My time in Sweden - Motivation Letter For SI scholarship

what you'll gain from scholarship in sweden

Describe how you can apply the knowledge and experience you will gain from your time in Sweden in your organisation/company and/or in your home country/region (max 1000 characters, space included)

The scholarship focuses on: Sustainable development goals (High quality education, no poverty, zero hunger, decent jobs ...)
My long term goal is to become an educational reformer and work collaboratively across disciplines to foster healthy learning environments for Vietnamese students. My work with students will allow me to enhance their abilities to succeed internationally, to score higher on university entrance exams/standardized tests, and generally improve their quality of life (poverty, hunger, and employment opportunities.)

My time in Sweden will positively impact my Personalized Learning Methods in my teaching, helping to address problems students face in Vietnam, such as inequalities in education, bullying, and mental health issues. Improving students' education results in broader implications affecting the quality of life in Vietnam, including its economy, public health, and the arts. Additionally, in this time of fractured international relations, having foreign students who are expertly trained in English, can only enhance possibilities for improved relationships between different countries.

Why are you giving the reviewer a lecture regarding what the scholarship focuses on? Who told you that you can do that? Why are you doing that? Do you want to get removed from consideration based on your opening sentence alone? That is exactly what will happen with that useless and brainless approach that you have taken to writing this response statement. It is not a motivation letter nor an essay. It is merely a statement.

Your long term goal does not describe how you plan to use the knowledge you will be gaining from the scholarship. Therefore, the committee will realize that you do not have an inkling of what the actual application of your study goals , in relation to the courses you will be taking will be once you complete your studies. You should focus only on developing the second paragraph content since that is what has a little semblance of applicability to the provided question.

Actually, I am stretching here only because there are certain aspects of the second paragraph that can apply to the discussion. Overall though, you have not really responded in an acceptable manner. You have not provided any useful information as it relates to the question being asked. Your lack of familiarity with the background and uses of the scholarship program proves to be highly evident and further weakens your consideration as a candidate for the scholarship application.

Hey Holt
Thanks for your feedback. That was my mistake when I forgot to remove the first sentence. That was me trying to clarify the goal of the scholarship to one of my reviewers before I posted it here. The essay should start at the part My long term goal is .... Thanks for your help anyways.