trulyblessed 1 / 2 Jul 11, 2011 #1Why do I love you so muchis it your smile that sends chills down my spineWhy do I love you so muchis it the way you hold me when i cryWhy do I love you so muchis is the way you say i love you and look into my eyesWhy do I love you so muchis it cause i think you can be the one who swoops me off my feetWhy do I love,Why do I love you so Much
amrosca 4 / 130 Jul 11, 2011 #2What a cute poem!! :3However, I would keep the same number of syllables in each verse other than "why do I love you so much". And perhaps some punctuation would even help you to express your feelings. But that's up to you :P
HalfARose 1 / 2 Jul 11, 2011 #3Why do I love you so muchis it cause I know you are the one for meWhy question if you know if this person is the one? state it as if you really know other than that I really love it. I love the say I love you and look into my eyes it sounds rough at first but the look into my eyes just smooths it out
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129 Jul 12, 2011 #4Why do I love,Why do I love you so MuchDon't capitalize that W.I don't like the repetition of that line. I think it makes the reader start to skim. I think the poem would be better if you only wrote that line once at the beginning and once at the end.:-) Nice use of the word swooshed!