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|IN MODERN WORLD, THE IMAGE IS BECOMING A MORE POWERFUL WAY OF COMMUNICATING THAN THE WRITTEN WORD
NEW - Hello¡ I am applying to a College program in Canada, and how English is not my first language, I...
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|Percentage of Australian population who did exercises regularly in 2010
2 - @mynhung as i know about task 1, you must reach 150 words at least. the first problem is that...
Writing Feedbackmynhung - Jun 13, 2019 / Hammy - Jun 13, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - DESCRIBING THE DATA FROM TABLE
3 - @Wendynguyen803 Hi there! Let me try to provide a substantial feedback for your essay. First and foremost,...
Writing FeedbackWendynguyen803 - Jun 13, 2019 / Maria - Jun 19, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2 - Children spend time playing computer
Writing Feedbackacynguyen0909 - Jun 13, 2019 / acynguyen0909 - Jun 14, 2019
|Pictures - Describe the cutting tools
Writing Feedbackbuiminhese - Jun 13, 2019 / Dang Khoa - Jun 15, 2019
|The percentage of national expenditure on three different categories of products and services
Writing Feedbackphamtruongueh - Jun 12, 2019 / phamtruongueh - Jun 12, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Is global warming real and should we spend time debating other social issues?
2 - @tplinh Hello there. First and foremost, try to optimize your essay through merging altogether lines that are quite...
Writing Feedbacktplinh - Jun 12, 2019 / Maria - Jun 12, 2019
|Sport activities and universities should be given the same amount of money?
Writing Feedbackcauchysang - Jun 12, 2019 / cauchysang - Jun 12, 2019
|Writing task 2: education is expensive - funding
5 - I think your ideas are good, and you should reduce redundant words to make your voice stronger. But I...
Writing Feedbackyuanyuan123 - Jun 11, 2019 / suong1510 - Jun 19, 2019
|Which of the following qualities is most important to you: a) cleanliness b) humorous c) politeness
2 - @areis4ud Hello there. Firstly, I recommend that you optimize your sentences. Evade using lines that do not contribute...
Writing Feedbackareis4ud - Jun 11, 2019 / Maria - Jun 12, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Percentage of employment - adults employed in seven sectors
3 - Hello! Although your structure is good, I would suggest taking optimizing imprecise words/phrases, as @Maria said. Another way...
Writing Feedbacknimbus2k2 - Jun 11, 2019 / JoeLollo - Jun 12, 2019
|Group working and respect to others' ideas and advice
Writing Feedbackpooria - Jun 11, 2019 / Maria - Jun 12, 2019
|Academic Ielts: Accept bad situation or try to change it for a better one.
Writing Feedbackcamocrash - Jun 11, 2019 / Maria - Jun 12, 2019
|IELTS: Who should be responsible for cars pollution - people or governments? Give your opinion.
2 - @otgon Hi there! I would firstly suggest that you try to integrate writing techniques that will make your...
Writing Feedbackotgon - Jun 11, 2019 / Maria - Jun 12, 2019
|Ielts academic essay : Spending less time at home. What are the causes and what are the effects?
2 - @byambasuren Hello there! Welcome to the forum. I'll do my best to provide a comprehensive feedback. First...
Writing Feedbackbyambasuren - Jun 11, 2019 / Maria - Jun 12, 2019
|The invention of computers is one of the most significant inventions all the time. Academic IELTS
Writing Feedbackotgon - Jun 11, 2019 / otgon - Jun 21, 2019
|Lack of interpersonal skills. Causes and Solutions?
5 - Dear manhmoc, Your essay is really impressive and smooth. Below are some of my suggestions: 1. "pairing...
Writing Feedbackmanhmoc - Jun 10, 2019 / buiminhese - Jun 13, 2019
|IELTS-2 : Should we let old languages die?
7 - English has became become the .. live a place which can not cannot connect ... own language dies out,...
Writing Feedbacknaomi1993 - Jun 10, 2019 / oneouran - Jun 26, 2019
|Noise effect. Should we have restrictions on noise?
2 - Hi @suong1510 really nice work! a small suggestion is that you can write your own position in the end...
Writing Feedbacksuong1510 - Jun 10, 2019 / Seba0901 - Jun 10, 2019
|Challenges of learning a new language
4 - @solivagant Hi there! I love how well-balanced your essay is. I recommend that you keep this up in...
Writing Feedbacksolivagant - Jun 10, 2019 / Maria - Jun 12, 2019
|GRE: Major cities can reflect some of the characteristics of a society
Writing Feedbacklilypad - Jun 10, 2019 / Maria - Jun 10, 2019
|IELTS-2 : we will become more independent due to the advancement of the world
5 - I think sometimes your topic of paragraphs is not connected to your supporting idea. For example, Indeed, modern ......
Writing Feedbackbearch5 - Jun 9, 2019 / otgon - Jun 11, 2019
|IELTS 2 : Parents should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents.
Writing FeedbackSeba0901 - Jun 8, 2019 / Seba0901 - Jun 9, 2019
|Bar Chart - social networking sites people used in Canada
Writing Feedbackbuiminhese - Jun 8, 2019 / Maria - Jun 8, 2019
|Two different recruiting criteria
2 - @solivagant Hi there! Be cautious of the way that you structure your sentences. Having a simplified approach to...
Writing Feedbacksolivagant - Jun 7, 2019 / Maria - Jun 8, 2019
|IELTS2: Are the problems that international travellers cause greater than the advantages they bring?
3 - @oneouran Hi there! I partially agree with the previous comment that you should focus your writing more on...
Writing Feedbackoneouran - Jun 7, 2019 / Maria - Jun 8, 2019
|Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer stick to only one job
Writing Feedbackdinhhuong189 - Jun 7, 2019 / dinhhuong189 - Jun 8, 2019
|Compare and contrast between extroverts people with the introverts' one
3 - hi @laylastella there are some grammatical errors in the last paragraph: nothing wrong with you when being an introvert...
Writing Feedbacklaylastella - Jun 7, 2019 / ughcollege - Jun 10, 2019
|Does Technology narrow or widen the poverty gap?
2 - @trungpham96 Hi there. Like what I always tell most learners here, I won't necessarily give out a band...
Writing Feedbacktrungpham96 - Jun 6, 2019 / Maria - Jun 7, 2019
|The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents.....
3 - Hi @EmanF! In your essay you've mentioned different studies which I think is superfluous, because you're supposed to give...
Writing FeedbackEmanF - Jun 6, 2019 / solivagant - Jun 10, 2019
|Advertising to children - Discuss both views
2 - @buiminhese Hi there! Welcome to the forum. Don't fret. We'll do our bests to help you here. ...
Writing Feedbackbuiminhese - Jun 6, 2019 / Maria - Jun 6, 2019
|Sports have the same importance as classes and libraries and require also similar funding
4 - My advice is that you should use words dividing your ideas into distinct ones such as: Firstly, Secondly; so...
Writing Feedbacklebuixuan - Jun 6, 2019 / suong1510 - Jun 10, 2019
|Sports which enhance team spirit are most beneficial but others advocate for individual competitions
Writing Feedbackoanh9a6 - Jun 6, 2019 / Maria - Jun 6, 2019
|Child punishment as a way of teaching morality
5 - Dear Solivagant, Punishment can be beating, hitting (physically injured) or pretending to stop loving, holding back giving money,...
Writing Feedbacksolivagant - Jun 5, 2019 / buiminhese - Jun 8, 2019
|IELTS General: Traffic congestion problem and some measure that could be taken to reduce traffic
3 - @Maria Thanks for welcoming me. Above essay was my first attempt for IELTS section 2 task. I am a...
Writing Feedbackrayraja18 - Jun 5, 2019 / rayraja18 - Jun 5, 2019
|Disease prevention is more important than treatment - strongly agree
Writing FeedbackDiligent Student - Jun 4, 2019 / Maria - Jun 5, 2019
|Writing task 1: Line graph shows the percentage of tourists....
2 - @rus147 Hello there. Welcome to the forum. Firstly, I suggest omitting unnecessary and irrelevant lines in your...
Writing Feedbackrus147 - Jun 4, 2019 / Maria - Jun 5, 2019
|Bar chart - the number of activities selected by Australian children in their leisure time
Writing FeedbackJason Nguyen - Jun 4, 2019 / Jason Nguyen - Jun 6, 2019
|Equal numbers of men and women learners in every field of study - is such balance beneficial?
3 - @vilender Hi there! First and foremost, ensure that the formatting of your words would all be academically appropriate....
Writing Feedbackvilender - Jun 4, 2019 / Maria - Jun 5, 2019
|Some believe that computer technology has made the world and the society a safer place
3 - @JINGHAN Hi there! Welcome to the forum. First and foremost, I recommend that you try to enhance...
Writing FeedbackJINGHAN - Jun 4, 2019 / Maria - Jun 5, 2019
|Shopping, working and communicating with people via Internet, without any face-to-face contact
3 - Hi thaonguyen1st, 1. With just a click of the mouse or ...=> I love writing like this and love...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1st - Jun 3, 2019 / manhmoc - Jun 4, 2019
|Writing Ielts task 2 - TECHNOLOGY and YOUNG PEOPLE
2 - @Wendynguyen803 Hello there! First and foremost, I think that your essay is well-written from the get-go. What I...
Writing FeedbackWendynguyen803 - Jun 3, 2019 / Maria - Jun 4, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: VISITORS' SATISFACTION BEFORE AND AFTER REFURBISHMENT
2 - @sherry14 Hello there. It would be helpful if you could provide the pie charts alongside the text next...
Writing Feedbacksherry14 - Jun 3, 2019 / Maria - Jun 3, 2019
|Proportion of population aged 65+ - The text is IELTS Writing Task1
3 - @Annie Chen Hello there. Welcome to the forum! Like what has already been mentioned, including the figure next...
Writing FeedbackAnnie Chen - Jun 2, 2019 / Maria - Jun 3, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: the number of silk workforce in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.
4 - @Taylor 098 thank you ^^ @Maria Thank you so much for giving me your detail feed back, I really...
Writing Feedbackchickenbound - Jun 2, 2019 / chickenbound - Jun 3, 2019
|TOEFL - books vs experience; which source of knowledge is more important?
3 - @Maria Hi, Maria I appreciate your advises! Those advises really help me a lot! I practiced writing...
Writing Feedbacktux543 - Jun 2, 2019 / tux543 - Jun 3, 2019
|Topic: Describe one of the happiest days of my life (a paragraph of about 200 words).
2 - @Cozy19s Hello there! Because you only have two hundred words, using essay optimization techniques would help you have...
Writing FeedbackCozy19s - Jun 2, 2019 / Maria - Jun 3, 2019
|THE NUMBERS OF MALE AND FEMALE TEACHERS IN 6 DIFFERENT TYPES OF EDUCATIONAL SETTING IN 2010
3 - @Thykeppy Hi there! Welcome to the forum. In comparison to most that I have observed and given...
Writing FeedbackThykeppy - Jun 2, 2019 / Maria - Jun 3, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2 - AGREE OR DISAGREE? - Work from home only benefits employees, not employers.
3 - @ctyn1203 Hello there. Welcome to the forum! Let me help you with your essay. First and foremost,...
Writing Feedbackctyn1203 - Jun 1, 2019 / Maria - Jun 1, 2019
|It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents.
3 - @Maria I really appreciate your feedback. Thank you! What band do you think I can get from my writing?...
Writing Feedbackhunghoiham1999 - Jun 1, 2019 / hunghoiham1999 - Jun 2, 2019
|Cars made in Argentia / Australia / Thailand - writing task
Writing FeedbackNhanpham147 - Jun 1, 2019 / Nhanpham147 - Jun 2, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2 - investment in science subjects is essential for development
Writing Feedbackkatiemeo - Jun 1, 2019 / katiemeo - Jun 2, 2019
|"throw-away" society. Causes and effects?
3 - Hi suong1510, Nice essay overall. There is a problem regarding the example in body paragraph 2. I...
Writing Feedbacksuong1510 - Jun 1, 2019 / greynd - Jun 1, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Water consumption statistics across the globe
2 - @nhant Hi there! It would be beneficial and helpful if you could provide the pie chart (any figure/data...
Writing Feedbacknhant - Jun 1, 2019 / Maria - Jun 1, 2019
|Question 26: Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. A learn for kids?
2 - @tunghs15217 Hello! I see that you're new to the forum. Welcome! Let me help you with your essay....
Writing Feedbacktunghs15217 - May 31, 2019 / Maria - May 31, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Inconsiderate gaming and kids
4 - Hi there, I think your opinion in the essay is quite clear, with a wide range of vocabularies you...
Writing Feedbackgreynd - May 31, 2019 / suong1510 - Jun 1, 2019
|IELTS W2 - To what extent do you agree or disagree too much attention to wild animals and birds.
Writing Feedbackmisaping - May 31, 2019 / misaping - Jun 1, 2019
|Scientific experiments and research - should governemnt or private companies control that?
Writing FeedbackTaylor 098 - May 30, 2019 / Taylor 098 - Jun 1, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: ANIMAL TESTING / moral issues
Writing Feedbackhaotran1198 - May 30, 2019 / suong1510 - Jun 1, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Agree or Disagree essay on solution to improve road safety
4 - Thank you for your helpful advices @ melanienguyen278 and @ Maria I'll try my best to enhance my writing...
Writing FeedbackWendynguyen803 - May 30, 2019 / Wendynguyen803 - Jun 3, 2019
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