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|Numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished
5 - @Holt I just remember, I recently printed out IELTS answer sheets, to get used to it, actually, This essay...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 25, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 25, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time.
3 - I just removed all my comments cause I think you do not need them. Please just follow Holt's instructions....
Writing Feedbackscully_vananh - Oct 25, 2017 / ah_zafari - Oct 25, 2017
|[task 1] map writing: arrangements in an American town between 1948 and the present year
3 - @Holt Glad to hear your advice. I appreciate your corrections, especially I know the usage of "to...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 25, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 25, 2017
|Essay about the influence of the internet
4 - Ainur, there is a lack of clarity in the presentation of your essay. Don't get me wrong, I can...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Information concerning the production of oil in six different countries from 1990 to 2010. IELTS 1
2 - Reinhardt, your sentence presentations do not follow the minimum 3 sentence requirement, which is why your essay automatically fell...
Writing Feedbackkampusbarbarrr - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|The graphs below presents data about computer ownership as a percentage of the population, 2002-2010
Writing Feedbacktom73217321 - Oct 24, 2017 / tom73217321 - Oct 25, 2017
|Living in a big city is more convenient and easily to find better jobs than in a suburban area
6 - @hiimsandra I will rewrite this essay. Your corrections are very useful. Thank you:) Oh, and the request is "What...
Writing Feedbackirisyuki - Oct 24, 2017 / irisyuki - Oct 25, 2017
|There is a lot of information in each country that becomes accessible if you know their language.
2 - You must never begin the discussion of the essay with a representation of information that is not located in...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 24, 2017
|Statistics of CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal
2 - Just_writer, hi, there are some grammar mistakes and misspellings. I will address the core: 1. Yous start well...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 24, 2017 / nemezidus - Oct 24, 2017
|Where there is no struggle, there is no strength. An essay for financial assistance.
4 - @HoltI am trying to obtain financial assistance from a program they offer for recent graduates of my school and...
Writing Feedbackaundraj - Oct 24, 2017 / aundraj - Oct 24, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 : Many TV advertisements nowadays cause effects on children
4 - Hello, Here are some corrections, them to reduce the harmful effect clamor spend the amount of time to...
Writing FeedbackEster - Oct 23, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 24, 2017
|Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good?
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 23, 2017 / pier - Oct 24, 2017
|The diagram shows the changes at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950
2 - Tran, the overview summary is meant to help you write a better essay. It is there so that you...
Writing Feedbackngoantran - Oct 23, 2017 / Holt - Oct 24, 2017
|Writing task 2 : Some people say it is OK to use animals for our benefit, others say it is not good
5 - Hello, Here are some corrections, human takes advantage most people who a good intention, but they do it...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 23, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 25, 2017
|The diagram presents the process of generating electricity from geothermal energy in a power plant
3 - Your essay is not effective in reflecting the C&C and GRA considerations of your essay. All of your paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 23, 2017 / Holt - Oct 23, 2017
|Allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters or not
3 - You have properly represented the requirements of the Task Accuracy section of scoring. There is a clear representation of...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 23, 2017 / Holt - Oct 23, 2017
|The difference of consumption between chicken beef lamb and fish in a European country
4 - Hi Jessie. Listen, there is actually a proper format to be followed for the opening presentation of a Task...
Writing Feedbackcherry_amour - Oct 22, 2017 / Holt - Oct 23, 2017
|The place where students hang out
Writing FeedbackSheGoesLalala - Oct 22, 2017 / SheGoesLalala - Oct 22, 2017
|Students want to live away from home while they continue to study
2 - Luong, you need to learn how to use a wider vocabulary range. Your essay becomes redundant because you use...
Writing Feedbackaliceliang - Oct 22, 2017 / Holt - Oct 22, 2017
|People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 21, 2017 / duynguyen1808 - Oct 22, 2017
|GRE issue essay of claim and reason type
4 - likhitha, due to the existing problems with your essay, I do not believe that it can score higher than...
Writing FeedbackAhona ash - Oct 21, 2017 / Holt - Oct 22, 2017
|Is it better to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway or on public transport?
2 - @just_writer to makes we need better railway so we can have better access to other cities in a...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 21, 2017 / sgassani - Oct 21, 2017
|The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurant between 2003,2013
3 - You should actually aim to write at least 200 words of the 150 minimum for this type of essay....
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 21, 2017 / Holt - Oct 22, 2017
|[task 1] bar chart writing - where people live in the Northwest region
7 - I totally understand and it's perfectly fine. I just did not like the Holt's comment. It was quite offensive....
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 21, 2017 / ah_zafari - Oct 21, 2017
|[task 1] line graph - the revenue of a New York City Bookstore
6 - @Holt @pier...
Writing Feedbackphduyenngo - Oct 21, 2017 / phduyenngo - Oct 21, 2017
|Punishment for each type of crime was often a prominent rule in societies
2 - Jalaleh, I would have been very happy to review this introduction for you had you just not forgotten one...
Writing FeedbackSol19921992 - Oct 20, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|[task1] map writing: the evolution of a villege
4 - I see. Thank you for your advice. I will improve skills accordingly and try to turn writing into my...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 20, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 20, 2017
|Use of animals for testing medicines is cruel or not ?
3 - Hi jayy, I think you didn't correctly paraphrase the prompt. You also didn't discuss two views correctly. For example,...
Writing Feedbackjayy98 - Oct 20, 2017 / pier - Oct 20, 2017
|Is it essential for newcomers to get used and follow the traditions and culture in a foreign country
4 - @Holt Thank you very much for your comment. I really appreciate it and will try my best to follow...
Writing Feedbackhoanghienktvn141 - Oct 19, 2017 / hoanghienktvn141 - Oct 26, 2017
|The official forbiddance of smoking in public places - IELTS writing practice task 2 academic
5 - @lhy1216 Hi, I'd like to make a correction for you. ...because smokers contribute make up only a ......
Writing Feedbacklhy1216 - Oct 19, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 21, 2017
|A school has been given money to spend on one thing to improve the school.
2 - Laura, I think you have not been properly briefed as to how to write the opening statement of a...
Writing FeedbackLauraMoriarty - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|Academic IELTS task 1-The maps of town center of Islip now and in the future
3 - Lu, when you provide the summary overview for your essay, always remember to include the discussion instruction at the...
Writing FeedbackChi Han - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|The population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults. good or bad?
2 - This sort of essay, based upon your title heading, indicates that you are to pick only one side of...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 20, 2017
|Maps below show the centre of small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development
4 - Hi just_writer, One mistake in paragraph 3: "The main road usability...." The meaning of "usability" means the ease...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 19, 2017 / Chi Han - Oct 19, 2017
|Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to VIP's personal lives
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 19, 2017 / TJLuschen - Oct 19, 2017
|Communication and trust are considered to be indispensable parts of social life
5 - @Holt Thank you very much, but I still don't know what should I do about the opening paragraph. Could...
Writing FeedbackRubenstein - Oct 19, 2017 / Rubenstein - Oct 19, 2017
|[task1] Three possible sites for a new hypermarket, which will be built in the city of Pellington
7 - @Holt Thank you for your explanation. But I'm a bit confused. I suppose the map is about "shopping center",...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 19, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 20, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Many countries increase the amount of household garbage going to landfill every year.
2 - Hang, you are taking an IELTS Task 2 test. This means, you are not allowed to start your discussion...
Writing FeedbackHannielee - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|It is now possible for scientist and tourist to travel remote natural environment eg. the south pole
3 - Ummu, the difficulty in understanding your presentation and the lack of cohesive and coherent paragraphs have led me to...
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 19, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|IELTS2 - it is necessary for parents to attend parenting training course to bring their children up
6 - Hello Guy, I think your essay didn't follow the prompt, I found some grammar mistakes: 1.You should...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 19, 2017 / happyfunny - Oct 19, 2017
|Children raised in the countryside have better than those from urban areas?
3 - Hi Pier, 1. I think it is better to write "... better educational facilities and effectively learn modern communication...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 18, 2017 / Hannielee - Oct 19, 2017
|Whether taking a gap year is a reasonable idea? (help, rescue poor writting)
4 - Hello Jane, I found some mistakes from your essay. Firstly, Grammar: -learn different culture of other countries...
Writing Feedbackchche - Oct 18, 2017 / happyfunny - Oct 19, 2017
|Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research
3 - There are 2 observational points that I would like to call your attention to. The first, is the problem...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|The proportion of men and women from the Aussie country who did systematic physical activity
4 - Yes, numbers are included in the word count. Whether spelled out or numerical, it counts towards the total number...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|Dependance on mobile phones. Everyone is using them more or less intensively.
3 - Huynh, you properly discussed the prompt by choosing to discuss only one side of the issue. This is a...
Writing Feedbacktieunuhuyenbi207 - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 19, 2017
|When proffesors give project on which students must work together, the students learn more effective
5 - @pier Hello Pier, your second draft is a lot better. However, there are some sentence construction errors in...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 18, 2017 / Onyinye123 - Oct 20, 2017
|Providing different kind of support to improve the quality of life of citizens in poorer nation
Writing FeedbackSummer1994 - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 18, 2017
|[task 1] Below is a map of the city of Brandfield - investments plan
3 - @Holt I see. Thank you for your explanation. I've finally found the proper way to write map analyses on...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 18, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 18, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Is local history more important than world history? Opinion essay.
Writing Feedbackscully_vananh - Oct 18, 2017 / Hannielee - Oct 19, 2017
|IELTS task 1-The charts below give information on the ages of people when they got married...
4 - @madeline8484 your summary overview is missing a few details that could have made it stronger. You should not have...
Writing Feedbackmadeline8484 - Oct 18, 2017 / Holt - Oct 18, 2017
|Some people believe that the amount of time that is put into art could be better managed
5 - Your second point on: parents who think there are no points in learning art for their child, is not...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 17, 2017 / Competent_Anna - Oct 18, 2017
|Should long-term job-seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work
4 - I have modified it, based on the feedback. Please suggest. In many countries, the government gives benefits to...
Writing Feedbackitsme2216 - Oct 17, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 18, 2017
|Nowadays, a lot of new, big supermarkets are appearing every day - what about local business?
4 - Hi just_writer. You have a lot of comma splices and run-on sentences in your essay. A comma splice is...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 17, 2017 / TJLuschen - Oct 17, 2017
|[IELTS] We lived in a world of technology these days. Opinion essay.
4 - Few corrections:- information is more significant (information is singular) it raised concerns over the way of military having...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 17, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 17, 2017
|The effect of paying for high grades at school.
3 - Bezhab, you can very well use the word "However" in your paragraph presentation because it is meant to break...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 17, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|The unpaid community service is not necessary to be a compulsory program in high school
2 - Sandra, your score for this essay will a 1. It is a failing score because you did not discuss...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 17, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|The developments of West Park Secondary School, from 1950 when it was erected, to 2010.
2 - Na, your summary overview doesn't really appear to be complete. It only has a basic description of the image...
Writing FeedbackNanadinh - Oct 17, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK II - TRADITIONAL AND MODERN MUSIC; each type has different purposes and style
2 - Lubis, what you wrote is not an IELTS task 2 essay. You wrote a research paper complete with references...
Writing FeedbackLUBR2310 - Oct 16, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle.
5 - I have modified it, based on the feedback. Please suggest. In many counties, the government gives benefits to...
Writing Feedbackitsme2216 - Oct 16, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 18, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug
6 - you're writing is not full chaotic, such as you used several correct grammar and you wrote more than 250...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 18, 2017
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