from STDs
Do not use an abbreviation at the beginning of the essay. At first write it completely and then use the abbreviation. I mean you should write it in this way:"from Sexually-transmitted diseases (STD) ...
other industrialized nation
sIn Florida there were 88,277 reported cases and in the southern counties of Florida there were 18,142 reported cases
U can write this sentence like the following one :" 88,227 and 18,142 cases were reported in Florida and southern countries of Florida, respectively. "
eleven participants
it would be better to write the numbers over 10 in digit
U should classify the information of this part of the research into three main parts and u should write each one in a separate paragraph :1) The aim of the study: Why did you do the study? Write about the questions that you are going to answer them through the study. 2) Methodology: You need to write the detail of the research separately. 3) Results and discussion: Give the main results you have gained. If it is possible analyze the data and provide a logical discussion.
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