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|My story can be summarized in three words: Change or Die. Why I deserve a scholarship?
3 - Dear thaobui1907, This is my suggestion based on my own experience only. For the scholarship application, universities would...
Scholarshipthaobui1907 - Jan 19, 2016 / ntlinh - Jan 28, 2016
|Tell us about paid or voluntary work experience and/or how you plan to contribute to Uni
3 - Dear thaobui1907, You have gained quite a lot practical experiences. However, I found your experiences were not connected...
Scholarshipthaobui1907 - Jan 21, 2016 / ntlinh - Jan 28, 2016
|Study Objective and Personal Statement for Fulbright - Senescyt Scholarship, Ecuador
3 - Felipe, for the second essay on this Fulbright application, here are my thoughts; The presentation is appropriately done,...
Scholarshipfelipeary91 - Jan 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 27, 2016
|This is an essay on the challenges that my peers and I have encountered.
2 - Brayan, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay by addressing your concerns. First of all, after...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 27, 2016
|Motivation Letter for Erasmus Mundus masters program on Digital Communication Leadership (DCLead)
3 - Ishaqur, I believe the final revision of your essay is done pretty well. Bold paragraphs, smooth transition and the...
ScholarshipIshaqur - Jan 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 23, 2016
|"How Athletics and Activities Have Influenced My Life." Lindy Callahan Scholarship essay.
2 - Brittany, I read and understand your essay and I believe it's a good one. You have written it in...
ScholarshipBcox30 - Jan 22, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 23, 2016
|Masters in Sweden, SI scholarship: I'll return to Vietnam, become a leader to tackle health problems
3 - I think that 'brain drain' is a serious issue in Vietnam now. To highlight your contribution to the development...
Scholarshipruby410 - Dec 21, 2015 / thaobui1907 - Jan 21, 2016
|My 250 word essay on why I believe that I should be awarded a certain scholarship
5 - I believe in the first para, you want to express that you are very enthusiastic person. However, I think...
Scholarshipdsdooder5 - Jan 15, 2016 / thaobui1907 - Jan 21, 2016
|Motivation letter on adacemic performance, reason's for applying makes you appropraite for scholarsh
3 - Adeniyi, the scholarship needs to have a more coherent direction. The discussion right now is trying to present too...
Scholarshipardeniyi1986 - Jan 21, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2016
|'Theory of reverse engineering and vulnerability analysis'. SOP for a DPhil in Cyber Security
2 - Jeff, you need to focus the content of your essay solely on the discussion of a personal statement. Have...
ScholarshipJeffRumanyika - Jan 18, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 18, 2016
|Contributions to my community and what I have accomplished.
2 - Brayan, I'd like to share my thoughts on your essay. I'd like to draw your attention to the last...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 17, 2016
|What do you consider to be the most pressing global issue today and why? 25000 character limit essay
3 - "Despite the seeming eradication of racism" I would adjust this statement to "Despite the progress of eradicating". I...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 16, 2016 / maggienowlin - Jan 17, 2016
|Tightly packed responses; career impact, influential person, six qualities and leadership
5 - Brayan, the problem with your leadership position response is that you were the leader, decision maker, and implementer of...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 15, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2016
|'nightly struggle to read stories' - this essay aims to describe myself the best way possible
2 - Cut the opening paragraph out, it doesn't say what it needs to say about you. Regardless of the sentiment...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 15, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2016
|Tell us about something that may help us evaluate your nomination - need to enhance this response.
2 - Brayan, with the above remarks and corrections, you should be able to revise pretty well. What I notice...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 5, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 14, 2016
|Discuss leadership experience - Gates Millennium
5 - This is definitely not a leadership experience essay. This is an essay about your ascent up the school paper...
Scholarshipkerry2654 - Dec 11, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 14, 2016
|Goals - finish high school with high grades, be accepted to my top three schools, and attend college
3 - Kerry we have a problem with your response. I hate to say this but, your response doesn't apply at...
Scholarshipkerry2654 - Jan 6, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 13, 2016
|Social justice, intersectional feminism, Congolese values. Acquired Knowledge Outside Class - Gates
4 - Your discussion about the rise of your knowledge about Feminism was a very gold way to kick off the...
Scholarshipkerry2654 - Jan 6, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 13, 2016
|Contribution to Community - Studyblr
2 - This experience sounds more like you were acting in an advisory rather than leadership capacity. There is no real...
Scholarshipkerry2654 - Jan 13, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 13, 2016
|Difficult problematic subjects - Gates Millennium Scholarship
7 - Gates Millennium Scholarship Word Count: 446 Discuss the subjects in which you have had difficulty. What factors do...
Scholarshipkerry2654 - Dec 11, 2015 / kerry2654 - Jan 13, 2016
|My English classes. Subjects I've Excelled in - Gates Millennium
5 - Gates Millennium Scholarship Word Count: 346 Discuss the subjects in which you excel or have excelled. To what...
Scholarshipkerry2654 - Dec 19, 2015 / kerry2654 - Jan 13, 2016
|If you saw your best friend cheat on a test, what would you do: TJHSST Entrance Essay Prep
ScholarshipStephanieH - Jan 12, 2016 / StephanieH - Jan 12, 2016
|Couching, volunteering, not to fear any failure. APIASF Scholarship - short term and long term goals
4 - Firstly, your essay seems a bit all over the place. Without an introduction or conclusion, the paragraphs didn't flow...
Scholarshippineapplerice - Jan 8, 2016 / StephanieH - Jan 12, 2016
|"My shyness" - GATES MILLENNIUM SCHOLARSHIP - source of my knowledge or skills
2 - Thelicia, I read through your essay and right off the bat, it already made me sad, you started the...
ScholarshipHelper17 - Jan 9, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 9, 2016
|By the "hard work" my dreams and passions are within reach - scholarship essay
3 - Thank you very much for your feedback, it is greatly appreciated! I can absolutely see what you mean. Looks...
ScholarshipFauxFox - Jan 7, 2016 / FauxFox - Jan 9, 2016
|I need assistance correcting my response to the prompt what has most influenced me for the future
4 - Brayan, when you discuss the inspiration you derive from pilots and the service that they offer the people, you...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 7, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 9, 2016
|Discussing my year as class president - leadership experience
3 - Kiana, as I read through your essay, you do have some work to do, particularly in streamlining the idea...
ScholarshipKianaMarieKiana - Jan 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Jan 6, 2016
|By seeking leadership experiences, I've been able to learn to communicate and empathize with people
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 5, 2016 / brayan1996 - Jan 6, 2016
|As a student, I have taken part in many after school and summer programs; non academic skills essay
2 - ... helped me improve my English, but also prepared me for college and life beyond. ... summer research programs...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 5, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Jan 6, 2016
|Scholarship For the United World College. My Personal statement. Assist me where possible.
5 - Thank you for taking time to respond and comment on my statement. I have taken note of your advice....
ScholarshipQueenofhearts99 - Jan 5, 2016 / Queenofhearts99 - Jan 5, 2016
|Discuss the subjects in which you have had difficulty. What factors do you believe made it difficult
3 - Par. 1: Academics has ALWAYS been a strong motivator in my life. However, this motivator was not always my...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 4, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 5, 2016
|Unfairness at the jewelery store - describe a situation when you or others were treated not right
3 - Brayan, you have a very good story to share here. It is really eye opening and relevant to the...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 4, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 4, 2016
|I need help appealing the loss of my scholarship
Scholarshipzainab06 - Jan 4, 2016 / zainab06 - Jan 4, 2016
|Making History - Marching Band Essay
Scholarshipalyx1207 - Jan 4, 2016 / alyx1207 - Jan 4, 2016
|'My academic success stems from math and science'. Suggestions on the content and how to improve it.
2 - Brayan, if you are planning to use this for a scholarship application, you have a lot of work to...
Scholarshipbrayan1996 - Jan 3, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 4, 2016
|The song "Win" by Brian McKnight is about hope, faith, and perseverance - and it expresses who I am
2 - Sid, the first experience that you related in your response, while interesting, does not have the same impact and...
Scholarshipsidchilling - Jan 3, 2016 / vangiespen - Jan 3, 2016
|England's challenge. Helen Keller once said "Character cannot be developed in ease and quiet"
2 - Quick fixes: "I could not speak in front of the public" "easily find the school representative easily " "Many...
ScholarshipAika_Magz - Dec 31, 2015 / mcooley - Dec 31, 2015
|2D and 3D in the gaming industry - scholarship essay on goals and contributions
7 - here's the complete essay along with changes in bold (word count: 370): Behind the flashing screen of the...
ScholarshipfiveTen3 - Dec 25, 2015 / fiveTen3 - Dec 27, 2015
|Short and long-term goals priorities in my life; college degree
3 - Amanda, try to be more course specific regarding your goals over the next 12 months. When you say that...
Scholarshipmanda803 - Dec 27, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 27, 2015
|I am applying for Global Undergraduate Exchange Program. This is my essay.
2 - hoang2101, I'm not good at writing, but here are the things I've noticed: 1. Check for grammar. I've...
Scholarshiphoang2101 - Dec 26, 2015 / Kisakina - Dec 27, 2015
|IRISH AID SCHOLARSHIP - Master in Ireland
4 - hey Nguyen I completely understand the requirements, but firstly you need to change your content, then only we...
ScholarshipTungnt - Dec 23, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Dec 23, 2015
|Scholarship essay- This is what makes me happy.
5 - Sakshi, like i said before, you are already submitting this with other scholarship requirements. Therefore, it is obvious that...
ScholarshipSsakshijain - Dec 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 20, 2015
|Meaningful activities / Study plan - SCHOLARSHIP ESSAY FOR YAKE UNIVERSITY
2 - All of these essays seem like free write lists to the prompt. Try to structure it in paragraph form...
Scholarshipphunmi - Dec 19, 2015 / kerry2654 - Dec 19, 2015
|Balance and organization: two necessary precepts for me - SCHOLARSHIP ESSAY
3 - Okay, the content of your essay does not really present any relevant purpose for your desire to be awarded...
Scholarshipsmunozas23 - Dec 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 18, 2015
|Why is your field of study important today?
3 - I suggest using this for the introductory sentence: "The Engineer is the fabricator of inventions for the benefit of...
ScholarshipZiks_a - Nov 29, 2015 / smunozas23 - Dec 18, 2015
|What is one event in your life that has changed you as a person?
ScholarshipGlendont - Dec 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 18, 2015
|Sense of humor is very helpful in my life - NTU Scholarship Essay on values and beliefs
Scholarshipshadowfiend - Dec 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Dec 16, 2015
|My magnificent success in auto mechanics has inspired me to move to the next level
4 - Chris this revision is absolutely better. You see, you can actually make a very good essay, I'm just proud...
Scholarshipbrunokris - Dec 8, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 8, 2015
|Character cannot be developed in ease and quiet. Overcoming a challenge essay
Scholarshipkenkenkilla - Dec 4, 2015 / kenkenkilla - Dec 7, 2015
|Everyone has faced some sort of obstacle in his life. Texas State essay topic B
ScholarshipGabygabbs15 - Dec 2, 2015 / Gabygabbs15 - Dec 3, 2015
|'Great enthusiasm' - letter of motivation for Erasmus Mandus Marhba Scholarship Master Program
3 - I appreciate your adjustments, suggestions and gramitical correctiona for my letter.. And I really need you Justivy to help...
ScholarshipHthmn - Dec 1, 2015 / Hthmn - Dec 2, 2015
|'I developed a slight tendency towards project management.' Mundus Scholarship letter
Scholarshipqamar3811 - Nov 19, 2015 / justivy03 - Dec 1, 2015
|Life time goals and how are my actions now contributing to this goal
3 - Gabriella, as I finish proof reading your essay, I conclude that you have the idea for a well written...
ScholarshipGabygabbs15 - Nov 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 30, 2015
|If you do not receive the MasterCard Foundation Scholarship what are your plans for the next 4 years
4 - Michael, honestly, the essay is quiet weak. Your answer to the prompt is more like out of self pity...
ScholarshipMichael53161 - Nov 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 29, 2015
|Most significant endeavor since attending community college (Public Speaking)
4 - Zikora, I read your essay and I believe it's done very well, the essay easily combined information and ideas...
ScholarshipZiks_a - Nov 29, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 29, 2015
|help me to read my personal statement. Welcome your critics, even grammars or phrases.
ScholarshipdooD - Nov 29, 2015 / irfan727 - Nov 29, 2015
|Greater expectations - FOOTLOCKER SHOLARSHIP QUESTION(S)
3 - Danny, while I appreciate that you want to share a little bit of your backstory with the reviewer, it...
Scholarshipdanny_g805123 - Nov 28, 2015 / vangiespen - Nov 29, 2015
|Furthering my education has been a personal goal I have always striven to achieve. (100 words)
3 - Alex, the prompt says 100 words, where's the other half of the words?, or is this just the first...
ScholarshipAlex18 - Nov 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 28, 2015
|Brief biography and what motivates you (250 or less)
ScholarshipZiks_a - Nov 28, 2015 / justivy03 - Nov 28, 2015
|Motivational Letter for Masters Scholarship in Sustainable Transportation & electrical Power Systems
3 - Hi..Eniola... Here a few advice to help you get your scholarship. first steps you should explain that...
Scholarshipsl93 - Nov 28, 2015 / hasbi - Nov 28, 2015
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