to serve for the massive production of large enterprises.
2 - Kim, your essay will fail on the basis of your opening statement alone. You were not able to properly...
Writing FeedbackMimi123 - Sep 18, 2017 / Holt - Sep 18, 2017
|Crime is a serious problem in most countries and the crime rate has tendency to increase annually
Writing FeedbackAnnie Tran 162 - Sep 17, 2017 / Annie Tran 162 - Sep 17, 2017
|Argument Topic about the way to increase the more viewers of news programs
3 - Abhilash, your arguments are not very convincing as you do not show a higher degree of analytical thinking beyond...
Writing Feedbackabhilashbhure - Sep 16, 2017 / Holt - Sep 17, 2017
|THE EATING HABIT AND LIFESTYLE OF CHILDREN
4 - @Holt Thank you so much for your assessment. I apologize for not having the question. Here it is: In...
Writing Feedbackhongphuoc - Sep 16, 2017 / hongphuoc - Sep 17, 2017
|[IELTS Writing Task2] - Hiring people with only practical skills and not looking at their education
3 - @Hold Thank you so much for your feedback. I will come up with another essay by incorporating your feedback....
Writing Feedbackpurushotham - Sep 16, 2017 / purushotham - Sep 16, 2017
|CBEST Writing Test : Explain if you have taken any risk in your life.
3 - @Holt Thank you so much. I will try again. Can you please tell me what else needs an improvement,...
Writing FeedbackRaj1234 - Sep 15, 2017 / Raj1234 - Sep 16, 2017
|Essay about whether university students must pay all tuition fees
4 - Hai, your paraphrase is inaccurate and does not properly reflect the sentiment of the original prompt. there is no...
Writing Feedbackhaiinnn - Sep 15, 2017 / Holt - Sep 16, 2017
|Young generations may be more aware on issues related to the environment and starvation
Writing Feedbacknguyentoan1999 - Sep 15, 2017 / nguyentoan1999 - Sep 15, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] THEORY VS EXPERIENCE IN FUTURE JOB MARKET
3 - @Holt Hi Holt, I failed to response to the prompt correctly. My essay is likely suitable for a...
Writing Feedbackhailung - Sep 15, 2017 / hailung - Sep 28, 2017
|Is the speaking competence or the writing ability playing a more decisive role in people's life
Writing Feedbackws0034 - Sep 15, 2017 / ws0034 - Sep 15, 2017
|Seminar report about the nuts and bolts of the graduate program
2 - Bonita, the summary regarding Henry is too short and uninformative. You need to expand on the discussion that he...
Writing FeedbackBonita_se - Sep 15, 2017 / Holt - Sep 15, 2017
|Reasons and solutions for wasting food
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Sep 15, 2017 / ditoaji - Sep 21, 2017
|Ielts General Training Essay on reading for kids
4 - Raven, while the advice regarding the grammar changes in your essay is good, a more accurate analysis of your...
Writing FeedbackRavenlui - Sep 14, 2017 / Holt - Sep 15, 2017
|Easiest way getting good grades: organizing ourselves and our time, being active in the class
4 - thank you for all of your suggestions. i have corrected both introductory and conclusion of mine. this essay is...
Writing FeedbackNuraya - Sep 14, 2017 / Nuraya - Sep 14, 2017
|(Paragraph contrasting food) Homemade Salsa vs. Restaurant Salsa
2 - Kaycee, make it clear that you are going to be comparing generic restaurant salsa with your family recipe for...
Writing Feedbackbandgeek98 - Sep 13, 2017 / Holt - Sep 14, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Job Vacancies Restriction in Many Countries
4 - @ditoaji I think Your introduction did not directly relate to the question being asked. The statement of the question...
Writing Feedbackditoaji - Sep 13, 2017 / Ganesh Mumar - Sep 16, 2017
|The methods used by three countries in order to deal with harmful waste products
4 - Hi, I'd like to rewrite a sentence for you. In detail, underground burial ... => 82% of waste...
Writing FeedbackMelindaLinda - Sep 13, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 5, 2017
|Businesses social responsibilties provide values for community
Writing Feedbackvinhconnect - Sep 13, 2017 / vinhconnect - Sep 14, 2017
|The plans for a school's development within a 20 year period - diagrams/maps
2 - Hi Melinda, this essay is pretty good. You have managed to properly discuss this essay in an acceptable manner....
Writing FeedbackMelindaLinda - Sep 12, 2017 / Holt - Sep 12, 2017
|Recently, people have a tendency of living on their own
2 - Nguyen, this essay did not follow the prompt requirement for the discussion. The instruction is asking you if this...
Writing Feedbackthuong0504 - Sep 12, 2017 / Holt - Sep 12, 2017
|Do you agree or disagree that increased global tourism are more harmful than beneficial?
3 - thank you very much holt, you are very helpful. May i ask another question? ( i just did). can...
Writing FeedbackIELTS JOHN - Sep 12, 2017 / IELTS JOHN - Sep 12, 2017
|People with five distinctive employment status allocating their spare time
3 - Well. I think you should change the way you describe the information because it looks too simple.You can also...
Writing Feedbackdaiha20082009 - Sep 12, 2017 / Watsup - Sep 13, 2017
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