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|Changing job; my writing should score 6 for IELTS, can you help me to improve my writing ability
Writing Feedbackintern0410 - Oct 11, 2017 / intern0410 - Oct 13, 2017
|The maps illustrate how Meadowside village and Fonton, which is a neighboring town - development
4 - @Holt Thank you. It is quite considerate of you to give me the advice. I would like to reassure...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 11, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 12, 2017
|Public celeberations such as festivals, holidays... shouldn't be financed by governments
5 - @Holt: Thanks so much for your detailed and useful comments and instructions. I have noted them down to practise...
Writing FeedbackThao Huong - Oct 11, 2017 / Thao Huong - Oct 12, 2017
|The invention of the Internet has had negative effects on your civilization.
4 - I was just expecting someone to view this as a free writing and give me feedback, though. and yes,...
Writing FeedbackWriter2037 - Oct 11, 2017 / Writer2037 - Oct 12, 2017
|Memoir writing draft about my memories in Korea
3 - Yongju, when you set up your first paragraph, you need to do so in a reflective manner. Ease your...
Writing FeedbackChocomint777 - Oct 11, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|History HW - One Object that Can Reflect Modern Civilization
3 - Sherry, this can only be considered a possible outline for topic discussions in your homework. I failed to find...
Writing FeedbackSherrywu - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|[TOEFL independent task] What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult?
3 - Sophia, I think you did not post the full original prompt for the discussion. The topic sentence is missing....
Writing Feedbacksophia1942 - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|The bar chart illustrates the Biritish male and female employees working in different occupations
3 - @hapi_hana9 Hi, I'd like to rewrite a sentence for you. Overall, the percentage of men ... => Overall,...
Writing Feedbackhapi_hana9 - Oct 10, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 22, 2017
|Only by challenging existing knowledge, we are able to expand our thinking about the universe
2 - Since not all countries live under a democratic form of government, it would perhaps be best if you avoid...
Writing Feedbackimpatient101 - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 10, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 2: Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result.
4 - @AliminHamzah There are some mistakes on grammar and spell. And the content lack of logical, it is hard...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 10, 2017 / hiimsandra - Oct 13, 2017
|I am more inclined to study with group of students rather than preparing to test alone [TOEFL]
Writing FeedbackKenChen - Oct 10, 2017 / KenChen - Oct 10, 2017
|Describe a strong memory based upon a smell
2 - Dang, you need to be more descriptive of the smell that is driving this memory of yours. The reader...
Writing Feedbackdvhanh - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|Television is one of the most wonderful inventions of human. And how it influence our children?
2 - Anatasia, I wish you had provided me with the complete and original prompt requirement for this essay. It appears...
Writing Feedbacklamphuongta - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|TOEFL: Children should play and study rather than help do the household chores?
3 - Ching, your opening statement was alright until you got to the part where you were supposed to provide your...
Writing FeedbackSunnyLai - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: The trend of GDP growth in post-reform China
6 - Hello Wong, As a fellow candidate preparing for IELTS academic I can give you few pieces of advice...
Writing Feedbackwinky_wong - Oct 9, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - Oct 20, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country side
3 - Alimin, are you enrolled in English classes at the moment? If you are, how is it possible that you...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|Kids can learn from the very first days by their parents, but other say it's the task of the school
3 - @Ummu Hi, I'd like to give you another example of paraphrasing the prompt: Children is an essential thing......
Writing FeedbackUmmu - Oct 9, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 22, 2017
|Moving abroad - challenge in your life that helps to overcome weaknesses and broaden horizon
3 - Naveen, your essay cannot be properly reviewed due to the lack of the original prompt requirement. Without the original...
Writing Feedbackneox3 - Oct 8, 2017 / Holt - Oct 8, 2017
|Task 2: Exams - the best method of assessing educational achievement, does they?
2 - @vanslogy your opening statement is almost correct in presentation. You did a good job of rephrasing the topic for...
Writing Feedbackvanslogy - Oct 8, 2017 / Holt - Oct 8, 2017
|IELTS task 2: The advantages and disadvantages of the current population structure
5 - @monopolymi Hi. I think your paraphrase of the prompt is good enough. I'd like to give you another example....
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Oct 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 21, 2017
|Why grand and expensive marriages became more and more common in recent years?
3 - @Ecirtaeb Hi, as @Holt has said, you didn't paraphrase the prompt correctly. I'd like offer you another example. ...
Writing FeedbackEcirtaeb - Oct 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 21, 2017
|[task 1] The bar chart shows different methods of waste disposal in four cities
3 - @Holt Very glad to hear that. I'm so happy. Thank you for your advice. I'll pay more attention...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 8, 2017
|Effect of Single-gender schools - wrtiting task 2 for IELTS
3 - @Holt, I am really sorry that I missed writing the question fully. The complete question is: In...
Writing FeedbackIELTS_Academic - Oct 7, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - Oct 7, 2017
|Taking a gap of one year after completing high school and before taking admission
2 - Nguyen, since this is your first time posting in this forum, I will give you some leeway and explain...
Writing Feedbacknguyencaocuong - Oct 7, 2017 / Holt - Oct 7, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Support opinion - Why is physical education important?
5 - Dear @TJLuschen Thank you for your corrections. I will rewrite this essay and will definitely consider all of your...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Oct 6, 2017 / Tran Minh Hien - Oct 8, 2017
|The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries
4 - @Holt Thank you Marry for your clarification. In China mainland, tens of thousands of anxious IELTS applicants are baffled...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 6, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 6, 2017
|The bar chart compares the worldwide sales figures for four different games over 6 years period
9 - Hi monopolymi, A few pieces of advice: 1. In the introductory statement, while you are paraphrasing the...
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Oct 6, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - Oct 20, 2017
|[TOEFL] Do students learn much when they work together on assigned projects.
3 - @Holt Thank you, I will make use of your gentle suggestion. I think my main problem is about developing...
Writing Feedbacksajastu - Oct 5, 2017 / sajastu - Oct 11, 2017
|A person's worth should be judged by social status, material possessions or traditional values
4 - @tadey Hi, I'd like to give you an example to paraphrase the prompt: Opinions differ as... => These days,...
Writing Feedbacktadey - Oct 5, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 22, 2017
|[IELTS Task2] learning a different language benefits our lives apart from working and traveling
6 - Hi Katty, from what I can see from your essay is that shorten the paraphrasing. State your opinion in...
Writing Feedbackkatty1234600 - Oct 5, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 17, 2017
|Some people think that boarding schools are an exellent option for children, while others disagree
5 - Helloo Usman, you have met the IELTS criteria when it comes to writing task 2. This essay has covered...
Writing FeedbackUkiUsman - Oct 5, 2017 / eddies - Oct 22, 2017
|Social networking is an usefull thing if you use it in the right way.
5 - @Holt ,Thank you for your concern.. I am not very good at writting. And it it difficult for me...
Writing FeedbackEmyviadolorosa - Oct 5, 2017 / Emyviadolorosa - Oct 6, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: International tourism brings negative consequences for visited countries.
5 - hello, glad to read your essay. you wrote more than 250 words and you used well grammar but you...
Writing Feedbackpeachaddiction - Oct 5, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 23, 2017
|Juvenile delinquency in Technology- Grammar correction
2 - Rizka, since you are only asking for grammar correction, I will be instructing you on how to correct the...
Writing FeedbackRzkMg - Oct 5, 2017 / Holt - Oct 5, 2017
|What is better for students, living in boarding school or in their parents?
4 - @ayibram Hi, I'd like to make several corrections for you. => Those who supported the boarding (...) advantages...
Writing Feedbackayibram - Oct 4, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 5, 2017
|The children live at boarding school or the other places
4 - Matsuki, first of all, leave the religious references at the door. In a general English test, be it IELTS...
Writing FeedbackMastuki Xenoph - Oct 4, 2017 / Holt - Oct 4, 2017
|TOEFL: Nowadays working fast has more value than high precision at job?
4 - that wining winning the... office. and you don't start with a small letter after a full stop. many company...
Writing Feedbacksasan_91 - Oct 4, 2017 / Chichi9 - Oct 6, 2017
|Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people.
3 - Ahmad, since you did not provide the original prompt for my consideration and comparison with your paraphrasing. I cannot...
Writing FeedbackAhmad Faqhruddin - Oct 3, 2017 / Holt - Oct 4, 2017
|IELTS writing task 1: Accommodations for holidaymakers
Writing Feedbacksarahna - Oct 3, 2017 / sarahna - Oct 18, 2017
|WORST GIFT EVER (parakeet bird) - why, when
NEW - Worst gift ever My brother Simon has always wondered if he could get a parakeet. He had talked...
Writing FeedbackALLIWANTISYOU - Oct 2, 2017 / — -
|Some people embrace the concept that each type of crime should carry a fixed penalty [task2]
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 2, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 2, 2017
|Teaching foreign languages would be better for primary student than high school student
2 - Fiza, the score for this essay will automatically be a 1 because you are not discussing the correct prompt...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Oct 2, 2017 / Holt - Oct 2, 2017
|IELTS task 2: The Duty to Educate Children
3 - Hi Chang, I suggest the following conclusion revised from your own: In conclusion, the fact that schools can...
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Oct 2, 2017 / sarahna - Oct 3, 2017
|Issue Essay for GRE AWA section - Teaching using the positive actions method, skip the negatives
2 - Malik, this essay is not well developed. It has logic and reasoning presentation problems, grammar structure issues, and coherence...
Writing Feedbackmalikakbaar - Oct 2, 2017 / Holt - Oct 2, 2017
|[Task 2] In many countries, children are spending several hours each evening doing homework.
3 - Hi, I think that you should describe your opinion in the first paragraph, agree or disagree. In the second...
Writing Feedbackhappyfunny - Oct 2, 2017 / monopolymi - Oct 2, 2017
|ielts task 2 : - People should work a fixed number of hours per week
5 - Hi vipy, seeing it from your essay, in the second paragraph, avoid using the personal pronoun to convey your...
Writing Feedbackvipy411 - Oct 2, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 16, 2017
|International sports events like Football World Cup help in world peace. Do you agree or disagree?
2 - Hardeep, your opening paragraph is a run-on sentence that does not display a correct interpretation of the original prompt....
Writing Feedbackdeepsinghdhiman - Oct 1, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|TOEFL : Education is a necessity / Marriage is one of the most important decisions of life
3 - @Holt Thank you for the input. I am trying to learn how to write introduction paragraph properly. Then, I...
Writing Feedbackgreenman210 - Oct 1, 2017 / greenman210 - Oct 1, 2017
|The role of eco-tourism in society is educating for both traveller and local communities.
Writing Feedbackhuiiwen - Oct 1, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|[Task 2] Many governments think that the financial growth is a crucial factor for company existence
4 - @Holt Thank you for your explanation that clears my doubts. I've long been bewildered by the model essays that...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 1, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 2, 2017
|Contrast high schools and universities - Contrast Essay
6 - There are some grammatical and spelling errors . I think you mean "futher" is "further" or "shools" is "schools"...
Writing FeedbackHue Nguyen - Oct 1, 2017 / lamphuongta - Oct 10, 2017
|Humanistic Approach to Apply Law for Human - IELTS Writing Task 2
3 - @Holt Dear Mary Rose, Thank you very much for your feedback. I'll check again my background statement and will...
Writing Feedbackayibram - Oct 1, 2017 / ayibram - Oct 4, 2017
|All teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community
4 - @Ngatranhvt Hi, I'd like to make several corrections for you. The essay contains lots of spelling errors, which will...
Writing FeedbackNgatranhvt - Oct 1, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 3, 2017
|IELTS: - Some people believe that studying in a college or university is the best place for students
2 - Vipy, your total approach to the essay is wrong. There is no clear paraphrasing and the discussion that you...
Writing Feedbackvipy411 - Sep 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|TOEFL; We're making choice in every second of life - planning and organizing skills among youngsters
Writing Feedbackirisyukiji - Sep 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|Young people struggle to join the workforce, how to solve the problem?
4 - Chuyunana. your essay is going to fail in an actual test setting for one reason alone, you did not...
Writing FeedbackCHUYUNAN - Sep 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 1, 2017
|Unpaid community service should be a compulsory high school program, do you agree or disagree?
3 - Irene, I am sorry but your approach to the opening statement is not the proper one for this type...
Writing Feedbackmonopolymi - Sep 30, 2017 / Holt - Sep 30, 2017
|[IELTS 2]Because of computers the life is easier and more convenient or just complex and stressful?
3 - Plamena, this being an IELTS essay, you are not allowed to present your opinion or present any opinion within...
Writing Feedbackplamchiiii - Sep 29, 2017 / Holt - Sep 30, 2017
|More countries are opening their doors to welcome more tourist
5 - @Holt Thx for your feedback, your comment about introduction is true, I feel difficult to deliver the topic into...
Writing FeedbackAhmad Faqhruddin - Sep 29, 2017 / Ahmad Faqhruddin - Sep 30, 2017
|Machine Are New Able To Do The Work Which People Used To Perform. What are the pros and cons
3 - Tai, you are not discussing an argument essay based on this topic. As far as the prompt is concerned,...
Writing Feedbacktailv123 - Sep 29, 2017 / Holt - Sep 30, 2017
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