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|TOEFL - Is working while studying better than taking for example a college loan?
3 - @Phoebe789 I do not suggest starting your essay with a personal statement. Instead, opt for making an introduction that...
Writing FeedbackPhoebe789 - Mar 29, 2019 / Maria - Mar 29, 2019
|Government invest in the arts vs public services
3 - Let's look through your essay carefully. In your first paragraph, you can see a lack of substantiation on your...
Writing Feedbackanhpnguyen - Mar 28, 2019 / Maria - Mar 29, 2019
|The idea to study English in an English-speaking country - IELTS 2: agree or disagree essay
3 - @mzoetemdroomm A couple of things to take note of. I would avoid using words that drag your essay. I...
Writing Feedbackmzoetemdroomm - Mar 28, 2019 / Maria - Mar 29, 2019
|IELTS: Why money should not be spent on finding life on other planets
4 - @coke you use too many "the". sometimes it is not necessary because it does not specificly refer to anothy...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 28, 2019 / yanhong - Mar 29, 2019
|[IELTS - Writing Task 2] : Discuss both views in penalizing villains.
2 - Welcome to the forum! I have a couple of key suggestions to your essay. Avoid dragging your sentences. You...
Writing Feedbackridhoswasta - Mar 27, 2019 / Maria - Mar 27, 2019
|Task 1 - the figure for internet usage
3 - @yanhong I suggest moving your second paragraph to the last portion of the essay. The text was pertaining to...
Writing Feedbackyanhong - Mar 27, 2019 / Maria - Mar 27, 2019
|Which is needed more: formal qualifications or practical skills to do the job better?
3 - Hi icebear24 I think there is a conflict between these two sentences. 'For example, in order to fix ......
Writing Feedbackicebear24 - Mar 27, 2019 / coke - Mar 28, 2019
|[IELTS Writing Task 1] UK commuters using three different means of transport
3 - Hello hachihachi137 I don't think that you could determine whether the train is the least favorable type of...
Writing Feedbackhachihachi137 - Mar 27, 2019 / coke - Mar 28, 2019
|[IELTS TASK 2] Should children read entertainment books only
3 - @anhpnguyen Hi, the structure of this essay looks fine, but there are some areas that you still need to...
Writing Feedbackanhpnguyen - Mar 27, 2019 / yanhong - Mar 27, 2019
|[IELTS task 2] Museums and the entrance fee - different viewpoints
3 - Here are some slightly revised sentences I would suggest, using asterisks to indicate specific words changed: In the...
Writing Feedbackanhpnguyen - Mar 26, 2019 / ColinLooper - Mar 26, 2019
|Find some strange rules of the university in the world
2 - Check your capitalization. Ketchup, not unless you are referring to a specific brand, is not supposed to be capitalized....
Writing Feedbacknhatuzumakii - Mar 26, 2019 / Maria - Mar 26, 2019
|IELTS: Letter to college administration showing interest in a course
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 26, 2019 / anhpnguyen - Mar 26, 2019
|The controversial idea to give longer prison sentences in order to reduce crime rate
Writing Feedbackkatkat - Mar 26, 2019 / katkat - Mar 26, 2019
|[IELTS TASK 1] - Table: The amount of money given in aid of technology of developing countries.
Writing Feedbacknhinhi123 - Mar 26, 2019 / nhinhi123 - Mar 27, 2019
|IELTS writing task 1 - line graph of waste produced
3 - @DoctorWho Thanks for your feedback. I divided into 2 periods of time that were 2000-2005 and 2005-2015 for 2...
Writing FeedbackJin_KT - Mar 26, 2019 / Jin_KT - Apr 4, 2019
|ielts task 2: discuss both views of choosing subjects at university
3 - Hi @nhuxuan, here are some points in your essay that should be improved. 1. In the body paragraphs,...
Writing Feedbacknhuxuan - Mar 25, 2019 / buttercup - Mar 25, 2019
|''Help me with my process: How bricks are produced''
3 - @dungpharma97 I suggest looking into finding better transitions for your essay. Avoid straining your sentences by extending unnecessarily the...
Writing Feedbackdungpharma97 - Mar 25, 2019 / Maria - Mar 25, 2019
|[IELTS] Money on protecting animals vs human well-being
3 - @anhpnguyen To create a more natural flow in your essay, I suggest rephrasing some of your lines. Remember that...
Writing Feedbackanhpnguyen - Mar 25, 2019 / Maria - Mar 25, 2019
|IELTS writing task 1 on maps / hydroelectric dam
Writing Feedbacknct - Mar 25, 2019 / nct - Mar 26, 2019
|"Parents should be free to decide whether or not to vaccine their babies" ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY
6 - Good article with using a wide range of lexicon and technical terms. I would recommend you to strengthen...
Writing Feedbackfreshjul287 - Mar 25, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 5, 2019
|Tofel writing part 2--whether children nowadays are more difficult to educate that in previous times
2 - Ruslai0, Your essay is on the right direction. However, I do suggest that you look into shortening your sentences....
Writing Feedbackruslai0 - Mar 24, 2019 / Maria - Mar 24, 2019
|IELTS task 2: more young people in society - evaluation of this trend
Writing Feedbackyanhong - Mar 24, 2019 / TJLuschen - Mar 25, 2019
|[IELTS TASK 2] Longer Prison Sentences And Other Solutions. Best way to reduce crime rate
2 - In paragraph two, give at least two examples of criminals who were converted into model citizens and cite that...
Writing FeedbackTheshadow - Mar 24, 2019 / Constance - Mar 24, 2019
|Essay topic: Developments in the field of artificial intelligence - a positive impact for the future
2 - In paragraph one - some individuals... A.I. ....I would argue that the computer can be wiser than humans. ...
Writing FeedbackHuyhuynh2001 - Mar 23, 2019 / Constance - Mar 23, 2019
|IELTS Writing task 2: Discuss about advantages and disadvantages of private medical services.
4 - You must make the thread Urgent for a new review from a Contributor, thank you. First Paragraph (Introduction):...
Writing FeedbackEren Jeager - Mar 23, 2019 / pc_pc - Mar 23, 2019
|When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration.
2 - Your manner of writing is good. A lot of readers would appreciate how straightforward you are when it comes...
Writing Feedbackthanhphuong02 - Mar 23, 2019 / Maria - Mar 23, 2019
|IELTS: Future science will make human almost immortal. Is that good?
2 - Coke, The direction of your essay is sufficient. I simply suggest extending the rationale of your explanations. For...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 23, 2019 / Maria - Mar 23, 2019
|IELTS_TASK 2: advantage and disadvantage of shopping online.
Writing FeedbackTUYET PHAM - Mar 23, 2019 / coke - Mar 23, 2019
|Nowadays changes need to be made regarding the school curriculum, prepare children for adulthood
2 - Saons, I think there are two points to consider in your essay. Firstly, let's delve into the technicalities of...
Writing Feedbacksaons - Mar 22, 2019 / Maria - Mar 22, 2019
|Strict ban on plastic bags - opinion essay
2 - Jalp, I think the structure of your essay is already good. However, I would also consider looking into...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Mar 22, 2019 / Maria - Mar 22, 2019
|IELTS Task 2 - Causes and Solutions of Obesity and decreasing Health
Writing Feedbackpropeace - Mar 21, 2019 / propeace - Mar 22, 2019
|Inventing computers as one of the most crucial human's achievements for the last hundred years
2 - In paragraph one should be humans have contributed for the last hundred years or if you want to say...
Writing FeedbackKaraVo - Mar 21, 2019 / Constance - Mar 22, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: The benefits of multigenerational workplace
3 - ... with the older ones haves become more ... ... brings huge advantages to the workplace. company/business I...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 21, 2019 / anhpnguyen - Mar 28, 2019
|IELTS T2 - mandatory courses of foreign languages in schools
Writing Feedbackifaedward - Mar 20, 2019 / ifaedward - Mar 21, 2019
|Writing task 1 - layouts of a university's sports center
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Mar 20, 2019 / crystlho - Mar 24, 2019
|IELTS task 2: Stay in the same type of work or change jobs time to time. Discuss both sides/opinion
Writing Feedbackbuttercup - Mar 20, 2019 / buttercup - Mar 21, 2019
|Writing task 1 : The employment of the first-year teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007
2 - Hope this could help. First paragraph gave too much information about the graph. Usually, you re-phrase the title...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Mar 20, 2019 / jalp - Mar 22, 2019
|[IELTS TASK 2] - ARTS AND SCIENCE; unique traits of arts vs science and technology
3 - Thank you for the suggestions, I appreciate your help :D I should really think about your idea about "arts...
Writing Feedbacklamnhathuy - Mar 20, 2019 / lamnhathuy - Mar 20, 2019
|[IELTS] People should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet.
3 - Personally, I think you should include passive voice in some of your sentences to avoid repetition. For example: First,...
Writing Feedbackbuimingduc - Mar 20, 2019 / lamnhathuy - Mar 20, 2019
|SOCIAL MEDIA AND OTHER REASONS INFLUENCE COMMUNICATION
2 - You've got a very good point about using the "old-fashioned" communication (like letters); people would generally be able to...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 19, 2019 / Rich Monte - Mar 20, 2019
|Universities function is providing the knowledge and skills required in a workplace / employer
Writing Feedbackidontwannabeyou - Mar 19, 2019 / idontwannabeyou - Mar 19, 2019
|Packaged food benefit society
Writing Feedbackdust1205 - Mar 19, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 19, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: The better selection for improving life quality in developing countries
2 - Obviously, people are happier when ... => i just think the sentence is unnecessary, to replace, you can mention...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Mar 18, 2019 / Hammy - Mar 19, 2019
|News comparison case study - a bombing attack in the UK
2 - I like your writing style; thoughtful and to the point (you could be a reporter :). I'm not sure...
Writing Feedbackxxxu021 - Mar 18, 2019 / Rich Monte - Mar 20, 2019
|Ielt writing task 1 The table below shows key data on the demographics of 4 different countries
2 - Gio1999pt, On a technical level, I would suggest looking into studying more about proper punctuation, subject-verb agreements, and...
Writing Feedbackgio1999pt - Mar 17, 2019 / Maria - Mar 22, 2019
|[IETLS Writing] the advantages of the government's spending on university fees
2 - It would be better if you explain your point of view first rather than you explain the opposite sides....
Writing Feedbackanhtu - Mar 17, 2019 / danggraini - Mar 18, 2019
|How to define and achieve happiness
3 - @Ekaputri17 I think you've written a strong essay overall. I can only suggest that you don't need to put...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 17, 2019 / coke - Mar 18, 2019
|Effect of air pollution on health
Writing FeedbackLinda68 - Mar 17, 2019 / Linda68 - Mar 28, 2019
|IELTS2 - the power of advertising and the real needs of the society in which they are sold
2 - Hy @Leon2501 Overall your ideas are good, you only need to make it simple and well-organized In my...
Writing FeedbackLeon2501 - Mar 17, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 17, 2019
|The problems and solutions to increasing life expectancy
3 - in my opinion, i don't agree with you that your essay talked about a general view which means including...
Writing FeedbackThao Hien - Mar 16, 2019 / Hammy - Mar 19, 2019
|Most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is very important
2 - good arrangement furniture -> well-arranged need money for fulfilling -> to fulfill this forces them continuing -> to continue...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 16, 2019 / ngothanhnam2211 - Mar 16, 2019
|Two sides of debate - CBEST: Technology contribution to the modern life
2 - hi @jakepkdt This is my suggestion for your writing: 1.The technology serves to ... society and economy...
Writing Feedbackjakepkdt - Mar 15, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 20, 2019
|Equal investment on railways and roads?: IELTS 2
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Mar 15, 2019 / crystlho - Mar 20, 2019
|Creativity and Entrepreneurship - young people are more creative than the old in business
2 - Hi @Sanazhemmati, I supposed you were writing a short essay for language tests like TOEFL or IELTS. Following this...
Writing FeedbackSanazhemmati - Mar 14, 2019 / liuzhengxian - Mar 16, 2019
|Writing task 2 (Fixing punishment and prison time)
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Mar 14, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 16, 2019
|It is argued that preventing problems relevant to health is more crucial than curing these problems
3 - Phan, you have not followed the discussion requirements for this essay. This happened because you went in a different...
Writing FeedbackHuyngoc168 - Mar 14, 2019 / Holt - Mar 17, 2019
|Rates of recidivism are still high - reasons of this phenomenon and possible solutions
2 - Hy @crystlho In my opinion, your solutions do not tackle the causes of the problems which you are...
Writing Feedbackcrystlho - Mar 14, 2019 / Ekaputri17 - Mar 15, 2019
|Nurses are a critical part of healthcare and make up the largest section of the health profession
2 - Sydnea, what is the whole point of this paper? It is a highly informative research paper that failed to...
Writing Feedbacksydmarie - Mar 13, 2019 / Holt - Mar 17, 2019
|Exercising - A Natural Way to Help Your Health
3 - Dong, since this is not an extent essay, your agreement should not be presented as a measured response. It...
Writing Feedbackddoris - Mar 12, 2019 / Holt - Mar 14, 2019
|It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects
Writing Feedbacktranthanh1992 - Mar 12, 2019 / peacock34 - Mar 15, 2019
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