'Traveling and tourism industry' - study plan and motivation letter

Phelps_Wang 1 / 2

Nov 25, 2012 #1

Hello guys!
I am new here and I need some help with my motivation letter and study plan.
Many thanks

Motivation letter

Dear sir/madam

My name is ***. I am twenty years old and I was born in Porto, a big city in North of Portugal. Although I am from Portugal, my parents are chinese.

I was educated as bilingual and biculture child. On one hand, my parents gave me the education and the influences according to China's lifestyle. On the other hand, portuguese school taught me the European culture. I am fluent in both languages because I have to speak them at home and at school. In addition to this, my English skills are also good, which makes me acquainted with various cultures.

My family has a restaurant, in which I am used to help since I was sixteen years old. I know how enjoyable is working in hospitality industry. I can meet new people and I feel good when customers are satisfied and value my job.

Travelling has been a passion through my life. Discovering new countries and learning about new cultures makes me think in a different way. So working in hospitality industry will be suitable for me.

As everybody knows the tourism industry is growing fast all around world and to be successful in this competitive and dynamic industry, it is very important to get a good education, so I decided to study at SHMS in Switzerland, which is a very well rated school. Switzerland is the birthplace of hospitality and Swiss hospitality education is the most qualified. I visited SHMS Caux campus on October and when I saw the school, I was amazed. The school looks like a palace, situated on the mountain , that provides a fabulous view. The environment of SHMS is great, there are students from everywhere over the world and being in touch with so many cultures everyday is something that I have never imagined.

I believe that the high education offered at SHMS will show me the way of success.

Study plan

As I said on motivation letter, I decided to start my education at SHMS because it is a worldwide reference in hospitality education.
I have chosen the BA degree course, which will take me three years to achieve.
This course is as theoretical and practical, including four academic terms and two internships, that allows students to not only acquire the necessary knowledge and skills, but also gain some work experience. Furthermore, I hope to live the international experience that SHMS provides.

The successful completion of my studies at SHMS and the solid educational background will help me find a good job in hospitality industry.
In this connection I enclose my letter of motivation

dumi 1 / 6,925

1592

Nov 25, 2012 #2

I was educated asa bilingual and ~~biculture~~bi-cultural child

----------- I doubt whether ''bi-cultural'' is a word in existence! check on that!

On one hand, my parents gave me the education and the influences according to China's lifestyle. On the other hand, portuguese school taught me the European culture.I am fluent in both languages because I have to speak them at home and at school. In addition to this, my English skills are also good, which makes me acquainted with various culture

My suggestion;
On one hand, I experienced Chinese culture at home through my parent's influence. On the other hand, I was exposed to the European culture at the Portuguese school. This made me fluent in both languages equally. In addition, I learned English too that gave me the opportunity to form acquaintances with people of diverse cultures.

OP Phelps_Wang 1 / 2

Nov 25, 2012 #3

Hello, dumi!
Thank you for the correction, the word bicultural exists :).

My suggestion;On one hand, I experienced Chinese culture at home through my parent's influence. On the other hand, I was exposed to the European culture at the Portuguese school. This made me fluent in both languages equally. In addition, I learned English too that gave me the opportunity to form acquaintances with people of diverse cultures.

It sounds much better!!
I would like to know if there are some more mistakes.
Many thanks

OP Phelps_Wang 1 / 2

Nov 26, 2012 #4

Hello, guys!
My friend told me that the content of my motivation letter is not very good, can anybody give me some suggestions, please?

dumi 1 / 6,925

1592

Nov 26, 2012 #5

Hi again : )

My friend told me that the content of my motivation letter is not very good, can anybody give me some suggestions, please?

I guess your friend has a point. The reason is your answer is not very aligned with the prompt. They need to know ;
* What is your professional goal? In which sector would you like to work after obtaining your Master's degree?
* In which way do you intend to contribute to the social, political or technical development of your home country once you are in a respective position? as well as to your professional or personal experience.

* Why do you apply for the chosen Master's programme? Which of the courses offered in this programme are particularly beneficial in pursuing your professional goals?

*Why do you think you are the right person for this programme?
*What knowledge and skills gathered in your previous education will be useful?
*Have you already gathered any relevant professional experience?
*Have you gathered any relevant experience as a member of any organization?
* How do you estimate your own personality? Do you think you are a good leader? Are you somebody who can make a difference? What makes you think so? (Emphasize your strong points, but be realistic.)

Ask yourself whether you have answered the above in this essay! If not, bring those points into it. Then it'll be fine!