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|Writing 2: Should the government encourage a certain percentage of jobs to be reserved for women?
3 - Arlen, in your opening statement, you strongly support the idea that positions should be reserved for women. However, you...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Mar 14, 2017 / Holt - Mar 14, 2017
|Online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013
2 - Nur, while it is good that you have learned how to remove the mechanical representation of information in your...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 14, 2017 / Holt - Mar 14, 2017
|TOEFL independent writing task 1. A new restaurant may be built in your neighorhood.
Writing Feedbackfufuleilei - Mar 14, 2017 / fufuleilei - Mar 15, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken?
Writing Feedbackblu - Mar 14, 2017 / Maitouyen282 - Mar 25, 2017
|Body image promoted and shared by social media is harmful to user
4 - Henry, your essay shows that you were given a topic to write about which is of huge importance or...
Writing Feedbackarsenal4life - Mar 14, 2017 / Holt - Mar 14, 2017
|Intercultural Communication connecting the societes. Final essay.
3 - Hello Suya, You have written a well-reasoned essay on intercultural communication based on your personal experiences. I think...
Writing FeedbackSUYA - Mar 14, 2017 / Peterson123 - Mar 14, 2017
|CLEP English Comp essay prep - agree/ disagree "no goals so impossible as ones we set for ourselves"
4 - Thank you bontonsoup1 and Holt, I especially appreciate the suggestion to sharpen my focus to one side of...
Writing FeedbackPeterson123 - Mar 13, 2017 / Peterson123 - Mar 14, 2017
|The way international associations help developing countries
4 - First of all, I would like to thank you for your precious comment. I would like to empathize that...
Writing Feedbackhiencute - Mar 13, 2017 / hiencute - Mar 13, 2017
|Essay about the importance of spending money on the arts
3 - Hi Martina, I have read your essay and found some errors which you are supposed to improve. Hopefully, you...
Writing FeedbackWarda1992 - Mar 13, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 13, 2017
|Unveiling crimes using sophisticated technology
6 - I agree that your opinion is presented early, before a proper introduction of your topic. You make good...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 13, 2017 / Peterson123 - Mar 15, 2017
|The talk about your favorite language
Writing Feedbackdoanquoc - Mar 13, 2017 / Arlen - Mar 14, 2017
|It is difficult to imagine a life without music. Traditional or popular, modern music?
3 - Nutwarara, the essay that you wrote will earn you a score of 4 because you did not properly discuss...
Writing Feedbacknutwararat - Mar 12, 2017 / Holt - Mar 13, 2017
|There is a nexus between corruption and terrorism
Writing FeedbackFAHADKHAN185 - Mar 12, 2017 / Holt - Mar 12, 2017
|Finacial Aid VS Practical Aid And Advice
4 - No bother at all Anais. I think you will see where your faulty paraphrasing came in with the example...
Writing FeedbackAnais - Mar 12, 2017 / Holt - Mar 12, 2017
|Environment problems, who would be responsible for this? - IELTS essay topic
Writing Feedbackdemi34 - Mar 11, 2017 / demi34 - Mar 21, 2017
|IELTS- Bigger Priority - governments should charge on railways instead of roads.
Writing FeedbackPaige - Mar 11, 2017 / Arlen - Mar 14, 2017
|How a solar powered water pump works
5 - I will not repeat the suggestion details anymore because I already explained it in the previous thread observation that...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 11, 2017 / Holt - Mar 14, 2017
|The three different charts present the percentage of four different categories of foods utilized
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 11, 2017 / Maitouyen282 - Mar 13, 2017
|Plethora numbers of criminal activities - causes of crime rate and effort to prevent them
4 - @yuukinohan4 Hi! I am learning IELTS too. Therefore, I give you some advice. Firstly, the cause of crime. Nowadays,...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 10, 2017 / Maitouyen282 - Mar 11, 2017
|My view on Independent Recruiting of Universities
4 - @Holt First of all ,I am very grateful to you for your advice. I'm a college student in China.I've...
Writing FeedbackRayLi - Mar 10, 2017 / RayLi - Mar 10, 2017
|Many children have difficulty paying attention and concentrating in their classes at school
6 - Hi guys @ChiObi @yuukinohan4 @Holt @eiriashhar Thank you so much for all your golden feedback. I read them...
Writing FeedbackOkaeef - Mar 10, 2017 / Okaeef - Mar 11, 2017
|The line graph depicts the different modes of transportation used by the country United Kingdom
6 - Hi @Sajeemaka I have already read your entire essay, i just suggest you to group the paragraph of...
Writing FeedbackSajeemaka - Mar 9, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 10, 2017
|A discussion paper regarding the mental health services in the city
2 - Luk, for the question section, do not provide the instructions that your professor provided for the writing of the...
Writing Feedbacklskarena22 - Mar 9, 2017 / Holt - Mar 9, 2017
|Discussion about if dinosaurs are endotherms
Writing Feedbackbaptista - Mar 9, 2017 / baptista - Mar 16, 2017
|Oil resources and Consumption annually in the same areas
4 - It would be better if you do not include any actual information in the overview summary. The summary is...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 9, 2017 / Holt - Mar 10, 2017
|Essay - Intercultural Communication. Western culture always tends to be open comparing with Eastern
Writing FeedbackKaitonglin - Mar 9, 2017 / Kaitonglin - Mar 9, 2017
|Car Ownership increasing big traffic jams
4 - Hey Nur! Like Holt said above, the introduction is mainly used to talk about the issue at hand and...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 8, 2017 / DoctorWho - Mar 8, 2017
|The government should promote the use of renewable energy in electricity generation
3 - Luk, this is a sound summary of your policy paper research. I hope though that this is not the...
Writing Feedbacklskarena22 - Mar 8, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|IETLS Writing task 1 - 'Parkway Hotel customer service' pie chart
4 - Hi Vi, I have read your writing closer and found a few improvements you need. Firstly, you actually presented...
Writing Feedbackchikachika - Mar 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 9, 2017
|IELTS WRITING PART 2 ex-criminals are good teacher for teenagers on danger of committing a crime
3 - Hi @Neo Lee After reading a whole of your essay, I can understand the reason of your agreement toward...
Writing FeedbackNeo Lee - Mar 8, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 8, 2017
|The percentage of elderly aged over 65 in USA, Japan and Sweden from 1940 to 2040 - IELTS
3 - Hi Ainun, I will give you a few corrections. Actually, based on the systematic, you can successfully write this...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Mar 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 9, 2017
|Higher entrance fees to attractions for residents than for foreign travelers?
6 - Duy, you would get a very disturbing score of 3 for this essay. The reason that you failed to...
Writing Feedbackhausofduy - Mar 8, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|Some alterations that had been done at West Park Secondary School from 1950 to 2010
2 - Nur, you misunderstood the illustrations that you were presented for the summary. The illustration provides information for changes to...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 7, 2017 / Holt - Mar 7, 2017
|IELTS TASK 1 Other worker's salaries, teacher's salaries and furniture and equipment
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 7, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|City or Country Life? Some people like me are fond of a fast-paced life in the city
2 - Nastya, I believe that you failed to provide another part of the prompt requirements. I am referring to the...
Writing FeedbackSoukho - Mar 7, 2017 / Holt - Mar 7, 2017
|The most important aspect of a job is the size of money you earn. Big salary vs job satisfaction?
3 - Hi @Mohsen23 I know that your idea disagrees the prompt. However, sometimes i get confuse because a lot of...
Writing FeedbackMohsen23 - Mar 7, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 11, 2017
|Globalization - process of International integration which have its impact on people's life
3 - Globalization can trace its roots back to 1942, when Christoper Columbus first discovered the Americas during his expedition to...
Writing Feedbackjaviernilo2 - Mar 7, 2017 / Holt - Mar 7, 2017
|News article about The Pakistan Super League.
5 - Neha, provide an overview or summary of the events that led to the brutal terrorist attack on that fateful...
Writing Feedbackhello123098 - Mar 6, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|It is inevitable for using alternative energy resources to replace fossil fuel exploitation
3 - Hi Nur, you have shown the good method for paraphrasing the statement. However, your last sentence in the introductory...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 6, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 6, 2017
|The line chart compares the data of package delivery distributed by two delivery service companies
4 - Hi @ainunazwaria Some suggestions come to me are firstly writing task one's overview that should be followed the...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Mar 6, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 6, 2017
|Comparison between average yearly costs on cell phone and landline phone services from 2001 to 2010
Writing Feedbacktuantu1710 - Mar 6, 2017 / tuantu1710 - Mar 7, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 : Life now is better today than it was century ago
3 - @Holt. thank for you comment and suggestion. i will note your reasons to improve my essay. Thank you....
Writing Feedbackcoco246 - Mar 6, 2017 / coco246 - Mar 6, 2017
|Education and health care should be financed by authorities - everyone could get free access to it
4 - Hi Nur, I really like reading your essay because you wrote this systematically. However, I have found there needed...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 5, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 6, 2017
|This essay about bar chart report related to "Average annual GDP growth"
3 - Tan, you could have done a better job of discussing the figures in the graph you were provided. The...
Writing FeedbackBinh Ngo - Mar 5, 2017 / Holt - Mar 6, 2017
|People have different views on dilemma if people successful in a sport should have higher earnings
6 - The format that you used is wrong. In order to accurately represent the task that you are given for...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Mar 5, 2017 / Holt - Mar 7, 2017
|Briefly describe the work of this (My current job) organisation (max. 250 words)
3 - Diga, if there are English equivalents for the name of your organization, please use them first, with the original...
Writing Feedbackdigaprasiska - Mar 5, 2017 / Holt - Mar 5, 2017
|Percentages of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features
3 - Raimov, your overview summary needs more work. It would have been best if you combined the first paragraph with...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 4, 2017 / Holt - Mar 5, 2017
|Choosing other jobs, changing occupations frequently - IELTS TASK 2
4 - @reptile5566 Since you already received feedback on the essay structure, I will try to highlight some grammatical/stylistic errors. Because...
Writing Feedbackreptile5566 - Mar 4, 2017 / serikbar - Mar 4, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - INFORMATION ABOUT DIARRHEA CASES IN MASHHAD FROM 1983 TO 1992
4 - Ainun, regardless of the minor problems that exist in your essay, those do not erase the fact that you...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Mar 4, 2017 / Holt - Mar 4, 2017
|The percentage of four different type of films distributed in Australia and Britain in 2001
9 - dear @Maitouyen282 Overall your essay is good. I am here is on learning process too. And this is...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 3, 2017 / nuradiapuspa - Mar 5, 2017
|Students should take priority to living away from home than sharing place with their parents
7 - Hai @thanhdo I have several comments about your writing. Firstly, you write too short essay for writing...
Writing Feedbackthanhdo - Mar 2, 2017 / ainunazwaria - Mar 3, 2017
|Ask a friend for some help regarding a part time job
Writing FeedbackNilendra - Mar 2, 2017 / Nilendra - Mar 3, 2017
|This essay will discuss the main reasons for increase the crime rate
5 - @akbarmappiare thank you very much. it is very helpful. I will concentrate about those when I am writing next...
Writing FeedbackNilendra - Mar 2, 2017 / Nilendra - Mar 2, 2017
|Promotion of the well-being in societies and environments in which they operate.
2 - Paras, your score for this essay cannot be higher than a 3 for the following reasons: Your overview summary...
Writing Feedbackparas01 - Mar 1, 2017 / Holt - Mar 2, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TEENAGE YEARS OR ADULT YEARS ARE MORE HAPPY ?
7 - Overall, I quite like this essay although it is a little long and there are a few grammar and...
Writing Feedbackkalyn - Mar 1, 2017 / adamrahimov - Mar 5, 2017
|Deciding which age of the life is the happiest is a controversy
5 - @Holt thank you very much for your time. your explanation is clear. i will try my best next time....
Writing FeedbackNilendra - Mar 1, 2017 / Nilendra - Mar 1, 2017
|IELTS GT Writing Task 2 - Modern technology. Comment (test date approaching soon)
2 - Bumblebee I think you essay as pretty good contents and I think you clearly answered the prompt given, with...
Writing Feedbackbumblebee - Feb 28, 2017 / Fab - Feb 28, 2017
|Full time education before the age of 18 is beneficial for students and the whole society
2 - Jessie, please come up with an original title for your essay next time. You cannot use the prompt topic...
Writing FeedbackJessiewu - Feb 28, 2017 / Holt - Feb 28, 2017
|IELTS Task1. SUA, Sweden and Japan; Proportion of elderly in three different countries.
6 - Ana, do you see how the graph is arranged chronologically by year and how the percentage discussions followed suit?...
Writing Feedbackmariana13 - Feb 28, 2017 / Holt - Mar 1, 2017
|Some people claim that the goal of politics should be the pursuit of an ideal. Others argue ...
4 - @paras01 The issues I see that needs tweaking are grammatical errors. Take note that you need to observe...
Writing Feedbackparas01 - Feb 28, 2017 / sugartown0829 - Feb 28, 2017
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