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|[IELTS TASK 1]The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Aug 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Aug 9, 2017
|Patience. What is your approach to problem-solving? TOEFL Independent Essay
3 - Majd, you are writing an academic essay. Therefore, the response needs to be direct and informative. You need not...
Writing FeedbackSFTBNWH11 - Aug 8, 2017 / Holt - Aug 9, 2017
|Study and other activities in student life
3 - Dear Holt, many thanks for your useful advice, it helps me a lot. I re-wrote the essay and hope...
Writing Feedbacknguyenquan - Aug 8, 2017 / nguyenquan - Aug 9, 2017
|Toefl Essay- Which of the following is the kind of friend you would prefer to have?
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 8, 2017 / Katthew Kim - Aug 10, 2017
|Ielts task 2 : technology provides opportunities as much as damages
4 - Susan, you have not approached this task 2 essay in the proper manner. From the very start, you have...
Writing Feedbacksmvicp - Aug 8, 2017 / Holt - Aug 8, 2017
|[IELTS TAKS 2] CAMBRIDGE 12 TEST 5 - INFORMATION SHARING
4 - It is considered by some that accessing to scientific research, business and academic world should be free while there...
Writing Feedbackhailung - Aug 8, 2017 / hailung - Aug 11, 2017
|Money as the reward for good grades in school
2 - Cindy, it is difficult for me to assess the impressive work that you have presented here. You did not...
Writing Feedbacknameaname - Aug 8, 2017 / Holt - Aug 8, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 1] CAMBRIDGE 12 - BAR CHART - PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES
Writing Feedbackhailung - Aug 7, 2017 / hailung - Aug 10, 2017
|Children should be taught to collaborate rather than trying to show who's better - IELTS writing
4 - @Shirely Fu Hello, miss Fu. Holt is a contributor, who is not allowed to review your essay twice or...
Writing FeedbackShirely Fu - Aug 7, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Aug 8, 2017
|Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it (just spend or invest in business, save)
2 - Nayaz, I would really appreciate it if you would include the actual prompt instructions for your essay practice test...
Writing FeedbackNayazah - Aug 7, 2017 / Holt - Aug 7, 2017
|Children' better chance for development - in a rural place or in a big city?
2 - Majd, you have not properly formatted this essay to the required outline for a TOEFL test. The opening paragraph...
Writing FeedbackSFTBNWH11 - Aug 7, 2017 / Holt - Aug 7, 2017
|IELTS task1 Ages of the populations in Yemen and Italy
4 - @Holt Thank you for all advice. I appreciate and will keep practicing my writing. Also, thank you for pointing...
Writing FeedbackWendy0604 - Aug 7, 2017 / Wendy0604 - Aug 10, 2017
|IELTS writing task 1 - The two pie charts about the types of communication.
3 - Yang, your essay does not follow the correct structure and form presentation for a Task 1 essay. Your first...
Writing Feedbackbachyangha - Aug 6, 2017 / Holt - Aug 7, 2017
|Robots will become smarter than humans and will take control of their society
2 - Cao, in my opinion, I believe that your essay will score between a 4-5 at best. Your essay has...
Writing Feedbackmathboy - Aug 6, 2017 / Holt - Aug 6, 2017
|Preservation of land for natural existence or human intervention
2 - Williams, the first thing that I notice about this essay is that you did not remember to post the...
Writing Feedbackliam_obdk - Aug 5, 2017 / Holt - Aug 6, 2017
|IELTS WRITING ESSAY ABOUT LEARNING A LANGUAGE AND A FOREIGN CULTURE
2 - Le, you need to familiarize yourself with the types of essays used in IELTS tests and how these are...
Writing Feedbackfuong0510 - Aug 5, 2017 / Holt - Aug 6, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1: the rate of smoking men declined gradually in Someland
Writing Feedbacktamdoan409 - Aug 5, 2017 / tamdoan409 - Aug 6, 2017
|Ielts task 2, topic: Law, type: Agree or disagree
3 - Tran, due to the fact that you did not properly discuss this essay, the score that you can get...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 5, 2017 / Holt - Aug 5, 2017
|Are the newspapers contents trustworthy?
3 - Cong, the next time you post an essay for review here, you need to post the original instructions and...
Writing Feedbacklecongminh1997 - Aug 4, 2017 / Holt - Aug 5, 2017
|The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the US between 1920 and 2000
3 - Admittedly, there will be complex graphs and simple graphs to discuss in the actual test. Since these topics are...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Aug 4, 2017 / Holt - Aug 4, 2017
|Toefl Writing, Television should be used to instruct people rather than to entertain them
4 - Matthew, you do not need to write an introduction for your original prompt statement each time. As a seasoned...
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 4, 2017 / Holt - Aug 4, 2017
|TOEFL essay- Write a letter about your experience in a foreign country
5 - Amin, this letter requires a touch of cultural difference beyond the obvious. It is a very sad letter that...
Writing FeedbackAminox - Aug 3, 2017 / Holt - Aug 4, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown in diagram
3 - @Echu You will not get a passing score for this essay. Even without the chart, I can see that...
Writing FeedbackEchu - Aug 3, 2017 / Holt - Aug 14, 2017
|People treat their birds, cats, dogs as a part of family.
2 - Ngo, the next time that you post an essay for review here, please include the original prompt that you...
Writing FeedbackNDLinh - Aug 3, 2017 / Holt - Aug 3, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: The low birth rate and its effects in the future
3 - Hi Holt, Could you specify 5 full developed statement paragraphs. Help me to understand please. I refer...
Writing Feedbacknhhung_80 - Aug 3, 2017 / nhhung_80 - Aug 3, 2017
|Essay about TOEFL question 'Having time alone is the most ideal way to relax and relieve stress'
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 3, 2017 / Katthew Kim - Aug 3, 2017
|"Who have to pay for the care of the elders? Government or family ?"
Writing Feedbackmatheusandrade - Aug 3, 2017 / matheusandrade - Aug 3, 2017
|Crime must be punished, the question is how? IELTS
4 - @near9 You did explain 2 opinions in your essay. But you did not discuss the opinions as dictated by...
Writing Feedbacknear9 - Aug 2, 2017 / Holt - Aug 3, 2017
|IELTS task1 Divorced rates in Finland and Sweden in a bar chart
3 - Dear @Holt Thank you so much for providing the instruction to me. I REALLY APPRECIATE your prompt response and...
Writing FeedbackWendy0604 - Aug 2, 2017 / Wendy0604 - Aug 3, 2017
|IELTS Task2 Protecting the variety of languages
2 - Hi Shirely Fu, This is my contribution in regards to your essay.Please help me with my essay ...
Writing FeedbackShirely Fu - Aug 2, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Aug 2, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] Traffic congestion - the proposition of solution
Writing Feedbackbruceng - Aug 2, 2017 / bruceng - Aug 2, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] (Agree and Disagree) Books and televisions
4 - Hang, the agreement that you have with the opinion should have been indicated in a proper manner in the...
Writing Feedbackxhang24 - Aug 1, 2017 / Holt - Aug 1, 2017
|IELTS TASK 1 - LINE GRAPH - Number of inhabitants in the Oregon, USA (with picture)
2 - @CHIHYULIN while I appreciate the url for the graph that you provided, it is a must that you instead...
Writing FeedbackCHIHYULIN - Aug 1, 2017 / Holt - Aug 1, 2017
|Wealth and Power / Personal Growth - IELTS
2 - Anh, let me start by helping you with some advice about how to better develop an opening statement. You...
Writing Feedbackpiay - Aug 1, 2017 / Holt - Aug 1, 2017
|Writing task 2 Is offering online courses a positive or negative development?
3 - Hi, I found your essay quite clear but you should stress on the advantage part if you claim it...
Writing Feedbackhi021132 - Aug 1, 2017 / piay - Aug 1, 2017
|Public health improvement by increasing the number of sports facilities.IELTS task2-cambridge8-test3
5 - To sum up, although increasing the number of sports facilities are a good way to improve the public health,...
Writing FeedbackUyennhuy211005 - Aug 1, 2017 / Uyennhuy211005 - Aug 1, 2017
|"Should state college tuition be free?" Hi All, Can you help me to correct this paragraph
8 - @Holt Thanks for your advice.I was trying to write one paragraph each time so I can get benefit...
Writing FeedbackAshkan123 - Aug 1, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Aug 4, 2017
|Reason why people sometimes prefer ride bicycle when commuting to work instead of using eg. car
4 - Maildor, I really do not think that the prompt you posted and the supposedly charts are related. However, the...
Writing Feedbackmaildor - Jul 31, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Aug 1, 2017
|The extinction of languages and how to prevent it - IELTS
4 - Shirely, your essay shows that you did not spare at least 1 minute to understand what was required of...
Writing FeedbackShirely Fu - Jul 31, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Jul 31, 2017
|WRITING TASK 2: Every year several languages die out.
5 - Hi, I am a bit confused with the idea included in the second paragraph because I do not understand...
Writing Feedbacktrangngth00 - Jul 31, 2017 / hi021132 - Aug 1, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2 - University purpose opinions
4 - Hi, I think it is better to add some examples on top of your explanation because it makes the...
Writing Feedbackpiay - Jul 31, 2017 / hi021132 - Aug 1, 2017
|Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you
3 - Thanks for your great help. It was the first time that I posted my essay, I'm so sorry because...
Writing Feedbackhongngoc1006 - Jul 31, 2017 / hongngoc1006 - Aug 1, 2017
|Ielts Writing task 2 - mandatory contribution to the society?
2 - Uyen, due to the fact that you did not provide the complete prompt instructions for this essay, I will...
Writing FeedbackAlicea - Jul 31, 2017 / Holt - Jul 31, 2017
|Task 2. Write about: laziness and how it influences our life
Writing FeedbackThanhvp - Jul 31, 2017 / Thanhvp - Aug 1, 2017
|IELTS Tesk 2 - Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools.
3 - Hi joan, I think you shouldnt take a specific person (your friend) as an example. Instead, you could have...
Writing Feedbackweijoanshih - Jul 31, 2017 / piay - Jul 31, 2017
|IELTS Task1 - Land degradation (Cambridge 8 Test 1)
4 - Hi, I think you should make more effort on the structure of the essay. After the introduction paragraph, it...
Writing FeedbackAnnieLZY - Jul 31, 2017 / hi021132 - Aug 1, 2017
|My life in the United States. I need help with my college essay.
2 - Baki, the essay you wrote does not accurately detail the American Dream that you are pursuing. This is simply...
Writing FeedbackPlexus - Jul 30, 2017 / Holt - Jul 31, 2017
|My most unforgettable meal
4 - Jessie as a simple statement that describes a meal that you remember, this essay is sufficient. It delivers all...
Writing Feedbackjessiewuwu - Jul 30, 2017 / Holt - Aug 1, 2017
|Childhood experience which leave lifelong Impressions
5 - @okorobiadimma14 Thank you indeed Okoye, for pointing out the errors in my essay. As per your great input,...
Writing FeedbackRiti - Jul 30, 2017 / Riti - Jul 31, 2017
|[IELTS]Some people think that children should be studying all the mandatory subjects
7 - Hi Karen, there are some grammar mistakes in your essay and I've corrected a few. Remember to proofread your...
Writing Feedbackpmuji999 - Jul 29, 2017 / AnnieLZY - Jul 31, 2017
|The truth is sometimes caustic and unpleasant to hear, although very important for us
3 - @Holt Hi, I'm preparing for a GRE AWA section. This is in respond to the GRE Issue section. Clearly,...
Writing FeedbackBharti2792 - Jul 29, 2017 / Bharti2792 - Jul 29, 2017
|IELTS: how do you find the phenomenon of working mothers and fathers dealing with household duties?
2 - Quan, excellent reasoning discussion. Bad opening statement. You almost had the opening statement perfected, except that you fouled up...
Writing Feedbacknguyenquan - Jul 29, 2017 / Holt - Jul 29, 2017
|IELTS: Beside the internet's advantages, some people think that the internet brings bad effects.
3 - Well done, you have answered the prompt thoroughly although some areas in terms of paragraph development need more rooms...
Writing Feedbackroyalnguyen - Jul 29, 2017 / eddies - Jul 29, 2017
|Essay about the shortage of living kidney donors
3 - Eric, in terms of research this is very well done. However, in terms of presentation, it does not follow...
Writing FeedbackErictamayo - Jul 28, 2017 / Holt - Jul 29, 2017
|Task 2: Exams should be replaced by an overall grade based on the whole period of study.
4 - @Holt I'm sorry. This is the full topic: "In schools, most courses finish with a final exam to assess...
Writing Feedbackjadeatoz - Jul 28, 2017 / jadeatoz - Jul 29, 2017
|MY PERSONAL STATEMENT (workshop human right and drug policy)
2 - Ayutaa, this personal statement is not effective in showing the reasons why you would make a successful participant in...
Writing Feedbackkendalj - Jul 28, 2017 / Holt - Jul 28, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 1 - Water used in different countries in 2000.
5 - I think you can put more conjunctions (besides, furthermore, however, etc.) in your sentences because you used too much...
Writing FeedbackR_Sand03 - Jul 28, 2017 / CHIHYULIN - Aug 1, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - WHAT TOURIST CAN DO
4 - This essay is lack of advanced vocabulary and structures, there are some words that you repeated many times. You...
Writing Feedbackghazali - Jul 28, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 3, 2017
|Discuss the similarities and differences between office workers and factory workers
Writing Feedbackcauvongnang - Jul 28, 2017 / jadeatoz - Jul 29, 2017
|In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge.
4 - @songax That is very helpful. Thank you so much for helping me. @Holt This is my first attempt...
Writing Feedbacknear9 - Jul 27, 2017 / near9 - Jul 28, 2017
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