I am applying for a scholarship application and started working on it. Here is one of the questions.
explain your academic objectives and how these are appropriate to your future goals.Tell specifically how a undergradute degree from the X university will contribute to your achieving your future goals. (100-word maximum)
Over the years, [country Y] has ensured a high-quality power supply in its large cities. Nevertheless, the power crisis is still evident in many villages and industries throughout the country. Due to the scarcity of non-renewable energy resources, the life of many power plants is coming to an end. As such, my objective is to bring a phase shift in the energy generation sector and acclimatize the appropriate use of my country's vast untapped green energy resources. A degree in Electrical engineering from X will master my understanding of advanced power technologies and equip me with a strong academic foundation required to ensure the availability of electricity to all citizens at affordable prices. Furthermore, research-intensive learning opportunities and various extracurricular activities will enhance my leadership skills and prepare me to adapt to any challenges I face.
This is my first draft. It is currently around 137 words. I am confused about where to reduce and improve. Any improvements/suggestions would be highly appreciated.