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|How to tell a good nation? Nation achievements? Or general welfare?
Writing Feedbacktiffanytw - Sep 11, 2017 / tiffanytw - Sep 11, 2017
|Kind, helpful. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbour?
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for reading. Actually, I have never tried to write TOEFL. This is my first...
Writing FeedbackJinsungPhil - Sep 10, 2017 / JinsungPhil - Sep 12, 2017
|Cement manufacturing. Essay about diagrams. English learner.
Writing Feedbackterry5419 - Sep 10, 2017 / terry5419 - Sep 10, 2017
|As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units.
3 - I think you are aware of arranging ideas by using firstly, secondly but it fails to connect all those...
Writing FeedbackJun12 - Sep 10, 2017 / daiha20082009 - Sep 11, 2017
|Will Robots take over our jobs in the future?
2 - Mike, this was a pretty well developed analytical essay of a given topic. The essay had a bump in...
Writing FeedbackMikezukerberg - Sep 10, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|Japan travellers outside their homeland
2 - Athanasia, this essay is so severely incomplete in terms of informing the reader that it was not worth the...
Writing FeedbackLaLaLand999 - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|Why I want to be dentist. I dream about it.
4 - Janjie, this is very weak personal statement for application to dental school. In a personal statement, you must show...
Writing FeedbackJJKanyarat - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|Everyone should study at school until 18. To what extent,do you agree or disagree?
3 - It is useless to write two paragraphs that only pertain to the body of the discussion. That is not...
Writing FeedbackWatsup - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off before going to university.
3 - Dat, it would have been of greater benefit to you if you had posted the original prompt that you...
Writing Feedbackdatbu - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 10, 2017
|More public parks or sports facilities should be built in new towns rather than shopping centers?
Writing FeedbackNhungDuong - Sep 9, 2017 / NhungDuong - Sep 10, 2017
|Citizens, businesses as well as government are major responsible for environmental improvement.
2 - Thanh, what is the complete prompt requirement for this essay? You provided us with only a partial prompt that...
Writing FeedbackModesty - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|[TASK 1] Changes planned for a town center.
2 - Phuong, this is a compare and contrast reporting essay. Therefore, the essay should have come in with 4 paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackphuongsongao - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|Culture - expansion of International media has negative or positive impacts on cultural diversity
2 - Pham, did you mean to say "same" not "sane"? "Same" means similar or no difference. "Sane" means not mentally...
Writing FeedbackPham To Anh Dao - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|The portion of those who own devices by four different categories in Vietnam during 6-year period
6 - hi@tan_hao_hcmut The line graph illustrates the portion (...) different types the proportion of ownership of devices in Vietnam...
Writing Feedbacktan_hao_hcmut - Sep 9, 2017 / sfiza - Sep 11, 2017
|A lot of people still smoke all over the world - they do not care about health warnings
3 - Thuong, if not for the mistake that you made in the opening paraphrase and the improper concluding statement at...
Writing Feedbackluanmoon - Sep 9, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1 (Population of people using different languages online)
3 - Dian, this essay severely lacks the proper format for an IELTS Task 1 essay. You do not have any...
Writing Feedbackditoaji - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|ISSUE:-think on task rather than worry about result
5 - As a reader, there is an ambiguty in your essay.Sometimes,it is like you are deviating from a main topic...
Writing Feedbackshraddhashende - Sep 8, 2017 / abhilashbhure - Sep 17, 2017
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made the world a better place
4 - Tuan, your essay will fail in an actual test because you did not follow the discussion instruction. You were...
Writing Feedbacktututuan - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|The park is place we like to go when we want to relax. Observation Descriptave Essay
3 - Mackenzie, I can see why your teacher told you that something was missing from the essay. It was highly...
Writing Feedbackmacdavis70 - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|Family - Men or Women take responsibility in raising children
3 - Pham, without the actual prompt requirement that you are responding to for comparison purposes, I cannot authoritatively say that...
Writing FeedbackPham To Anh Dao - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 9, 2017
|Urban areas and living space shortage - essay check
2 - Ngan, are you writing this essay for a TOEFL or IELTS practice test? My assessment of your essay usually...
Writing FeedbackNgan Nguyen - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 8, 2017
|Essay about the benefit of internet
5 - @Putrisalju2200 I think you need to be careful when using pronouns. In some sentence, you used " we" but...
Writing FeedbackPutrisalju2200 - Sep 8, 2017 / phuongsongao - Sep 9, 2017
|[TASK 2] Being friends with colleagues or not?
4 - @ditoaji Thank you for your correction! @Holt Thanks so much. Now I know what my strengths and weaknesses are....
Writing Feedbackphuongsongao - Sep 8, 2017 / phuongsongao - Sep 11, 2017
|[Task 1] The information on the percentage of people who went to cinema in UK
3 - Phuong, this is only a 3 paragraph essay. You stretched it to 4 paragraphs needlessly as the trending paragraph...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao202 - Sep 8, 2017 / Holt - Sep 8, 2017
|The proportion of attendance in fast food chains in the U.S.A. within a 10 year period
2 - Athanasia, you must be consistent in the method by which you represent the figures coming from the bar chart....
Writing FeedbackLaLaLand999 - Sep 7, 2017 / Holt - Sep 8, 2017
|IELTS: not enough of courtesy is demonstrated toward elderly people (reasons, problems in society)
3 - @Holt You're right, I realised it after creating this thread. The complete task is: "In many countries today, insufficient...
Writing FeedbackLaLaLand999 - Sep 7, 2017 / LaLaLand999 - Sep 7, 2017
|Should schools invest in infrastructure and physical plant, or just keep the faculty satisfied?
2 - @loqsc852 The discussion topic that you provided lacks the discussion instructions that come with these prompt statements. As such,...
Writing Feedbackloqsc852 - Sep 7, 2017 / Holt - Sep 7, 2017
|Ielts task 2: Many people value money and fame over desire to win.
2 - Tran, you deviated from the specified prompt discussion. There are no problems and solutions to be discussed. The only...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Sep 7, 2017 / Holt - Sep 7, 2017
|Harm fume gases from private cars' bring some serious problems [IELTS WR Task 2]
3 - @Wakalanud Your idea in this essay is good, yet it's better to paraphrase the question and put in the...
Writing FeedbackWakalanud - Sep 7, 2017 / ayibram - Sep 22, 2017
|[TASK 1][CAM 12-TEST 8] The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity
4 - Hello :) Your introduction is good enough (you paraphrased the information given by IELTS). Similarly, your overview is nice,...
Writing Feedbackphuongsongao - Sep 7, 2017 / LaLaLand999 - Sep 7, 2017
|[TOEFL Essay] Is it worth to build a new university in a local area? Benefits and drawbacks.
2 - Ajinkya, there is one tremendous flaw in your otherwise perfect discussion. The prompt is asking you to consider how...
Writing Feedbackice123 - Sep 6, 2017 / Holt - Sep 7, 2017
|[Task 2] Should kids really obey all rules or do what their parents and teachers say?
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Sep 6, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Sep 7, 2017
|A change of population measured in thousands in Columbia, Yamhill and Washington
3 - Your biggest problem here is that you gave totally wrong information, your score will be lowered severely! For example,...
Writing Feedbackevamusifa - Sep 6, 2017 / tran14 - Sep 7, 2017
|Spending whole time doing the same things is better than change?
4 - 1) Punctuation error. 2) Smooth but not impressive introduction. 3) You misunderstood the prompt. It asked you to discuss...
Writing FeedbackHang nguyen - Sep 5, 2017 / tran14 - Sep 6, 2017
|Why should women wear Ao dai at work ?
Writing FeedbackSuminap - Sep 5, 2017 / Suminap - Sep 6, 2017
|Diagram process of headland erosion (IELTS writing task 1)
2 - Heru, since this is your first posting here at EF, I will allow you some leeway and not score...
Writing FeedbackWakalanud - Sep 5, 2017 / Holt - Sep 5, 2017
|[IELTS] Brutality in the media makes people more aggresive?
5 - hai @Skychelcy, better if you rewrite your conclusion, it seems like you did not paraphrase your statement clearly, you...
Writing FeedbackSkychelcy - Sep 4, 2017 / Wakalanud - Sep 6, 2017
|Economic progress? Government should support its own citizens and their basic needs
2 - Chou, you still need to work on your opening paraphrase. While you show the ability to understand and restate...
Writing FeedbackEve0309 - Sep 4, 2017 / Holt - Sep 5, 2017
|[TOEFL Writing task] The best way to travel / whether or not in a group with a guide.
3 - @Holt I am so grateful for your timely review. Forgive me that I am not aware of the requirements....
Writing FeedbackCarlCong - Sep 4, 2017 / CarlCong - Sep 4, 2017
|TOEFL: Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays
2 - Lee, your topic line is not in accordance with the prompt. You jumped the gun and actually misfired in...
Writing FeedbackPeggyLee - Sep 4, 2017 / Holt - Sep 4, 2017
|[Task 1] The charts below show what the UK graduate and postgraduate students did after college
3 - @Holt Many thanks, Ms. Rose. Such conscientious advice cannot be heard otherwise. Without you, I would never find my...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Sep 4, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Sep 4, 2017
|Governments should plan more budget for railways development rather than roads system
2 - Lin, this is one of those "emotional" essays where you are asked to offer a degree of agreement or...
Writing Feedbacklinokmijn - Sep 4, 2017 / Holt - Sep 4, 2017
|Ielts task 2: Freedom in art. I mostly agree with this idea.
4 - @tran14 your essay has few grammatical errors as you know in your IELTS essay you should add more complex...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Sep 4, 2017 / Nilendra - Sep 5, 2017
|The variety of degree and diploma's types which Australian post - school students received in 1999
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Sep 3, 2017 / tran14 - Sep 4, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: discussion on getting married late or living alone in woman.
Writing FeedbackLan Anhh - Sep 3, 2017 / Lan Anhh - Sep 3, 2017
|Combination of different methods. How to reduce crime - IELTS Writing task 2
5 - 1) You misunderstood between 'longer prison sentence' and 'increase prison sentence', mate. The former means a longer period of...
Writing Feedbackealeana - Sep 2, 2017 / tran14 - Sep 3, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 2: Educational degree in rich countries gains higher position in own country
NEW - educational degree in rich countries Topic: In many developing countries nowadays, it is necessary for students to get...
Writing Feedbackmsbachvan - Sep 2, 2017 / — -
|The seaside resort of Templeton experienced significant change from 1990 to 2005.
2 - Trong, before you even think about your word formation problems, you must first consider if your essay meets the...
Writing FeedbackDegaak44 - Sep 2, 2017 / Holt - Sep 2, 2017
|Ielts task 2: Discussion about happiness - condicive factors to reach it
3 - @Holt Glad to see you again. I utterly appreciate your advice on how to better my work. It has...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Sep 1, 2017 / tran14 - Sep 3, 2017
|Classmates and parents - two important factors which contribute to the academic success of a child
Writing Feedbackdoquocvu - Sep 1, 2017 / doquocvu - Sep 2, 2017
|(IELTS Task 1) a pie chart describing water purposes - for analysis
6 - Hi :) There are actually many problems with this report. First of all, you haven't made any comparisons; you...
Writing Feedbacktommychan - Sep 1, 2017 / LaLaLand999 - Sep 7, 2017
|How to save our society? Honour, knowledge, honesty, and humanity.
3 - 1) Expressing errors here: many cultural and economical aspects => if you list the aspects, do not use 'many'....
Writing Feedbackmaryasholevar - Sep 1, 2017 / tran14 - Sep 4, 2017
|The resistance to change is a striking human's instinctive trait [IELTS TASK 2]
3 - Hi @Holt thank you for your remarks. I've finished the final work, please take a look at it and...
Writing Feedbackhailung - Sep 1, 2017 / hailung - Sep 15, 2017
|Illness prevention as opposed to illness treatment
3 - @Holt Thank you Holt, I will try to distinguish between two types of essay. Thank you so much!...
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Sep 1, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Sep 1, 2017
|Living In My Sister's Shadow
2 - Banit, this is a pretty good essay. It just lacks a balancing factor in the middle. Something that says...
Writing Feedbackbtaylor7355 - Aug 31, 2017 / Holt - Sep 1, 2017
|Ielts task 2: teaching children a special skill to tell the right and wrong
3 - I think your conclusion is quite short, and in your essay, there are a few grammar mistakes. it is...
Writing FeedbackEve0309 - Aug 31, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Sep 1, 2017
|Technology in education (Writing task 2 IELTS)
3 - I think your essay' introduction and conclusion are quite short, it would be better to write at least 3...
Writing Feedbacklevanhieu - Aug 31, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Sep 1, 2017
|College Composition CLEP Essay - Need Critique of Concealed Carry Essay
3 - Thank you @Holt. I need to work at focusing on the assignment which I believe will allow me to...
Writing Feedbackcastillope - Aug 31, 2017 / castillope - Sep 1, 2017
|The Beauty of the Mysterious Universe - college essay
Writing Feedbackcalliepj24 - Aug 31, 2017 / calliepj24 - Sep 1, 2017
|The most important thing about a job is how much money you earn in that job. Do you agree or disagre
2 - @Vietanhdao you have not provided a proper format for this essay. This is very sloppy work that will not...
Writing FeedbackVietanhdao - Aug 30, 2017 / Holt - Aug 31, 2017
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