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|Article Summary - Overworking style in Japan
3 - Hello! I will give you some opinions about your summary (1) ... almost suicide case isin Japan, It...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Oct 31, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 1, 2016
|Article Summary - Did China discover America
4 - Hi Lincoln. these are a few improvements for your summary. GOOD LUCK The majority OF people argue (...) before...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Oct 31, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Nov 1, 2016
|'Since I was paralyzed..' - College Essay, give advice
5 - HI Lydia, I do suggest removing that line because it doesn't really offer much of a relation to the...
Writing FeedbackLydiaFigueroa - Oct 31, 2016 / Holt - Nov 4, 2016
|I believe that everyone is a leader because every great leadership start from self-leadership
Writing Feedbackdebby17 - Oct 31, 2016 / debby17 - Nov 1, 2016
|Over 200 million people are suffering from Malaria, the disease caused by mosquitos; TED summary
4 - Hello inda18. actually, your essay has interesting topic. but let me give you some suggestions: 1. don't forget...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Oct 31, 2016 / badafebriani17 - Nov 1, 2016
|Article Summary : The Causes of Acne
3 - Hello. inda18. this is my suggestion. (...) form new structure called bio films making the ... 3....
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Oct 31, 2016 / badafebriani17 - Nov 1, 2016
|How to stop the deadly disease that is spread by mosquitoes? Mosquito, malaria, and education
4 - @dils I think you should try an oppening that invites the reader to engage to your story, try something...
Writing Feedbackdils - Oct 31, 2016 / Lixtik - Oct 31, 2016
|The peak of malarial death was a bit over 5 million in 1930.
2 - Dear misskitty, you have a good summary, however I have some advice for you It is essential to...
Writing Feedbackmisskitty22 - Oct 31, 2016 / Hujjatul19 - Nov 1, 2016
|Governments should invest more in public services, but arts cannot be neglected
4 - Hellooo! Allow me to give you some suggestion. ... in which most of government investments ... ... not...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk - Oct 31, 2016 / nurainiyusuf16 - Nov 2, 2016
|Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned.
2 - Hi Muhammad, below are my thoughts on your essay with the focus on the right words to incorporate in...
Writing Feedbacknaelendra - Oct 31, 2016 / justivy03 - Oct 31, 2016
|In the modern world, we compete each other to grab the level of success. We forget about our health
2 - Next cause --> you should use more coherence words such as In addition, moreover (maybe it would make your...
Writing FeedbackIvanMS027 - Oct 31, 2016 / intanrahayu11 - Oct 31, 2016
|The information about the grade of education of Bulgarian who looked for a chance to live abroad
3 - Hello ivan! I will give you some opinions about your essay. (1) ... grade of education of Bulgarian...
Writing FeedbackIvanMS027 - Oct 31, 2016 / septiadara29 - Nov 1, 2016
|To persuade the policymakers and influential people in the government - Chevening "Networking"
3 - @ichanpants89 Hi, Thank you very much for your remark, and it was certainly very helpful. One more question, do...
Writing Feedbackarifkoushik - Oct 31, 2016 / arifkoushik - Nov 1, 2016
|Being healthy is not an easy task today, but there are always ways to manage this
3 - Aloha ichanpants89, thank you for your suggestion, I hope you want to double check my essay. Here is my...
Writing Feedbackibe13 - Oct 31, 2016 / ibe13 - Oct 31, 2016
|Lightbulb made of modified E. coli fuses Biology and Electronics
2 - @Yonathan Hi Jonathan, I think you have a really good entry here. try to pay a bit more attention...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Oct 31, 2016 / Lixtik - Oct 31, 2016
|Not many high educated Bulgarians are interested emmigration abroad
4 - ... while higher education and primary and lower education ... 1) The repetition make it not look effective....
Writing Feedbackibe13 - Oct 31, 2016 / faizunaa17 - Nov 1, 2016
|An appropriate colour can result in comfort and motivation, therefore capacity for work and health
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Oct 31, 2016 / naelendra - Oct 31, 2016
|Bulgarian citizens who lived outside their country, based on school level
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Oct 31, 2016 / eve01 - Nov 1, 2016
|A new study reveals that happy people have a great sense to cheer their spouse up
3 - Hi Dila, here's another one from my end; - Happiness is related to the physical - happier are...
Writing Feedbackdils - Oct 31, 2016 / justivy03 - Oct 31, 2016
|Nowadays it is very difficult to stay healthy in this modern world
3 - Hi Nur, below are my thoughts on your essay, first of all, the tittle, it's missing a word or...
Writing FeedbackAnna94 - Oct 31, 2016 / justivy03 - Oct 31, 2016
|The increasing damage of pollution caused by aero transport emerges an opinion to reduce air travel
Writing Feedbacklanazaldo - Oct 31, 2016 / justivy03 - Oct 31, 2016
|The decreasing figure of animals and plants in tropical forests / threats to plant life
NEW - The graph and chart below give information about species extinctions and threats to plant life. Data of decreasing...
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|The Economist - What are the candidates' plans for America's budget?
3 - ... between Barack Obama and one candidate of Amerika president selectionAmerica presidential election. When the Barack Obama's era, they...
Writing FeedbackMathew88 - Oct 31, 2016 / amrillahmk - Oct 31, 2016
|Air pollution and planes. The government should look for a solution in the industrial sector instead
2 - @Kimichi89 Hi Kimichi, I would say that argument against factories are not strong enough. You might want to elaborate...
Writing FeedbackKimichi89 - Oct 31, 2016 / arifkoushik - Oct 31, 2016
|Although air travel becomes the easiest way for massive people to transport, it should be reduced
4 - Hello Gigih12! Allow me to give you some suggestion. air pollution become become (...) that people face...
Writing FeedbackGigih12 - Oct 31, 2016 / nurainiyusuf16 - Nov 1, 2016
|The developing, modern world makes very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle
Writing FeedbackReskiRamadani88 - Oct 31, 2016 / ryan31 - Nov 1, 2016
|A number of Bulgarians with different education, who plan to continue their live in other countries
3 - HELLO, here my suggestions for you Although, there is[was a] small decrease in the percentage [in] every category...
Writing FeedbackReskiRamadani88 - Oct 31, 2016 / Anna94 - Nov 1, 2016
|The perspective of the people about a healthy lifestyle
Writing Feedbackbadafebriani17 - Oct 31, 2016 / nurainiyusuf16 - Nov 3, 2016
|I disagree that the air travel is the big cause to generate big air pollution across the globe
Writing Feedbackhitam_manis - Oct 31, 2016 / Kimichi89 - Oct 31, 2016
|The idea of banned air transportation is not the best solution for air pollution
4 - Nowadays, many people travelled around the world faster and more easilyeasier, thanks to air transportation. ... of their efficiency...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Oct 31, 2016 / amrillahmk - Oct 31, 2016
|Over time, the people's lifestyle had been changed. The technology can be a main factor for it
2 - hi.. good writing.. I have some suggestions.. ... people's lifestyle had been[you mean that you want to make...
Writing FeedbackSarlindaDS_27 - Oct 31, 2016 / lanazaldo - Oct 31, 2016
|The plane contributes to pollute the atmosphere because it uses the fossil fuel
3 - Hi nda18. Here are my suggestions for your essay. Some people think that the only way to prevent...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Oct 31, 2016 / IvanMS027 - Nov 1, 2016
|Information of Bulgarian people who remain in country after graduation for continuing their studies
3 - Hello sarlindaDS_27 I have a twice advice to you, hope it can help you elementary school or lower...
Writing FeedbackSarlindaDS_27 - Oct 31, 2016 / Mathew88 - Oct 31, 2016
|Air transportation in today's world is popular not only for traveler but also for worker or student
Writing Feedbackalfa7 - Oct 31, 2016 / Abrahamlincoln - Nov 14, 2016
|The dilemma of practicing the new stuff or merely following the previous approaches.
2 - hello @sinahector there are several suggestions for you. here we go ..., man has made a tremendous amount...
Writing Feedbacksinahector - Oct 31, 2016 / hitam_manis - Oct 31, 2016
|Public libraries should be preserved, and these are not a waste of public money
NEW - Some people say that public libraries are an important public resource and should be free, others say that they...
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|Bulgaria immigrate - is there a relation between intelligence and willingness to immigration?
2 - Hello pramudia27. i think your essay is pretty good. but let me give you some suggestions. i like your...
Writing FeedbackPramudia27 - Oct 31, 2016 / badafebriani17 - Oct 31, 2016
|There is no doubt that air travel takes a part of responsibility to make the air pollution.
Writing Feedbacksasariri - Oct 31, 2016 / alfa7 - Oct 31, 2016
|I agree, that the aircraft can make human avoid the impact of air pollution on the earth.
Writing Feedbackmymelody - Oct 31, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Oct 31, 2016
|Some people think that air transportation usage needs to be cut to lower air pollution.
3 - Hi fauziyah let m give you some correction ... declared that the most agent cause of air pollution...
Writing Feedbackfauziyahtami - Oct 31, 2016 / Yonathan - Oct 31, 2016
|If you want to free your time to start live healthier, just make it happen!
2 - Hello Pramudiana27. i think your essay is pretty good, but this is my suggestion. 1. Meanwhile, others have opposite...
Writing FeedbackPramudia27 - Oct 31, 2016 / badafebriani17 - Oct 31, 2016
|Article Summary - Liberty moves north
3 - Hello, i will give you suggestion: Please check your tense using: Even there are has been a proliferation of...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Oct 31, 2016 / ReskiRamadani88 - Oct 31, 2016
|In the modern era, demanding of aviation company increases dramatically. Impact on the air quality.
3 - aloha @Mathew88 overall, your essay has unclear idea. Therefore, I, as a reader, cannot fully understand what you...
Writing FeedbackMathew88 - Oct 31, 2016 / ibe13 - Oct 31, 2016
|A comparison of the information about the proportion of Bulgarians who want to immigrate
2 - Aloha Meireza (1) "who have" looks common on your essay. You'd better say; "with"//"in"//"having" to change that phrase,...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Oct 31, 2016 / ibe13 - Oct 31, 2016
|I totally disagree that banning air travel is the only strategy to stop air pollution.
7 - Thanks for all the corrections and suggestions from you all guys, I really appreciate the comments. I will try...
Writing Feedbackmisskitty22 - Oct 31, 2016 / misskitty22 - Nov 1, 2016
|There are other elements (than air travel) which contribute most to the atmosphere pollution
3 - Hello, your essay is good enough. You explained you reason and the reasons about this problem in the paragraph...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Oct 31, 2016 / ReskiRamadani88 - Nov 1, 2016
|It will be hard for people who ignore their health to have a healthy lifestyle.
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Oct 31, 2016 / ifraanisa05 - Nov 1, 2016
|Fast food eaten by Australia Teenagers over 25-year period
2 - Hello Hope you doing well, lemme give you some suggestion The breakdown of information about [....] dropped dramatically...
Writing Feedbackamrillahmk - Oct 31, 2016 / fauziyahtami - Oct 31, 2016
|The chart shows information about educational stage of Bulgarian who wanted study to overseas
2 - Hi BadaFebriani, Kindly find my remarks below in order to significantly improve your writing skill, especially in writing an...
Writing Feedbackbadafebriani17 - Oct 31, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Oct 31, 2016
|The number of Bulgarian community which move to live overseas, divided into education level
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Oct 31, 2016 / ibe13 - Oct 31, 2016
|Restricting the air travel to prevent air pollution
Writing Feedbackdils - Oct 31, 2016 / nda18 - Oct 31, 2016
|It depends on ourselves, how much efforts we do to be fit and healthy.
4 - Hi ms. Nuraini. Here are my suggestions towards your essay: At present, a healthy life stylelifestylehavehas become a...
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Oct 31, 2016 / IvanMS027 - Oct 31, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Bulgarians who wanted to live in another country
3 - Hi Annisa, Here's my analysis towards your report summary of IELTS task 1. I hope you can follow through...
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Oct 31, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Oct 31, 2016
|There are opponent statements about how to get a healthy lifestyle in this modern world.
Writing Feedbackifraanisa05 - Oct 31, 2016 / SarlindaDS_27 - Oct 31, 2016
|The percentage of Bulgarians abroad who have secondary education was higher than others
3 - Hello Miss Willy :) Let's discuss your summary :) The chart shows about => (redundant preposition )...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Oct 31, 2016 / SarlindaDS_27 - Oct 31, 2016
|Over the years, an issue dealing with air pollution has been emerging.
4 - Hi Sman, I believe this is the first time I will review your essay and just like everyone here...
Writing FeedbackUcha MSN - Oct 31, 2016 / justivy03 - Oct 31, 2016
|TOEFL task2: The more money people have, the more they should give away to charity.
2 - Firstly, this is their social responsibilities.The government needs a lot of money to build infrastructures such as schools and...
Writing Feedbackfanceen - Oct 31, 2016 / Pramudia27 - Oct 31, 2016
|It is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle - habits change is necessary.
2 - Hello Septia You have a good summary I have some corrections for you ... people who think about...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Oct 31, 2016 / andika08 - Nov 1, 2016
|How many educated Bulgarians leave their country - the chart
2 - Hi Septia, Please take a closer look at my contribution below. I hope this would be helpful for your...
Writing Feedbackseptiadara29 - Oct 31, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Oct 31, 2016
|WRITING TASK II - LACK ARTISTIC TALENT ON CHILDREN
3 - a well-structured essay, i love it although there are some grammar mistakes on other creative and practical lessons...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Oct 31, 2016 / amrillahmk - Oct 31, 2016
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