I have never written any poetry before. Would anyone be able to correct my first poem, give me some pointers etc...??? Thanx
In the morning, as a gaze at the luminous colours of spring,
I am reminded of your infectious smile.
In the afternoon, as the bitterly cold New England wind races across the highlands,
I think of you and I am warm.
In the evening, as I fix my eyes on the marvels of the constellations,
I reminisce about your dazzling eyes.
And late at night, as I feel my anxieties taking hold,
I recall your gentle touch and I am free.
try using repetition, alliteration, and assonance
Every poem, like every essay, should still have a "theme" or "main idea." What is the main idea in this essay? You seem to be talking about another person...
I really like your peom. Your use of imagery really brings out the meaning of thte peom. My favorite line is, "In the evening, as I fix my eyes on the marvels of the constellations".
In the morning, as I gaze at the luminous colours of spring,
Other than that it sounds good!
I like!
