First stanza: awesome
Second stanza: simplistic, but refreshingly simple, like a haiku
Third stanza: "I Hated Grapefruits" seems like a big step up from " "I never really liked grapefruits." It seems like if you are going to upgrade from never really liked to "hate" it should be part of the central meaning of the poem.
he would use all of the sugar up every last bit of it in his grapefruit and then i'd be too
embarrassed to get more.--- I wonder why you would be embarrassed to get more sugar after he used it all up. If you were the only one using sugar, maybe you could feel embarassed, but... he is the one who should have felt embarrassed for using it all!
even after i left for good
and decided to become a poet but not an engineer.
Is this because your father wanted you to be an engineer but you defy him because you resent him for making you eat grapefruit?
:-)