'in order to be a successful educator...' - One paragraph of mine introduce letter

Dear all, this is my one of the paragraphs from my previous introduced letter. However, please help me with this. Thanks so much for time

Shortly after my graduation, I was looking for a teaching job that best fitted my education and experience. Fortunately I was hired by the XX High School District as a student attendant position for two years. This job made me realizes that in order to be a successful educator, besides my education and experience, I need to bring a great deal of passion in it. My career path shifted when left the job for my child-bearing for a short period of time. However, I was fortunate hired by the Alum Rock School District as a para-educator II and have been working for them ever since.

Shortly after my graduation, I began looking for a teaching job that best fitted my education and experience.

Fortunately I was hired by the XX High School District as a student attendant position, and this job lasted for two years.

This job made me realize that in order to be a successful educator, besides my education and experience, I need to bring a great deal of passion into it.

My career path shifted when I left the job for my child-bearing for a short period of time.

However, I was fortunately hired by the Alum Rock School District as a para-educator II and I have been working for them ever since.

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Thank you so much for your help Susan