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'Creativity, diligent work and zeal' - translation of letter of recomendation.


AlizarinCrimson 1 / 4  
Oct 17, 2012   #1
Hello! I dare to ask somebody to check this translation of LOR . Thank you.

I have known XXXXXX since 2007 when I was a head of her course Design of Architectural Environment until the end of this course. Also I was her project adviser during working on her final year project Design concept of International Center of Marine Ecoturism.

Being a student, she devoted a lot of time to research work in the field of ecological architecture and what was reflected in the university publications of 2008 and Lomonosov Moscow State University publications on the topic Renewable Sources of Energy of 2008 and 2010 years. XXXXXX works hard, starts course projects with big enthusiasm and performs it perfectly with excellent grades. She always tries to apply the cutting-edge technologies in her projects by using the additional materials, which she studied by her own. She was a first student in the group, who started to use computer 3D modeling for project representations compare to traditional handmade performing. She always tries to be aware about latest trends in architecture, hence her projects looks very contemporary and interesting, as well as futuristic. In her projects she responses to the environmental demands, challenges herself widely applying the green technologies in her buildings and finds original solutions. While she often experiments with forms and functions of object lifting it to the air or moving to the sea surface, she also rethinks the conventional methods of constructing specific for particular region and climate, such she did it at the project of Blocked Houses on Russian Islands. Eventually XXXXXX has participated in the regional exhibitions, has won awards. Also she has an experience to being laureate of international workshop Acapulco Green Tower in Mexico.

Sometimes XXXXXX chose not the most rational methods of design, deepening into the details of educational tasks, which resulted to a breach of terms of delivery of the project.

According to the efforts XXXXXX put into creating the projects, diligent work and zeal, she is one of the best students in the course and she is able to do a successful career as an architect. I think that XXXXXX will be a good continuation of her creative way. Based on my experience working with XXXXXX and her achievements, which speak for itself, I highly recommend XXXXXX as a candidate for your M.Arch program. She is hard working, highly creative and eager to learn and would make a great asset to any academic program.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 17, 2012   #2
I have known XXXXXX since 2007 when I was athehH ead of XXXXX (name the institution or the department)where she followed theher course in Design of Architectural Environment until the end of this course.Also I was alsoherthe project adviser during working onfor her final year project, Design concept of International Center of Marine Ecoturism.
OP AlizarinCrimson 1 / 4  
Oct 17, 2012   #3
Thank you...seems there is a lot of mistakes...could you help me with rest of the text please?
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 18, 2012   #4
I dont say have done mistakes.... I've given you my suggestions for further improvement :)

BeingShe wasa very dedicated student, shewho devoted a lot ofher time to research work in the field of ecological architecture and what was reflected,which was given high prominance under the topic of Renewable Sources of Energy of 2008/2010, in the university publications of 2008 and Lomonosov Moscow State University publications on the topic Renewable Sources of Energy of 2008 and 2010 years . XXXXXX works hard, starts course projects with big enthusiasm and performs it perfectly with excellent gradesis a hard working, dedicated and enthusiastic student who also secured excellent grades in her academic performances. She always tries to applyattempts to applythe cutting-edge technologies in her projects by using the additional materials, which she studied byon her ownwhile introducing her own innovative methodologies. She was athe first student in the group, who started to useusing computer 3D modeling for project representations compare toinstead of traditional handmade performing.(I feel the sentence reads better without this part) She always tries to be aware aboutkeeps herself updated with the latest trends in architecture, hence her projects looksare very contemporary and interesting, as well as futuristic. In her projects she responses to the environmental demands and challenges herselfand widely applying the green technologies in her buildings and finds original solutions . While she often experiments with forms and functions of object lifting it to the air or moving to the sea surface, she also rethinks the conventional methods of constructing specific for particular region and climate, such she did . Herit at the project of Blocked Houses on Russian Islands stands an obvious example for her remarkable skills in responding to such environmental challenges.EventuallyFurther, XXXXXX has participated in theseveral regional exhibitions, hasand won awards. .

I dont understand this;
Also she has an experience to being laureate of international workshop Acapulco Green Tower in Mexico
OP AlizarinCrimson 1 / 4  
Oct 18, 2012   #5
Thank you very much, dear Dumi! now it sounds much better!

about the last sentence:
I dont understand this;
Also she has an experience to being laureate of international workshop Acapulco Green Tower in Mexico


Is it better to write mere "Also she was a laureate of international workshop Acapulco Green Tower in Mexico"?
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 19, 2012   #6
I suggest some more improvements to what I already suggested... pls pay attention to my spelling (may be incorrect as I am not so good with spelling) :)

She keeps herself updated with the latest trends in architecture, hence her projects are very contemporary and interesting, as well as futuristic. In her projects she responses to the environmental demands and challenges and widely apply the green technologies in her buildings and finds original solutionsarchitectural applications. While she often experiments with forms and functions of object lifting it to the air or moving to the sea surface, she also rethinksconsiders the conventional methods of constructing specific for particular region and climate. Her project of Blocked Houses on Russian Islands stands as an obvious example for her remarkable skills in responding to such environmental challenges.

Also sheShe was also a laureate of international workshop Acapulco Green Tower in Mexico

The following sentence is very confusing;
Sometimes XXXXXX chose not the most rational methods of design, deepening into the details of educational tasks, which resulted to a breach of terms of delivery of the project.

what do you mean?

According to the efforts XXXXXX being a very talented, dedicated and enthusiatic put into creating the projects, diligent work and zeal, she is one of the best students in the course and she is able to do a successful career as an architectstudent, I belive she has a promising future as a sucessful architecht.I think that XXXXXX will be a good continuation of her creative way.I view the proposed masters program as the best option for her to accomplish her future career goals by enhancing her knowledge and capabilities, broadening her perspectives and obtaining very valuable net-working opportunities with the professionals in the field.Based on my experience working with XXXXXX and her achievements, which speak for itself,Based on her capabilities, knowledge, dedication and talents, I highly recommend XXXXXX as a candidate for this program.She is hard working, highly creative and eager to learn and would make a great asset to any academic program .
OP AlizarinCrimson 1 / 4  
Oct 19, 2012   #7
The following sentence is very confusing;
Sometimes XXXXXX chose not the most rational methods of design, deepening into the details of educational tasks, which resulted to a breach of terms of delivery of the project.

what do you mean?

In this case I ment the student's drowbacks.
Or don't quite understandwhat do they mean by "What are the applicant's principal challenges?"
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Oct 19, 2012   #8
If it is a letter of recommendation, it's better if you dont talk about the student's drawbacks. As for challenges, you can talk about the financing difficulties, balancing family life with studies etc. that are not her weaknesses but are challenges she has to take up to follow the course.
OP AlizarinCrimson 1 / 4  
Oct 19, 2012   #9
Ok, I see.
All in all, thank you for your awesome corrections and recomendations! I helps me a lot!


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