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|CONSUMERISM CULTURE IS BEHIND ADVERTISING
5 - He Rinnegan, here are some advices for your writing, beware of consumerism culture among us it cause the...
Writing FeedbackVK WSSH - Sep 16, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Sep 17, 2016
|The 'peaceful' Pacific Ocean, however not without typhoons, earthquakes and hurricanes
Writing FeedbackALMAJID06 - Sep 16, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016
|How to catch up the grit? A strong effort and high understanding is a key to reaching personal goals
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 16, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016
|Different Perception Of The Happiness
Writing Feedbackagungdanprakoso - Sep 16, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 17, 2016
|TED summary : The next generation of female engineers.
3 - Hi Jawa, Here some suggestions for your writing 1. Female engineers (...) only 11 per cent in...
Writing FeedbackJawa - Sep 16, 2016 / dils - Sep 19, 2016
|Water usage by the society in Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo in 3 different sectors
3 - hay, rose, i would try to give some comments which are probably useful. in my opinion, your sentence--...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016 / arisandy14 - Sep 16, 2016
|Government and Society : What Governments Can Do ?
3 - The officials of government run "the" wheels of administration in a country. Every actions of government such /...
Writing FeedbackFirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 16, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 17, 2016
|OUR ACHIEVEMENT DEPENDS ON THE PERSONALITY
2 - Hello @deanarin I would like to give you some corrections. 1. This sentence should be "... memories,...
Writing Feedbackdeanarin - Sep 16, 2016 / Asma Raj - Sep 16, 2016
|The Older forms of Entertainment - the circus have been famous a thousand years ago already
2 - Hey @Alamsyah Ismail, I got some suggestions for your writing. Here my advice: 1. Circus, the one...
Writing FeedbackAlamsyah Ismail - Sep 16, 2016 / abdasyari93 - Sep 16, 2016
|The number of books read by the boys and girls - a fluctuating trend between the two variables
2 - -The line graph gives information about the comparison number of books (...) and girls over a four-year period at...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 16, 2016 / Windvalley - Sep 16, 2016
|The Positive and Negative Consequences of Consumerism in Social Life
3 - yo! nice to read your essay. here my feedback comes... Nowadays, the demands of goods "have" increaseD higher...
Writing FeedbackAsma Raj - Sep 16, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 17, 2016
|The oldest form of circus has existed in Roman Empire around sixth century
2 - Hi,., yonathan,., your summarization is great, however, here some advice for you in order to improve your writing...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 16, 2016 / hasbi - Sep 16, 2016
|Tourism as a Crucial Key for Promoting Cultures and Increasing Local Income
3 - Hi, there! got some additional tips for you. Entertainment is one of "the" essential needs every...
Writing Feedbackabdasyari93 - Sep 16, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 17, 2016
|Summarize Graphic Chart 4 on Cambridge Book - Starmouth School library statistics
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 16, 2016 / Hujjatul19 - Sep 16, 2016
|The best way to refresh mind and body conditions is to spend the leisure time in natural environment
2 - Hi dils, this is my thought to you Research shows that mostlymost people are do not optimizeing their...
Writing Feedbackdils - Sep 16, 2016 / Aris05 - Sep 16, 2016
|Summary Article : These Are the Forgotten Victims of the West's Drought
4 - Hallo Andika, i have some corrections for you. It became changed the environment which are is (look the...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 16, 2016 / Giansy11 - Sep 26, 2016
|The shown line graph indicates the readers' changes of Starmouth School library
3 - Hallo, There are several correction, ...The shown line graph indicates... ...according to how many books already read...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 16, 2016 / David54 - Sep 16, 2016
|The system, called SayWAT, was invented for autistic people who need help with social interactions.
2 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections But However, a wearable headset could behelp helped....
Writing Feedbackswr10 - Sep 16, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 19, 2016
|Learning a tonal language like Chinese is tricky, however there's a new tool..
5 - Hi David54, I want to give a suggestion: Learning a tonal language like Chinese is tricky, however...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 16, 2016 / VK WSSH - Sep 19, 2016
|The leisure time in some outdoor activities is the most favourable method to relax the body and mind
2 - Hello rizaldo, nice to see your essay and also i really appreciate with your efforts to write an essay....
Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 16, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 16, 2016
|Universe consist of several complexities which becomes more complex with the great difficulties
3 - halo brother, i give you some correction for you. David Christian tried to summarized ( to infinitive + v1)...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 16, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 16, 2016
|There is a magic headset which will help you learn Chinese.
2 - Hi Terminal... Let me give you some advice... ... most extremely difficult but there are utilizing by(using) headset...
Writing FeedbackTerminal23 - Sep 16, 2016 / Yonathan - Sep 16, 2016
|A new device created by LouAnne Boyd at the University of California at Irvine, helps learn language
3 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections ... tones will probably encontered the most difficulties...
Writing FeedbackIedha01 - Sep 16, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 17, 2016
|Angela Lee Duckworth: financially settled in the age of 27, but still yet in pursue of her passion
3 - ... desire of Angela Lee Duckworth so that she decided to pursue her passion. she becomes/has become...
Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 16, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 18, 2016
|Go a head, make up new words (Erin McKean) - Summary from TED
3 - who said that to be a part of global society means you have to strictly consider about words?...
Writing FeedbackIfan21 - Sep 16, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 18, 2016
|There's a difference in the amount of read books among students, in regard to their gender
Writing Feedbackryan31 - Sep 16, 2016 / kiki23 - Sep 17, 2016
|Recent studies report that the level of people's stress and obesity increased in the last decades.
6 - Hey Paij1830 your have briefly summarized the essay and it's great : here some corrections for you : ...
Writing Feedbackfaizahadina - Sep 16, 2016 / Ifan21 - Sep 17, 2016
|'Sophisticated wearable headset'. Undoubtedly, it is tricky to learn tonal language nowadays.
Writing Feedbackzul2805_es - Sep 16, 2016 / Jawa - Sep 16, 2016
|The information about the amount of books been read in a school, the trends of years 2009-2012.
5 - the number of library books which read (passive Voice always use V3) by boys ... There were (use was...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 16, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 16, 2016
|Talent or ability doesn't make courageous. IQ factor and children's intelligence.
3 - Hello mr.gon, thank you very much for your essay and also i really interesting within your topic regarding Grit...
Writing Feedbackgon10 - Sep 16, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 16, 2016
|Opinions about Advertising : The Advantages on Situation
5 - hi..@mem77 let me try to correct your writing make your sentence straight to the point for example,...
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 16, 2016 / Jawa - Sep 16, 2016
|Writing Task 1 Student Cambridge Books
2 - ... of forty books from 100 books which is read by girls, while booksare read by boys has dropped...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 16, 2016 / faizahadina - Sep 16, 2016
|The ancient circus was introduced at the time of the Roman Empire.
3 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections ... mostly showing popular spectator sport, and chariot...
Writing Feedbackerwiin - Sep 16, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 16, 2016
|Inside Philippine President Rodrigo Duterter's War On Drugs - Summary Articles
3 - ... last drug lord and the last pushersupplier have surrendered ... In histhe last speech, he insulted ......
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 16, 2016 / Terminal23 - Sep 16, 2016
|On the video, the most things that Gore emphasize are optimistic and awareness.
5 - Hi hujjatul^^ Base on the video, the most thingsthatAl Gore said thatemphasize are optimistic and awareness(I think this...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 16, 2016 / eve01 - Sep 16, 2016
|"Comparison underground railway systems in 6 major cities."
2 - The data given in the table compares the underground railway systems in 6 major cities. Overall, as can...
Writing FeedbackWindvalley - Sep 16, 2016 / swr10 - Sep 16, 2016
|The number of books that were borrowed and its Book types [IELTS Writing Task 1]
Writing FeedbackPJmustbebetter - Sep 16, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 24, 2016
|Athletes are obliged to train their skills and focus not only to the muscles or body movements
4 - Hay rosa, i will give you some suggestion Original sentences : The rapidity and accuracy visual is an...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016 / Qaranew52 - Sep 16, 2016
|The rise of crime rate as the main worry in some countries. Solution? Invest in basic social rights.
2 - Here my suggestion. 1. Spelling mistakes? > increasements = increase (or you can rewrite your sentence "The...
Writing FeedbackBrunasingh - Sep 16, 2016 / Jnur - Sep 16, 2016
|Rita Pierson: Every kid needs a champion
3 - Hi, You did a good job in your writing. You start it with an opening sentence(Creating bond with all...
Writing Feedbackbung ilham - Sep 15, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 16, 2016
|Quickly scanning and noticing tracking objects - an athlete's recipe for success
2 - aloha Bams, here are my thoughts: Being a good athlete just does not only depend on muscles, but...
Writing FeedbackBAMS14 - Sep 15, 2016 / bung ilham - Sep 15, 2016
|The coal was the most popular energy source in France - years 1995 and 2005
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Sep 15, 2016 / ryan31 - Sep 16, 2016
|Contrasting of energy production in France between 1995 and 2005
2 - The pie charts shows compareS kinds of energy THE PERCENTAGES OF FOSSIL FUELS PRODUCED in Ff rance between...
Writing FeedbackBAMS14 - Sep 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 16, 2016
|Potential positions which are being inspected for the construction of a new supermarket in Garlsdon
2 - The given mapthe map show compares two potential positions ... ... the first site (S1) is was located...
Writing FeedbackWindvalley - Sep 15, 2016 / Terminal23 - Sep 16, 2016
|Five - second rule revealed (summary)
3 - Hi Hujjatul. I left the comment for you, hope it can help. Overyone surely is familiar with this...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 15, 2016 / ibal28 - Sep 16, 2016
|Writting Task 1 the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in ten years
2 - Hi Shandy.. I am delighted to read your writing. In this moment, let me help you to finalize yours....
Writing Feedbackarisandy14 - Sep 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 16, 2016
|Bill Gates - how do you stop deadly disease that spread by mosquitos?
3 - Hi @hujjatul19, Nice post from you, it is interesting because you summarized such a renowned person's speech. Regarding...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 15, 2016 / dils - Sep 16, 2016
|Bill Gates believes, that there are not problems in this world, that cannot be solved
Writing FeedbackALMAJID06 - Sep 15, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 16, 2016
|The table and the bar chart below give information about travelling to work in Houston, Texas.
2 - Hello ALMAJID06, here i left comment for you table (Table) depicts the proportion of ... ... while...
Writing FeedbackALMAJID06 - Sep 15, 2016 / Fira28 - Sep 16, 2016
|The Taklimakan Desert which is a part of Africa's Sahara
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Sep 15, 2016 / ryan31 - Sep 16, 2016
|TED Summary: The Art of Free-Stress Productivity by David Allen
2 - when productivity gets low and everything turns unstable. It is called crisis zone. = new sentence = it is...
Writing FeedbackFitri12 - Sep 15, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 15, 2016
|Writing Task 1; Comparison of five are mining sector categories in France during year 1995 and 2005
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Sep 15, 2016 / arisandy14 - Sep 15, 2016
|Summarize TED video : Bill Gates talk about mosquito, malaria, and education
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 15, 2016 / Asma Raj - Sep 16, 2016
|TED Summary : The philosophy of a happy life according to Sam
Writing FeedbackJawa - Sep 15, 2016 / dils - Sep 19, 2016
|Successful performance is not merely physics, it's also a multitude combination of supporting skills
3 - Hi Dhyla.. These are a few suggestions for you to finalize this summary Check my notes and deal with...
Writing Feedbackdils - Sep 15, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 16, 2016
|Some people say that words have stronger power than actions
2 - Namely, people need to havesome experience to be aware ... ... why his words are so impressive is...
Writing FeedbackYuyahhhh - Sep 15, 2016 / Terminal23 - Sep 16, 2016
|HERE'S HOW MANY APPLE CORES IT WOULD TAKE TO POISON YOU
2 - Hi Terminal123, below are my thoughts on your essay, this is very straight forward, in order for you to...
Writing FeedbackTerminal23 - Sep 15, 2016 / justivy03 - Sep 15, 2016
|Writing Task 1 Student Cambridge Books- Travelling to work in Houston, Texas
4 - Hi Fadhil! Sharing is fun, right? The followings are my humble comments: - The table gives information (besides...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 15, 2016 / Fitri12 - Sep 16, 2016
|Bill Gates tried to elaborate several problems that humanity is faced all over the world
2 - Hello @fadhilmd25, I would like to give some suggestion for your writing. Here my advice: 1. .......
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 15, 2016 / abdasyari93 - Sep 15, 2016
|INTERNET: The Drawback and Vantage
2 - Hello Your text is quite readable, but you could use adjusting/rewriting some of the sentences as follows: ...
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