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Motivation letter for applying a Master's Degree

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Aug 28, 2013   #1
Dear friends please revise my motivation letter
Many thanks in advance for your attention.

I am writing this letter in response to the announcement posted on your webpage regarding the Master of Science Information and Automation Engineering currently available. I respectfully submit this letter of application since I believe my academic background and experience are well suited to meet the needs of the position.

These days, in the third millennium, it's hard to imagine the production landscape without industrial automation systems. Growing requirements of high product quality, paired with expectations of equally high reliability in high-volume production, mean that the scale of industrial automation will continue to grow. Much of what was previously produced by human hand can no longer be achieved in terms of cost and quality. Hence, manufacturers are going to into Automation which is the use of machines, control systems and information technologies to optimize productivity in the production of goods and delivery of services.

In Iran, my country including developing nations, production efficiency in the large number of factories and industries is far less than the world's average which is due to utilizing high energy consumption equipment in the production line; however, in this circumstance, manufacturers still benefit due to the fact that the cost of energy in Iran is much less than other competitor countries as Iran, being one of most oil-bearing nations in the Middle East, is an energy superpower and the conventional strategy for power generation in this country has largely evolved around the usage of inexpensive local fossil fuels. Nevertheless, during recent years by removing energy subsidies plan; the cost of production is soared dramatically. Because of this, manufacturers have persuaded to use new technologies in their industries to keep up their competitiveness with other competitors. In this way, they need go through energy automation which can have positive impact on enhancing total efficiency of the factory through providing more efficiency by minimizing downtimes with fast fault identification and clearance, higher cost-efficiency through reduced operating and maintenance costs, reduction of energy costs through consumption optimization, high investment protection due to detailed knowledge of the supply network and its operating parameters and long-term operational security due to increased flexibility and scalability based on standardized components. Therefore, industrial automation is getting more and more popular among industries in my country which results in a great need to experts in the field of automation.

As a holder of Master's Degree in Electrical Engineering, I have been working in a company since three years ago. The company is one of the most famous companies in the field of the design and construction of oil storage tanks. Since one year ago, I have been appointed as head of the repairs and maintenance section and my major duty is to ensure of the accurate functioning of equipment and industrial tools. However, the problem which I face is that, these days, factories are being equipped by modern automation systems that their maintenance and repairs is much more sophisticated than the conventional equipment while my colleagues and I have a primary knowledge of automation systems such as PLCs and HMIs that cannot be enough for leading maintenance department. So, as my career goal is to become a successful expert, I decide to become familiar with newest technologies in industrial automation by doing a degree in Automation Engineering. This major involves the design, development and implementation of sensor and robotic systems for applications across a wide range of technological sectors. Modern engineering systems employ a broad spectrum of technologies, which when integrated provide for improved efficiency, quality and reliability. The combination of Mechanical, Electrical and Electronic Engineering with Computer Technology, namely, Mechatronics, is core to this endeavor. This integrated approach is becoming increasingly important in modern technological environments. I personally believe that by doing the degree I will be able to cope with challenges in the future and serve my company and my country better.

In this path, I choose Germany because this country is one of the major political powers of the European continent and a technological leader in many fields so that the industry of the country serves as a prevalent example among many because of big companies such as Siemens and Bosch which are well known in different fields of electrical and automation engineering. Germany is one of the countries that have been for many years leading with respect to inventions and the production of a multitude of communication and automation technologies with their specific system components. Furthermore, this country offers one of the best education systems in the world due to well-equipped universities and well-known professors. German universities combine research and study. They have been the scene of many groundbreaking discoveries and they are internationally renowned. Modern German universities also combine theoretical work with its practical application and both educate and train - basic research is augmented by applied research. With such favorable conditions, Germany has become a highly attractive place to study Engineering and related majors, for Bachelor, Master, or PhD degrees.

After a broad search, I found the Master of Science Information and Automation Engineering at University of xxxxx the best choice for me because the faculty of the institute rank among the top five in Germany with respect to research funds rose. They work closely with national and international industry and other research centers on research projects involving the newest technology and students are encouraged to participate in these projects. Moreover, this program includes numerous theoretical courses such as Robotics, Process Automation I and II, Real Time Systems, and also some useful practical courses such as Advanced Control Systems Lab and Process Automation Lab. This program is delivered from a multi-disciplinary perspective, thus equipping graduates for a diverse range of modern technological roles.

I believe that as a holder of Master's Degree in Electrical Engineering, being very close major to Automation Engineering, with a little job experience in a power plant and working as a maintenance supervisor in the industry of Iran, I have the capability and potential to fulfill this MSc position and am confident that I could be an active, open-minded and useful student in this program.

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Aug 31, 2013   #2
I am writing this letter in response to the announcement posted on your webpage regarding the Master of Science Information and Automation Engineering currently available. I respectfully submit this letter of application since I believe my academic background and experience are well suited to meet the needs of the position.

This group of sentences at the start of your application essay, in my opinion, is not necessary. Instead you could begin with some striking facts or features of this discipline and then proceed with your understanding of the course that you think is offered at the department.

The SOP overall is excellent. Go on ' Excelsior"

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