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Why do I love you so much...


trulyblessed 1 / 2  
Jul 11, 2011   #1
Why do I love you so much
is it your smile that sends chills down my spine
Why do I love you so much
is it the way you hold me when i cry
Why do I love you so much
is is the way you say i love you and look into my eyes
Why do I love you so much
is it cause i think you can be the one who swoops me off my feet
Why do I love,Why do I love you so Much
amrosca 4 / 130  
Jul 11, 2011   #2
What a cute poem!! :3
However, I would keep the same number of syllables in each verse other than "why do I love you so much". And perhaps some punctuation would even help you to express your feelings. But that's up to you :P
HalfARose 1 / 2  
Jul 11, 2011   #3
Why do I love you so much
is it cause I know you are the one for me

Why question if you know if this person is the one? state it as if you really know other than that I really love it. I love the say I love you and look into my eyes it sounds rough at first but the look into my eyes just smooths it out
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 12, 2011   #4
Why do I love,Why do I love you so Much

Don't capitalize that W.

I don't like the repetition of that line. I think it makes the reader start to skim. I think the poem would be better if you only wrote that line once at the beginning and once at the end.

:-) Nice use of the word swooshed!


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