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|Prohibit the fast food industry from advertisement? Opinion essay.
6 - You would have scored 6 bands for your essay, If you have included on more paragraph with examples of...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Dec 23, 2017 / Tanmayzz - Jan 9, 2018
|Men or women for higher-level positions? IELTS writing task 2
2 - Peter, your opening paraphrase is not sufficient enough. You are still using too much of the original wording in...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Dec 23, 2017 / Holt - Dec 23, 2017
|[toefl] Automobile have made a greater impact on society than airplanes.
3 - WJK, I am not sure what you are trying to discuss here and what the talking points are because...
Writing Feedbackfs1111 - Dec 23, 2017 / Holt - Dec 23, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2: Should we attend schools until we are at least 18?
3 - Wang, while you will not get a passing score in terms of the Task Accuracy requirements, your overall discussion...
Writing FeedbackOONA - Dec 22, 2017 / Holt - Dec 22, 2017
|Can you help evaluate this essay" What is the future of higher education?"
Writing Feedbackkdennison - Dec 21, 2017 / kdennison - Dec 23, 2017
|Can you evaluate this essay about 'What Causes Video Game Addiction'?
2 - James, this essay is based upon unfounded assumptions. As an informative essay, it does provide information that relates to...
Writing FeedbackJmaes - Dec 21, 2017 / Holt - Dec 22, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2 - Discussion - Banning tourism to protect local culture
2 - Tam, it is unfortunate that, although your discussion of the topic is strong, you did not accurately represent the...
Writing FeedbackTambee - Dec 21, 2017 / Holt - Dec 21, 2017
|What Is the Depth of Martial Arts..?
3 - I sincerely appreciate your help, Holt. There were Text1 and Text2, and there were two separate questions, one...
Writing Feedbackbananakick - Dec 21, 2017 / bananakick - Dec 21, 2017
|Ielts writing task 2 essay: Discuss and opinion about information sharing.
2 - Le, your overall presentation for this essay is inaccurate and not within the proper prompt requirements. The first problem...
Writing FeedbackGraceN - Dec 20, 2017 / Holt - Dec 20, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 (Process) : The production of a lead pencil
3 - Apinan, while you wrote a little over the minimum word count, you need to provide at least 4 paragraphs...
Writing FeedbackIceapinan - Dec 19, 2017 / Holt - Dec 20, 2017
|Effective Public Speaking - speech anxiety is a common thing
3 - Thanks, I've made changes in the body paragraphs where I made a lot of tense errors that I didn't...
Writing Feedbackjkasper - Dec 18, 2017 / jkasper - Dec 19, 2017
|The development of video - What Makes a Video Go Viral?
3 - @Holt Thank you very much. I need to spend more times revising the content of my essay. Thank you...
Writing Feedbackvupu65130 - Dec 18, 2017 / vupu65130 - Dec 18, 2017
|The changes in annual spending in particular UK School : WRITING TASK 1 IELTS
2 - @ppbbjakarta An analysis essay does not place important information within parenthesis. Information such as the years for analysis and...
Writing Feedbackppbbjakarta - Dec 17, 2017 / Holt - Dec 18, 2017
|The Review of movie <Whiplash> "Good job"
2 - HuJun, a movie review must be made with an academic consideration. Your essay reeks of lack of professionalism, your...
Writing FeedbackBoshishengWork - Dec 17, 2017 / Holt - Dec 18, 2017
|It's an essay about leadership summit. What makes my presence there imperative?
2 - Nagham , this is not a proper explanation essay as to why you wish to attend this summit. Since...
Writing FeedbackNoga123 - Dec 17, 2017 / Holt - Dec 17, 2017
|A person's worth VS old-fashioned value : IELTS WRITNG TASK 2
2 - The essay does not follow the correct requirements for the original prompt. The instruction prompt for this essay indicates:...
Writing Feedbackppbbjakarta - Dec 17, 2017 / Holt - Dec 17, 2017
|Should recycling be a legal requirement? IELTS ESSAY
5 - @ppbbjakarta Thank you so much for your help. I'm grateful for the time you spent reviewing my essay....
Writing Feedbackeli00 - Dec 16, 2017 / eli00 - Dec 18, 2017
|Which is better for a country? A few people earning high salary or government limiting?
NEW - In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think this is good for the country,...
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|University is the better route than school to reach successful career
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Dec 15, 2017 / Holt - Dec 16, 2017
|TOEFL: Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.
4 - When a choice is given between two topics by the representation of the word "or" , the writer must...
Writing Feedbackalwakeel - Dec 13, 2017 / Holt - Dec 15, 2017
|I WANT BAND 8.0 - IELTS2 - FATHERHOOD IS AS MUCH IMPORTANT AS MOTHERHOOD.
Writing Feedbackadin3a1 - Dec 13, 2017 / Holt - Dec 13, 2017
|Trying new things and taking risks is the cornerstone of success
2 - Mo, are you preparing for an IELTS test? The response essay that you wrote sounds like it. I wish...
Writing Feedbackalwakeel - Dec 13, 2017 / Holt - Dec 13, 2017
|The general picture and percentage about weight of residents who live in Charlestown in 1955 & 2015
3 - @carol326 According to band descriptor, in term of Task Achievement, to gain 5.0 more you have to depict an...
Writing Feedbackcarol326 - Dec 12, 2017 / ppbbjakarta - Dec 17, 2017
|The development of photography has changed the way people see the world. (Causal Effect Analysis)
Writing FeedbackJoe_edeskuty - Dec 12, 2017 / Holt - Dec 12, 2017
|Urban areas have more crimes. Direct question essay.
7 - The number of people who commit crimes in the cities are significantly larger than in the country side. ...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Dec 11, 2017 / shereenzalloum - Dec 16, 2017
|Cyber Security being important in the world today
2 - Amber , the first half of the essay seems to contain repetitive information in succeeding paragraphs. This makes the...
Writing Feedbackamberstar - Dec 9, 2017 / Holt - Dec 10, 2017
|Many countries invest a lot of money on art or on public services and facilities. What do you think?
3 - Qi Ji, everything about this essay presentation is going to make it fail. You failed to offer a proper...
Writing FeedbackMiracle0819 - Dec 9, 2017 / Holt - Dec 10, 2017
|Wealthy countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor areas
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Dec 9, 2017 / Holt - Dec 9, 2017
|Technology in food making. How have those inventions changed citizens life habits?
3 - @Pureness Over the pass LAST few decades, together with the advantages of technologies are CAUSES the...
Writing FeedbackPureness - Dec 8, 2017 / sfiza - Dec 9, 2017
|IELTS Some universities now offer their courses on the internet so that people can study online.
2 - Yujia, your essay response is inappropriate based upon the original prompt. The discussion is clearly requesting you to create...
Writing FeedbackYoga - Dec 7, 2017 / Holt - Dec 8, 2017
|Professional sportsmen have become very popular and their salaries are a lot of money.
4 - dear,@KCN in this essay, introduction is not able to present full prompt. please focus on how to paraphrase...
Writing FeedbackKCN - Dec 6, 2017 / sfiza - Dec 8, 2017
|Educated people are more valuable? Direct questions essay.
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Dec 5, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Dec 6, 2017
|Internet is a convenient place for finding the information, provided it is used wisely.
2 - Shruti, you did not fully understand the discussion instructions that were provided to you. This essay has a very...
Writing Feedbacksvirmani - Dec 5, 2017 / Holt - Dec 5, 2017
|Tax reforms proposed by republicans. Three categories in which you feel my essay could be stronger
NEW - Why Tax Cuts Are Bad For The Middle Class Taxes are considered to be one of the certainties of...
Writing Feedbackceverett92 - Dec 4, 2017 / — -
|Information in a specific sector should be shared freely or not
2 - bism, your essay does not follow the appropriate discussion instruction. You were asked to discuss both points of view...
Writing Feedbacksbina - Dec 4, 2017 / Holt - Dec 4, 2017
|Rainfall in Johannesburg and Cape Town from January to December//IELTS TASK 1
Writing Feedbacknewraki - Dec 3, 2017 / sbina - Dec 6, 2017
|A situation of the government schools and their students
Writing FeedbackTanveer775 - Dec 3, 2017 / giangchu210 - Dec 4, 2017
|5 different kinds of communication service which were used by people over 6 years
2 - @dotuananh2001, you forgot to include the image that your analytical essay is supposed to be based on. I cannot...
Writing Feedbackdotuananh2001 - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|Flame The Patriotic Into Integrity Unity and Creativity
2 - Indah , there are a few points for further development in your essay in relation to the thesis statement....
Writing Feedbackindahmuthmainnah - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|The Internet, despite being the most significant breakthrough in history, is indeed a mixed blessing
2 - Anna, I think you can score a 6 with this essay. What lowered the score for this otherwise strong...
Writing Feedbackanna1239 - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|Essay about "several languages die out and many people think this is a good thing, do you agree?"
4 - khaled, please remember to always provide the complete original prompt with your essay. It is not to be used...
Writing FeedbackkhaledQasem25 - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|Cooperation between individual and global governments to cope with environmental problems
Writing FeedbackTuan Anh 10c - Dec 3, 2017 / Tuan Anh 10c - Dec 3, 2017
|It is needless to use libraries because everyone can get all information they need on the Internet
3 - Hi Trang, I would like to offer a paraphrasing of the original prompt for your reference. In our...
Writing FeedbackLonar213 - Dec 3, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Dec 4, 2017
|Animals do feel. Express an opinion on animal treatment.
2 - @happyfunny I cannot help you fix your essay because you did not provide the complete original prompt for me...
Writing Feedbackhappyfunny - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|A discussion has been ongoing regarding the development of roads and railways
3 - fiZa, Actually, in the scoring procedure for IELTS, you are asked to represent only your understanding of the prompt...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|Same-sex Marriage and The Effects on the Society
2 - Jesse, your essay is heavy on theory, but lacking in examples and additional information that will support the data...
Writing Feedbackray8171 - Dec 3, 2017 / Holt - Dec 3, 2017
|One who pretends to be a friend but he/she is not, so called a fair weather friend
4 - @Holt Though I do appreciate your feedback, however, somewhere down the line, I still have doubts regarding what all...
Writing FeedbackTanveer775 - Dec 2, 2017 / Tanveer775 - Dec 3, 2017
|The school system should start teaching foreign language class at primary school.
3 - Roba, contrary from what the above poster said, you MUST use the pronoun "I" in these discussions because these...
Writing FeedbackRobaa - Dec 1, 2017 / Holt - Dec 2, 2017
|IELTS task 1: People who lived in Charlestown
3 - Hi Peter, let me show what you are supposed to improve. Please, meet my notes and deal with them....
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Dec 1, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Dec 2, 2017
|We should help minority nations to keep their languages for the cultural diversity
6 - Hi Ernazar, I believe the reason that you failed in this essay is not about off-topic but rather, an...
Writing Feedbackernazaralakoz - Dec 1, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Dec 5, 2017
|IELTS TASK 1-The chart gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity
3 - Hi Ulica,I have read your writing closely and it is actually a good job. However, you forgot a few...
Writing FeedbackUlica - Dec 1, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Dec 1, 2017
|IELTS WT2, Fast-food companies should not be allowed to give away free toys with their food
3 - Kay, you have set an admirable goal for yourself with regards to your desired score for the IELTS test....
Writing Feedbackmacbz - Nov 30, 2017 / Holt - Dec 1, 2017
|A university education should include an internship or some type of work experience.
2 - Trà , which of the English tests are you preparing for? IELTS or TOEFL? Also, what is the complete...
Writing FeedbackSakiCCS - Nov 30, 2017 / Holt - Dec 1, 2017
|The information superhighway was greatly transformed the way man conducts his activities today
Writing FeedbackErica Tin - Nov 30, 2017 / Holt - Nov 30, 2017
|Exercise should be a more important part of the school curricullum - persuasive essay
2 - Alex, your teacher is right. This is not a persuasive essay. This is an opinion paper and nothing more....
Writing Feedbackaryanxxx - Nov 29, 2017 / Holt - Nov 30, 2017
|Internet is as violent as entertaining - essay based on a short story
3 - @Holt Dear Holt. Thank you very much for your advice! I will reconsider the problem that you have mentioned...
Writing Feedbackqin6882060 - Nov 29, 2017 / qin6882060 - Nov 30, 2017
|Female teachers were dominant in pre-school, primary and secondary school in the UK in 2100
Writing Feedbackquanghuy219 - Nov 29, 2017 / quanghuy219 - Nov 29, 2017
|In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV
6 - There is a little likelihood that ... Also remember that there should be a space between coma and a...
Writing FeedbackErica Tin - Nov 29, 2017 / PeterBrown - Dec 23, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Material Possessions or Kindness/Trust?
Writing Feedbackzeqiyasin - Nov 29, 2017 / happyfunny - Nov 30, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2: TV or newspaper? neither? Internet
2 - Peter, This is a pretty good essay, even though your opening paraphrase is not proper. The opening paraphrase is...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017 / Holt - Nov 28, 2017
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