Dear Zack Myers,
Please allow me to apologize for not getting in communication with earlier --this was not out of any disrespect for you or your law firm which I hold in such high regard -- but merely this is the first opportunity I have had to formally explain my circumstances ---pending my release from VGH (Vancouver General Hospital.) I can appreciate how frustrated you are given the consequences of my actions; however, I feel very strongly that I need to completely elucidate my situation so that together we can both respond in a manner most appropriate.
Unfortunately, my health began to deteriorate when I was unexpectedly unable to receive one of my critical sleep aid medications Zopiclone (treatment of insomnia), on July 23 -- regrettably Zopiclone requires an annual special authorization form that has to be filled by my doctor, and even approval, it can take a few days for it to completely process. My mental and physical health deteriorated to a point which forced me to get proper help.
Due to the respectable restrictions put in place by New Horizons Recovery Centre, which did not allow any tenants day passes for any reason until the at least their 4th week of stay -- and my numerous unsuccessful attempts to counter-pursue them to make any kind of exception to go to my campus to rather my belongings (which included extra Zopiclone in a locker) - I found myself forced to leave New Horizons on the evening of July 29.
From that point I took a bus and made it back to my campus and got my Zopiclone and finally attained sleep. I followed up my next mornings with a well-needed rest and an urgent appointment at my doctor's office (UBC Student Health Services), and received a check-up and a re-prescription of my medications. I was also told to try to get some more rest and to book an appointment tomorrow with my regular GP (Dr. Patricia Mirwaldt.)
However that following evening I was not feeling well mentally or physically, and I was very anxious and worried, and one of my peers at the university called 9-11 with the impression that I was having some form of extreme panic attack/mental breakdown. I was rushed to VGH with the RCMP and paramedics hastily - blood and urine tests concluded that I was not on any illicit drugs or alcohol so therefore, it was assumed I was in need of some form of involuntary psychiatric treatment in order to stabilize my health. I was promptly admitted to the psychiatric ward at VGH, where I was given a dose of new medications for extreme anti-anxiety and severe anti-depression.
Now with all that being said, I feel more stabilized both mentally and physically now, and was released from VGH as of last Saturday evening; I was instructed to come back if I start feeling "un-well" at anytime. I understand the situation this puts both yourself and me in after these unfortunate events, and I have attached my hospital release papers to help corroborate part of my ordeal, and will provide any further documentation if you feel it helps authenticate or answer additional questions for yourself or the crown attorney.
I take full responsibility for my actions, and am willing to go back to Surrey Pre-trial for any length of time that warrants such behavior. I am truly embarrassed for this entire situation, and I just wanted to let you know how invaluable of an asset your help has been to me. In the future, I have every intention of curbing my thoughtless actions and learn to adjust my behavior befitting the environment and situation. I would also like to point out that I appreciate the help and services I received at New Horizons and hold the up-most respect for their facility, and I hope my absence in no way reflects any negative emotions I feel towards them in anyway shape or form.
Again, I am sorry for my actions and I hope that we can put this matter behind us. If you have any thoughts in this, please feel free to share. You may contact me at your convenience at this email address, or 604-xxx-xxxx (phone will be activated this at noon.)
***It might be better to call him Attorney Myers instead of Zack. If his full name is Zachary he might not even go by Zack.
This letter is already well-written, so I'll offer some ideas that might make it more succinct. The fact that it is a long and detailed letter attests to the respect and appreciation you're trying to convey, but we still may be able to make it more succinct.
Due to the
respectable restrictions put in place by ...
...until the at least
their the 4th week of ...
...my campus to
rather gather my belongings
I followed up
my next mornings with a well-needed rest and an the next morning with an urgent appointment at my doctor's ... Now with all that being said, I feel more stabilized both mentally and physically now, and ...
and hold the
up-most utmost respect
If you have any thoughts
in on this, please feel free to share. You may c...
***Okay, so some of those corrections above are grammar corrections. This is already written quite well, though. I hope you'll have great outcomes in this letter and with the whole situation.
Hello, I would like to give you some assistance.
First, I feel there are some missing words. The opening sentence should read: "Please allow me to apologize for not communicating with you sooner. I would start a new sentence with:" "This has been my first opportunity to explain my circumstances, pending my release..." I would change the end of the paragraph to "...manner that is appropriate..."
The next paragraph, there is too much information contained in one sentence. You can easily simplify these sentences. "Regrettably, XXXXX requires an annual special authorization form that has to be filled out by my doctor and it can take a few days for it to completely process. Thus, my..."
When you went to you doctor's office you state re-prescription. I think you should state "refill of my prescription medications". I would avoid some abbreviations. When you use GP, you should either describe her as a physician or general practitioner. Also, don't disclose her name in the essay.
The next paragraph, place a comma after "However" and place a period after worried. Start a new sentence with: "One of my peers..."
These are just a few grammar changes.