zziipp 1 / 1 Jan 14, 2011 #1Dear Prof. XXXI am writing you to apply for a post-doctoral position in your lab. I have been seeking just such an opportunity as this and based on job description on your website, I believe my education and research experience would be a good match for your requirements.I am currently in a doctoral program at Key Laboratory of Biotechnology & Crop Quality Improvement of XXX, XXX, XXX and will complete my Ph. D. degree by July, 2011. My Ph. D. research, being done focuses on genetic mapping and QTL analysis of agronomic traits in cotton (Gossypium spp.). Also I have experience in fiber quality related gene cloning in cotton.I would greatly appreciate if you provided me a post-doctoral opportunity to work under your supervision and I believe that my perseverance and enthusiasm could help me success in the research at your lab. Enclosed is my curriculum vitae for your close review. If you need additional materials or information, I am happy to supply it.Thank you very much for your consideration and looking forward to hearing back from you.Sincerely,XXX
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129 Jan 16, 2011 #2Nice job! Let's eliminate some unnecessary words...I have been seeking just such an opportunity, as this and based on the job description on your website (no need for a comma here) I believe...I think you need one more sentence added to the end of that first paragraph... a sentence that will be memorable and meaningful. Let the reader know your main idea by adding one more sentence to the end of that first paragraph. :-)... and I believe that my perseverance and enthusiasm could help me success in the research at your lab. (Right here, add a sentence to substantiate the claim, a sentence about ways you have used enthusiasm to contribute in other, similar settings.This is very professionally written, but you need a few interesting sentences to help the reader feel a sense of inspiration and curiosity about you. Good luck! Your writing is professional and impressive.
