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"it ain't over till it's over" - gks personal statement draft



IanKookoo 1 / 1  
Feb 3, 2025   #1
Every student likes to study freely but from my young age it was a dream i was hoping to be true to study free from financial constraints.Gks is an opportunity for me to build the gap between my passion and me. The passion brought me here today- writing thus essay with hopes of pursuing future studies in Korea,a land of opportunities.As the financial constraints kept on stepping my education. I was searching for an opportunity to stop this and study freely and gks will playback huge role in Me by removing this financial constraints and which will help me focus on " how the human body works?"instead of " how to pay the tuition fees?

Growing up as the only girl in my family ,I witnessed sacrifices everyday after my dad passed away and my elder brother sacrifice his own dreams to help me achieve my dreams. their support fueled my drive to work harder and I understood that learning is the key for a better life.

I took STEM strand during my high school in pursuit of passion for medicine. During the high school I did participate in extracurricular activities such as net ball , marathon, 100m race , relay , cycle race,etc.
while I was in High school my biology teacher, who was a microbiology majored student back in her days , shared her stories doing lab practicals and about heart miracles. I started my IALs but after 1½ year due to a sudden increase of tuition fee my family had no other options but to stop my education. And I had a 1 year long break but not break I didn't stop studying my books and getting notes from my friends and I planned to IELTS to go abroad and did prepare but my family was against it because I was only 16.

There's a saying that " it ain't over till it's over",this quote became my motto of life.The education I thought that stopped didn't stop. I enrolled to a foundation program in NSBM Green University. There were other subjects other than my major (science) such as maths and quantitative techniques, principles of management and English and soft skills.These subjects did help me to build such skills like management , leadership, problem solving, etc.
As of September 2024 , I completed the foundation program and unfortunately had to return home without being able to apply for a degree program.As I deepen my studies, I became increasingly fascinated with South Korea's medical advancement , excellent healthcare infrastructure, strong emphasis on medical research.also i could be exposed to a thriving scientific community and can gain global connections for my future career as a cardiologist . I'm excited about the opportunity to study in South Korea, where I can grow academically and personally and build the foundation I nee to pursue my career.

I choosed to study biological science for my undergraduates because or is a great foundation for medical school. it gives deep understanding of essential subjects like anatomy, physiological and biochemistry.I am confident that I can thrive in South Korea. I believe studying in Korea will all9w me to deepen my knowledge, contribute global healthcare and experience its rich culture of progress and learning. I have already proven that I can live independently
and manage my finances. during the year in capital so I believe even if living
in colombo and south korea is different the basic skills wanted is already and I'm looking forward to improve myself personally even more by surrounding myself with new people's,new thoughts and new environment.

I aspire to become a representative, using my experiences and education in healthcare field to bridge gaps and foster mutual understanding between nations. Through the program, I aim to contribute to global progress ,particularly in healthcare and serve as a positive example of collaboration and growth. thankyou for taking time to evaluate my application.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15539  
Feb 4, 2025   #2
i was hoping to be true to study free from financial constraints.

Refrain from stating the obvious. You do not need to tell the reviewer this information because this is the default reason that the applicants would like to be recipients of the GKS scholarship. Delete this whole paragraph.

etc.

Do not write so informally. Do not use such references in a formal scholarship applicaiton.

I planned to IELTS to go abroad and did prepare but my family was against it because I was only 16.

This is irrelevant. Remove this section. The reviewer does not care about your IELTS test status. Discuss this only in the study plan If you scored highly in the test so that it can help increase the profile of your application.

problem solving, etc.

Again with the etc. Problem. Please delete all references to this word in the essay.

I have already proven that I can live independently and manage my finances. during the year in capital

There is no reason to be discussing how fiscally responsible you are. That is not a consideration for this particular personal statement.
OP IanKookoo 1 / 1  
Feb 4, 2025   #3
@Holt
Thankyou for your advice.. I'll correct my mistakes sir.


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