I would like to apply Australia Awards Scholarship to study Master of Commerce in UNSW, please give me some feedback about my answer regarding to this question. I would very much appreciate an honest review, feedback, and comment for my essay on why I applied for my courses and institutions. Thank you!
Why did you choose your proposed course and institution*?
I am an undergraduate student from Food Technology major. I learned about how to process the raw food into the food that is ready to be sold. When I was in the university, I have done a lot of assignments about food business project. From there, my interest in business and commerce has risen and I find my passion so I am always excited to do some works about business although just little things like projects from my lectures or helping my student association to get money for holding an university event.
After I graduated, I continue my parents business although it is not a food business but they are stationery store, home material store, and hotel. It has been one year and I am getting more interested to learn how professional business works. On the other hand, I feel like I do not have enough knowledge to do a proper business because in my opinion, business is not a small thing and not easy to do, it needs a knowledge to apply. However, I would like to run this business professionally with the ways of big companies do, because I believe even though it is only a small business, but if we run it professionally, the business will become big and grow. That is the reason that strengthen me to take a master degree.
Since my background is not from business, I have lack of knowledge regarding to business, so I prefer to take Master of Commerce as my master degree. As far as I know, it learns about every aspects of business like business analyst, accounting, marketing, human and resource management, finance, business strategy, and business design. My preferred institution is University of New South Wales. I have done some research about this university and it is one of the Group of Eight (Go8) in Australia and consistently ranking within the top 50 worldwide. Especially, UNSW gives many chances to their students to have many experiences in business such as local, national, or international internship, networking with mentors and industry connections.