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|IT sector business and childrens impact
Writing Feedbackitaseptiyani - May 11, 2017 / trilestari - May 11, 2017
|Kids skills and familiarization in using new gadgets
5 - It's pretty good, but you failed to discuss how the technology would help children learn about the real (not...
Writing FeedbackIrmadesyre - May 11, 2017 / Rich Monte - May 11, 2017
|Parents often let their children play a lot with computer and tablets in order to improve skills
Writing FeedbackMuhammad Yoki - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Children are very familiar with their electronic 'toys'
Writing FeedbackAdhanice - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Play a lot with gadget in the early age
Writing FeedbackFatmaFaricha - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Writing IELTS Task 2 parents let children playing computers and tablets
Writing Feedbacktrilestari - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|THE GAP BETWEEN THE WEALTHY AND LESS WEALTHIER CITIZENS.
NEW - Economic inequality among people Nowadays, an increasing of people are concerned about the gap between the upper and...
Writing FeedbackTony_Tran - May 11, 2017 / — -
|The line graph: tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
2 - Hi I think you have been working hard with pies/charts/diagrams. That's why your language use is good such as...
Writing Feedbackbaonhisu - May 11, 2017 / mandyduong - May 16, 2017
|Essay ielts task 2 (Improve technolgical skill)
3 - 1.i completly...... let take an........ please use CAPITAL after (.) 2. teckle : itu should be TACKLE...
Writing FeedbackRianda Ridho - May 11, 2017 / Irmadesyre - May 11, 2017
|Empowering Gadgets to Access World
Writing Feedbackharis_ibrahimm - May 11, 2017 / moh_jawahir - May 11, 2017
|Various cases of people living abroad
4 - Let me give your advice, pay attention with the connective word like between. Not between to, but between, and....
Writing FeedbackDora Elia Kasih - May 11, 2017 / haris_ibrahimm - May 11, 2017
|Progress Report English Course
6 - please attention your grammar and punctation, because there are some mistakes in your sentences. so, try to use complex...
Writing FeedbackIrmadesyre - May 11, 2017 / Dora Elia Kasih - May 11, 2017
|An essay about "How to Deal with Stress?"
Writing Feedbackconniecon - May 10, 2017 / conniecon - May 14, 2017
|Museums and artworks are important for the country, for the history, and culture from international
2 - Some mistakes of your essay: ... artworks are two of the most ... In the 2nd paragraph, i feel...
Writing FeedbackdaxXx_ryan31 - May 10, 2017 / maily257 - May 10, 2017
|Fatally Ill People's Choice
2 - Without pain and suffering, there is no existence (not to mention 'no pain, no gain). Life is by design...
Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - May 9, 2017 / Rich Monte - May 13, 2017
|Discuss about the roles of metabolism and nutrient on one's ability to perform exercises.(400 words)
NEW - carbohydrates provides energy All the energy and nutrients that enable us to live and do exercise come from...
Writing Feedbackahtai - May 9, 2017 / — -
|Punishment on educating children
3 - Hello mail257, thanks for your feedback on my essay. With regard to yours, I believe you have good...
Writing Feedbackmaily257 - May 8, 2017 / daxXx_ryan31 - May 11, 2017
|Task 2: Living in big cities is bad for your health. To what extent do you agree or disagree
2 - Hi, I believe you have a wide range of knowledge about this topic or at least do careful research,...
Writing Feedbackchmt - May 7, 2017 / mandyduong - May 15, 2017
|Flying should cost less - benefits and drawbacks
2 - Nowadays, more more cheap cheaper ordinary people citizens world, so environmental environmentally friendly, so ...
Writing Feedbackdearbao - May 7, 2017 / eminhaqi - May 9, 2017
|IELTS Writing TASK2 - Women participate in the armed force
Writing FeedbackEstrellajajajaja - May 7, 2017 / thisissabrinaxx - May 8, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - SPORT ON TELEVISION
2 - some mistakes ^ ^ impact on st some of them have sport events favourite teams playing so they think...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - May 6, 2017 / maily257 - May 8, 2017
|IELTS essay task 1 - Table "Scottish cultural activities"
2 - experienced --> showed/performed. I think it might be better. comparatively --> relatively. The tone would be better...
Writing Feedbackbakakurothanhtam - May 6, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 6, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - the extensive use of computers in classroom, reduce the number of teachers
Writing FeedbackQuanbong - May 5, 2017 / Quanbong - May 5, 2017
|Writing 2: It has been suggested that everyone in the world wants to own a car, a TV and a fridge.
2 - @Arlen You have already presented your opinion quite clearly. The reader can easily understand that from your point of...
Writing FeedbackArlen - May 4, 2017 / Eng Phin - May 4, 2017
|Raising a company productivity through promotions - basing on a performance or on the seniority?
3 - Hi @vinusi, you could have done a better job of discussing the matter related to promotions based on seniority...
Writing Feedbackvinusi - May 4, 2017 / Binh Ngo - May 6, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 Industrial and business center relocation
3 - @Ahmadham However, this might create a new congestion spot ... I think this can be expanded, or...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - May 3, 2017 / kevin1983 - May 21, 2017
|Difficulties of living in a city. How to make urban life better?
2 - I think you should make clear what is the thesis statement of your essay in the introduction, you can...
Writing FeedbackHashirama - May 3, 2017 / vinusi - May 4, 2017
|Give 2 reasons on why schools should allow the public to use school sports facilities after school
Writing Feedbackthisissabrinaxx - May 3, 2017 / thisissabrinaxx - May 6, 2017
|PRESERVING RARE LANGUAGES FROM VANISHING
2 - I've found some mistakes in your essay: _Language as so many "another things" like art and old ... _Ancient...
Writing Feedbackhadeel22 - May 3, 2017 / Hashirama - May 3, 2017
|People who visited theme parks, museums, galleries, historical objects and zoos in Britain
Writing Feedbackquocphap36 - May 3, 2017 / baochau2014 - May 3, 2017
|New Port city - a report about criminal activieties in this area
Writing Feedbackelirya - May 2, 2017 / elirya - May 3, 2017
|The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel.
2 - Hi Mai, I have read your essay closely. I will try you a few suggestions. First, if you wanna...
Writing Feedbackmaily257 - May 2, 2017 / akbarmappiare - May 2, 2017
|American TV shows vs broadcast foreign films
3 - Hi Itachi, I will give you a few suggestions. Hopefully, you can meet my notes and deal with them....
Writing Feedbackctk41 - May 2, 2017 / akbarmappiare - May 2, 2017
|The table below shows the television viewing figures for sports by country, in million
3 - @adambacon813 Dear @adambacon813, I am very thankful for your useful recommendation. I hope to get more your...
Writing Feedbackbaochau2014 - May 2, 2017 / baochau2014 - May 3, 2017
|Alteration of Foster Road before and after improving
2 - Hi @Reza_Hidayat, here several suggestions for your writing : Firstly, pay attention on overview, I think your overview is...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - May 1, 2017 / Anhy chan - May 2, 2017
|Should parents attend parenting training course?
3 - Hi Reza, I reckon you have needed improvements for finalizing your essay. Please meet my notes and review them...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - May 1, 2017 / akbarmappiare - May 6, 2017
|Parenting training led parents to be a good parent for their child
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - May 1, 2017 / adambacon813 - May 2, 2017
|Increasing parenting abilities in result of participating in specified courses
3 - Syamsiah, I have to say your essay is quite confusing. In your thesis, you clearly state that the trend...
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - May 1, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 1, 2017
|Two pictures - remarkable changes to Foster Road
2 - hay @syamsiahRahimmanca, there are several advice that can help you in finishing this essay. i know well the difficulties...
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - May 1, 2017 / agus_mono - May 1, 2017
|How to be a good mother or father - you can learn it!
4 - My comment: - parents are the first school for every children in the world -----> clearly, parents cannot be...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - May 1, 2017 / maily257 - May 2, 2017
|Proposed change of Foster Road
2 - Hi agus_mono I will give you some feedback the care (car) lane will be narrowed down (pay attention...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - May 1, 2017 / syamsiahRahim - May 1, 2017
|Writing Task 1: Foster Road' Alterations
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - May 1, 2017 / Anhy chan - May 1, 2017
|Should university students be allowed to use mobile phones in class?
Writing Feedbackvananh0015 - May 1, 2017 / vananh0015 - May 1, 2017
|As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities.
3 - @akbarmappiare Thank you very much!!!! You accurately point out so many oversights that I have not noticed. I will...
Writing Feedbacka2741890 - Apr 30, 2017 / a2741890 - Apr 30, 2017
|Causes why young people have not much time for their needs and are under lots of pressure to study
Writing Feedbackmaily257 - Apr 29, 2017 / maily257 - May 1, 2017
|Car-free days or other ways to reduce air pollution.
4 - @Tai I have red you essay, and I think that you present a clear position and relevant main idea...
Writing FeedbackTai - Apr 29, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - May 1, 2017
|Some people think that a factory will bring many risks to the area they live in.
4 - @Wilby In my point of view, you express a position but you present less supporting ideas to emphasize your...
Writing FeedbackWilby - Apr 28, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - May 1, 2017
|IELTS TASK2 BIODIVERSITY MAINTAINING - animals and plants are being extincted gradually
2 - Ahmed, your opening statement is totally contrary to the content of the prompt of your essay. The statement 'Increasing...
Writing Feedbackahmed123 - Apr 28, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 28, 2017
|'bricks are put in a kiln' - manufacturing process of elements used in masonry construction
2 - hay @tnritika i have read your essay, i think there are several grammatical mistakes on your essay, in your...
Writing Feedbacktnritika - Apr 27, 2017 / agus_mono - May 1, 2017
|How to produce bricks for building purpose
2 - Hi Reza... Actually, your writing is a good job, but I will offer you a few improvements for finalizing...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 27, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 29, 2017
|Children in some parts of the world have less responsibility compared to children in the past.
2 - Hi, I like your idea. However, you should write "one of the" + Noun (plural) in your first paragraph....
Writing FeedbackDiahkn93 - Apr 27, 2017 / Tai - Apr 29, 2017
|WT 2 - Should children have more or less responsibility?
3 - Besse, Once analyzing your introduction it seems that your are failed to meet the the task achievement, You need...
Writing Feedbacktnritika - Apr 27, 2017 / Ahmadham - May 1, 2017
|Less responsibility is a positive change or negative change?
2 - Andi, your are too mechanical with this essay and that would reduce your overall score. Your paraphrase is not...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 27, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 28, 2017
|Less tasks for kids - how good or bad is this change?
2 - Hi @syamsiahRahim First, if you wanna get a high score, you are supposed to show clearly what you...
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - Apr 27, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 28, 2017
|Manufacturing steps - from raw material to ready for distribute frozen fish pies
2 - Hello, I have read your writing and I think it is great according to the pictures. However I still...
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - Apr 27, 2017 / tnritika - Apr 27, 2017
|Children today have less responsibilities than in the past
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Apr 27, 2017 / tnritika - Apr 27, 2017
|Direct Question Type : Responsibility of Children In the Past and Nowadays
2 - @Anhy I will give you some feedback in particular their strength and and weakness study is not just...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Apr 27, 2017 / syamsiahRahim - Apr 27, 2017
|IELTS W2. People do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past
2 - Hello, I have read your essay and I think your writing is great and your ideas are logical However...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Apr 27, 2017 / tnritika - Apr 27, 2017
|BRICKS: Clay digging, filtering, moulding after adding water and sand, finally the thermal treatment
2 - Hi, @agus_mono I have read your whole essay, then here some suggestions for you: firstly, you have to put...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Apr 27, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 28, 2017
|WT 1 - How the brick was made
2 - @Diahkn93 several problems relating to grammatical error were found after reading your essay. you have to pay more attention...
Writing FeedbackDiahkn93 - Apr 27, 2017 / agus_mono - Apr 27, 2017
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