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Writing task 1: the percentage of female members of parliament of euroupean countries

4 - Hi. I just don't know how to say thank you. I'm learning IELTS by myself at the moment and...

Writing Feedbacknhantran - Aug 28, 2017 / nhantran - Aug 29, 2017
Three Yearbook Write-ups (Description of a Person)

4 - @afriawan33 Thank you, but that's not exactly what I'm looking for... :P @Holt Ah, okay. I'll try to...

Writing FeedbackArowanaPrincess - Aug 28, 2017 / ArowanaPrincess - Aug 28, 2017
I don't care how poor a person is; if he has family, he's rich - CLEP testing

4 - The love, support,and companionship of ... Since the beginning of time,manmankind or human beingshas(have) existed in a family or...

Writing Feedbackcastillope - Aug 28, 2017 / toseanliu - Aug 29, 2017
GRE Essay about what makes a nation truly great

2 - Daniel, I think you can get a top score of 5 for this essay. The line of argument and...

Writing Feedbackdaniellee - Aug 27, 2017 / Holt - Aug 28, 2017
Ietls writing task 2 - opinion eassy questions - energy and resources

3 - i think the task respond criteria isn't complete, the question is agree or disagree with find out new areas...

Writing Feedbackiammandywong - Aug 27, 2017 / vovancuong - Aug 27, 2017
Writing Task 2: The Internet has as many disadvantages as it does advantages.

4 - @Holt Thank you a lot. I'm very appreciate . I'll try again....

Writing Feedbacktrungkienpeter - Aug 27, 2017 / trungkienpeter - Aug 28, 2017
The funds are being exhausted un-necessarily, by the government - on the arts. IELTS Writing Task 2

2 - Mayank, while this is an opinion paper essay, the type of opinion you must discuss is clearly indicated in...

Writing Feedbackmayanknitc - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 27, 2017
Arrangement in Working Hours

3 - @Holt Dear Holt, firstly thanks for your great ideas. I am going to interest the issues that you explain....

Writing FeedbackFahri - Aug 26, 2017 / Fahri - Aug 26, 2017
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: THE ORIGIN OF SUCCESS

4 - Nemo, please disregard the example opening statement that Phuc gave you as an example. While he meant well and...

Writing Feedbackhungnemo - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
IELTS 2: Leaders and directors in an organisation are normally older people. Is it right?

2 - @Fiar the essay has a specific discussion instruction. You are to simply agree or disagree with the statement provided....

Writing FeedbackFiar - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
Writing Task 2 : The air traffic is bigger nowadays, which causes many problems

3 - Yulia, this is not a very good essay. I believe it would have a difficult time getting a passing...

Writing FeedbackYulia Indah - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
GRE Argument Essay: Inacurate Scientific Theories?

2 - Hi Patrick, I think you have written an essay that can get a 4 in this instance. You present...

Writing Feedbackilovechemistryha - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
[TOEFL] CLASSMATES WIN HANDS DOWN ON THEIR INFLUENCE ON CHILDREN'S SCHOOL SUCCESS!

3 - Whoah Johnny! The essay that you wrote is not one that is easy to keep track of discussion wise...

Writing FeedbackJohnny Nguyen - Aug 25, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
The illustration describes the process in which bricks are made for constructing purposes

3 - Tran, your paragraphs are too short to be fully analytical of the procedure illustrated. You must use fully developed...

Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 25, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
Government role in reducing health concerns

2 - Thao, your opening statement would have been acceptable only if it did not contain a tremendously long run-on sentence,...

Writing Feedbackdaikii123 - Aug 25, 2017 / Holt - Aug 25, 2017
A large proportion of budget should be diverted from treatment to spending on health and education

2 - John, this essay does not follow the required parameters of an IELTS Task 2 essay. All of your paragraphs...

Writing FeedbackIELTS JOHN - Aug 25, 2017 / Holt - Aug 25, 2017
IELTS writing task 2: Many countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects

3 - @Holt Thanks for taking your time to give these comments. I do appreciate....

Writing Feedbacknldqui - Aug 25, 2017 / nldqui - Aug 25, 2017
[TOEFL] A well-rounded student is more likely to obtain success in the future

6 - @toetoefldog, I do not know how people organise paragraphs in a toefl test, so I just give you advice...

Writing Feedbacktoetoefldog - Aug 25, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 27, 2017
IELTS Task2: How do you judge the higher proportion of elder people in many countries?

3 - @Holt I see! I will read those similar discussions! Thank you for helping me so much!...

Writing FeedbackGoldenjohnny - Aug 25, 2017 / Goldenjohnny - Aug 25, 2017
Internet made a lot of changes in how we search for and spread information

4 - @ruanriying I think you offered very strong arguments in the essay, but you should try to illustrate them more...

Writing Feedbackruanriying - Aug 25, 2017 / toetoefldog - Aug 29, 2017
[IELTS Writing Task 2] The best solution for traffic jam is providing free public transport?

3 - Hello Huệ, I agree with @Holt, I will give you more details. The prompt is a solution...

Writing FeedbackElizabeth0606 - Aug 24, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 24, 2017
[TOEFL] Young People's Dependency on Changing World

3 - Alta, you failed to respond to the prompt statement at the end of your opening paraphrase. This being a...

Writing Feedbackaltaer - Aug 24, 2017 / Holt - Aug 24, 2017
[writing task 2]The best way for children to read books.

4 - You should use some words such as aren't, let's in an academic essay. "books are very important to people"...

Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 24, 2017 / Elizabeth0606 - Aug 25, 2017
IELTS Writing Task 1: Internet usage across three countries

3 - Long, I have other comments: I think that your opening statement is a bit general. You should include...

Writing Feedbackhaugiangguny - Aug 24, 2017 / sarahna - Aug 25, 2017
Don't may a mistake - stick to the one, proper job only. [IELTS Writing task 2]

4 - Hello Quyen, Your essay is 236 words so you can add one para for your opinion. The conclusion...

Writing Feedbacktuquyen11010 - Aug 24, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 24, 2017
Computer skills should also be the fourth largest branch. Do you agree or disagree?

3 - Quyet, your opening statement falls short of a proper paraphrasing and opening statement. You neglected to inform the reader...

Writing Feedbackvodang - Aug 24, 2017 / Holt - Aug 24, 2017
Many wildlife species worldwide are in danger of extinction. How can we protect endangered animals?

3 - @Holt thank you so much for your comments, I'll try my best to make progress....

Writing Feedbackgongyoooppa - Aug 23, 2017 / gongyoooppa - Aug 24, 2017
The Ashdown Museum After and Before

5 - @eddies Hi Eddies, I really appreciate your advice and correction, thank you for the enlightenment. It will be helpful...

Writing Feedbackmiss19 - Aug 23, 2017 / miss19 - Aug 24, 2017
[TOEFL] Globalisation worldwide effect - similarities in different countries

2 - Perita, when you discuss your opening statement, after you present your opinion, do not add information to it that...

Writing Feedbackperita - Aug 23, 2017 / Holt - Aug 23, 2017
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Environment and Economy in the success

5 - Thank you all for having taken your time to provide me with your helpful corrections. Your comments are much...

Writing FeedbackDuc Dao - Aug 23, 2017 / Duc Dao - Aug 27, 2017
Travel with a Companion or Travel Alone?

2 - Amra, I would say that this is a high school level English writing. There are still a number of...

Writing Feedbackamra125 - Aug 23, 2017 / Holt - Aug 23, 2017
Ielts Task 2 Topic: computer skills after writing, reading and maths

2 - @Nhu Tran When you write your paraphrased statement, it would be best if you do so with a clear...

Writing FeedbackNhu Tran - Aug 23, 2017 / Holt - Aug 23, 2017
Essay about Travel to foreign countries when you are young or when you are older

3 - @Holt Thanks for taking time to give me so much insightful suggestions. I do agree with you that I...

Writing FeedbackFloraNougat - Aug 23, 2017 / FloraNougat - Aug 24, 2017
IELTS Writing Task 2 : Studying History - what's the aim of it?

2 - Valery, your essay became a personal opinion paper because you did not accurately represent the paraphrased statement as requiring...

Writing Feedbackvalerydang - Aug 22, 2017 / Holt - Aug 22, 2017
IELTS writing task 1: Australian school leavers' activities

3 - @Holt I have just revised the report as you advised. My latest one: The pie charts compare three...

Writing Feedbacksarahna - Aug 22, 2017 / sarahna - Sep 18, 2017
[IELTS writing task 2] Online shopping: discuss both sides and give your opinion.

3 - @Holt Thank you so much. Your advice is really helpful and important to me. I'm desperately trying to understand...

Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Aug 22, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Aug 23, 2017
The best method to decrease the number of traffic jams.

3 - Phuc, there are a number of serious problems with your essay that has affected the possible final score that...

Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 22, 2017 / Holt - Aug 22, 2017
TOPIC - CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS OF THE RISING UNEMPLOYMENT RATE

3 - @MandyTran Hi Tran, your essay impressed me with decent vocabulary in the introduction, but as I processed through the...

Writing FeedbackMandyTran - Aug 22, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Aug 22, 2017
The share of Oscar winners by genre film for 2003 and 2008

2 - Kien, your essay is missing the most important part, the summary overview. While there is no specific spot for...

Writing Feedbacktrungkienpeter - Aug 22, 2017 / Holt - Aug 22, 2017
A comparison and projection of five-decade populations between Yemen and Italy

3 - Philo, it is difficult for me to review the work that you did in this essay because you forgot...

Writing Feedbackalfabio - Aug 21, 2017 / Holt - Aug 22, 2017
[TOEFL] Which do you prefer, traveling with a companion or alone?

2 - Liu, when you write your essays, make sure that you always speak in completed paragraphs. That means, each thought...

Writing FeedbackJayde - Aug 21, 2017 / Holt - Aug 22, 2017
[IELTS writing task 2] Rising pressure on students, positive or negative?

2 - Nguyen, the strength of your essay lies in the method by which you discuss the body of paragraphs. The...

Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Aug 21, 2017 / Holt - Aug 21, 2017
(IELTS TASK 2) The public should be encouraged to use public transportation more. Give your opinio

7 - Hi Emin, your essay appears to be of low level, thus low band score for the following reasons: -...

Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - Aug 21, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Aug 22, 2017
Writing task 1 (IELTS). Process of coffee manufacturing

6 - Hello giang, I think you can add the reason for any step : For example, Coffee beans dried...

Writing Feedbackngangiang - Aug 21, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 23, 2017
[IELTS Writing task 1] What UK graduate and postgraduate students did after leaving college in 2008?

3 - @BADJ You did a very good job in presenting the information from the charts on an individual and comparative...

Writing FeedbackBADJ - Aug 21, 2017 / Holt - Aug 21, 2017
CAE Essay Part 1: Methods schools and universities use to help students find suitable jobs

4 - Hello Hanh, I think your idea is good but it's not enough, I have one more idea that...

Writing FeedbackHanh Ngoc - Aug 21, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 22, 2017
IELTs Task2: Advantages and disadvantages do home computers have for children

2 - Van, it is unfortunate that you forgot to upload the complete original prompt instructions along with your response essay....

Writing FeedbackVan Trang - Aug 21, 2017 / Holt - Aug 21, 2017
IELTS Task2. Is 24-hour television a good thing? Or it may bring some harm.

3 - @Holt Oh, you're right! I was confused by the two words, positive and negative, and jumped into writing immediately....

Writing FeedbackGoldenjohnny - Aug 21, 2017 / Goldenjohnny - Aug 21, 2017
IELTS Writing task 2; some people think that social networking sites have a damaging effect

4 - Good article with construction. Here are my personal views. 1.I think it will be better if we answer...

Writing Feedbacktuanminhnguyen - Aug 21, 2017 / Goldenjohnny - Aug 21, 2017
IELTS Writing Task 2: should information be freely accessible?

3 - Long, this essay will get an automatic failing score. It will not pass any of the criteria for consideration...

Writing Feedbackhaugiangguny - Aug 20, 2017 / Holt - Aug 21, 2017
IELTS Writing Task2 - Why ppl try to find out the history of their family? Positive trend?

3 - @Holt Thank you for your help and suggestion....

Writing Feedbackviolavu - Aug 20, 2017 / violavu - Aug 27, 2017
IELTS Writing Task 2: Opinion over providing a wide range of young people with higher education

4 - @Holt Thank you, your comment helped me a lot to better my essay particularly and my way of thinking...

Writing FeedbackFiar - Aug 20, 2017 / Fiar - Aug 26, 2017
This simple electronic deveice should be banned in school. Do you agree or not.

3 - Nuru, I believe that you are trying to respond to a Task 2 IELTS essay. The problem, is that...

Writing Feedbackfastweb - Aug 20, 2017 / Holt - Aug 20, 2017
IELTS Writing task 2: Discussive passage (money on road systems?)

3 - 1) Both 'incremental' and 'increase' mean rising, it is unnatural to use these next to each other. 2) Because...

Writing Feedbackcamtuvu - Aug 20, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 25, 2017
Salary must be consider top priority in choosing a job. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

3 - Kim, did you post the complete prompt instructions along with your essay response? It does not seem like you...

Writing FeedbackMimi123 - Aug 20, 2017 / Holt - Aug 20, 2017
IELTS writing task 2: Liability to support state education system

5 - Hi all, Assuming that simple sentences are the key to improve my essay, here is my edited one...

Writing Feedbacksarahna - Aug 20, 2017 / sarahna - Aug 26, 2017
Ad vs disad of a young population - IELTS task 2 essay

3 - @Holt I'm truly thankful for your remark. Regarding your advice on opening and concluding statements, I was following some...

Writing Feedbackxbb84 - Aug 20, 2017 / xbb84 - Aug 20, 2017
4 creteria: Coherence and cohesion, Lexical resource, Grammar, Task respond and comment

2 - Hi wind0111, Is the essay requirement correct? In my opinion, there are basic grammar errors in this topic...

Writing Feedbackwind0111 - Aug 20, 2017 / sarahna - Aug 20, 2017
To succeed, It is necessary to make sure that others know about your strengths or accomplishments.

4 - @sweetkick Well, I think you do have a clear mindset in organizing your article. While I am not a...

Writing Feedbacksweetkick - Aug 19, 2017 / Goldenjohnny - Aug 21, 2017
Museums are interesting mostly for tourists not locals. Reasons and solutions?

2 - Richard, this is a good essay with some slight problems. The first problem, is that you mentioned that there...

Writing Feedbackbangyeuemlam - Aug 19, 2017 / Holt - Aug 19, 2017

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