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|My volunteer-mindedness that I have done during my high school life - APU scholarship essay
ScholarshipSuperp - Feb 3, 2015 / digaprasiska - Feb 3, 2015
|The dies had been cast before I was born, setting in motion many hardships and struggles
2 - Hi Angelica, I brought the essay down to 289 words by focusing the content more on your story rather...
Scholarshipangelicaf - Jan 30, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 2, 2015
|To me, invent something is a dream for a lifetime. Scholarschip Statement of Purpose
4 - Basically, you should explain your interest in the field and how the advanced studies will help you fulfill it....
Scholarshiprienyfadh - Feb 1, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 2, 2015
|If you give a man a fish, you feed him for a day; teach a man to fish - you feed him for a lifetime
4 - Definitely. Your essay has to come full circle in order to properly plead your case with the scholarship committee....
Scholarshipsmunoz23 - Jan 31, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 2, 2015
|Describe a failure in your life, and what you've done to fix it?
3 - Here's the revised version. Any changes I should make? Prompt: Describe a failure in your life, and how you...
ScholarshipIHaile - Jan 29, 2015 / IHaile - Jan 30, 2015
|People that are nobody and wants to be somebody. APU Japan: Scholarship Essay
3 - Yasmin, you certainly had a lot to say in your essay. Unfortunately, nothing you had to say actually led...
Scholarshipyasmairoh - Jan 25, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 25, 2015
|Five star customer services; Hospitality management - SCHOLARSHIP ESSAY
5 - THANK YOU :)...
ScholarshipIfranco - Jan 20, 2015 / Ifranco - Jan 24, 2015
|Nursing provides to people great care and improve their health.
4 - The one question your essay needs to answer in particular is, "Why do you want to become a "Pediatric...
Scholarshipaarooj - Jan 20, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2015
|What are your career plans and how might they be consistent or contribute to mission of the program
3 - Your scholarship essay needs to embody a specific goal or ambition that you have for your community that relates...
Scholarshipsmunoz23 - Jan 21, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2015
|My vision and dreams - Scholarship Motivation letter
ScholarshipMilorad - Jan 18, 2015 / Milorad - Jan 19, 2015
|"I can speak five languages" - this short statement became my biggest motivation for learning more
Scholarshipbinhvt95 - Jan 13, 2015 / binhvt95 - Jan 18, 2015
|MoMA is often recognized as the utmost significant museum of modern art in the world
Scholarshipgusebqkr223 - Jan 18, 2015 / gusebqkr223 - Jan 18, 2015
|Flashing lights. Tangled bodies. Room shaking. Bass blaring. Sweet intoxication.
7 - Your right, I never thought about it that way! Thank you so much for all your help Vangiespen! I...
Scholarshipmhamid92 - Jan 14, 2015 / mhamid92 - Jan 17, 2015
|Scholarship essay about where I would see myself in future if I had the chance to time travel
2 - Sami, you need to discuss this essay from the point of view of wishing to discover who or what...
Scholarshipsamiiimarie - Jan 14, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2015
|Three adjectives have followed me throughout life - philanthropic, creative, and intercultural.
Scholarshipdozazgirl - Jan 12, 2015 / vincenm - Jan 14, 2015
|"Nothing is impossible" A familiar quote but significant to me, even until now. NTU scholarship
2 - "Nothing is impossible" A familiar quote but significant to me, even until now. Yes, if you were determined to...
Scholarshipjy_chin - Jan 11, 2015 / miraheta - Jan 12, 2015
|Helping the community through autism awareness (APIASF prompt)
2 - Okay, great job. Now let's make this sentence a little clearer by simplifying: Being a member of t The...
Scholarshipanonymous2014 - Jan 9, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Jan 11, 2015
|Scholarship essay: why I'm choosing APU for my further educational needs
4 - The first reason: I was born in a lower-middle class family and my mother is a housewife. One...
Scholarshipasiparahm - Jan 9, 2015 / GaziF - Jan 10, 2015
|Scholarschip. It would be an honor for me and my family to become a part of this fantastic journey.
2 - Performing with good academics, ethical values and responsibility has always been one of my main goals, but in order...
Scholarshipacano98 - Jan 8, 2015 / anonymous2014 - Jan 9, 2015
|Everything we do affects our success and our failure as well as our future. APIASF Scholarship
7 - Here is the updated version of the essay. Thank you so much for helping me. I'm hoping to receive...
ScholarshipSherlockLegends - Jan 4, 2015 / SherlockLegends - Jan 9, 2015
|The community where I live in right now is notorious for gang violence, especially for the youths.
3 - I did some revisions, and I followed what you said, though it is still iffy. Please help me polish....
ScholarshipSherlockLegends - Jan 8, 2015 / SherlockLegends - Jan 9, 2015
|I have learned that life in this world is not fair, things don't happened the exact way we wanted.
2 - I have learned that life in this world is not fair, things don't happen the exact way we wanted....
Scholarshipjosephcung - Jan 6, 2015 / huzefaa - Jan 8, 2015
|Mathematics and art are a specialty of mine - GMS Essay
Scholarshipnrojas2 - Jan 5, 2015 / lynn1997h - Jan 5, 2015
|"The only way to do great job is to love what you do" - this statement became my lodestar
2 - Overall, it's good. Some words are just redundant. Try not to overuse them. Utilize thesaurus to broaden your vocabulary...
ScholarshipHoaduong2012 - Jan 4, 2015 / Lady Elle - Jan 4, 2015
|The routine of my family - we are separated from ourselves. Gates Millennium Scholarship Essay
10 - When you say you were affected emotionally, socially, and academically, offer examples of these incidents. Then connect the way...
Scholarshipnrojas2 - Jan 2, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 4, 2015
|To get something - it always takes effort, sacrifice, and faith in God
4 - I grew from a family that gave priority to education, health and religion . since childhood I have been...
ScholarshipAulisa - Jan 3, 2015 / wai019 - Jan 3, 2015
|Some drastic changes in my life: moving from Mexico to North Carolina, preparing for a college
9 - What is the scholarship for? Some context may help us better understand where you are coming from.. I...
Scholarshipsmunoz23 - Dec 20, 2014 / nkp28 - Jan 1, 2015
|Students seek assistance from scholarship programs in order to mitigate their cost of attendance
5 - Benjamin, I am sorry for late reply. You can drop your review, whenever you're through with it and I...
ScholarshipSadebenjamin - Dec 24, 2014 / Modewap - Dec 31, 2014
|Free speech is the ultimate precondition for colleges to establish academic excellence. SCHOLARSHIP!
2 - the only problem that i have with this is that you're wasting a lot of words on explaining what...
Scholarshipjjj90 - Dec 29, 2014 / acrogirl5 - Dec 31, 2014
|'bachelorette in four years' - Should short and long term goals be straightforward or fluffed?
2 - My short -term goal is to graduate high school while getting rid of as many college prerequisite classes as...
ScholarshipBaloanie - Dec 30, 2014 / LunarEclipse - Dec 30, 2014
|Like former President Reagan, my adolescence sculpted me into the person that I am today.
Scholarshipnuclearducks - Dec 30, 2014 / nuclearducks - Dec 30, 2014
|Buying house for my parents/hope to develop technology to help those with stuttering (APIASF prompt)
2 - You have two great stories here, but I think your essay would improve if you connected them somehow. Try...
Scholarshipanonymous2014 - Dec 28, 2014 / Puppytime - Dec 28, 2014
|As HCl (hydrochloric acid) singes my flesh, a gleam of satisfaction bounces off my face; SCHOLARSHIP
3 - You may NOT post two essays in one thread. The second part removed. I did originally have this...
ScholarshipSadebenjamin - Dec 26, 2014 / Sadebenjamin - Dec 26, 2014
|One of the few object that is very important to me is my piano - Essay for Transferring Colleges
Scholarshipsamiisprink - Dec 22, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 26, 2014
|It was one my best volunteering experiences. 2nd Scholarship Essay for Transferring Colleges
2 - Ashley, I hope you find this helpful. :) Your introductory paragraph sounds like your are answering a direct...
Scholarshipsamiisprink - Dec 23, 2014 / Modewap - Dec 24, 2014
|It had begun as a project I did with the members of my Girl Scout troop. FDDS Scholarship Essay
2 - This is a very good essay Lauren. The idea that you have been carrying around this Good Samaritan side...
Scholarshipchapous3 - Dec 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 23, 2014
|Vandy Chancellor's Scholarship on Values
3 - Kristoff, you need to directly pick out one of the core values described in the essay prompt and then...
ScholarshipKristoria - Dec 22, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 22, 2014
|My Math Blues. Math and I do not get along.
3 - I think you should change the line "Till this day, I still have issues in my advance math class:...
ScholarshipZaria15 - Nov 26, 2014 / smunoz23 - Dec 21, 2014
|"Do not go where the path may lead, go instead where there is no path and leave a trail."
4 - Anon I think you should provide examples that back up your ideas such as, What are your culture traditions...
Scholarshipnovelsnerd98 - Dec 13, 2014 / smunoz23 - Dec 21, 2014
|Why and what motivates you to volunteer for Bina Antarbudaya? > volunteer exchange scholarship
3 - Your motivation and reasons for joining this volunteer activity is very shallow. You need to show a personal connection...
Scholarshipmardiansyah - Dec 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 19, 2014
|"Winner is dreamer" - Describe, in less than 300 words, the values and beliefs you hold strongly to
2 - Young response top the essay is incorrect. Being a dreamer is not a personal value, it is a character...
Scholarshipalmst - Dec 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 14, 2014
|I realized that we would eventually die and we do not know even when; my most influential eye-opener
4 - First of , you have absolutely not answered the prompt. You need to stick with just one thing.You talk...
ScholarshipNvtermptrl - Dec 12, 2014 / ezraclay - Dec 14, 2014
|Education is a key driver which always leads to the right direction - master degree scholarship SOP
2 - "I have found myself clearer and closer to my dream by the education." --> "Education helps me find myself...
ScholarshipKaranick - Dec 13, 2014 / hunhann - Dec 14, 2014
|World Food Programme Internship Letter
2 - Winnie, when writing an internship letter, you should only create an overview of the documents that you are submitting....
Scholarshipwincollate - Dec 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 13, 2014
|Himalayan Kingdom of Nepal - agriculture as the sine-qua-non of all economic activities; scholarship
2 - Sujan, were you provided with a prompt for your scholarship letter? It would be easier for me to review...
ScholarshipSuzns - Dec 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 12, 2014
|I like to assume biology experiments as a expedition to the microcosm, it makes me excited, zealous
2 - Yang, your essay is quite intricate and informative. Whether the content you chose to present is uncommon or not...
ScholarshipXuehuaweiba - Dec 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 10, 2014
|Education, a tool for altering change.
5 - There are numerous grammatical errors in your essay at the moment because you changed the wordings that I had...
ScholarshipModewap - Dec 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 6, 2014
|I wanted to stand as the pinnacle of hope for my underprivilege community, a role model to others
7 - My comment stands Adeyemi. That means that I am not changing my review of your modified essay even if...
ScholarshipModewap - Nov 3, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 30, 2014
|Study Objectives - I would like to learn about polymers in an engineering context
ScholarshipFlaviaR - Nov 28, 2014 / FlaviaR - Nov 30, 2014
|'I can see her eagerness to learn new things' - Employer writing Chevening reference
NEW - Chevening reference Hello! My employer asked me to write the refference myself because he doesn't know English and...
ScholarshipNastasi - Nov 30, 2014 / — -
|My motivation - there is a modest number of people who are genuinely interested in you..
3 - Overall, I love the essay. It is really good and you are really outspoken! What do you think about...
Scholarshipjdlr96 - Nov 26, 2014 / Cow5215 - Nov 29, 2014
|High school wouldn't have been so great if I hadn't experienced those thrilling activities
2 - "didn't know all these benefits charity offers till I became the member and president of the Charity Club" change...
Scholarshipamanuel19 - Nov 26, 2014 / SaritaM - Nov 26, 2014
|Essays for International Youth Camp on Anti-Corruption
Scholarshipyukarti - Nov 25, 2014 / yukarti - Nov 25, 2014
|This village had only one primary school - my experience
ScholarshipSanda3 - Nov 24, 2014 / Sanda3 - Nov 24, 2014
|What identifies you as a deserving candidate for Saint Louis University's Presidential Scholarship?
2 - Rafeeq, your essay is fine but it lacks one important element, you were not able to discuss how the...
ScholarshipRafeeq - Nov 24, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 24, 2014
|Obviously, direct communication makes conversations more clear and smooth
2 - Laurita, what is the exact prompt that you are trying to answer here? It is marked as a scholarship...
ScholarshipLauraP - Nov 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 23, 2014
|Fulbright-García Robles Scholarship (comexus) - Study Objectives
2 - Mariana, the essay is definitely wordy and needs to be cut down. The problem is that you are trying...
ScholarshipAlix - Nov 21, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 21, 2014
|I can always remember the feeling of wanting to know just how computers worked
2 - Leonard, the essay is not asking you about your past interest and experience with computer information. It is asking...
Scholarshipnebfresh - Nov 20, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 20, 2014
|Personal statement that outlines your study and career objectives including what you will study.
Scholarshipmavericks - Nov 19, 2014 / mavericks - Nov 20, 2014
|Nigeria. Describe your vision for your country and how you hope to contribute to that vision
5 - Thank you very much Vangiespen. Please am really confuse about what you mean "Am referring to Nigeria as a...
Scholarshipxperia - Nov 19, 2014 / xperia - Nov 20, 2014
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