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|Chances do not make a major contribution to the triumph of anyone
5 - Do you guys can check my rewritting again ? It is argued that fortune plays a leading role in...
Writing Feedbackanhdt117 - Jun 2, 2017 / anhdt117 - Jun 4, 2017
|Immigration has a major impact on the society. Main reasons of immigration and its consequences.
2 - Utsi, the way that you introduced the topic is exaggerated. You must only present a discussion that relates to...
Writing Feedbackutsi - Jun 2, 2017 / Holt - Jun 2, 2017
|The number of people smoking, divided into two different gender groups
2 - Ngo, the major flaws of this essay are your inability to write a good introduction and lack of detailed...
Writing FeedbackTung Anh - May 31, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - May 31, 2017
|The Connection between Technology and Trafficking
2 - Ashley, what is the focal point of your research? You will need to clarify the thesis statement in your...
Writing Feedbackanmart36 - May 31, 2017 / Holt - Jun 1, 2017
|Australian teenagers and junk foods in their diet
4 - 1. You wrote: ... of eaten per year for pizza, fish ... Feedback: The article is missing before...
Writing Feedbackd2ny - May 30, 2017 / thunga2603 - Jun 3, 2017
|IELTs Task one: You live in a room in college which you share with another student.
4 - Hi I think your letter is not formatted right.I think you should start what is your request and...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - May 30, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Jun 3, 2017
|[Task 1] The graph below shows the changing trend of the use of modern technology in homes in the UK
Writing FeedbackTung Anh - May 30, 2017 / baosoftware1 - Jun 9, 2017
|How inhabitants in UK spent their time on separate types of telephone calls over a 7-year period
2 - Khoa, where is the chart for this analysis essay? I don't have anything to compare your written information to...
Writing Feedbackdaiha20082009 - May 30, 2017 / Holt - May 30, 2017
|Essay IETLS task 2: Sponsor for national sport teams. Who should financially support the teams?
3 - Sri, although you tried your best in the introductory paragraph, it is not good enough to earn you substantial...
Writing FeedbackSri Hardiyanti - May 29, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - May 30, 2017
|Many people believe they cannot count on the same job perpetually
2 - Hsin-ya, your opening statement is really because it immediately represents your opinion of matters to be discussed in the...
Writing Feedbackhsinya0316 - May 29, 2017 / Holt - May 29, 2017
|I need correct my TOEFL Independent Writing: Raising children in urban or rural areas
3 - Holt, I appreiciate your comments. I am not clear with your opinion: "It takes more than just 2 lines...
Writing Feedbacksilkworm - May 29, 2017 / silkworm - May 30, 2017
|Transport investments. IELTS Task II, Roads VS Railways.
2 - Yong, the main problem that you have work this essay is that you are not discussing it properly. Read...
Writing Feedbacksunraise2005 - May 29, 2017 / Holt - May 29, 2017
|As global trade increases between different countries
Writing Feedbackquanking - May 27, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - May 28, 2017
|The total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into 3 categories
Writing Feedbackhello_dmmm - May 27, 2017 / TJLuschen - May 27, 2017
|Essay about job contribution. I need mentors advice, remark, write score band...
2 - Anhphong, the essay is very confusing to read. There is a lack of proper representation of the two argumentative...
Writing Feedbackwind0111 - May 26, 2017 / Holt - May 26, 2017
|Should doctors either be engaged in more profitable activities or health-oriented
3 - @okorobiadimma14 Thanks for your suggestions. I appreciate it. I admitted that I do have the weaknesses of writing skills...
Writing Feedbackadambacon813 - May 25, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 26, 2017
|People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country
Writing Feedbackandreekhuat - May 25, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 25, 2017
|The proportion of consumers purchasing items online from three countries
2 - ...
Writing FeedbackRamShackle - May 24, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 25, 2017
|Treatment of ill people vs promotion of healthy lifestyle
2 - This is quite an interesting topic to read. I notice that you identified your position early in the paper....
Writing Feedbackxuantruong94 - May 24, 2017 / Frank86 - May 24, 2017
|Who should integrate children into public life?
Writing Feedbackzoeymisu - May 23, 2017 / zoeymisu - May 25, 2017
|Two types of solution of solving poor.
Writing Feedbackadambacon813 - May 23, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 25, 2017
|Children should always follow their parents' advice.
3 - @TJLuschen thank you for your comments. Here is a topic of writing in IELTS book that i'm studying. My...
Writing Feedbackanhgiang - May 23, 2017 / anhgiang - May 24, 2017
|Kidnapping is the worst crime
Writing FeedbackCandice523 - May 23, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 23, 2017
|Intended major and future goals and why you have chosen your field of interest
2 - Ngan, this is absolutely the wrong response to the prompt. Your response sounds like a a childish paper written...
Writing Feedbackngannkh - May 22, 2017 / Holt - May 22, 2017
|Motivation Letter of Taking M.TESOL program in Monash University
3 - Hello Ahmad, Firstly, I wish you good luck for receiving the scholarship. You have well explained why...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - May 22, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 23, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 1 : Why young executives are stressed at work and the consequences.
4 - You should add an overall paragraph after the introduction and one more body paragraph (because the third paragraph seems...
Writing Feedbackguan721 - May 21, 2017 / Riley Nguyen - Jun 10, 2017
|[IELTS Writing part 2] Playing computer games is harmful. Do you agree with it?
3 - There are some sound arguments in the essay, but I would reconsider the arguments made in paragraph 4....
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - May 21, 2017 / wtangalang - May 23, 2017
|Share information in scientific research, business and the academic world. Good or bad
2 - Dear @kevin1983 You can rearrange this sentence to be more concise and simple: "All of the giant company...
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - May 21, 2017 / flykitten - May 22, 2017
|Past or Future. Why not to move just forward?
2 - Hello @ngannkh I will just correct some grammar mistakes, has value... = has a value / has values...
Writing Feedbackngannkh - May 20, 2017 / flykitten - May 22, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 1 : The three companies' waste
9 - Thanks for your advices. I will try to write a better essay next time. Hope that you can also...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - May 20, 2017 / Red Moon - Aug 6, 2017
|It is high time to encourage different sources of energy all over the world
3 - Hello Sfiza, It's a very interesting and popular topic. You may want to read some articles about this...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - May 19, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 23, 2017
|Should foreigners pay more for tourism ? Should the host country require more money ?
2 - @tranvinhquang720 Hi, I would like to give you my brief feedback about the essay. First of all, I assume...
Writing Feedbacktranvinhquang720 - May 19, 2017 / mandyduong - May 19, 2017
|Punishment for Children is important for them to learn the difference between right and wrong?
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - May 18, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 19, 2017
|Must the free time of kids be always educational?
3 - @Bekhruz Good response. I think you state your position well and have good reasons backing it....
Writing FeedbackBekhruz - May 17, 2017 / acecomer98 - May 18, 2017
|Summary: How can parents help students survive the exam season?
4 - Bao, I must give you a thumb-up for the excellent skills you showed in summarizing the article. Stating each...
Writing Feedbackbaokhanhlqd - May 16, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - May 26, 2017
|Too much requirements from students? Should they focus strictly on the academic subjects?
2 - Hi..You got to know that essay question with agree and disagree type can be answered by five forms of...
Writing Feedbackyuzukachan - May 16, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 17, 2017
|Nowadays it is possible to use computers and mobile phones for automatic language translation
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Writing Feedbackhahoang2312 - May 15, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 15, 2017
|[IELTS Writing part 2] Money should be spent on health education instead of medical technology
5 - @mandyduong It is a excellent essay, however, I am not convinced about the conclusion about "Develop countries", for there...
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - May 15, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 21, 2017
|Music will never disappear from our life
Writing Feedbackndocojocojo - May 14, 2017 / ndocojocojo - May 15, 2017
|This is my first Issue topic on the desire of corporations. Evaluate and grade me.
2 - The main aim of government corporations is to work for the welfare of their people. Although sometimes they...
Writing Feedbackmnagrik94 - May 14, 2017 / niesaysi - May 16, 2017
|It's a short story about a aunt and his nephew.
3 - @Holt Thanks for your help and your advice,I knew about that, but I'm a beginner,I wrote this story mainly...
Writing Feedbackxujiantao - May 14, 2017 / xujiantao - May 15, 2017
|In my opinion railways are more important than roads. Government support. IELTS- writing task 2
2 - Halo Lin Yi, It seems that you still have a problem with grammatical understanding. Some sentences you made are...
Writing Feedbackblackheartbt - May 13, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 13, 2017
|Education in home country vs study overseas
3 - Hello, I believe you catched the main points about studying abroad. I would suggest you to mention about...
Writing Feedbackfirefox2010 - May 13, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 23, 2017
|SHOULD GOVERNMENT REGULATE THE FAST FOOD INDUSTRIES
2 - HI...when analyzing your essay, I have to say it is a nightmare for you. Despite less grammatical errors, your...
Writing Feedbackarashzh - May 12, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 13, 2017
|Technological skills through computer games? Any other influence?
5 - furthermore this is able to stimulate them - this can stimulate them they do not be easier to...
Writing Feedbackjazulirahman - May 11, 2017 / ezgifilik - May 21, 2017
|IT sector business and childrens impact
Writing Feedbackitaseptiyani - May 11, 2017 / trilestari - May 11, 2017
|Kids skills and familiarization in using new gadgets
5 - It's pretty good, but you failed to discuss how the technology would help children learn about the real (not...
Writing FeedbackIrmadesyre - May 11, 2017 / Rich Monte - May 11, 2017
|Parents often let their children play a lot with computer and tablets in order to improve skills
Writing FeedbackMuhammad Yoki - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Children are very familiar with their electronic 'toys'
Writing FeedbackAdhanice - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Play a lot with gadget in the early age
Writing FeedbackFatmaFaricha - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Writing IELTS Task 2 parents let children playing computers and tablets
Writing Feedbacktrilestari - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|THE GAP BETWEEN THE WEALTHY AND LESS WEALTHIER CITIZENS.
NEW - Economic inequality among people Nowadays, an increasing of people are concerned about the gap between the upper and...
Writing FeedbackTony_Tran - May 11, 2017 / — -
|The line graph: tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
2 - Hi I think you have been working hard with pies/charts/diagrams. That's why your language use is good such as...
Writing Feedbackbaonhisu - May 11, 2017 / mandyduong - May 16, 2017
|Essay ielts task 2 (Improve technolgical skill)
3 - 1.i completly...... let take an........ please use CAPITAL after (.) 2. teckle : itu should be TACKLE...
Writing FeedbackRianda Ridho - May 11, 2017 / Irmadesyre - May 11, 2017
|Empowering Gadgets to Access World
Writing Feedbackharis_ibrahimm - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Various cases of people living abroad
4 - Let me give your advice, pay attention with the connective word like between. Not between to, but between, and....
Writing FeedbackDora Elia Kasih - May 11, 2017 / haris_ibrahimm - May 11, 2017
|Progress Report English Course
6 - please attention your grammar and punctation, because there are some mistakes in your sentences. so, try to use complex...
Writing FeedbackIrmadesyre - May 11, 2017 / Dora Elia Kasih - May 11, 2017
|An essay about "How to Deal with Stress?"
Writing Feedbackconniecon - May 10, 2017 / conniecon - May 14, 2017
|Museums and artworks are important for the country, for the history, and culture from international
2 - Some mistakes of your essay: ... artworks are two of the most ... In the 2nd paragraph, i feel...
Writing FeedbackdaxXx_ryan31 - May 10, 2017 / maily257 - May 10, 2017
|Fatally Ill People's Choice
2 - Without pain and suffering, there is no existence (not to mention 'no pain, no gain). Life is by design...
Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - May 9, 2017 / Rich Monte - May 13, 2017
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