please review my short essay below.
How will the scholarship contribute to the organization' human resources development needs (500char)
network of scholars and professionals
I am applying for this scholarship so that I can pursue my master's degree abroad as an attempt for my development as a professional. It is also a step that is highly supported by my firm so that I can be more global-minded that is useful especially when dealing with foreign clients. As a prestigious international scholarship, getting accepted by AAS will open my connection to a vast network of scholar and professional worldwide that will be beneficial not only for myself but also for my firm.
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The only part of this statement that actually works is the one about: "getting accepted by AAS will open my connection to a vast network of scholar and professional worldwide that will be beneficial not only for myself but also for my firm." To build on this response, you need to explain how your current firm requires more professionals in this field and why. Explain how, after you complete the studies, you will be able to go back and train the HR department in relation to the professional needs of your firm in this field. By becoming an AAS scholar, you will be able promote the scholarship among the other trainees who are looking for ways to further advance their careers as well. As such, the importance of AAS in this field will be of high importance not only to yourself and the firm, but to the future scholars coming from your organization as well.