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|TOEFL ESSAY: FAMILY vs FORMAL EDUCATION
5 - Lijing, what you did he was create your own prompt to respond to rather than responding to the prompt...
Writing Feedbacklijing822 - Mar 28, 2017 / Holt - Mar 29, 2017
|Writing Task 1: Erosion of a headland - effects of waves in the coastal area
3 - Agus, the essay can probably get a 5 because you managed to present the obvious information in the illustration...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Mar 28, 2017 / Holt - Mar 28, 2017
|IELTS: energy use and greenhouse gas emissions in an average Australian household
7 - @matteo1222 I have red your essay, and I think you should make comparison among the feature as overview in...
Writing Feedbackmatteo1222 - Mar 28, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 4, 2017
|Should children start learning foreign language earlier?
2 - Good work Lee. You were able to properly assess the topic for discussion, present the reason behind the discussion,...
Writing Feedbackbtho - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|If the students are underperforming, it is a sign that they have a bad teacher. Discuss
4 - In your essay you blame the teachers, parents, society, but you don't touch the fact that students can be...
Writing Feedbackvynguyn - Mar 27, 2017 / Rich Monte - Mar 29, 2017
|England female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom
3 - @Emma Nguyen You should pay attention with spelling, you also do not cover all key features, try to...
Writing FeedbackEmma Nguyen - Mar 27, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 2, 2017
|Residential housing - Alteration in America Village between 1994 and 2010
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Buildings and environment - The maps and changes in an American town between 1994 and 2010
3 - @Diahkn93 Hi Diah, In my opinion, I think your essay quite difficult to understand (caused by your interpretation). You...
Writing FeedbackDiahkn93 - Mar 27, 2017 / Datnguyen - Mar 27, 2017
|Two Shops: The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010
3 - halo Mr. @restuanlubis Halo Mr. Restu, actually I get your point about your grouping. However, I can understand...
Writing Feedbackrestuanlubis - Mar 27, 2017 / tamtamii - Mar 27, 2017
|People house change - the village of Stokeford in 1930
3 - Hermin, while your paragraphs are well representative of the illustrations provided, you did not really manage to present the...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|New buildings - The maps below show village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010
3 - Diah, excellent work in presenting an original take on the illustrations other than simply stating the mechanically obvious information....
Writing FeedbackDiahkn93 - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Change in town - the alteration of Stokeford village in 1930 and 2010.
4 - Septi, you can probably get a score of 5 with this essay. The essay could use some less mechanical...
Writing Feedbackseptyndid - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Sports stadium - the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.
5 - Andi, your essay does not put all of the information that you were provided with to good use. You...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Recent figures shown an increase in violent crime among youngsters
2 - Mayank, the first thing that struck me in your opening statement is the mistake in your term usage. You...
Writing FeedbackMayank7g - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Two Coins - A company to build a large factory near your community
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your nice comments. I really needed for such wonderful feedbacks. :)...
Writing FeedbackFaridNoorzad - Mar 27, 2017 / FaridNoorzad - Mar 27, 2017
|IELTS Task 2_women who do not plan to have careers should be allowed to get post-grad degrees or not
2 - Phone, your opening paragraph was almost perfect. Almost perfect because you dropped the ball in the last sentence. You...
Writing Feedbackzeal - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Replacing Factories : The map below shows the alteration in an US town between over 62 years
3 - @restuanlubis Pay attention on your word choosen and subject verb agreement: The maps illustrate regarding ... (It will better...
Writing Feedbackrestuanlubis - Mar 27, 2017 / Anhy chan - Mar 27, 2017
|Which school facilities should receive money from the local authorities?
3 - Dang, the entire premise of the essay is not clearly presented in the opening statement. The topic for discussion...
Writing Feedbackthunga251090 - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|The different condition of American town in 1948 and 1950
Writing Feedbackkoganta - Mar 27, 2017 / agus_mono - Mar 27, 2017
|Writing IELTS TASK 2 - Topic: Paper NEWS importance
Writing FeedbackDatnguyen - Mar 26, 2017 / Datnguyen - Mar 26, 2017
|Fastfood is good or bad for our lives?
5 - @mastindersingh Thank you so much for your support, your comment is very precious to me. I hope next essays...
Writing FeedbackAndreiWindy - Mar 26, 2017 / AndreiWindy - Mar 26, 2017
|Sentence Outline- Top 7 Steps To Make Your IoT More Secure
2 - Roy, your steps 2 and 3 are redundant. If you read the outlines very well, you will discover that...
Writing Feedbacknezumi - Mar 26, 2017 / Holt - Mar 26, 2017
|"The importance of biodiversity" task 2 writng module IELTS
4 - Hi @Sabrena_amal It is really alike with the prompt, even so you really need to paraphrase the...
Writing FeedbackSabrena_amal - Mar 25, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 26, 2017
|Cars on road, climate, and the level of pollution in many cities.
2 - Mayank, save for a number of grammatical problems related to sentence structure and lexical resources, you have presented a...
Writing FeedbackMayank7g - Mar 25, 2017 / Holt - Mar 25, 2017
|How to support developing countries ?
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Mar 25, 2017 / frenchfries - Mar 25, 2017
|Ielts task 2 - An increasing trend of living or studing abroad
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 25, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 26, 2017
|Should children do household chares?
Writing FeedbackHilary88 - Mar 24, 2017 / Holt - Mar 25, 2017
|Writing IELTS Task2: Topic Food products. Imported or local?
Writing Feedbacknguyensonhdtk94 - Mar 24, 2017 / nguyensonhdtk94 - Mar 24, 2017
|SOLUTIONS ON CLIMATE CHANGE
5 - Your idea, grammar and vocabulary are really good. But you seem to get the essay requirement wrong. In your...
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Mar 24, 2017 / blu - Mar 24, 2017
|TOEFL IBT Independent Writing: Owning smart phones or not? Your point of view
3 - @Holt Thank you, it was very helpful. I will try to rewrite this essay. Could you please take your...
Writing Feedbackhain3dessay - Mar 24, 2017 / hain3dessay - Mar 25, 2017
|People can be closer eachother. How Internet affect on our life?
6 - @hain3dessay @Holt @thunga251090 Thank you very much for your opinions, I will try to improve my writing skill....
Writing FeedbackAndreiWindy - Mar 24, 2017 / AndreiWindy - Mar 25, 2017
|"Pen and Paper Exams - IELTS exam task 2
Writing Feedbackmaya_diab - Mar 23, 2017 / maya_diab - Mar 24, 2017
|Writing IELTS TASK 2 - Topic: Tourism - influence for visited places.
6 - @yuukinohan4 Thank for your comment, it is very precious with me. I will try to improve in next essay....
Writing FeedbackDatnguyen - Mar 23, 2017 / Datnguyen - Mar 27, 2017
|Railroads vs Road Budget - IETLS CAMBRIDGE 11 TASK 2
5 - hi @daiha20082009 it should be better to say "carbon dioxide" rather than write the formula Sometimes i...
Writing Feedbackdaiha20082009 - Mar 23, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 26, 2017
|There are several reasons why nuclear technology is really worthwhile for humans life
3 - Hi @anonym28 First of all, please insert the prompt so that essay forum members are able to give you...
Writing Feedbackanonym28 - Mar 23, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 26, 2017
|Convenience food / city people for writing IELTS task 2
2 - Heru, your essay failed to answer the prompt as it seems you did not understand the requirements of the...
Writing FeedbackTongalere - Mar 22, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Mar 23, 2017
|Writing 2: Computers replacing teachers / Money Education
2 - Arlenliu, it is of utmost importance that you post the exact prompts of your essay alongside your draft so...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Mar 22, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Mar 23, 2017
|Unhealthy convenience food - Task 2 IELTS Writing module
Writing Feedbackhadeelhekmat - Mar 22, 2017 / blu - Mar 24, 2017
|Writing IELTS task 2 : Convenience Food and Preparation Time
2 - Frisilia, with this kind of sloppy sentence development and lack of focus on proper grammar presentation, your essay is...
Writing FeedbackFrisilia - Mar 22, 2017 / Holt - Mar 23, 2017
|High school graduate or experience which important to get job?
3 - Nisa, it is very unfortunate that the errors in this essay limits your score to a failing mark of...
Writing FeedbackNisa_sultan - Mar 22, 2017 / Holt - Mar 23, 2017
|Don't be a victim of interview bias
3 - Thien, the clarity of your opinion is lost due to the manner of your discussion. You failed to make...
Writing FeedbackRogerPham - Mar 21, 2017 / Holt - Mar 23, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Is it useless to keep traditional skills and ways of life?
4 - I think you are conscious of using connected words, that is so valuable in your essay. From my experience,...
Writing Feedbackenglishholic - Mar 21, 2017 / daiha20082009 - Mar 24, 2017
|The first day of learning oral English
Writing FeedbackZona - Mar 21, 2017 / d2ny - Mar 22, 2017
|Celebrating Food - Traditional food will change by fast food ?
2 - Nisa, there are a large number of problems related to this particular essay. It has both good and bad...
Writing FeedbackNisa_sultan - Mar 20, 2017 / Holt - Mar 20, 2017
|IELTS writing the topic is about laws and society
3 - Hi Michele, I have read your writing closely and found some you have to improve. Please, meet my notes...
Writing Feedbackmichele - Mar 20, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 20, 2017
|Factors which have an influence on men and women
3 - Hi Maitou, there were a few improvements you needed. First, make sure that you write is in your mind....
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 19, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 19, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Reference Letter for a job - Request from a Teacher
Writing Feedbacktanner - Mar 19, 2017 / Maitouyen282 - Mar 19, 2017
|Smart phones prohibition among kids
4 - A proper academic essay is composed of 5 parts. That description for these paragraphs are the introduction, 3 body...
Writing Feedbackdesign4cracker - Mar 19, 2017 / Holt - Mar 19, 2017
|(Russian National Exam) Agree or disagree? The clothes people wear influence their behavior
7 - @Holt, I am sorry. I wasn`t going to teach you. I just wanted to provide you this structure to...
Writing Feedbackalinavaky - Mar 19, 2017 / alinavaky - Mar 19, 2017
|New technology devices and software make students can not concentrate on class
Writing FeedbackERIC SUNG - Mar 19, 2017 / ERIC SUNG - Mar 19, 2017
|The honesty importance in a relationship
3 - For me, I CONSIDER HONESTY ESSENTIAL IN ALL ASPECTS OF LIFE, AND TELLING THE TRUTH FORMS A LARGE PART...
Writing Feedbackcheniki - Mar 19, 2017 / Guderian455 - Mar 19, 2017
|Discussion about young people ignoring some traditional beliefs
Writing Feedbackzeal - Mar 19, 2017 / zeal - Mar 24, 2017
|Household expenditure in Hong Kong and Britain - charts give the breakdown of the percentage
4 - You counted sentences only for the first two paragraphs. Review the third paragraph and you will see that you...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 18, 2017 / Holt - Mar 19, 2017
|Team work; Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard
Writing Feedbackabderraouf2che - Mar 18, 2017 / abderraouf2che - Mar 18, 2017
|Education from parents and diversity - whether parents are the best teachers?
3 - Anh, what is the actual prompt requirement that you are responding to? Kindly indicate it in your response to...
Writing Feedbackantonie8x - Mar 17, 2017 / Holt - Mar 18, 2017
|IELTS task 2 about "What are the changes of family structures and family roles"
2 - Yolanda, the main problem with this essay is that it focused itself on the "Once Child Policy" of China....
Writing FeedbackYolandaessay - Mar 17, 2017 / Holt - Mar 17, 2017
|Lights and shadows of being a known person
4 - @xuancuong Hi I am learning ielts so i am really glad to help you in this essay. firstly, you...
Writing Feedbackxuancuong - Mar 17, 2017 / Maitouyen282 - Mar 18, 2017
|Second language learning at primary school. Both positive and negative aspects.
Writing Feedbackmaruko chan - Mar 16, 2017 / maruko chan - Mar 17, 2017
|workers commuting to work. IELTS Writing Task 1 - Paraphrasing INTRODUCTION
4 - Thao, I have already corrected your one sentence opening statement in my previous thread. So I will not be...
Writing Feedbackdreamof90 - Mar 16, 2017 / Holt - Mar 17, 2017
|Protecting wildlife through zoos?
2 - Hoang, since this is the very first essay that you have written for the IELTS practice test, I will...
Writing Feedbackhoangvutran123 - Mar 15, 2017 / Holt - Mar 15, 2017
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