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|The tendency that youth graduates find it difficult to find a job nowadays
Writing Feedbacktramnguyen123456 - Feb 20, 2017 / Holt - Feb 25, 2017
|Critique on literature Review Introduction on Carbohydrate feeding on exercise performance
3 - Amanda, make the second paragraph the first paragraph instead. The actual topic paragraph is located in the second paragraph....
Writing Feedbackjermaine7 - Feb 19, 2017 / Holt - Feb 19, 2017
|Opinions of celebrities are powerful for young people who haven't decided their major. TOEFL Writing
2 - Asol, once again, I will remind you to please post the complete instructions for your essay prompt. Do not...
Writing Feedbackgoo9dan - Feb 19, 2017 / Holt - Feb 19, 2017
|[TOEFL] Moving to a new city or country is not agood idea because you will lose your old friends
4 - The full prompt for the essay dictates that you either agree or disagree with the statement provided. Therefore, you...
Writing Feedbackgoo9dan - Feb 19, 2017 / Holt - Feb 19, 2017
|Nowadays overpopulation and crowding of large cities are considered a big problem in the world.
5 - I correct how much I can. There were spelling mistakes.Also some places you can use synonyms. Additionally...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Feb 18, 2017 / mastindersingh - Feb 19, 2017
|Music cannot be substituted. People can't live without it.
5 - Adam, do not aim for the minimum 3 sentences for the introductory paragraph. The more sentences you have, the...
Writing Feedbackadamrahimov - Feb 18, 2017 / Holt - Feb 19, 2017
|Percentage of the variation of old people, who are above their sixties
2 - To, you need to provide the graph so that I can confirm the accuracy of the information you are...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen2021 - Feb 18, 2017 / Holt - Feb 18, 2017
|Different techniques to encourage children for higher activity. Competitiveness or cooperativeness?
3 - Hi First, introduce your topic. The introductory paragraph should briefly orient the reader to the topic and provide a...
Writing FeedbackMH_tw - Feb 18, 2017 / rozhnaz - Feb 18, 2017
|This figure illustrates some new construction in the town of Garlsdon
4 - @MH_tw Dear Deng, other than you miss many information from the figure, your words is only 146 though....
Writing FeedbackMH_tw - Feb 18, 2017 / sehatdinati - Feb 20, 2017
|The figure illustrates the number of three kinds of fast food eaten by youths in Australia
Writing Feedbacksehatdinati - Feb 18, 2017 / sehatdinati - Feb 18, 2017
|PTE Summarize written text in one sentence. IT and blue-collar workers
3 - Thank you Mary! I didn't realize there are three stages. I only got the division by IT and blue-collar...
Writing Feedbackfoyuliu - Feb 18, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 18, 2017
|Task 2 IELTS The line graph illustrates amount of UK employee transporting every day
5 - You find below my example of a more properly developed overview summary statement. It includes an analysis of the...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen20 - Feb 18, 2017 / Holt - Feb 18, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.
7 - The sentence in the fourth paragraph is too long to read. This bad habit will form ... negatice...
Writing Feedbacksehatdinati - Feb 18, 2017 / ylin0233 - Mar 7, 2017
|The pie charts illustrate how the proportion of annual expenditure was changed in a UK school
4 - Add a little comment, regarding following sentences, it seems no need to mention the data in 1991 since you...
Writing Feedbackkocc2003 - Feb 17, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 18, 2017
|PTE Essay: should age discrimination be made illegal
Writing Feedbackfoyuliu - Feb 17, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 17, 2017
|Evolution on people's quality of life through the making of foods
4 - For example, when you said "humans have invented enumerated tools...", you created a confusing sentence because the correct development...
Writing Feedbackjaikrishna - Feb 17, 2017 / Holt - Feb 17, 2017
|The consequences of deforestation would be even more serious than the global warming
Writing Feedbackrainman9t - Feb 17, 2017 / Holt - Feb 17, 2017
|The quantities of goods moved using four kinds of means in the UK between 1974 and 2002
4 - dear @Abrahamlincoln, A few corrections from me.. Watch the grammar. In paragraph 1, The line graphs compare...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Feb 16, 2017 / nuradiapuspa - Feb 22, 2017
|Our life is very different from this life that our parents and grandparents used to live
4 - Hi Van, You should not repeat the complete question in your answer. Also, for every 2 lines a...
Writing FeedbackVan Nhi Nguyen - Feb 16, 2017 / jaikrishna - Feb 17, 2017
|Modern building versus buildings from the past
Writing Feedbackhaleshi - Feb 16, 2017 / haleshi - Feb 16, 2017
|Ways to preserve any remaining wilderness areas.
2 - Shivam, upon close analysis of your essay, I do not believe that you can score higher than a 3...
Writing Feedbackshiv_riky - Feb 16, 2017 / Holt - Feb 16, 2017
|Writing Task 1 - how many people took computer science at university of UK?
4 - Hi Abrahamlincoln, It is important to give more stress on sentence structure. For example, Meanwhile, in the...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Feb 16, 2017 / haleshi - Feb 16, 2017
|Writing Task 2 - Travelling to other countries with appreciation for different customs
4 - @Abrahamlincoln In the conclusion, the sentence seems very complicated. It is good to use complex sentences without hampering...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Feb 16, 2017 / haleshi - Feb 16, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Presentation skills. Do you think public speaking skill is really important?
3 - Sinchana, the example that you gave about the doctor is irrelevant to the discussion. You presented his success but...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 15, 2017 / Holt - Feb 16, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Parenting course program for young parents
5 - Hi Sinchana, I will try offering my perspective about your writing. After I have seen your style in the...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 15, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Progress of mankind in recent years
4 - In your presentation, each paragraph has 2 examples which you use to create your message regarding the topic provided,...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 15, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: The choice of subject between girls and boys
3 - Sinchana, always keep a formal, academic tone in your essays. Always refer to the genders as male or female,...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|Task 1 IELTS the bar graph shows the global sales (in bilion of dollars) of different games
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen10 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|How to make our society better?
2 - Kalmia, are you writing this as a response to a specific English qualifying test that you will be taking...
Writing Feedbacklittle kitten - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|Minimizing the traffic issue - proposed ways
7 - As mentioned, your introduction paraphrase should give your opinion for agree or disagree questionnaire. 2 or 3 rd...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Feb 14, 2017 / jaikrishna - Feb 22, 2017
|Reasons of land degradation globally and the impact it causes on three different continents
3 - Hi Fadhil, welcome to Essay Forum. Hopefully, in the next term, you attach the picture about you explained if...
Writing FeedbackFadhilmmd2511 - Feb 14, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 14, 2017
|Essay - healthy lifestyle of individuals. Discuss both sides and give opinion
4 - Hi Sichana, I have read your writing closely. You need improvement, especially your content. In the introductory paragraph, you...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 13, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 14, 2017
|E books versus paper books. Cause and effects.
7 - @akbarmappiare Thanks for your detailed explanation on making me understand about my mistakes. Will work on these things and...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 13, 2017 / sinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017
|Today's kids ailments same like among adults. The example - obesity.
12 - Thanks a lot Holt for your speaking. I try to read articles and then write them again. and follow...
Writing FeedbackSARAsajedi91 - Feb 13, 2017 / SARAsajedi91 - Feb 14, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: The gap between rich and poor is growing. What problem does this create?
3 - Hi Sinchana, welcome to Essay Forum. I will try offering a few corrections for finalizing your writing. In...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 13, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 13, 2017
|CBEST: Pros and Cons of "Letter grading" v/s "Pass- Fail"
Writing FeedbackPKM - Feb 12, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|In industrial society nowadays, many children are suffering from obesity and it is a serious problem
5 - Mai, IELTS is a very technical Test of English of Language and as such, should be given proper attention...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen124 - Feb 11, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Feb 11, 2017
|People today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. Causes and proposed solutions.
3 - Hello Yully, welcome to the medium for improving your writing. In my view, you have need learning the way...
Writing Feedbackkaishira35 - Feb 11, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 11, 2017
|Why it is important to solve the homeless problem?
6 - You may also want to include in-text citations or quotes, properly referenced in your essay so that you can...
Writing Feedbackhowbowdat - Feb 11, 2017 / Holt - Feb 11, 2017
|To purchase either a house or a business is the question
Writing FeedbackNorahFSH - Feb 10, 2017 / sinchana2017 - Feb 15, 2017
|IELTS task 1 - Reasons for study and the amount of employer support.
3 - Hoang, I think you have misinterpret the meaning of 'overview' sentence. If you take a closer look on the...
Writing Feedbackyennhihoang2712 - Feb 10, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 10, 2017
|What can arts tell us of life that science cannot?
6 - @Holt Oh yeah, I understand, I thought it has something wrong, now I clear, thanks you and I will...
Writing FeedbackNgocdoan - Feb 10, 2017 / Ngocdoan - Feb 11, 2017
|In the complex, industrial society nowadays, the quality of life is deteriorating
2 - To, you are becoming sloppy with your paraphrasing. You did not even bother to try and paraphrase the prompt...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 9, 2017 / Holt - Feb 9, 2017
|PTE essay: Is it foolish to get married before completing studies
Writing Feedbackfoyuliu - Feb 9, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 10, 2017
|The process of producing cement and making concrete which is raw material from cement for building
4 - Hi Anabel, I have read this closely. I have found a few things which you correct. Firstly, I have...
Writing Feedbackanabel - Feb 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 9, 2017
|Unemployment is inevitable issue in the society, especially among school leavers
5 - The main problem with your essay is the opening statement. It does not contain the correct information. The opening...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Feb 8, 2017 / Holt - Feb 8, 2017
|A serious effort is the most important factor for a journey toward success
8 - Jan, the best way to practice sentence formation is to read more English based material. I do not mean...
Writing Feedbackrxustrong - Feb 8, 2017 / Holt - Feb 10, 2017
|Task 1.The diagram shows how raw materials are used to make plastic products. Summarise the diagram.
3 - Hi Minh, welcome to Essay Forum which is one of the best sites for improving your ability. I know...
Writing FeedbackMinh Ngoc - Feb 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 10, 2017
|It's popular for teenagers to travel or to work for a year before studying into next level
7 - You can write that they can get first hand experience of the society rather than somebody else sharing...
Writing FeedbackMH_tw - Feb 8, 2017 / PKM - Feb 13, 2017
|Life is adventure, and adventure is a challenge.
2 - Miftah, sorry to say but there are lots of corrections needed in your essay and therefore, my suggestion is...
Writing FeedbackKing_mif - Feb 8, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 8, 2017
|Does the punishment required in order to educate a children?
4 - @Riyan Mudastsir 'know whether is right and wrong' is grammatically incorrect because there is no subject. I believe you...
Writing FeedbackRiyan Mudastsir - Feb 8, 2017 / shohruhbek - Feb 8, 2017
|Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
3 - Wow! Json, you blew this discussion out of the water! What an almost perfect discussion you presented in defense...
Writing Feedbackaloha21 - Feb 8, 2017 / Holt - Feb 8, 2017
|Being a man or a woman makes diffrence whether or not people can be excluded from a job
12 - @anabel Yeah I should be more careful with commas and learn punctuation rules in general. The missing article was...
Writing Feedbackshohruhbek - Feb 7, 2017 / shohruhbek - Feb 8, 2017
|IELTS (unpaid work is important for the young people?)
6 - Thank you very much for taking the time to review my essay. Your input and feedback are vitally important...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Feb 7, 2017 / rozhnaz - Feb 8, 2017
|Total School Spending in the United Kingdom during three separate decades
3 - Hey Anabel. Time distribution is very important. Firstly read up on the entire material given and then focus...
Writing Feedbackanabel - Feb 7, 2017 / DoctorWho - Feb 7, 2017
|The pie chart describe the degradation of agricultural land productivity in the worldwide.
6 - Hi Anabel, You should add the part of overall or conclusion in Task 01 because this part is important....
Writing Feedbackanabel - Feb 7, 2017 / Minh Ngoc - Feb 8, 2017
|Increasing use of vehicles contributes to air pollution and leads to an overuse of natural resources
3 - Hey Maitouyen!! Overall an ok essay. I think your conclusion is pretty solid. But the introduction can be...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen1 - Feb 7, 2017 / DoctorWho - Feb 7, 2017
|People get information through news, but meanwhile are uncertain about the truth of these news
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Feb 7, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Feb 7, 2017
|Who should care more about our health if not we ourselves? IELTS writing task II about healthy life
4 - Apart from above comments, I just want to add that your introduction is quite long, even longer than main...
Writing Feedbackrezamei - Feb 7, 2017 / adamrahimov - Feb 7, 2017
|BAR & LINE GRAPH - three dimensions on the screens
3 - Gigih, I believe that there was a better way to write this essay which would have improved your overall...
Writing Feedbackgigihes - Feb 7, 2017 / Holt - Feb 7, 2017
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