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|The alteration of an island; new vehicle track and footpath to connect the western and eastern areas
6 - I can see some improvements and that's quite good. Yet, there are still some rooms to enhance the quality...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Various ways of communication summary - all contribute to conveying information equally
3 - Ignacy, you neglected to represent what I consider to be the key point of the essay prompt. You failed...
Writing Feedbackwladca - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|English spoken throughout the world essay
2 - Ivan, your paraphrased prompt is incomplete. You were supposed to mention that there are languages that are slowly losing...
Writing Feedbackuzbeklord - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|WRITING TASK 1 Process making of bricks for building industry
2 - Sari, where did the term loam, that you keep using throughout most of the essay come from? There is...
Writing Feedbackss158284 - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|Thesis for essay on Japanese internment versus the Holocaust?
Writing Feedbackcocobean3 - Dec 11, 2016 / Holt - Dec 11, 2016
|Cause and problems: Stress in your country (length of essay over 100 words)
NEW - Stress has been a majour for a long time affecting students seriously in many countries.Vietnam is one of those,two...
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|Opinion Essay (The Athletics Centre in Georgian College)
Writing FeedbackAhaSeki - Dec 10, 2016 / Holt - Dec 10, 2016
|The various plus points of international tourism are definitely worth the exchange.
3 - Six, ownership of the information and opinion that is presented in an opinion essay is very important. It shows...
Writing Feedbackcoucou97 - Dec 9, 2016 / Holt - Dec 9, 2016
|The controversy statement that American's airport left far away from other countries' airports
2 - Lincoln, I think that you need to learn more about collocation. Your sentence structure seems quite confusing due to...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 9, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 9, 2016
|TED Summary - The Internet Secret
4 - Try to rephrase confide citizens the concealed (...) privacy of internet users"?, try making it easier for readers to...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 9, 2016 / kervina - Dec 9, 2016
|Listening Summary : Chaos Theory - the alteration of dynamic variables
2 - #... and mathematics that focuses on the alteration of dynamic variables. #changes in environment. However, this theory > changes...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 9, 2016 / sus_007 - Dec 9, 2016
|Article Summary : Longer 'Penis' drives evolution of bigger brains in female fish
2 - Some suggestions for better clarity: "...bigger genitals means more mating success. Suprisingly..." "become larger and to escape from over...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 9, 2016 / rousua - Dec 9, 2016
|Ielts writing task 2 - Safety standards are important when building people's homes.
3 - The thing that makes your essay seems odd is because you did not answer the question properly. Reaching band...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Where is the best place for children to learn how to be a good member of society?
2 - First of all, I do not think your introduction is appropriate for the exam. I will suggest to use...
Writing Feedbackimagenius - Dec 8, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 8, 2016
|Writing Task I about the relationship between worker with their supervisor and partners.
3 - Dear Dioba, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too! ...iswere the highest...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Dec 8, 2016 / mem77 - Dec 8, 2016
|The appearance of people as one of the essential indications of what characteristics they possess
Writing FeedbackDioba - Dec 8, 2016 / nda18 - Dec 9, 2016
|Article Summary - New Investigation from Malaysia Airlines
2 - Lincoln, I am sure that this is too short for an article summary. You are suggested to write more...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|The pie charts reveal about the outcome of study which was conducted in 2005 and 2009
3 - Apart from grammatical errors in the first paragraph, I can see you misinterpreted the word "pattern" and "trend". These...
Writing FeedbackUQ17 - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|Some people argue that judging from the clothes that they wear is not appropriate. Others disagree.
3 - Do not create a 'hung' introduction paragraph if you want to reach band 6 or above. It should be...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|People can freely choose clothes they like, while they cannot be assessed from their appearance
3 - Aloha Kurnia, here are my thoughts for you; (1) word choices basically, it is absolutely crucial that you...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 8, 2016 / ibe13 - Dec 9, 2016
|The education fee should not be charged for every student with different household budget
3 - There are many IELTS candidates that have the same mistake in deciding their position towards the essay. I believe...
Writing Feedbackleeminhee - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|Jamie Oliver has started a social project, called food revolution.
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016 / kurnia - Dec 8, 2016
|Fashion is one of essential aspects on people characteristic.
2 - Hi,there are several mistakes in your summary. 1.It indicates that fashion is one of essential aspects on people...
Writing FeedbackUQ17 - Dec 8, 2016 / Dioba - Dec 8, 2016
|The relationship between supervisors and co-employs in the working life
3 - Dear yuri these are my corrections firstly, you should attach the graph picture although it is simple thing...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 8, 2016 / UQ17 - Dec 8, 2016
|The behavior of people gives more accurate data about what people like, than their clothes
3 - ,most people know what their friends are like from their behaviour... Behavioral analysis... I think the essay needs more...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016 / chadnium000 - Dec 8, 2016
|Supervisor vs co-employees - the graph show about result of survey to employee
5 - There are several mistakes in your summary. 1.The graph( it only singular, but i get the picture from other...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 8, 2016 / Dioba - Dec 8, 2016
|"The Aesthetics of Silence" My personal essay on remaining silent
4 - Is Aaron still your best friend at this point? After this falling out, did the two of you become...
Writing FeedbackRahulkb - Dec 8, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|According to a study, 72 percent of old people in Glasgow (aged 75 years and more), were illiterate
4 - Here, Abdik Here, my corrections toward your writing 1. Abdik, You have to use past time consistently in...
Writing Feedbackabdik - Dec 7, 2016 / Abrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016
|Music connects people and is also used as a therapy. Which type of music is the most important?
3 - Thanks for the response, I saw that too after when I posted but couldn't edit Some people though...
Writing Feedbackrajat2108 - Dec 7, 2016 / rajat2108 - Dec 8, 2016
|Technologies such as computer benefits society
6 - In your essay, you mostly focused on the usage of computers using "the Internet". But before the Internet was...
Writing FeedbackHoaidepchi - Dec 7, 2016 / mualla - Dec 16, 2016
|Nile River Civilization influences on the Modern World
2 - Some suggestions to help clean it up and bring more clarity: "it is undoubted that all early civilizations"...
Writing Feedbackjamiewach - Dec 7, 2016 / rousua - Dec 9, 2016
|A simple profound accomplishment; the pride of winning a competition
2 - Aimee, are you writing this essay as a part of an English exercise or are you writing this as...
Writing FeedbackAmatis250 - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|Writing 2: Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke
5 - Arlen cohesiveness and cohesion are terms that are used to describe how effectively you present the information that you...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|The information about the air diffusion in a house and how it reduces heat
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 7, 2016 / debby17 - Dec 12, 2016
|An appearance of Internet has made significant changes in the way people live
Writing FeedbackPhuong_Loan - Dec 7, 2016 / Phuong_Loan - Dec 8, 2016
|TED Summary - If superpowers were real: Super speed - Joy Lin
2 - Lincoln, The Flash was never mentioned in the video presentation. This is an assumption that you are making because...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|Businesses have many essential purposes, such as profits and decreasing the unemployment
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 7, 2016 / kurnia - Dec 8, 2016
|The only objective of an enterprise is to generate profit, however, I disagree with that idea
2 - Lincoln, your essay started out on a strong note, the paraphrased paragraph doesn't really fall under the required number...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|Regulating Advertising - let the Ministry of Truth decide
2 - Ha, it is extremely difficult for me to review your essay for a number of reasons. The first one,...
Writing Feedbackhale - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|The aim of the firm is to be profitable and companies should only focus on this.
Writing FeedbackUQ17 - Dec 7, 2016 / abdik - Dec 7, 2016
|The occurrence of heat loss and energy waste in the house comes from many household appliances
5 - The process of air leaks out and into the house which affects in the heat losing and energy wasting...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 7, 2016 / yika - Dec 8, 2016
|Article Summary : Bees of the sea : Tiny crustaceans pollinate underwater plants
2 - Nda, your topic sentence at the start of the summary should have immediately indicated that the tiny crustaceans help...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 7, 2016 / Holt - Dec 7, 2016
|People tend to enjoy interaction with their friends in social networking more than in the real life
4 - @yika In my view and agree are repetitive in the starting. Tend to agree --only agree can work....
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 6, 2016 / abdon786 - Dec 15, 2016
|The importance of communication skills in job relation
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 6, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 13, 2016
|Using media gives many cons on individual relationship between citizens.
Writing FeedbackCastro - Dec 6, 2016 / yika - Dec 7, 2016
|Writing task 1 (The graph shows information about kinds of important communication ability)
5 - Even though people is plural, I think the correct version is: "dealing with people WAS" - not "WERE."...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 7, 2016
|The finding of two studies that aims to ask workers which the varied skills should they have.
2 - Lincoln, there was only one study covering 2 questions presented in the chart. So you made a mistake in...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 6, 2016 / Holt - Dec 6, 2016
|The electronic media impacts on the alteration of human behavior which tends to be more individual
3 - I can see the reason why did your essay cannot go beyond 6.0. This is because your conclusion is...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 6, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 7, 2016
|Reduced number of people who keep in touch with others and disrupted personal relationship
6 - Hello, I will give my correction for you personal relationship direct communication In the past we usually...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 6, 2016 / yika - Dec 6, 2016
|New Zealand: the cricket as a sport which attracted the smallest number of girls to involve in
6 - I am also interested in ilets and following up so many sources "we" language is not preffered so much....
Writing Feedbackhanhchoick - Dec 6, 2016 / clementiness - Dec 9, 2016
|A research in which people were interviewed about communication abilities critical in their jobs
4 - Hello, this is my correction for you but in previous it deceaseddecreased slightly at 60% it was...
Writing FeedbackCastro - Dec 6, 2016 / yika - Dec 7, 2016
|Artificial gills enabling human to breath under the water.
2 - Nina, once again you seemingly present a personal opinion in what should be an objective summation of an article...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 6, 2016 / Holt - Dec 6, 2016
|Scientists effort to invent a device which enable human to breathe under the water for a long time
6 - Dear Nda Here, my corrections toward your writing For that reason, several scientists is in an effort to...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 6, 2016 / Abrahamlincoln - Dec 6, 2016
|According to many, women are much better in taking care of children, than men
2 - @krempetkov I do not see any flaws in your ideas, I'd suggest adding your position to your first...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 5, 2016 / roseochoa - Dec 5, 2016
|(summary)Strong Personalities Skew Study Samples
5 - Hellooo Vicky! Allow me to give you some suggestion through your summary. Look at mine below: In truth,...
Writing Feedbackvicky17 - Dec 5, 2016 / nurainiyusuf16 - Dec 6, 2016
|Snowman Revenge - it was built on a hydrant.
5 - Mary was 10 yersyears old, (...), he makes the snowman in front ... While the snow falls maryMary(the name...
Writing Feedbackikhlasul01 - Dec 5, 2016 / ded15 - Dec 5, 2016
|BE KIND TO OTHER PEOPLE
2 - Ahmad, do you have a prompt that you are responding to with this statement? I am not sure about...
Writing Feedbackanonym28 - Dec 5, 2016 / Holt - Dec 5, 2016
|(Summary Article) Illegal Miners in Ghana Moving into Ristricted Forest Areas
2 - Dedy, your grammar accuracy problems in the sentence development and confusing use of lexical resources have made an otherwise...
Writing Feedbackded15 - Dec 5, 2016 / Holt - Dec 5, 2016
|IELTS writing task 2: too much exercises is bad for one's health, do u agree or disagree?
5 - Hello, here are my suggestions, 1. You have to state your view- agree or disagree in the first...
Writing Feedbackmimemeow - Dec 5, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 6, 2016
|In my country-Taiwan, many high schools encourage students to be a volunteer.
2 - Arlen, in terms of task accuracy, the essay would possibly score a 5 for a number of reasons. With...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 4, 2016 / Holt - Dec 5, 2016
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