bilal ABUZENAH 15 / 81 Nov 2, 2009 #1Where is?Where is the justice?Where is the peace?Where is the freedom?I went everywhere and looked for thoseIt took me years and years,I found nothing.I have no idea where those have goneā¦.Why do they want to keep them away from my people?I do not know!Who knows?!!I went back to my country with two black bags full of money!!!!Everybody was waiting for me,They wanted me to say something,I could not!!!!I raised the two black bagsIn that moment, every one knew what happened...While all of them were shouting at me.A little child stood and held up a stone in his hand and shoutedThis is the justiceThis is the peaceThis is the way to the happiness.... BILAL
OP bilal ABUZENAH 15 / 81 Nov 2, 2009 #3thanks shy1. if you don't mind may u please read my other poem...thanks...
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129 Nov 4, 2009 #4Punctuation can make it even better, but only if you like it:I went everywhere and looked for those. ----> I added a period.Semi-colon:I raised the two black bags;In that moment, every one knew what happened...
zebrasapien 1 / 8 Nov 6, 2009 #6Where are you from? Is it not important? I think I could understand this poem much better if I knew some background information. I like it, though.
OP bilal ABUZENAH 15 / 81 Nov 6, 2009 #7You can click on user name to see my other papers...I think you can figure it out from the text. specially the end of it.