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|In about 300 words, describe one thing you would like to see changed or improved in your own country
4 - Hello, your idea about the topic is ok but I think you should use more complicated grammar structures so...
Writing Feedbackcherri mocha - Jul 11, 2017 / hoangmyvo - Jul 12, 2017
|The importance of local history as opposed to world history
3 - @Holt thank you so much for your comment, Holt. I really appreciate. Would you mind If I asked you...
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Jul 10, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Jul 10, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: Graph of employment rates in three sectors of UK economy
8 - I think your second body paragraph is too short and you need to make more comparisons ( You can...
Writing Feedbacktommyph - Jul 10, 2017 / Red Moon - Aug 6, 2017
|Problems and Solutions to the Increase in Number of Flights as a Result of Tourism (IELTS)
Writing Feedbackjasonhwang - Jul 10, 2017 / huongtienganh - Jul 11, 2017
|It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide univesity places for all young people
3 - Dang, in all instances, please remember to post the original prompt requirement along with your response essay. That will...
Writing Feedbackdangvan - Jul 9, 2017 / Holt - Jul 10, 2017
|Cooperation and competition are imperative and children should master both of these skills
Writing Feedbackhailung - Jul 9, 2017 / hailung - Jul 11, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Graph of employment rates in Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand, and US
3 - Katya, in your opening statement, always make sure that you present a proper overview of the information that you...
Writing Feedbackkacanakya - Jul 9, 2017 / Holt - Jul 9, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] Social life at work and outside work. Discuss
Writing Feedbackxhang24 - Jul 8, 2017 / xhang24 - Jul 9, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Being economically success while at the same time having a clean environment?
3 - @Holt Thank you Holt! I have always been struggling between writing complex sentences and stopping long sentences. I will...
Writing Feedbackjennyjenny - Jul 8, 2017 / jennyjenny - Jul 10, 2017
|Changes in family structure and its member_gender role => What changes occur? Positive or negative?
4 - Hi @kngan172000 Here are my "modifications" As a result, family structure and member's contribution are modifying daily. I...
Writing Feedbackkngan172000 - Jul 8, 2017 / Slumar206 - Jul 8, 2017
|Railways vs roads - I consider both traffic systems equally important to our societies.
2 - Kevin, let's get one thing straight here. When you are given an opinion essay to write, specially one that...
Writing Feedbacks11015kevin - Jul 8, 2017 / Holt - Jul 8, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Teaching Situation in Classroom No Longer Exist by 2050 (Education)
2 - Karen, it would be best if you followed the proper manner of stating an agreement or disagreement with the...
Writing Feedbackkarennnn - Jul 7, 2017 / Holt - Jul 7, 2017
|University English Blog post based on the movie Kill Bill
2 - Rosaleen, opening with the quote by Ferguson is a good approach as it explains the content of your forthcoming...
Writing Feedbackrosaleen98 - Jul 6, 2017 / Holt - Jul 7, 2017
|There are many governments that ban smoking in public places, and a great number of business also s
2 - Pham, this is a well discussed essay that needs only a few minor points for correction. For starters, I...
Writing Feedbackquynhanh12345 - Jul 6, 2017 / Holt - Jul 6, 2017
|Underappreciated home nurses in California
2 - Juliette, if your paper is all about cultural worth, you might want to rethink your current opening statement. There...
Writing Feedbackjewels238 - Jul 6, 2017 / Holt - Jul 6, 2017
|Organizations should provide support to society as its benefits far outweigh costs.
Writing FeedbackHidy - Jul 5, 2017 / Holt - Jul 6, 2017
|Should grade 12 University level English be a requirement for entry into all university programs?
3 - Yoojin, first up, your title is isn't engaging or intriguing enough to catch the reader's attention. You are stating...
Writing Feedbacklonelypeach - Jul 5, 2017 / Holt - Jul 6, 2017
|Cars will be driven by computers not people in the near future. Positive or negative - ielts
5 - Interesting choice of topic. You did a great jobs of giving examples of you're thoughts however I would choose...
Writing Feedbackgiangchu210 - Jul 4, 2017 / Alyssag1 - Jul 6, 2017
|People are leaveing their home countries to seek a better life
3 - @Holt I see, thank you very much for pointing out my mistakes. In the meantime, I tried to remake...
Writing Feedbacknumissh - Jul 4, 2017 / numissh - Jul 6, 2017
|The number of civilians holding various federal government jobs. IELTS Writing Task 1
3 - Hi Holt! Thanks for teaching me how to post, i'll make sure to transfer the other task in another...
Writing Feedbackkaijean - Jul 4, 2017 / kaijean - Jul 4, 2017
|Graduates should travel and work for a period of time instead of going directly to university
6 - @Minh Thi According to + source will lower your overall score due to the fact that the examiners...
Writing FeedbackMinh Thi - Jul 4, 2017 / hailung - Jul 5, 2017
|The Tabard Towers Theme Park - IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample
Writing Feedbacknumissh - Jul 3, 2017 / numissh - Jul 8, 2017
|IELT T2- Punishments are neccessary to help children learn the right and wrong from early age
6 - @Holt : thanks for great insight! especially about the structure. I have question on However if you happen to...
Writing Feedbacklamabeto - Jul 2, 2017 / lamabeto - Jul 4, 2017
|Traditional games or new, electronic games are better for children?
4 - Cu, please provide the complete prompt requirements for your next essay exercise so that you can be properly assessed...
Writing Feedbackcuthilananh2000 - Jul 2, 2017 / Holt - Jul 4, 2017
|Can we use animals for our personal benefit or this is unacceptable?
Writing Feedbackrock07 - Jul 2, 2017 / Holt - Jul 4, 2017
|[TOEFL] Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year.
4 - Eric, in my opinion, you cannot score higher than a 3 with this essay because of inconsistencies in your...
Writing FeedbackERIC SUNG - Jul 1, 2017 / Holt - Jul 4, 2017
|"Spending all your free time studying is not a good idea" What's your opinion? Write an essay.
6 - Hello!! The introduction is your power statement. It's the one thing that decides whether or not someone will...
Writing Feedbacksspedicato1 - Jul 1, 2017 / DoctorWho - Jul 7, 2017
|Children are increasingly spending less time to their parents.
4 - Nguyen, there is a disconnection between your paragraph title and the actual discussion that you present. In your title,...
Writing FeedbackGnad - Jul 1, 2017 / Holt - Jul 4, 2017
|GAP YEAR could be a huge asset if used for proper activities - IELTS
5 - I would also say that the essay above does not have a proper balance idea and number of words...
Writing Feedbackhailung - Jul 1, 2017 / lamabeto - Jul 16, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - What those kids are doing
4 - Rodolfo, it is a general rule in the use of English Language that a paragraph must contain at least...
Writing FeedbackSupermanSkivvies - Jun 30, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Jul 1, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Learning difficulties faced by students from two schools (table)
3 - @okorobiadimma14 , Thank you for your advice! I have a clearer idea on how to write the overview for...
Writing Feedbackwinnienwk - Jun 30, 2017 / winnienwk - Jul 1, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : Give opinions on teaching a foreign language in primary school years.
5 - @hailung Thank you for your comment. - But as i know, many students who learn foreign language early have...
Writing Feedbackthaongoc - Jun 30, 2017 / thaongoc - Jul 18, 2017
|Some people are in favour to live in a house, others see more advantages living in a flat
5 - @Holt thanks very much for your comment, i didn't mean really that i did a search on rent., but...
Writing Feedbackhe227803 - Jun 29, 2017 / he227803 - Jun 30, 2017
|IELTS task 2: Protecting architectural heritage
4 - Hi Tran, I have read your article. Firstly, I think your introductory paragraph is good because you successfully paraphrased...
Writing Feedbacktran le hai anh - Jun 29, 2017 / celinechan - Jun 30, 2017
|PTE Essays task 2 writing - 20 mins typing on direct form of communication
2 - Tav, this essay is near perfect to the best of my assessment. The fact that you engaged the use...
Writing Feedbacktavanloc - Jun 29, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Jun 29, 2017
|Economic success and clean environment.
Writing Feedbackthanhtampy2000 - Jun 29, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Jun 29, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Sales in a college bookshop
4 - Dear, @kacanakya This can be simplified to one sentence. The table figure covers sales report on three...
Writing Feedbackkacanakya - Jun 29, 2017 / SHanafi - Jul 2, 2017
|Persuasive Essay about different issues caused by computers
3 - Kristi, there are several problems with the essay that you are presenting. The most glaring problem is that this...
Writing Feedbackk_triplett - Jun 28, 2017 / Holt - Jun 28, 2017
|The prevention on health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine.
2 - Sana, your paraphrasing is not in the acceptable format. It does not clearly explain the original topic for discussion...
Writing Feedbacksana saeed - Jun 26, 2017 / Holt - Jul 15, 2017
|Is Violence the Result of TV, computers, and video games?
Writing Feedbackhalib_2309 - Jun 26, 2017 / celinechan - Jun 30, 2017
|Art is considered an essential part of all culture throughout the world. However, these days fewer a
2 - Adiya, due to the lack of the prompt instructions regarding the actual topic and discussion style, it it's difficult...
Writing Feedbackadiya - Jun 26, 2017 / Holt - Jun 26, 2017
|[IETLS writing] In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing
4 - Hi Wang Gang.. I have read your essay closely and found a few improvement you have needed. Turning to...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Jun 26, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Jun 26, 2017
|Parents have a dilemma and are unsure if their children should compete or cooperate with others
3 - Great work, however, as pointed out you have only an answered a half of the question. I suggest you...
Writing Feedbackcelinechan - Jun 25, 2017 / Hidy - Jun 26, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: Some people think that the government should pay one of the parents
3 - Thanks a lot @Holt. I will work on complex sentences and try to complete the sentences with proper...
Writing Feedbackmtrj - Jun 24, 2017 / mtrj - Jun 24, 2017
|A lot of young people spend their time sitting in front of the television at home
3 - I also wrote six paragraphs in my first IETLS writting. The mistake should be avoided in the future....
Writing Feedbackkimyoongi - Jun 24, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Jun 26, 2017
|Sport amenities as an optimal method of making the public healthier?
3 - Hi Duc. I am going to give you responds related your contents. I would not focus on your grammar....
Writing FeedbackDuc Mosby - Jun 23, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Jun 28, 2017
|The body of an ielts essay related to personal happiness achievement
2 - Duy, in all honesty, this is one of the most off tangent discussion for this topic that I have...
Writing FeedbackLeestorm - Jun 23, 2017 / Holt - Jun 23, 2017
|Television influences badly on children's creativity
4 - @Holt Thank you Holt for your review. I'm sincerely grateful. Firstly, I d'like to say that my full essay...
Writing FeedbackIris Riverside - Jun 22, 2017 / Iris Riverside - Jun 25, 2017
|Writing task 1: The percentage of 10-15 year-olds chatting online and playing games.
6 - @Red Moon Rephrase your first paragraph and note some little mistakes.. Could you please check my thread and help...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jun 22, 2017 / Babbie419 - Jul 3, 2017
|[TOEFL] INCREASING THE PRICE OF GAS AND ELECTRICITY IS WISE, IN MY OPINION!
3 - @Holt thank you for your comment on my post! In response to your question, The prompt requirement asks "Do...
Writing FeedbackMinh Nguyen - Jun 22, 2017 / Minh Nguyen - Jun 22, 2017
|A movie that has inspired you and its impact on your life. Problem in usage and convention - CBEST
Writing Feedbackbaljinder - Jun 21, 2017 / baljinder - Jun 22, 2017
|Information about the private use of Internet, Cd player, mobile phone and home computer in the UK
2 - Alessandro, you have to always remember that you will lose points for writing single sentences instead of complete paragraphs....
Writing Feedbackyendo - Jun 21, 2017 / Holt - Jun 22, 2017
|The pie chart below shows the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular UK university
2 - Darren, while you did a pretty good representation of the overall information in the essay, your summary statement lacks...
Writing FeedbackDarren Mai - Jun 21, 2017 / Holt - Jun 21, 2017
|[Ielts task 2] Education's effectiveness in leading people to a healthy eating habit
Writing Feedbackthien_my - Jun 21, 2017 / tran le hai anh - Jun 23, 2017
|Explain any risk you have taken in your life. Cbest level essay.
Writing Feedbackbaljinder - Jun 20, 2017 / baljinder - Jun 21, 2017
|Should museums charge for admission? Benefits and drawbacks.
5 - Anna, I read the entire response and felt like there was so much more that you could say. Your...
Writing Feedbackdinosps9a4 - Jun 20, 2017 / brayan1996 - Jun 22, 2017
|[TOEFL] Because modern life is complex, young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Writing FeedbackERIC SUNG - Jun 20, 2017 / Holt - Jun 20, 2017
|Ielts task 2 : The title is magical inside, plz make it more magical
3 - Ethan, word of advice never end an essay with "in conclusion." The reader should get the idea that your...
Writing FeedbackEthan Truong - Jun 18, 2017 / brayan1996 - Jun 19, 2017
|Academic Writing: the daily audiences percentage of UK radio and television X-XII 1992
2 - Haiyin, you need to develop a more consistent presentation of your timeline in your English sentences. Try to familiarize...
Writing Feedbackravatrav - Jun 18, 2017 / Holt - Jun 19, 2017
|A new recreational facility in Tusk - GRE writing task: Argument Essay
3 - Sodiq, basing the result of your work on the 30 minute time constraint, I am confident that you can...
Writing FeedbackHidy - Jun 17, 2017 / Holt - Jun 18, 2017
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