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|The diagram presents Manufacturing Process of Bricks
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Apr 27, 2017 / Diahkn93 - Apr 27, 2017
|Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to succeed
2 - Hi @Lime I have read your writing closely. Turning to a detailed description, I have found you have needed...
Writing FeedbackLime - Apr 26, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 27, 2017
|Information about global water use and water consumption
2 - Andi, it is usually a good practice to post the prompt of your essay alongside your draft so that...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 26, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 27, 2017
|Causes and effects of using eBooks
2 - Hello, I think the arrangement of the paragraphs is clear and easy to follow. The only weak point...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 26, 2017 / Arlen - Apr 27, 2017
|Do you agree that free trade makes rich countries richer and poor countries poorer?
2 - Great essay and logic! Has concern about- has concerned about everything has its both sides- every coin has two...
Writing FeedbackNguyen Minh Tram - Apr 26, 2017 / dawez - Apr 26, 2017
|The causes of eBook trend and its problem related to the libraries
2 - Hello again mr @agus_mono Overall you conducted passage was good. But in some part for using vocabulary not appropriate...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Apr 26, 2017 / Diahkn93 - Apr 27, 2017
|More and more people prefer to read e-books rather than paper books
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - Apr 26, 2017 / tnritika - Apr 27, 2017
|In the chart the amount of global water use in three different sectors over 10 decades (1900-2000)
2 - Hi Syamsiah, I will try giving a few suggestions for finalizing your essay. First, be careful of putting information....
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - Apr 26, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 26, 2017
|The preference of people on E-Books and Paper Books
3 - I have read our essay clearly and still found several mistakes. you have pay attention on using inappropriate...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Apr 26, 2017 / agus_mono - Apr 27, 2017
|WT 1 - Water consumption in different purpose and areas
3 - hay @Diahkn93 i have several advice to boost your score in this writing firstly, in introducing the chart, you...
Writing FeedbackDiahkn93 - Apr 26, 2017 / agus_mono - Apr 26, 2017
|Water use worldwide and water consumption
2 - hello @tamtamii you explain the multiple charts very well, but i still found little error such as ;...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Apr 26, 2017 / Diahkn93 - Apr 26, 2017
|WT 2 - Why do offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment?
2 - Hello, I think the biggest issue is the cohesion. I cannot follow your thinking in several sentences and...
Writing Feedbacktnritika - Apr 26, 2017 / Arlen - Apr 27, 2017
|Percentage of spending in three categories of goods in several countries in 2000
2 - Hi @tnritika here some suggestions for your essay: To get a high score in Task responce, try to compose...
Writing Feedbacktnritika - Apr 26, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 27, 2017
|Global Water use and comparison between Brazil and Congo
2 - hello @agus_mono i know its hard to write for multiple data like this. based from what i know...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Apr 26, 2017 / Diahkn93 - Apr 27, 2017
|The amount of water used by sectors, also the water utilisation in Brasil and Congo
2 - Hay any, i have several advice which may can help to improve your score. firstly. you have to...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Apr 26, 2017 / agus_mono - Apr 27, 2017
|Optimal method to acquire knowledge by students
Writing FeedbackAvyuktbgdc2017 - Apr 25, 2017 / tnritika - Apr 26, 2017
|Ielts writing task 2: Social networking sites-------A blessing or a curse?
Writing Feedbackbtho - Apr 25, 2017 / syamsiahRahim - Apr 26, 2017
|Percentage of spending on different needs in several European countries in 2002
2 - hy @Reza_Hidayat, i have just read your essay. in my view, several grammatical mistakes that you did in...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 25, 2017 / agus_mono - Apr 27, 2017
|Line chart - IELTS task 1 - the rate of recycled plastics, glass, paper and aluminium
2 - Hi @teephan226 there are several suggestion for you to make your essay more powerfull: 1. It is good that...
Writing Feedbackteephan226 - Apr 25, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 26, 2017
|Criminalism and various measures to lower this anomaly
2 - Hi Restu, I have read your essay closely and a few problems in yours. As we see, you presented...
Writing Feedbackrestuanlubis - Apr 25, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 25, 2017
|How to help recidivist to get a proper life?
2 - if you want to give the solution about specific training program in order to provide the prisoners a skill...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 25, 2017 / tnritika - Apr 26, 2017
|Most of criminals are notorious offenders - what to do with them?
3 - Hi @syamsiahRahim , As far as I am concern, there are several suggestions for boost your score in writing...
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - Apr 25, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 27, 2017
|causes and measures for offenders who commit more crimes after serving the first punishment
3 - Below is my revised and recommended various of your essay, I rectified some grammatical mistakes and make a few...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Apr 25, 2017 / btho - Apr 25, 2017
|The proportion of National Consumer Expenditure in Five countries
2 - hi Anhy I will give you some feedback for each countries (country) ....... just funding arround 4,35 %....
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Apr 25, 2017 / syamsiahRahim - Apr 25, 2017
|The percentage of three kind of items which were purchased by consumers
5 - @syamsiahRahim i have read your essay clearly. first of all, i think you can improve your overview by selecting...
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - Apr 25, 2017 / agus_mono - May 1, 2017
|Writing task 2 - causes and solution for offender commit more crimers after they was free
2 - @Diahkn93 Your essay idea managing is good. As your request first and foremost your introduce, I think there are...
Writing FeedbackDiahkn93 - Apr 25, 2017 / restuanlubis - Apr 25, 2017
|Ielts writing task 1: Info about British sporting activities
Writing Feedbackbtho - Apr 25, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 25, 2017
|Commit crimes and first punishment - death penalty?
2 - The main issue with your essay should be grammar, which is seriously deterring your readers should getting your message....
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Apr 25, 2017 / btho - Apr 25, 2017
|The provided table illustrates about people have expenditure on different goods in 2002
2 - @tamtamii Your essay manage is going with well. Sadly, it is too short only more 2 words, that is...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Apr 25, 2017 / restuanlubis - Apr 25, 2017
|First Punishment for many offenders
2 - Ummm With all due respect, I think the first thing you need to work on is your grammar accuracy....
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Apr 25, 2017 / btho - Apr 25, 2017
|Expenditure of five countries by category
2 - GRAMMAR what isthe biggest proportion of ... -------------------- use past tense because the year is 2002 firstly, all people...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Apr 25, 2017 / hasanah_13 - Apr 25, 2017
|Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programs.
3 - @PHUONGMIN I have red your essay, and I think that you just use some of simple sentences in your...
Writing FeedbackPHUONGMIN - Apr 25, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 26, 2017
|Ielts task 1: A line graph describing waste production of three companies
4 - Wong, considering that writing task 1 always involves description, comparing and contrasting the information presented in a line graph...
Writing Feedbackmasami - Apr 23, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 24, 2017
|The transformation that happened on Taft University's campus from 1980 to 2005 is depicted on maps
3 - Huong, you again failed to provide a copy of the illustration that you were provided with for the summary....
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - Apr 23, 2017 / Holt - Apr 23, 2017
|[IELTS] Summarise the information by reporting the main features of cement and concrete production
6 - @mandyduong I have red your essay and I just concern on how you arrange the sentence and your lexical...
Writing Feedbackmandyduong - Apr 23, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 26, 2017
|Whether luck is important to success? TOEFL
3 - @Holt I think I understand what you mean. For instance, I delete the first sentence of my last paragraph...
Writing FeedbackSelaf - Apr 23, 2017 / Selaf - Apr 23, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2 Cause and effect. Topic: Crime and safety in a society
7 - Hi @Trista5577 , I have read your essay closely. Therefore, there are several suggestions to make your essay more...
Writing FeedbackTrista5577 - Apr 23, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 25, 2017
|Having a gap-year is more and more common in recent years. IELTS Writing Task 2
6 - @benz0127 I would like to say that you present information with lack of coherence, and there is no clear...
Writing Feedbackbenz0127 - Apr 23, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 26, 2017
|Choosing the Urban Life - to live in the city or the countryside？
Writing FeedbackBlairlau - Apr 23, 2017 / Blairlau - Apr 23, 2017
|New medicines on the market at the expense of animals
3 - Hi Fiza, these below are my thoughts for finalizing your essay. Please, meet my notes and fix them. Fiza,...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 22, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 24, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Causes and solutions (Topic: Museums and Historical sites)
2 - Vuu, good work on writing 200 words for this essay. That sort of word count can definitely increase your...
Writing FeedbackTogepiLinhVuu - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont Island - chart summary
2 - Micol, for consistency, please always indicate the percentage throughout your presentation rather than saying "half, a third, a fifth"....
Writing Feedbackmichsimo - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Excessive usage of cars - problems and solutions
Writing FeedbackThuy Linh - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Clothes, travel, film and music's online sale of four different retailers
3 - Ahmad, I think that this essay presentation of worthy of a band score of 7. It is highly accurate...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Speaking same language in the future is good or bad?
Writing FeedbackTai - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Advertising analysis essay "The cultural expansion of Vietnam Airlines"
Writing Feedbacksarah2015 - Apr 20, 2017 / michsimo - Apr 21, 2017
|Writing Task I People living in three different countries of U.S.
3 - From the grammatical side, a partical is missing "human" should be "a human". The "quantity " word seem not...
Writing FeedbackAhmadham - Apr 20, 2017 / NurulNaval - Apr 21, 2017
|Topic: key problems facing the world's cities in the 21st century and solutions
2 - Micol, the prompt of your essay does not in any way imply argumentative essay, therefore, the word 'argue' in...
Writing Feedbackmichsimo - Apr 20, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 20, 2017
|The First Day on My New Job
3 - @Holt Thank you for your advice, especially that of protect other's privacy. I will try to do it better...
Writing Feedbackspringblossoms - Apr 20, 2017 / springblossoms - Apr 25, 2017
|Advertising and Consumers relation
3 - Hi @alextran2215 , actually I could say that your essay is quiet impressive, as you have to use many...
Writing Feedbackalextran2215 - Apr 19, 2017 / Anhy chan - Apr 27, 2017
|Topic : best way to solve the problem of poverty is to set up businesses with rich countries
2 - Huy, it is usually difficult to tell if your draft has answered the prompt of the essay if we...
Writing Feedbackguydragon - Apr 19, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 21, 2017
|Some people believe that imprisonment is the most successful way to deal with criminals. Others thin
5 - @gabby12345 Hi gabby, I have red you essay, and I think that it is good if you paraphrase your...
Writing Feedbackgabby12345 - Apr 19, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 27, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2 exclusion of women in certain jobs
2 - @ayat_555 I think you need to change your introduction paragraph. The first sentence should be the topic of your...
Writing Feedbackayat_555 - Apr 19, 2017 / adib_yz - Apr 19, 2017
|Future IELTS exam preparation. The graph compares the number of visits to two new music sites on web
3 - @akbarmappiare Thank you very much. I didn't realize those big mistakes in the writing. I spent money on a...
Writing Feedbackdilink - Apr 18, 2017 / dilink - Apr 19, 2017
|Which media do you prefer? Why? 100-125 WORDS
2 - Hello Ismael, your sentences in this have needed improvement. If you wanna answer the question, please you don't give...
Writing Feedbackismaelvr - Apr 17, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 17, 2017
|I decided to do running - there are many advantages of running to our body
2 - Weijjiang, you should focus on only one aspect of running for your essay instead of trying to develop a...
Writing FeedbackWeijiang123 - Apr 17, 2017 / Holt - Apr 18, 2017
|The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia
Writing FeedbackASooshd - Apr 16, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 25, 2017
|Writing IELTS task 1 - Inflow of Foreign Workers in Australia 1992-2001
2 - Hi Muhammad Rinul, I have read your writing closely.Honestly, you have needed some improvements to finalize this writing. ...
Writing Feedbackmrfwijaya - Apr 16, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 16, 2017
|The value and quality of women's work should be more appreciated
3 - Ngai, you have inaccurately discussed the paraphrased statement. The opening statement needs to only deliver your understanding of the...
Writing Feedbackhoiovo - Apr 16, 2017 / Holt - Apr 16, 2017
|Translation of a short movie to my little brother at school
5 - Bluemoon I have not practiced writing or speaking in English since the last August So I forgot everything ...
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