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|Essay for Freshman Scholarships
4 - Prompt: Describe your family and your family's contribution to your education. Take Two - Is this any better?...
ScholarshipWolves23f - Jan 26, 2013 / Wolves23f - Jan 27, 2013
|"Jasmine Reveolution"; issue of personal, local, or national concern
ScholarshipLoguisvitch - Jan 26, 2013 / Loguisvitch - Jan 27, 2013
|Architecture/ Potential to succeed - SCHOLARSHIP MY GOALS/ Why INVEST in my education
4 - You come across as very arrogant and shallow. Reading this, I didn't feel that you really wanted to study...
Scholarshipalejandroaex - Jan 25, 2013 / megciso - Jan 26, 2013
|Courage is not born, it is developed; Scholarship 2013
11 - Courage is an intense belief or countering action admist and against the presence of great fear, risk, or peril....
Scholarshiprcamp92 - Jan 16, 2013 / rcamp92 - Jan 26, 2013
|'It is not a tool' - What Does Leadership Means? Scholarship
3 - "cunning" is a term generally used for a negative feeling. Even the term "shrewd " has a lighter...
ScholarshipJai911 - Jan 25, 2013 / dumi - Jan 25, 2013
|"I wanted to be an explorer"- Optics&Photonics Scholarship
4 - Thank you so much, guys! I'll use your suggestions! Just to make sure: The incipit isn't too strange or...
ScholarshipTess962 - Jan 23, 2013 / Tess962 - Jan 24, 2013
|Women in Science and Engineering/ Educational and Career Goals
ScholarshipBloodyKiss01 - Jan 22, 2013 / dumi - Jan 24, 2013
|Diverse Academic Intersts, Responsibility, my Culture; HMC President's Scholar-SOP
3 - Being rich and successful, making my friends and family proud and changing the world into a more meaningful...
Scholarshipcesaror123 - Jan 22, 2013 / dumi - Jan 23, 2013
|Diverse values and morals, blue collar houehold/U.S. Naval(NROTC)
Scholarshipalexishemeon - Jan 21, 2013 / dumi - Jan 23, 2013
|Vice President of HOSA; Leadership experience
5 - Definitely think that you should talk more about how you have affected your school's HOSA club rather than discuss...
ScholarshipNicoleO - Jan 14, 2013 / cesaror123 - Jan 22, 2013
|Culture,and Change among the Sherpa of Nepal ;Scholarship essay
6 - Mr Jiwan recommended me to review your essay regarding the following topic. Where I can see your powerful essay...
ScholarshipShanchuan Yin - Jan 18, 2013 / maneek - Jan 22, 2013
|Passion, USNS in Haiti, Hospital ship; REASONS- Naval Nurse Officer(NROTC)
2 - This is awesome... It's simple, straight and well presented. I like your style of writing :) .......
Scholarshipalexishemeon - Jan 21, 2013 / dumi - Jan 22, 2013
|English CAHSEE ; Why do you want to become a City Year Corps member?
Scholarshipcsdavies - Jan 21, 2013 / dumi - Jan 22, 2013
|Teaching passion/Change Route/Comeback;Motivational Essay- CBS Master's Scholarship
2 - ---------- You actually need not to be so descriptive :) ...,exclaimed my fellow students in the economic and...
ScholarshipMoh Mansour - Jan 21, 2013 / dumi - Jan 21, 2013
|I want to make a difference; U Ottawa Scholarship - Why Engineering?
Scholarshipjbrasz - Jan 8, 2013 / dumi - Jan 20, 2013
|I have excelled in Science; Gates Millennium Scholars
Scholarshipmagnifikakim - Jan 16, 2013 / dumi - Jan 20, 2013
|VC STUDENT COUNCIL; Leadership ability both in and out of school
ScholarshipAlwaysneedhelp - Jan 10, 2013 / dumi - Jan 20, 2013
|MUSIC- Therapeutic Remedy; Gates Millenium Essay: leadership experience
3 - I'm not sure whether you have already submitted this as it caught my eyes pretty late :) However, this...
ScholarshipAyinna - Jan 15, 2013 / dumi - Jan 20, 2013
|Engineering/ Team work/ European exposure; Motivational letter ; Erasmus Mundus
2 - I wish you presented this more effectively. Why not say this in direct speech having the entire focus...
Scholarshipcheetha - Jan 19, 2013 / dumi - Jan 19, 2013
|My future profession "teacher of languages;Motivation letter/ Erasmus Mundus /Masters
3 - Thank you, Dumi for your great help. I was quiet confused, hurried. I hmeant about IELTS even I didn't...
Scholarshipgboranbayeva - Jan 15, 2013 / gboranbayeva - Jan 16, 2013
|Someday I will achieve my wish; SOP - Scholarship
NEW - Hi, here's my scholarship statement of purpose, I want to know how's the over all idea of the statement...
ScholarshipTsuri - Jan 16, 2013 / — -
|Limited Resources/ Lack of funds; LETTER OF INTENT
5 - Here WE doesnt not have a preceding noun to which it refers.Syria comes at the end of the sentence.A...
Scholarshipseeky - Jan 11, 2013 / dibya - Jan 16, 2013
|Life time experience with a college life; Summer School Scholarship
Scholarshipsamiull - Jan 12, 2013 / samiull - Jan 16, 2013
|Deporting Daniela; Bill Gates Scholarship; Treated unfair.
4 - The prompt: Briefly describe a situation in which you felt that you or others were treated unfairly or...
ScholarshipNicoleO - Jan 14, 2013 / NicoleO - Jan 15, 2013
|Medical care for those live in third-world ; Contribution to diversity
3 - I like the second part =) However, I would recommend you to be more specific on YOURSELF. Write something...
Scholarshipnewcollege - Jan 9, 2013 / VVCepheiA - Jan 14, 2013
|My communication skills/ business skills; Scholarship Essay - Making Difference?
4 - I definitely agree with jkjeremy - if you have 200 words, make every single one count! You dont want...
Scholarshipflorida32 - Jan 11, 2013 / MisuleCZE - Jan 13, 2013
|Redefine perceptions; Case Western -Describe your solution
2 - I'm good at being harsh, but I don't need to. This essay is fairly solid. You begin the essay...
Scholarshipvenkatasuhas5 - Jan 12, 2013 / Th25cc - Jan 12, 2013
|Desperate for guidance; Scholarship-Leadership experience
2 - Hello, "It appears that every girl wants to be a Barbie, Nicki Minaj is the hair color queen,...
Scholarshiplexilex1995 - Jan 10, 2013 / admission2012 - Jan 10, 2013
|Bachelor's Degree and becoming a prosecutor; Scholarship Essay/ Short&Long TERM GOALS
Scholarshiplexilex1995 - Jan 9, 2013 / Th25cc - Jan 10, 2013
|Financial Analyst; MICHAEL'S MOTIVATION LETTER , MSC FINANCE AT CARDIFF,UK
ScholarshipMichael 13 - Jan 10, 2013 / Michael 13 - Jan 10, 2013
|Cancer is the 2nd leading cause of death ; Scholarship/ Goals as a professional
ScholarshipTeiji - Jan 7, 2013 / victoraguirre13 - Jan 9, 2013
|"Words to Remember"; Scholarship Essay - The Best Advice
ScholarshipChris1395 - Jan 6, 2013 / AmoebaMan - Jan 9, 2013
|Want to broaden my perspectives; Gilman Scholarship Statement of Purpose Essay
NEW - Here is my essay; I am planning to study abroad in New Zealand and I am currently a Nutrition...
ScholarshipRedinlove - Jan 9, 2013 / — -
|Work in Europe; Motivation Letter/Structural Engineering
Scholarshipqky - Jan 6, 2013 / qky - Jan 9, 2013
|From Congo & Post-college ambition; SCHOLARSHIP APP
3 - this is interesting you should add some else such as a hard time that you went through or something...
Scholarshipmerveille2011 - Jan 8, 2013 / lexilex1995 - Jan 8, 2013
|Too many females; COMMON APP/Situation that I was unfairly treated
4 - The essay is much better now. You have established a story that will allow you to answer each question...
Scholarshiplexilex1995 - Jan 7, 2013 / Th25cc - Jan 7, 2013
|Benefit to Home Country,Future long-term Goals/ UK Scholarship
NEW - Hi everyone, I have plans to apply for XXXX scholarship. I applied last year as well but the...
Scholarshipkaslam2 - Jan 7, 2013 / — -
|Volunteering at equine therapy center for autistic kids/ Contribution to community
Scholarships23180185 - Dec 28, 2012 / s23180185 - Jan 6, 2013
|Tuberculosis/ Clone; Motivation letter
2 - "As perAccording to the data presented by WHO," I would use this introduction. "I believe with the aid of...
Scholarshiprajatp - Jan 6, 2013 / Shifu123 - Jan 6, 2013
|I am open-minded/ Difficulty in Art & Science - GATS Scholarship
6 - Definitely change the word "learnt" to learned or learn. "Learnt" is not a word. There are also some sentences...
Scholarshiplexilex1995 - Jan 6, 2013 / tinkr1 - Jan 6, 2013
|I Am Not Fully "Korean"- Westmont Cultural Diversity Essay
Scholarshipqasderwdw - Jan 6, 2013 / qasderwdw - Jan 6, 2013
|Trying new things/ Skating; Leadership based SCHOLARSHIP/ Experience
2 - You repeat "extent" twice in this sentence - I would recommend dropping the second one since it's...
Scholarshipchocolateshoppe - Jan 5, 2013 / lornam - Jan 6, 2013
|I Took a Risk - I joined the Cross Country Team SCHOLARSHIP
2 - It's a nice answer, and showed how you challenged yourself. HOWEVER, is it really a risk? You joined the...
Scholarshipchocolateshoppe - Jan 5, 2013 / Kitsumi - Jan 5, 2013
|"Science is merely common sense at its best" ; SOP for ERASMUS MUNDUS scholarship
3 - thanks alott lethicia for your rapid response,glad to have your comments and positive comments :-)...
Scholarshipmizna - Jan 4, 2013 / mizna - Jan 4, 2013
|I volunteered as a Special-Hands buddy;GE-REAGAN SCHOL;Leadership/ Positive Influence
NEW - Before he became America's 40th President, Ronald Reagan pursued leadership roles to inspire and advocate for those around him....
ScholarshipCLTSO13 - Jan 4, 2013 / — -
|TURNTABLES/ MIXING SONGS; Gates Millennium Schol /Other areas of KNOWLEDGE or SKILLS
3 - It seems slightly flaccid. I think you could add dialogue+details to make it more engaging. Please see my essay....
Scholarshiptherealjso - Jan 1, 2013 / hughj - Jan 4, 2013
|New opportunities/ Affable,Multicultural Environment; Scholarship- Why UWC?
Scholarshiprainee - Jan 3, 2013 / moon05 - Jan 4, 2013
|Graduation Test; Georgia / Personal challenge
3 - @cristichica Would this revision work in place of the sentence you were talking about? Revision: I deserve financial aid...
ScholarshipHenryAmber - Jan 3, 2013 / HenryAmber - Jan 4, 2013
|Gates Millennium Scholarship (subjest in which you excel)
2 - a very well written essay. I loved the beginning and the end. however in the middle you lose the...
Scholarshipninjakungfu - Jan 1, 2013 / zdv - Jan 3, 2013
|Inspirational Mom; Jeff Krosnoff Scholarship/Inspiring poem
Scholarshippinkpolkadot15 - Jan 3, 2013 / — -
|FLUTE; UT Dallas McDermott Scholarship essay - Why Dallas Museum of Art?
Scholarshiplornam - Jan 2, 2013 / katev - Jan 2, 2013
|Brain tumor survivors; FURMAN SCHOLARSHIP/ Current issue/recent event
Scholarshiphpdwnsn95 - Jan 1, 2013 / moon05 - Jan 2, 2013
|UM Scholarship Essay; 'I used to have an on/off switch that I came to loathe'
NEW - Please tell me what you think! Not a very good writer...Every question must be answered in 100-150 words (Some...
Scholarshipgdiazdeleon - Jan 1, 2013 / — -
|Gain insight and new perspective / What Inspires You?- Study Abroad Scholarship
2 - What does stereotypes have to do with your inspiration? I think you should supress this part since it i...
Scholarshipc_lignelli - Dec 31, 2012 / duquevan - Dec 31, 2012
|The best things in life aren't things; SCHOLARSHIP ESSAY
6 - " I have joined in many extracurricular activities at my school such as the basketball team, some clubs like...
Scholarshipgabi_gallegos - Dec 29, 2012 / Edna - Dec 31, 2012
|I was a very curious child; My goals/ Scholarship
7 - sakura741 Thank you very much indeed... As i said the maximum words of the essay supposed to be 300...
ScholarshipNew1234 - Dec 30, 2012 / New1234 - Dec 30, 2012
|I stuck firmly to my own principles; Values and Beliefs- NTU SCHOLARSHIP
4 - It is that people might be offended by my words or actions which I do not realize they could....
Scholarshipnenakris - Dec 20, 2012 / New1234 - Dec 29, 2012
|"You're wrong, I'm right" ; Yale/Princeton Supp; Role of Culture
2 - I really like this! Not sure exactly what the quotation embodies, but other than that, great narrative. ...
ScholarshipRange Rover - Dec 29, 2012 / hellogoodbye - Dec 29, 2012
|Graphic designer; Tell us about your academic/career short-term and long-term goals.
2 - It's a good story. But there's a lot of sentence structure problems. I would take out the first sentence...
Scholarshipgabi_gallegos - Dec 28, 2012 / s23180185 - Dec 28, 2012
|And I have carried that lesson with me everywhere since; National Merit Scholarship
Scholarshipdevyndowdle11 - Dec 12, 2012 / s23180185 - Dec 28, 2012
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