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|Each roles are significant - who should teach kids how to be good members of the society? IELTS W2
4 - take such responsibility=sense of responsibility a worth discussing=a heated debate/discussion equally important roles and reasons are following=increasingly important role...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Apr 1, 2017 / MikaTan - Apr 1, 2017
|TOEFL: Why go to university? It is important for our future.
Writing Feedbackdaonguyen123 - Mar 31, 2017 / daonguyen123 - Apr 1, 2017
|Smartphone today - how to live without them?
Writing Feedbackhoanglong - Mar 31, 2017 / kacanakya - Apr 4, 2017
|Inner city traffic congestion is still a serious problem in many cities. IELTS writing task 2.
4 - Hello, I like your statement since you provided lots examples supporting it, however, the pity point is that they...
Writing FeedbackMikaTan - Mar 31, 2017 / Arlen - Apr 1, 2017
|Population in U.S state of Oregon - three counties over sixty years timeline
2 - Hermin, in order to create a proper overview summary of the line graph you were provided, you need to...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 31, 2017 / Holt - Mar 31, 2017
|Influences of advertising - are these ads really necessary?
2 - Linh, a quick point of correction in the paraphrased opening statement. You contradicted yourself when you said that you...
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Mar 31, 2017 / Holt - Mar 31, 2017
|The alteration of US Oregon's state inhabitants in three counties
2 - Sriwidayani, I am not sure if your tutor had told you this but, one of the scoring considerations in...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Mar 31, 2017 / Holt - Mar 31, 2017
|New technologies have developed dramatically in the recent years. IELTS, task2 writing module
5 - Hello, To be honest, I think your structure is good and I can understand what you want to express....
Writing Feedbackjason_alan - Mar 31, 2017 / Arlen - Apr 1, 2017
|writing Task 1: Oregon Population in three counties
3 - Agus, you cannot score higher than a 4 with this essay because of a number of reasons. The first,...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Mar 30, 2017 / Holt - Mar 31, 2017
|The comparison of local government expenditure in each category in Someland
2 - Hi Tami, I have read your writing closely. Following this, I found a few things you have to fix...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 30, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 30, 2017
|IELTS TASK2: Dangers of the Internet - is it an excellent means of communication?
2 - halo @Mayank7g I have read your essay and I found some mistakes. In the first paragraph, you wrote...
Writing FeedbackMayank7g - Mar 30, 2017 / tamtamii - Mar 30, 2017
|Sorrel Cottage Development - Map
3 - Phuong, your presentation lacks coherence and your sentences vary from hanging to run - on sentences. As a rule...
Writing Feedbackphuongphuong - Mar 30, 2017 / Holt - Mar 30, 2017
|What are pros and cons of job hopping ?
Writing FeedbackHolyzNero - Mar 30, 2017 / Holt - Mar 30, 2017
|Non-scientific subject is not important?
4 - Sriwidayani, it seems to me that you discussed the wrong prompt requirement in this essay. Were you practicing by...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 30, 2017
|Information Technology brings a work flexibility
6 - Furthermore, some jobs ... That is why they ... This is because the artist ... You can combine...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Mar 29, 2017 / imlost88 - Apr 1, 2017
|Technology has helped us to have a more convenient life." Discuss
3 - Vy, you make some pretty valid discussion points in your essay. Just one point for correction though. In an...
Writing Feedbackvynguyn - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 30, 2017
|The alteration of expenditure in local government of Someland over 30-year period
3 - Restuan, please take note that you should only use the information provided to you within the pie charts and...
Writing Feedbackrestuanlubis - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 30, 2017
|Annual expenditure in Scotland - comparing pie charts
2 - Hi Agus, I have read your writing closely. There I found a few things you are supposed to fix...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Mar 29, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 29, 2017
|Employee Benefits - Information Technology help people for working outside their workplace
2 - Hermin, you have really tried to apply yourself to the writing of this essay. Unfortunately, it still was not...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 29, 2017
|How to produce variation tealeaves
4 - hai @tamtamii I have read the whole of your essay. As I know, in the diagram process, you have...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 29, 2017 / Anhy chan - Mar 29, 2017
|Argumentative essay "International students should not be allowed to work while study in Aus."
3 - Philip, your essay has a number of grammatical problems. The first problem, is your fondness for using the word...
Writing FeedbackPhilipfeng - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 29, 2017
|The advantages of current twenty-first-century technological developments on the society
2 - @venkat_writting hay Venkat, your idea on your essay quite good, but there are several problems that i found on...
Writing Feedbackvenkat_writting - Mar 29, 2017 / agus_mono - Mar 29, 2017
|Great role of big sporting competitions in our world
4 - you should try to support your view with the help of proper examples in the body paragraph and also...
Writing Feedbackimlost88 - Mar 29, 2017 / Mayank7g - Mar 30, 2017
|Minority Languages to Die Out? - IELTS, task2
3 - @Holt :( I was confused about the requirement of the question between giving an evaluation for it and consider...
Writing Feedbacknoura_ama - Mar 29, 2017 / noura_ama - Mar 29, 2017
|IMPORTANT FACTORS TO CHOOSE A JOB.
3 - @Holt thank you so much for your suggestions and your advice, I will practice writing the essays in the...
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Mar 29, 2017 / frenchfries - Mar 29, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: environmental topic, fossil fuels / other forms of energy
6 - For help use these websites : 1. ieltsmaterial (Writing task 1 and 2 samples are really good) 2. ielts-mentor...
Writing FeedbackemIELTS - Mar 29, 2017 / Doel Hasan - Mar 29, 2017
|Writing Task 1: Two mail companies: TNT and FedEx
6 - hy meirkhan,, this is my suggestions: firstly, you have to introduce the graph by paraphrasing the question. i think...
Writing Feedbackmeirkhan - Mar 28, 2017 / agus_mono - Apr 3, 2017
|Ielts task 1 Wi-fi café, internet express and café cool in New York
7 - @Maitouyen282 Your overview was very detail, you only need to mention the general trend and make comparison, it is...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 28, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 1, 2017
|Writing Task 2: art-based subject can improve students' performance in secondary school.
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Mar 28, 2017 / Mayank7g - Mar 30, 2017
|Learning to play team sports is an important part of a child's education.
3 - Mayank, there is a problem with your opening statement because it does not accurately represent the topic for discussion...
Writing FeedbackMayank7g - Mar 28, 2017 / Holt - Mar 28, 2017
|TOEFL ESSAY: FAMILY vs FORMAL EDUCATION
5 - Lijing, what you did he was create your own prompt to respond to rather than responding to the prompt...
Writing Feedbacklijing822 - Mar 28, 2017 / Holt - Mar 29, 2017
|Writing Task 1: Erosion of a headland - effects of waves in the coastal area
3 - Agus, the essay can probably get a 5 because you managed to present the obvious information in the illustration...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Mar 28, 2017 / Holt - Mar 28, 2017
|IELTS: energy use and greenhouse gas emissions in an average Australian household
7 - @matteo1222 I have red your essay, and I think you should make comparison among the feature as overview in...
Writing Feedbackmatteo1222 - Mar 28, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 4, 2017
|Should children start learning foreign language earlier?
2 - Good work Lee. You were able to properly assess the topic for discussion, present the reason behind the discussion,...
Writing Feedbackbtho - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|If the students are underperforming, it is a sign that they have a bad teacher. Discuss
4 - In your essay you blame the teachers, parents, society, but you don't touch the fact that students can be...
Writing Feedbackvynguyn - Mar 27, 2017 / Rich Monte - Mar 29, 2017
|England female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom
3 - @Emma Nguyen You should pay attention with spelling, you also do not cover all key features, try to...
Writing FeedbackEmma Nguyen - Mar 27, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 2, 2017
|Residential housing - Alteration in America Village between 1994 and 2010
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Buildings and environment - The maps and changes in an American town between 1994 and 2010
3 - @Diahkn93 Hi Diah, In my opinion, I think your essay quite difficult to understand (caused by your interpretation). You...
Writing FeedbackDiahkn93 - Mar 27, 2017 / Datnguyen - Mar 27, 2017
|Two Shops: The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010
3 - halo Mr. @restuanlubis Halo Mr. Restu, actually I get your point about your grouping. However, I can understand...
Writing Feedbackrestuanlubis - Mar 27, 2017 / tamtamii - Mar 27, 2017
|People house change - the village of Stokeford in 1930
3 - Hermin, while your paragraphs are well representative of the illustrations provided, you did not really manage to present the...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|New buildings - The maps below show village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010
3 - Diah, excellent work in presenting an original take on the illustrations other than simply stating the mechanically obvious information....
Writing FeedbackDiahkn93 - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Change in town - the alteration of Stokeford village in 1930 and 2010.
4 - Septi, you can probably get a score of 5 with this essay. The essay could use some less mechanical...
Writing Feedbackseptyndid - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Sports stadium - the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.
5 - Andi, your essay does not put all of the information that you were provided with to good use. You...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Recent figures shown an increase in violent crime among youngsters
2 - Mayank, the first thing that struck me in your opening statement is the mistake in your term usage. You...
Writing FeedbackMayank7g - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Two Coins - A company to build a large factory near your community
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your nice comments. I really needed for such wonderful feedbacks. :)...
Writing FeedbackFaridNoorzad - Mar 27, 2017 / FaridNoorzad - Mar 27, 2017
|IELTS Task 2_women who do not plan to have careers should be allowed to get post-grad degrees or not
2 - Phone, your opening paragraph was almost perfect. Almost perfect because you dropped the ball in the last sentence. You...
Writing Feedbackzeal - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|Replacing Factories : The map below shows the alteration in an US town between over 62 years
3 - @restuanlubis Pay attention on your word choosen and subject verb agreement: The maps illustrate regarding ... (It will better...
Writing Feedbackrestuanlubis - Mar 27, 2017 / Anhy chan - Mar 27, 2017
|Which school facilities should receive money from the local authorities?
3 - Dang, the entire premise of the essay is not clearly presented in the opening statement. The topic for discussion...
Writing Feedbackthunga251090 - Mar 27, 2017 / Holt - Mar 27, 2017
|The different condition of American town in 1948 and 1950
Writing Feedbackkoganta - Mar 27, 2017 / agus_mono - Mar 27, 2017
|Writing IELTS TASK 2 - Topic: Paper NEWS importance
Writing FeedbackDatnguyen - Mar 26, 2017 / Datnguyen - Mar 26, 2017
|Fastfood is good or bad for our lives?
5 - @mastindersingh Thank you so much for your support, your comment is very precious to me. I hope next essays...
Writing FeedbackAndreiWindy - Mar 26, 2017 / AndreiWindy - Mar 26, 2017
|Sentence Outline- Top 7 Steps To Make Your IoT More Secure
2 - Roy, your steps 2 and 3 are redundant. If you read the outlines very well, you will discover that...
Writing Feedbacknezumi - Mar 26, 2017 / Holt - Mar 26, 2017
|"The importance of biodiversity" task 2 writng module IELTS
4 - Hi @Sabrena_amal It is really alike with the prompt, even so you really need to paraphrase the...
Writing FeedbackSabrena_amal - Mar 25, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 26, 2017
|Cars on road, climate, and the level of pollution in many cities.
2 - Mayank, save for a number of grammatical problems related to sentence structure and lexical resources, you have presented a...
Writing FeedbackMayank7g - Mar 25, 2017 / Holt - Mar 25, 2017
|How to support developing countries ?
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Mar 25, 2017 / frenchfries - Mar 25, 2017
|Ielts task 2 - An increasing trend of living or studing abroad
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 25, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 26, 2017
|Should children do household chares?
Writing FeedbackHilary88 - Mar 24, 2017 / Holt - Mar 25, 2017
|Writing IELTS Task2: Topic Food products. Imported or local?
Writing Feedbacknguyensonhdtk94 - Mar 24, 2017 / nguyensonhdtk94 - Mar 24, 2017
|SOLUTIONS ON CLIMATE CHANGE
5 - Your idea, grammar and vocabulary are really good. But you seem to get the essay requirement wrong. In your...
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Mar 24, 2017 / blu - Mar 24, 2017
|TOEFL IBT Independent Writing: Owning smart phones or not? Your point of view
3 - @Holt Thank you, it was very helpful. I will try to rewrite this essay. Could you please take your...
Writing Feedbackhain3dessay - Mar 24, 2017 / hain3dessay - Mar 25, 2017
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