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|Response to an article on why liberal arts are important
Writing FeedbackNoBeesHere - Jan 16, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|IELTS - several sources as energy consumption in US in 1980 and its forecasting in 2050
2 - Ayu, for this sort of predictive report essay, you must learn how to format your sentences in the future...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 16, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|[IELTS task2] Architects shouldn't worry about producing building as a work of art. Agree or not?
Writing Feedbackseaflower412 - Jan 16, 2017 / drjanck - Jan 17, 2017
|Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos.
5 - Janaki, the essay is asking you to do a number of things before you present your opinion. That is,...
Writing Feedbackdrjanck - Jan 15, 2017 / Holt - Jan 16, 2017
|Compare the data on a global scale - report
3 - Well done! Here are some suggestions to improve: At the endfinally , India and Africa ... shows the...
Writing FeedbackRin El_Faariha - Jan 15, 2017 / sweetsenior - Jan 15, 2017
|Consumer societies' where money and possessions are given too much importance.
6 - Hi @drjanck , overall your essay is good, but perhaps you can use complex sentence for some statements. then,...
Writing Feedbackdrjanck - Jan 14, 2017 / ayuriska - Jan 16, 2017
|Looking for a way out - Alcohol Intervention
3 - Xinyi, if you are already a college student or a high school interested in writing, your school, college, or...
Writing Feedbackxinyi0913 - Jan 14, 2017 / Holt - Jan 14, 2017
|To what extent you agree with the idea that some teenagers lead an unhealthy lifestyle?
2 - Hello Liu! Hopefully my feedback is helpful for you. I've considered your points and read your essay as...
Writing FeedbackCaliabi - Jan 13, 2017 / CDuke93 - Jan 13, 2017
|You have just spent a weekend at a friend's house and forgot your coat containing some belongings
2 - Jaya, if you are going to make up information about the value of the coat, saying you left your...
Writing Feedbackjaikrishna - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|Writing 2: people think instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it
Writing FeedbackArlen - Jan 13, 2017 / skazo - Jan 21, 2017
|Too much of financial dissonance in this world
4 - Your structure is good. On the other hand, you have made many grammar mistakes and I think you should...
Writing Feedbackfidel123 - Jan 13, 2017 / krempetkov - Jan 14, 2017
|Given pie charts compare the number of inhabitants in Yemen and Italy in 2000
5 - Ayu, why are you indicating the information in the essay based upon thousands of percent when he chart is...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Feb 2, 2017
|The proportion of telephone calls in the UK
4 - Ayu, there are instances when you should use a comma and when you should a period in your sentence...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 19, 2017
|IELTS TASK 1 - MAP (comparison the development of some tourist facilities)
6 - Ayu, the tense to use in all of these report essays will be the past tense because the information...
Writing Feedbackayuriska - Jan 13, 2017 / Holt - Jan 17, 2017
|Ielts writing TASK 2 - Sports professionals don't deserve such high salaries for their work
3 - hai george, well in my opinion sportmen duty is to not just entertain citizens, but also become a figure...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Jan 12, 2017 / ayuriska - Jan 13, 2017
|It is important to rest the mind during leisure time.
4 - Chau, while your essay speaks of valid reasons for resting the mind during leisure time, it fails to take...
Writing FeedbackChau Tran - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 14, 2017
|Internet opinion from a common user
4 - Jaya, kindly provide the complete prompt instructions for our comparison with the essay that you wrote. It is important...
Writing Feedbackjaikrishna - Jan 12, 2017 / Holt - Jan 13, 2017
|The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
8 - @hongnguyentp92 I hope my suggestion would be useful. On the first paragraph, you tried to paraphrase "produce" with...
Writing Feedbackhongnguyentp92 - Jan 11, 2017 / bagusetyawan - Feb 27, 2017
|Besides the economy, there are many types of progress worth our attention as well.
4 - @ngokhoa99 Thanks for your correction and I have a question that whether to have an example in essay is...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Jan 11, 2017 / Arlen - Jan 13, 2017
|The Urgency of Prohibition to Mobile Phone Utilization in Public Places (Writing IELTS Task 2)
4 - Thanks for your suggestion @nandasharma. I have to admit that i did it intentionally, and that is my method...
Writing Feedbackilmuholic - Jan 11, 2017 / ilmuholic - Jan 11, 2017
|Are the real teachers replaceable?
Writing Feedbackvonhuoclan - Jan 11, 2017 / Arlen - Jan 11, 2017
|Writing Task 2: People claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled.
3 - Arlen, you have to clearly show your opinion. It seem that there is no a completion in your writing....
Writing FeedbackArlen - Jan 10, 2017 / ilmuholic - Jan 11, 2017
|The possession of car in a proportion of no car, one car, two cars, and more than two cars in Canada
4 - Hello, First of all, the words account doesn't meet the 150 words requirement. I think your sentences address...
Writing Feedbackilmuholic - Jan 10, 2017 / Arlen - Jan 11, 2017
|How to write an essay about TV-watching habits?
5 - Your writing is good and cover all the question which needed to answer. If only you can expand the...
Writing FeedbackSarasped - Jan 9, 2017 / ilmuholic - Jan 10, 2017
|Topic is "Science, not art or literature must be taught at universities" do you agree or not?
3 - Hajar, first of all, you will need to learn how to develop more interesting titles for your posts other...
Writing FeedbackHajar rifena - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|Writing Task 1: average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in four countries
3 - A little inputs for the beginning. The provided line chart illustrates compares the trend average of...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Jan 9, 2017 / Streetwalker - Jan 9, 2017
|Raising driving age from 18 to 25.
6 - Unfortunately, that is not enough. You see the essay prompt is meant to test your knowledge of current events...
Writing FeedbackGemyNitron - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|A white paper ready to be filled. Kids' the best teacher is their parent.
2 - Housseyne , since this is the first time that you have posted here, I am absolutely sure that you...
Writing FeedbackNADOUR - Jan 9, 2017 / Holt - Jan 9, 2017
|Most countries allow 18-year-olds to drive a car.
3 - @eetester Just a few things I noticed: "While some people support 18 ... Others, believe that driver's license ..."...
Writing Feedbackeetester - Jan 9, 2017 / clr - Jan 9, 2017
|Solutions for traffic jams in Ho Chi Minh City
Writing FeedbackAndrea178 - Jan 8, 2017 / Holt - Jan 8, 2017
|What would I do if I were a billionaire?
5 - Dears Your essay has some gramarical problems . For examle, let's find out what would I do and where...
Writing FeedbackVarlamow - Jan 8, 2017 / maitouyen1 - Jan 27, 2017
|Writing IELTS Task 1 (Diagram) of recreation places in Britain in the last year of the 20th century
4 - dear @ilmuholic firstly, please make sure that your overview is the summation of all that you discuss in your...
Writing Feedbackilmuholic - Jan 8, 2017 / liv_ryu - Jan 9, 2017
|Toefl writing: technology has apparently assisted our kids to become more creative
3 - Hello Olivia Yang, I will give you several suggestions 1. Since this opinion essay, I think you'd better...
Writing Feedbackolivia yang - Jan 7, 2017 / faizunaa17 - Jan 8, 2017
|Introductions and Overviews IELTS
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Jan 7, 2017 / Holt - Jan 9, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2 - Compare the merits and demerits of having a car.
3 - Hello, In my opinion, I think it is a well-organized article and answer your question-- I don't think...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Jan 6, 2017 / Arlen - Jan 9, 2017
|Essay about causes of crimes - the main reasons are the lack of education, religion and drugs.
Writing FeedbackAbderrahime - Jan 5, 2017 / Lorelly - Jan 6, 2017
|Many people believe that the internet is very useful for communication, however I disagree...
5 - @ichaa I think you should give your opinion clearly that whether you think the internet is an excellent means...
Writing Feedbackichaa - Jan 5, 2017 / Nuverte0452 - Jan 5, 2017
|The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom
2 - About you first sentence - you should always paraphrase the question. Do not give any addition information, neither any...
Writing Feedbackichaa - Jan 5, 2017 / krempetkov - Jan 7, 2017
|Writing Task 2 opinion's people about internet using
Writing FeedbackFiza26 - Jan 5, 2017 / Arlen - Jan 13, 2017
|Citizens impression on the WWW cyberspace
2 - Hi, Mr. septa! actually I appropriate the meaning of your essay, but unfortunately you haven't done your essay 250...
Writing Feedbackseptaafrian0554 - Jan 5, 2017 / ichaa - Jan 5, 2017
|Internet as communication medium and tools for search information.
2 - @gribigribi Hello gribi In this occasion I would give you some of the suggestion to tweak more of...
Writing Feedbackgribigribi - Jan 5, 2017 / Diazalichsan - Jan 5, 2017
|Writing Task 2 Sample for IELTS: Discussion and opinion about Internet
3 - Hello, First of all, I think this article doesn't match the 250 words requirement. The body part (paragraph...
Writing Feedbackbasohamdanianis - Jan 5, 2017 / Arlen - Jan 9, 2017
|The Line graphs of how much people in UK and US to spend on Petrol
8 - Diaz, good work on presenting more than the minimum number of words in your essay. That said, you should...
Writing FeedbackDiazalichsan - Jan 5, 2017 / Holt - Feb 3, 2017
|How much petrol expenditure in US and UK influence budget of these countries
3 - hello mr septa... your writing is so good, but we have some corrections... the first, please write more than...
Writing Feedbackseptaafrian0554 - Jan 5, 2017 / rizal - Jan 5, 2017
|The graph presents information about comparison of spending on petrol between people in the UK & USA
4 - Grienda, for starters, always remember to include a copy of illustration that your report is based on when you...
Writing Feedbackgribigribi - Jan 5, 2017 / Holt - Jan 19, 2017
|Line Graph Task 1 IELTS sample 2017: Petrol expense in USA and UK
2 - Hello Mr.Baso.. Your writing so amazing... unfortunately, your writing less than 150 words, because writing task 1 must...
Writing Feedbackbasohamdanianis - Jan 5, 2017 / Fiza26 - Jan 5, 2017
|Film Spectators in Asian and Europe Countries
2 - Hello mr.@septaafrian0554 I have a few corrections for you . - movie theather - movie theater - ......
Writing Feedbackseptaafrian0554 - Jan 4, 2017 / BiburLicek - Jan 4, 2017
|The cinema viewing vigures for all films, in millions
3 - hai @Diazalichsan i think you should explain bit about other genres like romance and comedy, instead of describing all...
Writing FeedbackDiazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017 / ayuriska - Jan 13, 2017
|Spendings number for various goods in some part of the world
3 - Alright Fiza, I would give you a brief suggestions regarding to your fabulous essay. First, actually, you...
Writing FeedbackFiza26 - Jan 4, 2017 / Diazalichsan - Jan 5, 2017
|The proportion of primary need expenditures in Malaysia and Japan in 2010
2 - @ichaa I've made the following necessary corrections. I would focus more over structuring your article....
Writing Feedbackichaa - Jan 4, 2017 / nandasharma - Jan 4, 2017
|Pie Chart Task 1 IELTS Sample: typical house spendings in Japan and Malaysia
7 - Hi Baso, Despite those grammatical mistakes, I think you essay is not solid enough. The way you compare two...
Writing Feedbackbasohamdanianis - Jan 4, 2017 / MH_tw - Feb 6, 2017
|The average family expenses in Malaysia and Japan
2 - @septaafrian0554 Hello, Septa, It was such a great essay by the way, however, you need to tweak more of...
Writing Feedbackseptaafrian0554 - Jan 4, 2017 / Diazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017
|Pie Chart: Comparison of Household in Japan and Malaysia in 2010
4 - Hello Diaz.. sharing is fun right?, i have some suggestions based on your essay ... was in other...
Writing FeedbackDiazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017 / Fiza26 - Jan 4, 2017
|The pie charts presents the overall family spending in Japan and Malaysia
3 - @gribigribi First and foremost, it was such a good essay for writing task 1 IELTS, all the components have...
Writing Feedbackgribigribi - Jan 4, 2017 / Diazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017
|Ielts task 1 - Information about the sales during an ordinary October week at a small restaurant
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Jan 3, 2017 / blueknightiris - Jan 3, 2017
|"When in Rome, do as Romans do" Travelling and promotion of globalisation
2 - Well, there are a few problems with your Introduction paragraph. Your first sentence should paraphrase the question, while...
Writing Feedbackdang200993 - Jan 2, 2017 / krempetkov - Jan 3, 2017
|Zoos are capable of preserving species that are facing extinction.
2 - Hi, your grammar is very good. In your intro, I would not write "This essay will do this, this...
Writing Feedbackquora123 - Jan 1, 2017 / TJLuschen - Jan 1, 2017
|Essay; Relationship between old and young people in the modern world
Writing FeedbackAnna M - Dec 31, 2016 / Anna M - Jan 1, 2017
|The data on how fast world wide population growth in numbers and statistics of urban population
3 - In your introduction, you should explain what information both graphs are presenting. The bar graph provides information about...
Writing FeedbackMuhayyun Mappare - Dec 30, 2016 / krempetkov - Jan 3, 2017
|Comparison of the society growth and urban areas
2 - Hello, Overall, the content of this essay is good and understandable. You draw information from the graphs well...
Writing Feedbackhanasufiarahma - Dec 30, 2016 / lynzee22 - Dec 30, 2016
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