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|TOEFL: Nowadays working fast has more value than high precision at job?
4 - that wining winning the... office. and you don't start with a small letter after a full stop. many company...
Writing Feedbacksasan_91 - Oct 4, 2017 / Chichi9 - Oct 6, 2017
|Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people.
3 - Ahmad, since you did not provide the original prompt for my consideration and comparison with your paraphrasing. I cannot...
Writing FeedbackAhmad Faqhruddin - Oct 3, 2017 / Holt - Oct 4, 2017
|IELTS writing task 1: Accommodations for holidaymakers
Writing Feedbacksarahna - Oct 3, 2017 / sarahna - Oct 18, 2017
|WORST GIFT EVER (parakeet bird) - why, when
NEW - Worst gift ever My brother Simon has always wondered if he could get a parakeet. He had talked...
Writing FeedbackALLIWANTISYOU - Oct 2, 2017 / — -
|Some people embrace the concept that each type of crime should carry a fixed penalty [task2]
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 2, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 2, 2017
|Teaching foreign languages would be better for primary student than high school student
2 - Fiza, the score for this essay will automatically be a 1 because you are not discussing the correct prompt...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Oct 2, 2017 / Holt - Oct 2, 2017
|IELTS task 2: The Duty to Educate Children
3 - Hi Chang, I suggest the following conclusion revised from your own: In conclusion, the fact that schools can...
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Oct 2, 2017 / sarahna - Oct 3, 2017
|Issue Essay for GRE AWA section - Teaching using the positive actions method, skip the negatives
2 - Malik, this essay is not well developed. It has logic and reasoning presentation problems, grammar structure issues, and coherence...
Writing Feedbackmalikakbaar - Oct 2, 2017 / Holt - Oct 2, 2017
|[Task 2] In many countries, children are spending several hours each evening doing homework.
3 - Hi, I think that you should describe your opinion in the first paragraph, agree or disagree. In the second...
Writing Feedbackhappyfunny - Oct 2, 2017 / monopolymi - Oct 2, 2017
|ielts task 2 : - People should work a fixed number of hours per week
5 - Hi vipy, seeing it from your essay, in the second paragraph, avoid using the personal pronoun to convey your...
Writing Feedbackvipy411 - Oct 2, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 16, 2017
|International sports events like Football World Cup help in world peace. Do you agree or disagree?
2 - Hardeep, your opening paragraph is a run-on sentence that does not display a correct interpretation of the original prompt....
Writing Feedbackdeepsinghdhiman - Oct 1, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|TOEFL : Education is a necessity / Marriage is one of the most important decisions of life
3 - @Holt Thank you for the input. I am trying to learn how to write introduction paragraph properly. Then, I...
Writing Feedbackgreenman210 - Oct 1, 2017 / greenman210 - Oct 1, 2017
|The role of eco-tourism in society is educating for both traveller and local communities.
Writing Feedbackhuiiwen - Oct 1, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|[Task 2] Many governments think that the financial growth is a crucial factor for company existence
4 - @Holt Thank you for your explanation that clears my doubts. I've long been bewildered by the model essays that...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 1, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 2, 2017
|Contrast high schools and universities - Contrast Essay
6 - There are some grammatical and spelling errors . I think you mean "futher" is "further" or "shools" is "schools"...
Writing FeedbackHue Nguyen - Oct 1, 2017 / lamphuongta - Oct 10, 2017
|Humanistic Approach to Apply Law for Human - IELTS Writing Task 2
3 - @Holt Dear Mary Rose, Thank you very much for your feedback. I'll check again my background statement and will...
Writing Feedbackayibram - Oct 1, 2017 / ayibram - Oct 4, 2017
|All teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community
4 - @Ngatranhvt Hi, I'd like to make several corrections for you. The essay contains lots of spelling errors, which will...
Writing FeedbackNgatranhvt - Oct 1, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 3, 2017
|IELTS: - Some people believe that studying in a college or university is the best place for students
2 - Vipy, your total approach to the essay is wrong. There is no clear paraphrasing and the discussion that you...
Writing Feedbackvipy411 - Sep 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|TOEFL; We're making choice in every second of life - planning and organizing skills among youngsters
Writing Feedbackirisyukiji - Sep 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|Young people struggle to join the workforce, how to solve the problem?
4 - Chuyunana. your essay is going to fail in an actual test setting for one reason alone, you did not...
Writing FeedbackCHUYUNAN - Sep 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|Unpaid community service should be a compulsory high school program, do you agree or disagree?
3 - Irene, I am sorry but your approach to the opening statement is not the proper one for this type...
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Sep 30, 2017 / Holt - Sep 30, 2017
|[IELTS 2]Because of computers the life is easier and more convenient or just complex and stressful?
3 - Plamena, this being an IELTS essay, you are not allowed to present your opinion or present any opinion within...
Writing Feedbackplamchiiii - Sep 29, 2017 / Holt - Sep 30, 2017
|More countries are opening their doors to welcome more tourist
5 - @Holt Thx for your feedback, your comment about introduction is true, I feel difficult to deliver the topic into...
Writing FeedbackAhmad Faqhruddin - Sep 29, 2017 / Ahmad Faqhruddin - Sep 30, 2017
|Machine Are New Able To Do The Work Which People Used To Perform. What are the pros and cons
3 - Tai, you are not discussing an argument essay based on this topic. As far as the prompt is concerned,...
Writing Feedbacktailv123 - Sep 29, 2017 / Holt - Sep 30, 2017
|More time and effort on improving the world now than it was in the past?
4 - @Holt Thank you for all suggestions! I revised my mistakes below. I would greatly appreciate it if you give...
Writing FeedbackSunnyLai - Sep 29, 2017 / SunnyLai - Oct 9, 2017
|IELTS task 2 : Death Penalty Abolition and Life Prison Applied
3 - Linh, even without the prompt requirement, I can offer you some serious advice regarding your grammar and coherence. You...
Writing Feedbackcookie234 - Sep 29, 2017 / Holt - Sep 30, 2017
|Parent should not pressure their children to choose particular profession.
7 - - "Children must not be forced by their parents" - " I strongly agree that children should not be...
Writing FeedbackLiAnSoh - Sep 28, 2017 / lamphuongta - Oct 10, 2017
|TOEFL writing: Internet brought a load of information to its users
4 - Harold, while the body of the paragraphs responds to the essay, your paraphrasing does not properly reflect the original...
Writing Feedbackgreenman210 - Sep 28, 2017 / Holt - Sep 29, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Should the past criminal record be presented to the jury?
3 - @Holt Wow what a fatal mistake. I will pay more attention to the prompt from now on. Thank you!...
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Sep 28, 2017 / rubychautran - Sep 29, 2017
|Ielts writing task 2: advantages and disadvantages of going to remote natural environment
4 - @TJLuschen: many thanks for your advice, it is the first time I 've posted on this website. I will...
Writing FeedbackDongvo - Sep 28, 2017 / Dongvo - Sep 29, 2017
|It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if they won't affect you
4 - Firstly, we are living in the global village that every event may end up influencing us to certain degree....
Writing Feedbackdiligentwriter - Sep 28, 2017 / hailung - Sep 28, 2017
|Sporting events can control people's tensions internationally and national feelings
5 - @rubychautran I agree with you. The essay is quite hard to comprehend, like in this paragraph: Athletes lost...
Writing Feedbackyourfriend - Sep 28, 2017 / Betsyy - Oct 3, 2017
|Autobiographical essay without using first person English 1301
4 - Rob, in the first paragraph, you have made a very big blunder. You mentioned that you were born to...
Writing Feedbackbenh44 - Sep 27, 2017 / Holt - Sep 28, 2017
|Should noise be controlled?
4 - @Holt Thanks for your response. I'll pay more attention to my spelling and try to correct them before I...
Writing FeedbackFarFarSong - Sep 27, 2017 / FarFarSong - Sep 28, 2017
|Luck is nessesary aspect to achive a dream goal
3 - Nguyen, this is an extent essay and as such, it is normally discussed coming from only one point of...
Writing Feedbackhaotran - Sep 27, 2017 / Holt - Sep 27, 2017
|[IELTS writing task 1] Line graph: spread consumption
Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Sep 27, 2017 / Holt - Sep 27, 2017
|Ielts writing task 2-permit students to freely choose any subject
2 - Ngan, there is absolutely no way that you can score higher than a 4 with this essay because you...
Writing Feedbackkimnganngan - Sep 26, 2017 / Holt - Sep 27, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2: Early job to pay for retirement
2 - Sarah, you just got a score of 1 in this essay. Your response is completely unrelated to the task...
Writing Feedbacksarahna - Sep 26, 2017 / Holt - Sep 27, 2017
|A descriptive paragraph about a place that makes you feel safe/happy
3 - Hang, your creative writing attempt is too one dimensional. What I mean by one dimensional is that you had...
Writing Feedbackxhang24 - Sep 26, 2017 / Holt - Sep 27, 2017
|Creating Job Satisfaction for All Workers - IELTS Writing Task 2 Academic Essay
5 - @judi_soares Hi Juliana, thanks for the feedback, yeah I think I have lack of idea in writing this essays....
Writing Feedbackayibram - Sep 26, 2017 / ayibram - Sep 27, 2017
|Networking - strong ability to make and maintain the network. Show how to use it in the future.
6 - Juliana, your networking essay is so faulty that it could be discarded by the reviewer for non-compliance with the...
Writing Feedbackjudi_soares - Sep 26, 2017 / Holt - Sep 27, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2 - teachers and parents education - which has more value to a child?
6 - Hi, I think you should write down your opinion in the first paragraph. In the second and third paragraphs,...
Writing Feedbackemem123 - Sep 26, 2017 / monopolymi - Oct 3, 2017
|Which age group is easier to be influenced by views of celebrities?
3 - Sheanen, the opening paraphrase is not accurate in terms of representing the original prompt. You have a tendency to...
Writing Feedbackdiligentwriter - Sep 26, 2017 / Holt - Sep 26, 2017
|[IELTS writing task 1] Table: Underground railway information summary
6 - Hello hgianghgiang, based my humble opinion. your essay is not too bad actually, you wrote more than 150 words...
Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Sep 26, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 10, 2017
|Some believe that children should get education at their home rather than educational institutes
4 - Ankush, regardless of whether you are writing an essay for the IELTS or TOEFL test, the main requirement for...
Writing Feedbackvipy411 - Sep 25, 2017 / Holt - Sep 26, 2017
|Strict actions should be imposed on the offenders who violates traffic norms
5 - @Holt : Thanks for the response. Mistakes that you pointed in my essay are valid and I gave me...
Writing Feedbackniteshgoyal11 - Sep 25, 2017 / niteshgoyal11 - Sep 26, 2017
|Salary can overweight other factors when it comes to selecting a job
5 - @lamtrieuphong Hi, It seems to me that you need to build more sentences in the conclusion that cover all...
Writing Feedbacklamtrieuphong - Sep 25, 2017 / ayibram - Sep 26, 2017
|Essay about unsatisfactory habits (TOEFL)
3 - @Holt Thank you for your reply! I appreciate your advices. This is my first time writing an essay. I...
Writing Feedbacknaz1204 - Sep 25, 2017 / naz1204 - Sep 25, 2017
|TOFEL: To finish a project single at one time or do several projects at same time?
2 - Ching, your representation of the prompt paraphrase is inaccurate and your paragraphs go beyond the maximum allowable of 5...
Writing FeedbackSunnyLai - Sep 25, 2017 / Holt - Sep 25, 2017
|International fast food companies have spread their branches - junk food is available everywhere
5 - @diligentwriter Hi Sheanen, yeah I just realized it. Thank you for your feedback :) @hgianghgiang Hi Nguyen, thank...
Writing Feedbackayibram - Sep 25, 2017 / ayibram - Sep 25, 2017
|These days people pay more attention to artists (writers, painters, and so on)
3 - Tello, your whole approach to the essay is wrong. You did not understand the instruction sentence at the end...
Writing Feedbackafnitello99 - Sep 24, 2017 / Holt - Sep 25, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Motivation for sports persons
6 - @rubychautran This essay impressed me right from the beginning with excellent paraphrasing. Throughout the body paragraphs you presented a...
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Sep 24, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Sep 25, 2017
|IELTS writing practice task 2 academic - Modern technology
4 - @Holt Thanks for reviewing! Your advice are really useful. I was trying to rephrase the keywords in the question,...
Writing Feedbacklhy1216 - Sep 24, 2017 / lhy1216 - Sep 25, 2017
|Is it the right time for wildlife preservation? task2
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Sep 23, 2017 / sfiza - Sep 25, 2017
|Tertiary education is becoming an increasingly popular choice among high school graduates
5 - @rubychautran I agree with contributor Holt's feedback that you shouldn't assert: "Tertiary education is becoming an increasingly popular choice...
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Sep 23, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Sep 25, 2017
|An increasing number of people are concerned about the benefits of studying the past in schools
Writing Feedbackhoanglk12 - Sep 23, 2017 / rubychautran - Sep 24, 2017
|IELTS writing task 1 -- the comparisons among the sales of two Fairtrade-labelled goods
Writing Feedbackemem123 - Sep 23, 2017 / emem123 - Sep 24, 2017
|FOR QUESTBRIDGE: The Christmas Present that Got Away
3 - @Holt Hi, I considered your advice and drafted a new response to be the prompt. I would appreciate some...
Writing Feedbackissaessay - Sep 23, 2017 / issaessay - Sep 23, 2017
|Telecommuting allows employer to cut costs
3 - Renzo, your statement has time reference issues. It appears that you are using a future tense voice in the...
Writing Feedbackrenzotello - Sep 23, 2017 / Holt - Sep 23, 2017
|People will have rewarding and life enriching experiences when they have a chance of studying abroad
3 - My, your opening statement is inconsistent. The first sentence does not make any sense. Aside from that, your paragraph...
Writing Feedbackmy vo - Sep 23, 2017 / Holt - Sep 23, 2017
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