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|IELTS Writing Task 2: The choice of subject between girls and boys
3 - Sinchana, always keep a formal, academic tone in your essays. Always refer to the genders as male or female,...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|Task 1 IELTS the bar graph shows the global sales (in bilion of dollars) of different games
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen10 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|How to make our society better?
2 - Kalmia, are you writing this as a response to a specific English qualifying test that you will be taking...
Writing Feedbacklittle kitten - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|Minimizing the traffic issue - proposed ways
7 - As mentioned, your introduction paraphrase should give your opinion for agree or disagree questionnaire. 2 or 3 rd...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Feb 14, 2017 / jaikrishna - Feb 22, 2017
|Reasons of land degradation globally and the impact it causes on three different continents
3 - Hi Fadhil, welcome to Essay Forum. Hopefully, in the next term, you attach the picture about you explained if...
Writing FeedbackFadhilmmd2511 - Feb 14, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 14, 2017
|Essay - healthy lifestyle of individuals. Discuss both sides and give opinion
4 - Hi Sichana, I have read your writing closely. You need improvement, especially your content. In the introductory paragraph, you...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 13, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 14, 2017
|E books versus paper books. Cause and effects.
7 - @akbarmappiare Thanks for your detailed explanation on making me understand about my mistakes. Will work on these things and...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 13, 2017 / sinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017
|Today's kids ailments same like among adults. The example - obesity.
12 - Thanks a lot Holt for your speaking. I try to read articles and then write them again. and follow...
Writing FeedbackSARAsajedi91 - Feb 13, 2017 / SARAsajedi91 - Feb 14, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: The gap between rich and poor is growing. What problem does this create?
3 - Hi Sinchana, welcome to Essay Forum. I will try offering a few corrections for finalizing your writing. In...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 13, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 13, 2017
|CBEST: Pros and Cons of "Letter grading" v/s "Pass- Fail"
Writing FeedbackPKM - Feb 12, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|In industrial society nowadays, many children are suffering from obesity and it is a serious problem
5 - Mai, IELTS is a very technical Test of English of Language and as such, should be given proper attention...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen124 - Feb 11, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Feb 11, 2017
|People today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. Causes and proposed solutions.
3 - Hello Yully, welcome to the medium for improving your writing. In my view, you have need learning the way...
Writing Feedbackkaishira35 - Feb 11, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 11, 2017
|Why it is important to solve the homeless problem?
6 - You may also want to include in-text citations or quotes, properly referenced in your essay so that you can...
Writing Feedbackhowbowdat - Feb 11, 2017 / Holt - Feb 11, 2017
|To purchase either a house or a business is the question
Writing FeedbackNorahFSH - Feb 10, 2017 / sinchana2017 - Feb 15, 2017
|IELTS task 1 - Reasons for study and the amount of employer support.
3 - Hoang, I think you have misinterpret the meaning of 'overview' sentence. If you take a closer look on the...
Writing Feedbackyennhihoang2712 - Feb 10, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 10, 2017
|What can arts tell us of life that science cannot?
6 - @Holt Oh yeah, I understand, I thought it has something wrong, now I clear, thanks you and I will...
Writing FeedbackNgocdoan - Feb 10, 2017 / Ngocdoan - Feb 11, 2017
|In the complex, industrial society nowadays, the quality of life is deteriorating
2 - To, you are becoming sloppy with your paraphrasing. You did not even bother to try and paraphrase the prompt...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 9, 2017 / Holt - Feb 9, 2017
|PTE essay: Is it foolish to get married before completing studies
Writing Feedbackfoyuliu - Feb 9, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 10, 2017
|The process of producing cement and making concrete which is raw material from cement for building
4 - Hi Anabel, I have read this closely. I have found a few things which you correct. Firstly, I have...
Writing Feedbackanabel - Feb 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 9, 2017
|Unemployment is inevitable issue in the society, especially among school leavers
5 - The main problem with your essay is the opening statement. It does not contain the correct information. The opening...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Feb 8, 2017 / Holt - Feb 8, 2017
|A serious effort is the most important factor for a journey toward success
8 - Jan, the best way to practice sentence formation is to read more English based material. I do not mean...
Writing Feedbackrxustrong - Feb 8, 2017 / Holt - Feb 10, 2017
|Task 1.The diagram shows how raw materials are used to make plastic products. Summarise the diagram.
3 - Hi Minh, welcome to Essay Forum which is one of the best sites for improving your ability. I know...
Writing FeedbackMinh Ngoc - Feb 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 10, 2017
|It's popular for teenagers to travel or to work for a year before studying into next level
7 - You can write that they can get first hand experience of the society rather than somebody else sharing...
Writing FeedbackMH_tw - Feb 8, 2017 / PKM - Feb 13, 2017
|Life is adventure, and adventure is a challenge.
2 - Miftah, sorry to say but there are lots of corrections needed in your essay and therefore, my suggestion is...
Writing FeedbackKing_mif - Feb 8, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 8, 2017
|Does the punishment required in order to educate a children?
4 - @Riyan Mudastsir 'know whether is right and wrong' is grammatically incorrect because there is no subject. I believe you...
Writing FeedbackRiyan Mudastsir - Feb 8, 2017 / shohruhbek - Feb 8, 2017
|Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
3 - Wow! Json, you blew this discussion out of the water! What an almost perfect discussion you presented in defense...
Writing Feedbackaloha21 - Feb 8, 2017 / Holt - Feb 8, 2017
|Being a man or a woman makes diffrence whether or not people can be excluded from a job
12 - @anabel Yeah I should be more careful with commas and learn punctuation rules in general. The missing article was...
Writing Feedbackshohruhbek - Feb 7, 2017 / shohruhbek - Feb 8, 2017
|IELTS (unpaid work is important for the young people?)
6 - Thank you very much for taking the time to review my essay. Your input and feedback are vitally important...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Feb 7, 2017 / rozhnaz - Feb 8, 2017
|Total School Spending in the United Kingdom during three separate decades
3 - Hey Anabel. Time distribution is very important. Firstly read up on the entire material given and then focus...
Writing Feedbackanabel - Feb 7, 2017 / DoctorWho - Feb 7, 2017
|The pie chart describe the degradation of agricultural land productivity in the worldwide.
6 - Hi Anabel, You should add the part of overall or conclusion in Task 01 because this part is important....
Writing Feedbackanabel - Feb 7, 2017 / Minh Ngoc - Feb 8, 2017
|Increasing use of vehicles contributes to air pollution and leads to an overuse of natural resources
3 - Hey Maitouyen!! Overall an ok essay. I think your conclusion is pretty solid. But the introduction can be...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 7, 2017 / DoctorWho - Feb 7, 2017
|People get information through news, but meanwhile are uncertain about the truth of these news
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Feb 7, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Feb 7, 2017
|Who should care more about our health if not we ourselves? IELTS writing task II about healthy life
4 - Apart from above comments, I just want to add that your introduction is quite long, even longer than main...
Writing Feedbackrezamei - Feb 7, 2017 / adamrahimov - Feb 7, 2017
|BAR & LINE GRAPH - three dimensions on the screens
3 - Gigih, I believe that there was a better way to write this essay which would have improved your overall...
Writing Feedbackgigihes - Feb 7, 2017 / Holt - Feb 7, 2017
|A healthy lifestyle or dependence on doctors and medicines? Writing task 2 IELTS
6 - For instance, it could be harmful when someone who ... In my opinion the idea of this sentence is...
Writing FeedbackrezaES - Feb 7, 2017 / rozhnaz - Feb 7, 2017
|Topic about different standard for performance of male and female
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Feb 7, 2017 / thuy_nguyet - Feb 7, 2017
|Journey of learning English
2 - Miftah, are you writing this as a practice statement for one of your English classes? While I am sure...
Writing FeedbackKing_mif - Feb 7, 2017 / Holt - Feb 7, 2017
|IELTS Task 1; Percentage of British Students able to speak languages other than English, 2000-2010
4 - Hello, here's my advice for your writing 1. It is important to paraphrase your first sentence in your...
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 6, 2017 / Gigih12 - Feb 7, 2017
|The percentage of Australians from six different household types struggling with poverty in 1999
2 - Nhi, first up, use a comma instead of a period when indicating information in the thousands. Always follow the...
Writing Feedbackyennhihoang2712 - Feb 6, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|Ability of Various Language for British Students - data based on the charts presented
Writing FeedbackJanicelo - Feb 6, 2017 / Janicelo - Feb 8, 2017
|The crucial part of being happy lies in one's everyday attitude towards life.
5 - @Ssakshijain Thank you for reading my writing. As I am more familiar with verbal english, I have difficult with...
Writing Feedbackchikachika - Feb 5, 2017 / chikachika - Feb 6, 2017
|The bar chart compares the projected and actual criminal incidents in 2009 and 2018.
4 - Hi Daniette, I am gonna try offering advice for improvement of your writing. I appreciate your effort to present...
Writing Feedbackforbetterdani - Feb 5, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 6, 2017
|"You can learn about the character of a country from the way that treat animal" - Practice again
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Feb 5, 2017 / thuy_nguyet - Feb 6, 2017
|Gender equality has been achieved? Unlikely.
2 - Daniette, while your paraphrasing an opinion in the opening statement is commendable, it is a bit faulty because you...
Writing Feedbackforbetterdani - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|Rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete
2 - You have good skill of paraphrasing. Your position in introduction is clear enough. However, you need to improve the...
Writing Feedbackjaikrishna12 - Feb 5, 2017 / forbetterdani - Feb 5, 2017
|Teaching foreign languages at primary school should be optional rather than compulsory. Ielts task 2
6 - Adam, I am not sure where you got the idea that you can present your opinion in the concluding...
Writing Feedbackadamrahimov - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 5, 2017
|Development and rapid expansion of supermarkets make many local businesses unfit to compete
Writing Feedbackkitis - Feb 5, 2017 / kitis - Feb 7, 2017
|First college essay, 10 years since high school. Descriptive essay for basic English 101
4 - Yes, the presentation of the "Here we go." statement is exactly what I meant. The same goes for the...
Writing Feedbackjmack3d - Feb 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 6, 2017
|IELTS Practice task 2 - History education and its importance
4 - As an additional feedback to improve your band score later on, you can write a more appropriate introduction paragraph....
Writing FeedbackJane N - Feb 3, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 7, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Punishment for Children and impact on their development
4 - On the contrary, since the word corporal isn't part of the keywords provided in the essay, she could use...
Writing FeedbackJanicelo - Feb 3, 2017 / Holt - Feb 4, 2017
|Task 2 ielts People often wonder whether money brings happiness or not
8 - Hi To, I think your essay is really good, the arguments are supported by a series of evidences and...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 3, 2017 / Janicelo - Feb 6, 2017
|Investing more on railways means investing in a safer future for us and our children
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 2, 2017 / mariana13 - Feb 3, 2017
|Percentage of different types of energy used and their greenhouse emission in Australian household
2 - Janice, the information that you present is relevant to the pie chart presented. The weakness of your comparison statements...
Writing FeedbackJanicelo - Feb 2, 2017 / Holt - Feb 2, 2017
|Parents often wonder whether they ought to let their children spend time on TV, video and PC games
9 - If you notice the question. Discuss both view and give your own opinion You should provide your own...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 2, 2017 / bagusetyawan - Feb 2, 2017
|[IELTS task 2] Lack of Learning languages and children development in the modern society
Writing Feedbackkenthai - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|Essay Writing. Methods to integrate modern ways of transportation.
2 - Ayman, I am assuming that you posted the wrong prompt instructions to go with the essay that you developed....
Writing Feedbackabohashim2003 - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|IELTS Task 1. Six pie charts about water usage worldwide
4 - Ana, the instructions clearly state that you are to present at least 150 words, nothing less. Yet you are...
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|task 2 ielts - celebrity's privacy; should every rumour of the famous be published by media?
5 - To, try to not type the prompt into the box. That is usually how these mistakes occur. Whenever possible,...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 1, 2017 / Holt - Feb 1, 2017
|PTE: Over a billion adults legally smoke tobacco. The long term health costs are high - for smokers
8 - Thank you @Holt, without your comments I could not realize how bad my essay was. I will keep practice...
Writing Feedbackfoyuliu - Feb 1, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 7, 2017
|Family, television and friends are important factors in child's development. Task 2 ielts
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