I experience difficulties to write a motivation letter that meets my expectations. I would be grateful if you could read my draft and give me some guidelines to improve it. Thank you in advance.
Motivation letter - BSc Engineering Technology - KU Leuven
Dear sir or madam,
I am writing this letter to express my motivation to apply for the Engineering Technology Bachelor programme at KU Leuven. I aim to present the reasons for my interest in the field, why I chose this programme, how it would allow me to develop professionally and my key personality features.
To begin with, my passion for engineering started after I read a novel, Atlas Shrugged by Ayn Rand. The description of engineers as the drivers of success in society or the Atlases who hold the globe on their shoulders inspired me to consider a career in the field. Further on, I continued to delve deeper into the engineering world and I was impressed by the ambitious goals Elon Musk's companies have set for the future, as well as their current progress. I was for once convinced this is what I want to do - help innovate our world and contribute to the overcoming of humanity's greatest challenges.
Besides, my decision to study at KU Leuven is motivated by a couple of reasons. First of all, it is renowned as the most innovative university in Europe with its impressive number of filed patents over the years. What is more, researchers from the institution have created the first solar hydrogen panels paving the road for a world independent from fossil fuels. And the promise of its motto - Inspiring the outstanding - makes me believe this is the place where students are taught and trained to change the world, so I am eager to become one of them.
This particular Bachelor programme stood out among the others because it has a multi-disciplinary approach to the field. It aims to train engineers who are capable of managing complex problems on a technological as well as on a social level. Furthermore, the curriculum provides insights from the business world, which encourages students to develop an entrepreneurial mindset. These key particularities convinced me that the programme is my best opportunity to gain the fundamental knowledge and skills necessary to pursue my professional goals.
I believe that my personal traits would enable me to meet the requirements of the Bachelor course. I am generally a hard-working and ambitious individual, and I approach challenges with an open mind. My willingness to learn and grow has made me an excellent scholar in most subjects but mathematics has always been my favourite science. In my opinion problem-solving is essential to human nature and I embrace it when dealing with exigent tasks. Finding solutions and implementing them successfully is a rewarding quest which I dream to turn into an engineering career.
In brief, the engineering profession sparked my interest due to the qualities it demands of the ones who practice it - their most exceptional abilities, their faultless decisions, their full intellectual capacity. Being enrolled in your programme would give me the opportunity to start my development towards becoming such superhuman. I am aware of the hard work it requires, and I am enthusiastic to devote myself to my aims.
Thank you for considering my application.
Holt Educational Consultant - / 10,364 3367
This is a motivational letter that should be focused on your post study ambition. The motivation should explain how these studies, specifically studies in Europe and at this university, can help you achieve your goal. You make mention of Ayn Rand and Elon Musk as The people who inspired you to pursue this field of study. However, there is no clear reference to your ambition that would have been motivated by these people. What do you plan for your future? Why is that your motivation? Your character should be described through your motivation to achieve this goal. Specifically, if it can help your community or the world.
Your motivation for choosing the university is highly generic. You could be describing any university at this point. The motivation for your studies should relate to your reason for choosing the university. However, since your actual ambition remains unclear, it is going to be difficult for you to properly refer to an effective motivating factor for your university choice.