I am reapplying to U of H after being placed in academic suspension, I would love some feedback about my essay. Any suggestion on how to improve it would be appreciated.Thank you
PROMPT:Describe the circumstances that led to your suspension.
Describe the procedures you intend to implement to improve your academic standing. In addition,
please discuss your interest in your choice of major and your background that led to this interest.
To Whom It May Concern,
I was a full-time student pursuing a degree in Mechanical Engineering Technology when I was placed under academic suspension after the spring 2012 semester. It has been almost four years since I last attended University of Houston and I have made plenty of changes around my life in order to be able to be ready to attend this school once again.
When I first started attending University of Houston, I was still living with my parents, working full time as an intern and I was still taking classes at Lone Star College. I started working as an intern because I knew I wanted to pursue a mechanical engineering career, and that would give me a head start once I completed my degree. However, it was not going to be a paid internship, so I still depended on my parents in order to pay for school, gas, and other necessities.
My parents agreed to help pay for all my needs as long as I attended school full-time, took care of my younger brother as well as doing the house chores. After school and work were over, I had to take care of my ten year-old little brother. As much as I tried to balance school and work, I was starting to fail in school. The relationship between my parent and I started to deteriorate quickly, with constant fight when I wasn't able to keep up with my responsibilities at home.
As I talked to my coworkers about careers and school, they recommended I change my major t Mechanical Engineering Technology, claiming that it was more hand-on and practical. After my first semester there, I decided to take my co-workers advice and change my major. My second semester was going better, I was able to understand what I was being taught easier, but I was still under a lot of stress at home, and still not able to study as much I wanted and needed. I started to have some health problems as well, with all the stress I was going through.
That's when I decided I needed to move out of my parent's house. I was told there was a drafter position open at the company, and I decided to apply for it. A few weeks after I was hired as a drafter, I moved out. I knew for my next semester I would only be taking a class or two, just enough were I would be comfortable, and I knew I would have time to study. Unfortunately, it was too late by then, and I was placed under academic suspension following that semester.
After my suspension, I went back to Lone Star College to acquire my Associates degree first; I could focus on learning studying and time management techniques so that when I went back to U of H, I would pass all my classes with good grades. I took a class or two every semester, making sure I had time to study and rest as well. On May 2015 I received my Mechanical Engineering Technology Associates degree as well as an Excellence in Engineering Design Award. On the years I attended Lone Star College, I was able to raise my GPA, from under 2.0 to above 3.0.
My parents are both engineers, and growing up, they told me that their careers required analyzing problems and designing a method or device to be able to help fix that problem. I knew since I was young that that was what I wanted to do. As a designer, I assist the engineers and I get to work with them closely. I've worked drawing and designing assemblies for different aspects of the oil industries for over 3 years. I've always been interested in pursuing a career as a Mechanical Engineer.
My husband and I have been saving money for me to be able to go back to U of H. If I am allowed to return to U of H, I will take a break from work and focus entirely on school. I will only take a class or two my first semester there since I know how hard classes are. I know I have all I need in order to finally become an Engineer; I have all the tools and the support I need this time in order to not fail. I wish greatly that you can give me the opportunity to prove not only to you and my family, but to myself, that I am ready to finish achieving my degree in Mechanical Engineering Technology.