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|Most of criminals are notorious offenders - what to do with them?
3 - Hi @syamsiahRahim , As far as I am concern, there are several suggestions for boost your score in writing...
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - Apr 25, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 27, 2017
|causes and measures for offenders who commit more crimes after serving the first punishment
3 - Below is my revised and recommended various of your essay, I rectified some grammatical mistakes and make a few...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Apr 25, 2017 / btho - Apr 25, 2017
|The proportion of National Consumer Expenditure in Five countries
2 - hi Anhy I will give you some feedback for each countries (country) ....... just funding arround 4,35 %....
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Apr 25, 2017 / syamsiahRahim - Apr 25, 2017
|The percentage of three kind of items which were purchased by consumers
5 - @syamsiahRahim i have read your essay clearly. first of all, i think you can improve your overview by selecting...
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - Apr 25, 2017 / agus_mono - May 1, 2017
|Writing task 2 - causes and solution for offender commit more crimers after they was free
2 - @Diahkn93 Your essay idea managing is good. As your request first and foremost your introduce, I think there are...
Writing FeedbackDiahkn93 - Apr 25, 2017 / restuanlubis - Apr 25, 2017
|Ielts writing task 1: Info about British sporting activities
Writing Feedbackbtho - Apr 25, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 25, 2017
|Commit crimes and first punishment - death penalty?
2 - The main issue with your essay should be grammar, which is seriously deterring your readers should getting your message....
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Apr 25, 2017 / btho - Apr 25, 2017
|The provided table illustrates about people have expenditure on different goods in 2002
2 - @tamtamii Your essay manage is going with well. Sadly, it is too short only more 2 words, that is...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Apr 25, 2017 / restuanlubis - Apr 25, 2017
|First Punishment for many offenders
2 - Ummm With all due respect, I think the first thing you need to work on is your grammar accuracy....
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Apr 25, 2017 / btho - Apr 25, 2017
|Expenditure of five countries by category
2 - GRAMMAR what isthe biggest proportion of ... -------------------- use past tense because the year is 2002 firstly, all people...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Apr 25, 2017 / hasanah_13 - Apr 25, 2017
|Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programs.
3 - @PHUONGMIN I have red your essay, and I think that you just use some of simple sentences in your...
Writing FeedbackPHUONGMIN - Apr 25, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 26, 2017
|Ielts task 1: A line graph describing waste production of three companies
4 - Wong, considering that writing task 1 always involves description, comparing and contrasting the information presented in a line graph...
Writing Feedbackmasami - Apr 23, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 24, 2017
|The transformation that happened on Taft University's campus from 1980 to 2005 is depicted on maps
3 - Huong, you again failed to provide a copy of the illustration that you were provided with for the summary....
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - Apr 23, 2017 / Holt - Apr 23, 2017
|[IELTS] Summarise the information by reporting the main features of cement and concrete production
6 - @mandyduong I have red your essay and I just concern on how you arrange the sentence and your lexical...
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - Apr 23, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 26, 2017
|Whether luck is important to success? TOEFL
3 - @Holt I think I understand what you mean. For instance, I delete the first sentence of my last paragraph...
Writing FeedbackSelaf - Apr 23, 2017 / Selaf - Apr 23, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2 Cause and effect. Topic: Crime and safety in a society
7 - Hi @Trista5577 , I have read your essay closely. Therefore, there are several suggestions to make your essay more...
Writing FeedbackTrista5577 - Apr 23, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 25, 2017
|Having a gap-year is more and more common in recent years. IELTS Writing Task 2
6 - @benz0127 I would like to say that you present information with lack of coherence, and there is no clear...
Writing Feedbackbenz0127 - Apr 23, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 26, 2017
|Choosing the Urban Life - to live in the city or the countryside？
Writing FeedbackBlairlau - Apr 23, 2017 / Blairlau - Apr 23, 2017
|New medicines on the market at the expense of animals
3 - Hi Fiza, these below are my thoughts for finalizing your essay. Please, meet my notes and fix them. Fiza,...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 22, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 24, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Causes and solutions (Topic: Museums and Historical sites)
2 - Vuu, good work on writing 200 words for this essay. That sort of word count can definitely increase your...
Writing FeedbackTogepiLinhVuu - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont Island - chart summary
2 - Micol, for consistency, please always indicate the percentage throughout your presentation rather than saying "half, a third, a fifth"....
Writing Feedbackmichsimo - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Excessive usage of cars - problems and solutions
Writing FeedbackThuy Linh - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Clothes, travel, film and music's online sale of four different retailers
3 - Ahmad, I think that this essay presentation of worthy of a band score of 7. It is highly accurate...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Speaking same language in the future is good or bad?
Writing FeedbackTai - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Advertising analysis essay "The cultural expansion of Vietnam Airlines"
Writing Feedbacksarah2015 - Apr 20, 2017 / michsimo - Apr 21, 2017
|Writing Task I People living in three different countries of U.S.
3 - From the grammatical side, a partical is missing "human" should be "a human". The "quantity " word seem not...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - Apr 20, 2017 / NurulNaval - Apr 21, 2017
|Topic: key problems facing the world's cities in the 21st century and solutions
2 - Micol, the prompt of your essay does not in any way imply argumentative essay, therefore, the word 'argue' in...
Writing Feedbackmichsimo - Apr 20, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 20, 2017
|The First Day on My New Job
3 - @Holt Thank you for your advice, especially that of protect other's privacy. I will try to do it better...
Writing Feedbackspringblossoms - Apr 20, 2017 / springblossoms - Apr 25, 2017
|Advertising and Consumers relation
3 - Hi @alextran2215 , actually I could say that your essay is quiet impressive, as you have to use many...
Writing Feedbackalextran2215 - Apr 19, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 27, 2017
|Topic : best way to solve the problem of poverty is to set up businesses with rich countries
2 - Huy, it is usually difficult to tell if your draft has answered the prompt of the essay if we...
Writing Feedbackguydragon - Apr 19, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 21, 2017
|Some people believe that imprisonment is the most successful way to deal with criminals. Others thin
5 - @gabby12345 Hi gabby, I have red you essay, and I think that it is good if you paraphrase your...
Writing Feedbackgabby12345 - Apr 19, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 27, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2 exclusion of women in certain jobs
2 - @ayat_555 I think you need to change your introduction paragraph. The first sentence should be the topic of your...
Writing Feedbackayat_555 - Apr 19, 2017 / adib_yz - Apr 19, 2017
|Future IELTS exam preparation. The graph compares the number of visits to two new music sites on web
3 - @akbarmappiare Thank you very much. I didn't realize those big mistakes in the writing. I spent money on a...
Writing Feedbackdilink - Apr 18, 2017 / dilink - Apr 19, 2017
|Which media do you prefer? Why? 100-125 WORDS
2 - Hello Ismael, your sentences in this have needed improvement. If you wanna answer the question, please you don't give...
Writing Feedbackismaelvr - Apr 17, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 17, 2017
|I decided to do running - there are many advantages of running to our body
2 - Weijjiang, you should focus on only one aspect of running for your essay instead of trying to develop a...
Writing FeedbackWeijiang123 - Apr 17, 2017 / Holt - Apr 18, 2017
|The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia
Writing FeedbackASooshd - Apr 16, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 25, 2017
|Writing IELTS task 1 - Inflow of Foreign Workers in Australia 1992-2001
2 - Hi Muhammad Rinul, I have read your writing closely.Honestly, you have needed some improvements to finalize this writing. ...
Writing Feedbackmrfwijaya - Apr 16, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 16, 2017
|The value and quality of women's work should be more appreciated
3 - Ngai, you have inaccurately discussed the paraphrased statement. The opening statement needs to only deliver your understanding of the...
Writing Feedbackhoiovo - Apr 16, 2017 / Holt - Apr 16, 2017
|Translation of a short movie to my little brother at school
5 - Bluemoon I have not practiced writing or speaking in English since the last August So I forgot everything ...
Writing FeedbackSawsana - Apr 15, 2017 / Sawsana - Apr 15, 2017
|Choosing an university which is far from home or in your country? (write a compare & contrast essay)
Writing Feedbacksamanhb - Apr 15, 2017 / Bluemoom - Apr 15, 2017
|The prevalence of Western clothes.
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Apr 15, 2017 / mrfwijaya - Apr 16, 2017
|Driving offenders must face consequences
2 - Muhammad, the English sentence structure of the essay is not very good. It usually confuses the reader while reading...
Writing Feedbackmrfwijaya - Apr 14, 2017 / Holt - Apr 14, 2017
|Veganism -- Giving advice on my essay! This is for a final grade.
2 - Fabia, you can actually lengthen the content of your essay if you continue to respond to the questions that...
Writing FeedbackFabia2 - Apr 13, 2017 / Holt - Apr 14, 2017
|The percentage of students who studied at four types of secondary schools over a period of ten years
4 - Hello Phanh, it is typical essay for IELTS writing task 1. Overall, it is good but I have several...
Writing FeedbackPhanh - Apr 13, 2017 / mrfwijaya - Apr 14, 2017
|The primary reasons behind low productivity of agriculture land. Two graphs description IELTS TASK 1
2 - Hadeel, you must avoid redundancies of information in your essays. Your irst 2 paragraphs contain the same information in...
Writing Feedbackhadeel21 - Apr 13, 2017 / Holt - Apr 13, 2017
|Destination most of students after graduation
3 - Please see my correction of some grammatical errors in the first two paragraphs. ... show about the ratio of...
Writing FeedbackMuhammad Afif - Apr 13, 2017 / az23 - Apr 16, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 Exercise "comparation among UK student who didn't go into full-time work"
5 - @ardy_rp In my point of view, you should paraphrase your introductory paragraph as it is are more likely to...
Writing Feedbackardy_rp - Apr 12, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 27, 2017
|What students did after leaving college, without job? Describing The Graph.
8 - @syita_arc as far as i read your essay, i think to improve your score, you have to pay attention...
Writing Feedbacksyita_arc - Apr 12, 2017 / agus_mono - Apr 26, 2017
|Where went majority of UK students since they finished their school?
Writing Feedbackaini fidhni - Apr 12, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 25, 2017
|Destination of UK Graduates and Postgraduates in 2008. Describe Table IELTS Task 1
3 - Hello Nindy, Overall, it is good writing but I have several notes for you. 1. You should better to...
Writing FeedbackAnindyaNindy17 - Apr 12, 2017 / mrfwijaya - Apr 14, 2017
|The typical destinations for students after graduating. IELTS Writing Task 1: Comparing the chart
4 - hi there..., I have perused your writing report more closely, then I think some areas for improvement in terms...
Writing FeedbackFarinda Urfah - Apr 12, 2017 / eddies - Apr 13, 2017
|Transportation facilities and shopping mall. Describing maps IELTS TASK 1
3 - Hi @aman12 The most important part that you should put attention in this essay is the way you describing...
Writing Feedbackaman12 - Apr 12, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 25, 2017
|Should we help people from other countries ?
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Apr 12, 2017 / frenchfries - Apr 13, 2017
|West Europe electricity generation resources
2 - Abeeb, when you write the summary overview, it is imperative that you accomplish that paragraph using at least 3...
Writing Feedbackabeerbas - Apr 11, 2017 / Holt - Apr 11, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2: Poor memory in modern life
Writing FeedbackLink - Apr 11, 2017 / Kiki31415 - Apr 16, 2017
|Announcement about constructing a great manufacturing plant in the area - TOEFL Independent writing
2 - Yin, there is an extreme prompt understanding problem in your essay. You did not properly parasite the prompt discussion...
Writing Feedbackjoannasephira - Apr 11, 2017 / Holt - Apr 11, 2017
|The employment pressure of graduate students
3 - Mirror, I wish that you had given me an inclination as to what the actual prompt for this essay...
Writing Feedbackmirror - Apr 11, 2017 / Holt - Apr 11, 2017
|How do we eradicate illiteracy in Ghanaian society
2 - Daniel, the topic of your essay is the eradication of illiteracy in Ghana. The premise of the essay is...
Writing Feedbackyaww phanye - Apr 10, 2017 / Holt - Apr 10, 2017
|Reason for learning a foreign language
2 - HIen, in the opening statement, do not use the term "later view" as the correct term is "latter view"....
Writing Feedbacknguyenhien - Apr 10, 2017 / Holt - Apr 10, 2017
|Is eating meat good for health or not ?
3 - Hi You should take more notice of verbs as well as some structures.For example:contain-contains,avoid to eat-avoid eating In addition,your...
Writing FeedbackAgustina Nababan - Apr 10, 2017 / nguyenhien - Apr 10, 2017
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