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Limericks or poems. Started to like poetry... maybe



qomoco 24 / 104  
Jan 18, 2010   #1
Angel's Decision (Seeking Death)

Shall I compare you to light or fire?
For I'm the petrified moth in desire.
Light? Is that you? Unlikely,
Fire? Is that you? Likely...
Though I still search, for my straits are dire.

Shark

I saw a man reaching for the red moon.
Forty years later, I saw him again at noon.
I was a curious little boy,
Confronted the man with "why?"
"Why not," the man replied, a sharp harpoon.

well I wrote these for college but I couldn't get much comments from the essay thread so I decided to post here.

tell me what you think

EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Jan 19, 2010   #2
For I'm the petrified moth in desire.

Awesome, you have great rhythm. A comedian does a few jokes about how the invention of the light bulb realy messed up moths' worlds. He says there are moths still flying on their way to the sun, saying, "It's gonna be worth it!"

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I think yet works better than though:
Though I still search, for my straits are dire.

I don't understand the second one very well! This structure confuses me:
I was a curious little boy----> Confronted the man with "why?"

Sorry you didn't get much response last time! It has been busy, with lots of new essays posted all at once during the end of December.

:-)


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