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Medical Exchange Program - searching for fix a letter of recommendation


Tutti green 1 / -  
Nov 21, 2019   #1

she deserves to participate in this program



Dear,
The Global Undergraduate Exchange Program always provides a good opportunity for all outstanding undergraduate students in community service, professional development, and cultural enrichment. As Vice-President of the University of Medicine of Hanoi, as a sponsor, I have the honor to present Miss LE Thi Thu Huyen - a 4th-year student in general medicine for her candidacy to perform an exchange semester in US.

Medical students are always seen as hard-working, motivated students and must work hard to be able to take theoretical and practical courses at hospitals. And I assure you that LE Thi Thu Huyen is a serious student, determined and dynamic. She has a solid command of written and spoken English and also a good level of French (with the DELF B2 diploma). Her ability, passion, team spirit and diligence have led to good results in her studies even in extra-curricular activities. In her work, she often impresses me with her meritorious diligence, her curiosity and also her constant enthusiasm. Indeed, I particularly appreciate her constant dynamism and her playful temperament that suggests a determined student investigate new knowledge and achieve her goals.

Being able to participate in your program's activities will allow her to meet other international students, learn about the cultures of her American dreams, and of course have deep training in the specialist she loves. For my part, I deeply believe that with her qualities and her aspiration, she deserves to participate in your exchange program.

Hoping that his application attracts your attention and that it can be chose among yours, I am always at your disposal for any further information
Maria - / 1,098 389  
Nov 22, 2019   #2
@Tutti green
Welcome to the forum! I hope my feedback gives you insight on how to improve your writing.

Firstly, the first paragraph needs to be enhanced to appear a lot more formal and professional in writing. Omit words that are excessive - and try your best to deal with the technical angle of things than anything else. For instance, take a look at this revision of your introductory sentence: The Global Undergraduate Exchange Program alwaysprovides a good opportunity opportunities for all outstanding undergraduate students in community service, professional development, and cultural enrichment.

Try to also merge lines that can actually flow in the same spectrum. If we take a look at the second paragraph, for instance, it is obvious how the first two sentences could have been merged to create a shorter and more structured sentence. If you stick with these fundamentals of learning, it would be much better for your writing in general.


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