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Where am I? I am here! (poem)


SEGER 1 / 3  
Oct 2, 2012   #1
I am here
I wonder where HERE is?
I heard of this place but,
I see nothing
I want to find something,
I am here

I pretend it is
I feel a distance
I touched the unreal
I worry of the unknown
I cried in my silence
I am here

I understand nothing
I said to myself
I dream of challenge
I try to reach
I hope for compassion
I am HERE!
Meiling 2 / 3  
Oct 14, 2012   #2
Overall, I do like your poem; however, I would personally add some figurative language to it and make it a little longer. Also, I feel a little disconnected with the line "I pretend it is." I really like the repetition and there is definitely an emotional tone coming from the poem!

I hope this helps!


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